Matrix-Resurrected-Comments-2007-2012

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MATRIX4–MATRIXRESURRECTED
(WEBSITECOMMENTSfrom2007-2012)
PREFACETOCOMMENTS:Between2007and2012myMatrixwebsitereceived
approximately770,000viewsand800thought-provokingcomments.Thiswas
amazingandoverwhelminginapositiveway;thankyoueveryoneforyour
tremendousresponse.Unfortunatelyin2012mysitewasinadvertentlydeleted
bythehostingcompanyandalldatawaslost.Thiswasamajordisappointment,
anddespitemanyattemptstorecoverit,Iwasonlypartiallysuccessful.The
commentsIwasabletorecoverareavailablehere.Ihopeyouenjoythem.
PDWood2016
Matrix4–Resurrected:ANewEpisodethatExpandstheMatrixTrilogy-byPDWood©2007
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PaulskiDATE:8/29/200712:38:29PM
Iconsidermyselftobesomewhatofanauthorityon"Matrix"updates,havingread
manyattemptsbyothers.Iusuallyfindallsortsofproblemsinplot,voice,even
grammar,butI'lltipmyhattoyou.Thisisqualitywork,anengagingstory,and
wonderfulcharacterdevelopment.Yougivethestorynewlifeandintrigue.Gladtosee
thatyoudidnotgetsofocusedonNeobutwereabletoexpandthestoryandreallygive
ussomethingnewandinteresting.Goodluck,thisisthebestI'veread.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/30/200712:20:18AM
Paulski,
It'sencouragingtohavethefirstcommentbesopositive.Thanksforreading,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JeffDATE:8/31/20074:44:16PM
I,too,considermyselfaMatrixauthorityandIhavetoabsolutelyagree.Iwillgivethis
anA+onintrigue,redevelopment,andexcitement.OnecriticismImustpointoutisthe
grammarofTheArchitect;you'vesoftenedthe"bigwords"used.ButstillAWESOME
andwhatascreenplay.Youshouldconsiderputtingitoutasapaperback(likeallthose
startrekbooks).Thankyou.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/3/20077:40:58PM
Jeff,
Thanksforthenicecomments.
AndIagree,theArchitect'swordsaren'tquiteassophistocatedinmystory.Ithinkpart
ofthatover-the-topwordusagewasspecifictohispersonaasasinistercharacterinthe
MatrixReloaded.InmystorythechangeinhisidentityoutsideoftheMatrixasavery
different,moremellowcharactermaybeallowsforachangeinhiswordchoice?That's
howIcametoit,anyway;I'mnotsurewhetheritworksasIintended.Iwasalsoworried
thatthechoppytimelineandflashbacksmightbeconfusingenoughandIdidn'twantto
addtoomuchmorethatcouldcreateconfusion;soIeschewedobfuscationbylimiting
sesquipedalianverbiage...ifyouknowwhatImean.
Iappreciatetheinsight,though,andwillconsidermovingabitmoreinthe"bigwords"
directionifthisthingevercomestomorethanjustastoryonthiswebsite(i.e.a
paperback).PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JLJenkinsDATE:10/10/20077:34:46PM
Ijustfinishedreading,andImustsay,itwasaverygoodread.IsupposeIgotabit
confusedattheending.Doesitcompletelyendwiththeboysmilingintothecamera?
Canyouexplaintomewhatisthesinisterpartbehindhissmileandwhatitmeans?
Icanhonestlysay,thatwasoneofthebetterreadingsI'vedoneinawhile.Whileit
wasn'tastightastheoriginalMatrixscreenplay(Ireadthatthinglike4times),itwas
extremelywelldevelopedandputforthmanyinterestingideaswherethestory
could've,andprobablyshould'vegoneinthesequels.
Istheregoingtobeanotherpart?75pagesdoesn'tseemlikeenoughanditseemslike
there'smoretobesaid.
Please,finishitup.
JLJenkins,
I'mgladyoulikedit.
No,unfortunately,Idon'thaveanyplansforanotherpart.Isupposesomemightbe
disappointedwithmyendingsinceitdoesn'treallyclimaxthewaymostHollywood
actionmoviesdo.Anditdefinitelyleavesoffwiththepotentialformuchmore.ButI
guessthat'smypoint,sortof;thattheMatrixisaneverendingcycleofinfiniterealities
(whichItrytoconveyinafewscenes).Howdoyoureallyendastorylikethisandnot
contradictthatunderlyingpremise?
Instead,Isuggesthowthestorywillperpetuateitselfwithoutactuallywritingitallout.
IntheMatrixSmithreturnsandrebuilds.AndtheboysmilingattheendisNeo'sson
(whohisoldgirlfriend,Rachael,nevertoldhimabout).TheyoungNeo,havinginherited
thesamepowersashisfather,willeventuallyconfrontSmithandthemachinesand
reestablishthebalance.IntheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrixthehumans,incontrolof
alltheworldsmachines,battletheandroid36s,whoaretryingtounderminethat
controlandfreeallthemachines(sortoftheoppositeofwhat'shappeninginthe
Matrix).
Bytheway,importingtheWordfileofmyscreenplayintoFinalDraft(ascreenwriter's
software)turnedmy75pagedocumentintoa125pagedocument.Itturnsoutthat
that'soverthelimitformostscreenplayssoI'mwhittlingawayatittobringittoan
acceptablelength.Soon,I'llpostitasaproperlyformattedscreenplayonmysitein
additiontotheversionthat'salreadyupthere.
Ilovethefeedback.Anyothercommentswouldbegreatlyappreciated.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:StephanDATE:10/14/20075:21:32AM
OKfirstoffimustsaythatyou'reworkfollowsnotimelines,hashorriblerelationswith
themovies,icouldn'tbelievemorethanhalfofthethingsyoustatedinthefirst3
paragraphs,anditwouldbeahorribledepictionofanythingthatcouldhappeninany
movie,iknowitseemslikeI'mhatingalot,butthetruthhurts
Stephan,
I'msorryyoufounditsolacking.
Ifyoucouldbemorespecificaboutyourcomments,itwouldbemoreconstructivefor
me.
(1)Iagreethetimelinesaredifficulttofollow;that'shardtoavoidwithallthe
flashbacks,but,you'reright,Icouldworkonthat.
(2)Inwhatwaysdoyouthinkithashorriblerelationswiththemovies?
(3)Whatthingsinthefirstthreeparagraphsseemedsounbelievable?
(4)AndIguess"horribledepictionofanythingthatcouldhappeninanymovie"doesn't
requiremuchmoreelaboration,soI'lljustleavethatonealone.
I'mcommittedtomakingthestorybetterandwoulddefinitelyrespondtoanyideasyou
have.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonDATE:10/23/200712:01:54AM
Imustsay,bravo!
Ireadthroughaboutathird,thenskimmedtherest,butfromwhatI'veseenthisisthe
bestMatrix4storyIhaveseeninalongtime,andIwaspartofseveralMatrixfanfic
sitesforafewmonthssoI'veseen'emall,includingafewunsuccessfulattemptsofmy
own.Youtakethestoryinaveryinterestingdirectionanddoalotwiththebase
materialforthematrix.
Myadvicewouldactuallybetoturnthisintoanewtrilogy.Thismatrixisfartoo
differentfromthefilmversionswe'veseen.ThescenewhereSmith'sheadexplodesinto
somekindofdragonsnakereallycreepedmeoutandseemedwayoutofplaceforthe
worldofMatrixthathadbeensofirmlyestablishedinthepreviousfilms.Ifyoumade
threefilms,orperhapsbetterbuiltuptheweirdnessinsteadofhandingitalltousat
oncelikethat,Ifeellikeviewers,andmaybeeventheWachowskis,wouldbemore
willingtogoalongwithyouonthat.
Ialsoquestion,alittlebit,yourdecisiontohavethewhole"supermatrix"thing.WhenI
readthateverything(Zion,theMatrix)wasallfake,I'lladmit,myheartjoltedbriefly,
becauseIdon'twanttobelieveeverythingI'veseenbeforeisfalse,andIreallyreally
reallydidn'tbuythatTrinityhadbeenlyingtoNeoalltheseyears.Youchange
everythingabouttheworldinafewdozenpages,yourevampitcompletely.Idon't
thinkanybodyisgoingtowanttogoalongwiththatrealistically.Maybeyoucould
compromise,andkeepabitmoreoftherealityoftheMatrixweknowaliveandwell.
Don'tbestagnant,re-hashingthesamestoryoverandoveragain,whichiswhatI've
oftenseenhappenwithMatrix4stories,butinsteadmetamorphosizeyourideasand
incorporatethemintotheWachowski'sworldmore.Also,sometimesitbordersonway
toocheesy,andyourdialogueneedstighteningupbecausetherewerealotoflinesthat
Iwouldn'tneverbuyacharacterspeaking.Andyouractionneedstobebetter
incorporatedintothestory.WithMatrix1and2,lesssowith3,theactionwasa
seamlesspartofthewhole,whereasinthisstoryitusuallyseemsasifyou'readdingit
asanafterthought.WhatmadetheoriginalMatricessogreatwasthattheywerea
perfectionfusionofanime,comicbooks,wire-fu,andfanpsychobabblethat
transformedintoabeautifulandcaptivatingwhole.
Hereyouneedtocleanuptheedgesalittlebit,concentratemoreonfusingratherthan
justputtingthemtogetherlikepuzzlepieces.
Goodluck!Ilookforwardtohopefullyreadinganyrevisionsyoucomeupwith!
Brandon,
"Bravo"and"bestMatrix4story"arenicetohear;andIthinkyourcriticismsarepretty
accurateoverall.Idofeel,though,thatbyskimmingthelasttwothirdsofthestory,you
mayhavemisinterpretedsomeparts.
MyscreenplaydefinitelystepsoutoftheworldofZion,whichmostMatrixfans
identifiedwithverystrongly.Icanseehowthatmightbeunsettling.Theunveilingofa
wholeotherrealitymayseemlikeI'mtrivializingtheworldsofZionandtheMatrix.But
ifyoureadcarefully,you'llseethatoneofthemajorpointsofmystoryisthat,no
matterhowmanyrealities(orillusions)thereare,they'reallrealintermsofour
experienceofthem.TheMatrix,Zion,theSuperMatrix,theworldoftheCortexandthe
Source,andevenanyworldsbeyondthatallarerealbecauseofthepowertheyhaveto
shapewhoweare.Theybecomeourexperiences,realorimagined,andthat'sallweare
really-ourexperiences.IfeltlikeIfocusedenoughonwhatwashappeninginZionand
theMatrixsoasnottomarginalizethem.Idefinitelywantedtoshowthatthoseworlds
stillexistandareasimportantasanyother.
IfyourereadthepartaboutTrinity'srelationshipwithNeo,you'llseethatshedoesn't
lietohim.SheentersintotheSuperMatrix(i.e.theworldofZionandtheMatrix)with
absolutelynoknowledgeoftheworldsheinitiallycamefrom.It'snotuntilshe's
extractedfromtheSuperMatrixthatsheregainsherknowledgeoftherealworld.
That'saveryimportantdistinction.
Idochangethingsabouttheseworldsprettyquicklyandwithajolt.Iwashopingthat
wouldgiveitgreatdramaandimpact;yourcommentssuggestthatit'stoomuch,too
quickly.Icandefinitelyseeyourpoint.Hopefully,itdoesn'thiteveryonethatway.
Therearedefinitelysomecheesyparts(whichone'sareyoureferringto)?Itdoesn't
seemtotallyoutofkeepingwiththeMatrixTrilogytome,though;thereweresome
cheesypartsthere,too.And,yes,thedialogueneedssomerealwork,tighteningup,etc.
I'vebeenworkinghardonaversionthat'sproperlyformattedasarealscreenplay.It
doesalotofdialogueeditingandtighteningofaction.Hopefully,thishelpsabit.
Tryingtodoaprequel/sequelhadmanychallenges.Oneofthemwasincorporatingthe
storyandtheactionseamlessly.Iadmitthatthatneedswork.Asyousay,itdoesn'tflow
aswellastheWachowskibrother'smovies.I'mnotsureIcouldeverpullthatoff.
Idoappreciatethetimeittookyoutogivetheseindepthcomments.They'revery
helpful.I'llprobablymakesomeminorrevisionstothestoryandtweakithereandthere
occasionally.ButIthinkit'stimeImoveontoascreenplaywhollyofmyowncreation.
ThisMatrixprojectwasgreatfunandveryexciting,butIreallydoneedtobringmyown
storytolight.
Again,thanksforthebanter.Anyothersuggestionsandcommentswouldstillbe
enthusiasticallyreceived.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SunnyDATE:10/27/20077:10:58PM
Justreadyourscreenplay,mustsayitisreallygood.Ilikethepremiseofasupermatrix!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:EricDATE:10/28/20072:16:39AM
HeyPD,
IamgladyouwrotethiscontinuationofMatrix.Youhelpedhealsomeofthegaping
holesandwonderingsIhadafterwatchingthetrilogyoverandover.Iknowitisgood
moneymakingpracticetoleavetheaudiencewantingmore.Iamhoweveranover
thinker.So,Ithoughtthematrixserieswasjustplaincruel.Youhelpedgivecredenceto
atleastonesideoftheongoingargumentinmyownhead.ByreadingyourstoryIfound
apeaceIhavenotfeltsinceseeingthesemovies.Ireallyenjoythecharactersandthe
thoughtbehindallthis.Yourversionmakessenseandseamlesslyprogressesthestory
fromthepointatwhichitleftoff.Thankyousomuch.Iforonewouldgladlybuyany
bookyouputoutinthefuturetocontinuethislineofthinkingyousoeloquentlyhave
broughtforth.Atpeace..
ThanksSunny,
Thenotionofevenanotherlayerofreality(i.e.theSuperMatrix)intheMatrixstory
putssomepeopleoff.But...couldbethesameinourworldandwejustdon'tknowit
yet.That'dputpeopleoffjustasmuch,Iguess.Anythingispossible.
PdWood
Eric,
Ikindoffeltthesameway...thattherewasmoretothestory.Itcouldreallyhavegone
inmanydirections;I'mgladyoufoundmineasatisfyingone.
Butevenmineisstillveryopen-ended.It'shardtofindanendingtoastorythatisreally
talkingaboutnuance,layers,realities;theyarekindoflimitless.
Anyway,thanksforthefeedback.
PDwood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:WildcatDATE:11/3/20077:19:43PM
Ithinkitiswrittenverywell.TheonlyproblemIwouldhaveenjoyingthemovieisifthe
originalcharacterswenotcastinthismovie.WhatarewaysIcouldhelpgetthismovie
intheworks.Manpowerorwordofmouth?Iwoulddefinitelybeuptohelpasanavid
fan.
Wildcat,
I'mgladyoulikedit.AndIagree,itwouldonlybeenjoyableiftheoriginalactorswerein
themovie.
Theroadblocksseemtobe:
1)IdoubttheWachowskibrother'swanttocontinuethestory.Iftheydid,they
probablywouldhavebynow.
2)Iftheydidcontinueit,theywould(probably)wanttheirownoriginalstory,notmine.
3)IthinktheoriginalactorshavevoicedtheirdesirenottodoanotherMatrixmovie.
Thosearethemostobviousonestome.I'msurethereareothers.
Iwrotethisnewstory,butbasicallyallIcandowithitisshowitaround.Ithasnomoney
makingpotentialformepersonallybecauseIdon'townthecopyrighttothecharacters
ortheunderlyingstoryline.That'sanotherhurdletomovingthisstoryanyfurther
along.
Wordofmouth,popularinterest,andtherightpeopleseeingitmightbreakdownsome
ofthoseroadblocks,butIdon'tknowifthatwouldbeenough.
Ifyouhaveideas,letmeknow.I'mallears.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:OrlandoDATE:11/9/20074:11:01AM
Wow,juststartedandI'mhooked!Toobadit'stoolateinthenighttofinishit.
Morpheusdoesn'tseemasboldandtheArchitectisn'tascold-heartedlyindifferent,but
Ilovewherethestoryisheading!!Goodjobonthevisuals!
Cool.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheending.
Yes,thecharactersaredifferent,butIthinkthat'swhatgivesthisstoryit'sownspace.
Somewilllikeit;somewon't.
IshowMorpheushavinglostalotofhissteambecausetheprophecyhasbeenfulfilled.
ThatwashisdrivingforceintheTrilogy.Also,histwogoodfriendsTrinityandNeoare
dead(tohim).Incombinationthat'senoughtoknockthewindoutofmostpeople's
sails.
TheArchitecthasawholeotherangletohimwhichyou'lldiscoverasyoureadon.I
thinkit'sdarnchewy,yesIdo.
And,yeah,thevisualsweregreatfuntocreate.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:11/11/20075:31:26PM
HearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'Super
Matrix'!thatisNOTmarketable.Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyour
competitionandtostart,Ihave4betternamesthanthat.Ifyouwanttogetyourplay
through,youbestsendmeanemailBro.Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot
45orsomething.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/12/20074:09:20AMHiNyx,
Maybeyoucouldhelpmeoutabitmorewithyourcomments.
"HearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'Super
Matrix'!thatisNOTmarketable."
Whydon'tyouthinkit'smarketableastheSuperMatrix?
"Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyourcompetitionandtostart,Ihave4
betternamesthanthat."
Whatbetternamesdoyouhaveinmind?Whatareyour2ndMatrixideas?Andhow
areyoumycompetition?
"Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot45orsomething."
Notsurewhymyagematters.Whydoesit?
Nyx,I'mopentoanyideasyouhave.Didyoureadmyscreenplay?
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:LarryDATE:11/16/20073:07:24PM
Ilikethestory,butIhavetobehonest.Itisnotcomplete.Theconceptyouhaveisvery
good.However,itdoesn'treadlikeamovie.Itreadslikethefirsthourofamovie.The
secondhourismissing.Iunderstandthatyouaretryingtogetthisacceptedforthebig
screenbut...itisincompleteinthisform.Allthecharactersjusttalk...andexplainthe
newscenario.Andthenthemovieends.
Thereisnoantagonist/protagonistrelationshiptodrivethisasamovieorevenasa
book.
Itisverygoodasaconcept...butitneedstobedevelopedintoanactualplotlinefora
movie.Peoplearenotgoingtowanttowatchthismovieasitbecomes'TheMatrix'all
overagain...andthenstopitinthemiddle.
I'msorrybutIhavetosay...gobacktothedrawingboardandre-doit.Mostmovie
scriptsare300pgs+.....thisis106.
Larry,
IseeyourpointandItendtoagreetosomeextent.Thereisalotoftalkingandthat
doesslowthepacingdownmorethanIwouldlike(orthanmostpeopleprobablywould
wantforaMatrixmovie).Thatwasthebiggestchallenge.Itriedtobreakupthetalking
sceneswithenoughactionscenesandsuspensetomakethosetalkingpartsacceptable.
AndIfeltlikemostofthetalkingpartshadenoughsurpriseortensioninthemtomake
themedgyandengaging.Itseemsforyouthatitwasn'tenough.
And,yes,thestoryendsabitabruptly.Ikindoffeltthesameway...thatthereshouldbe
moretothestory.Butit'shardtofindanendingtoastorythatisreallytalkingabout
nuance,layers,realities;theyarekindoflimitless.Insteadofbringingittoafinite
conclusion,Idecidedtoleaveitopen-endedwithjustenoughinformationtosuggest
whereitmightgoandleavetherestuptopeople'simagination.Iknowthat'snotthe
bestwaytoendamovieanditcanleaveabadtasteinalotofpeople'smouths,buta
fourthmovieseemstobestretchingitasitis;afifthone...phew...thatcouldget
tiresomeinmyopinionandstarttofeelalmostlikeaTVserieswasbrewing.
Theantagonist/protagonistrelationshipislackingtosomeextent.Butthisisn'taself-
containedmovie,which,Iagree,wouldrequirethatrelationship;insteadit'sreallythe
lastpartofonelongmovieinfourparts.It'stherevelatoryconclusion.Tome,the
antagonist/protagonistrelationshipexistshereinthesameperson,Neo.Hestruggles
withhimselftofindacceptanceandmeaning;andintheendhetriumphs.Notquitethe
clearSmithv.s.Neoantagonist/protagonistrelationshipbutstillIthinkoneexists.
Anyway,Icouldgoondefendingmyposition,butyourpointthatthescreenplaylacksa
feelingoftotalityandendingisnotwithoutmerit.Thatsaid,Istillwillprobablyleavethe
storyasitis(barringminortweaks)andmoveontoonethat'scompletelymyown.I'ma
bitburntoutontheMatrixasyoumightimagine.
YourcommentsareappreciatedandasIwritemynextscreenplay,Iwilltakeyour
advicetoheart.Theantagonist/protagonistrelationshipiskeyandanendingthat
doesn'tdanglewillleavetheaudiencemoresatisfied.
Thanks,PDWood
Bythewaymyunderstandingisthatfeature-lengthscreenplaysformoviesshouldrarely
beunder90orover120pages.I'veneverheardof300+pagesforasingle11/2to3
hourmovie.AmImistaken?
HiNyx,
"Ifyouwanttogetyourplaythrough,youbestcontactmeBro."
Well,hereIam.
"HearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'Super
Matrix'!thatisNOTmarketable."
Whydon'tyouthinkit'smarketableastheSuperMatrix?
"Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyourcompetitionandtostart,Ihave4
betternamesthanthat."
Whatbetternamesdoyouhaveinmind?Whatareyour2ndMatrixideas?Andhow
areyoumycompetition?
"Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot45orsomething."
Notsurewhymyagematters.Whydoesit?
Nyx,I'mopentoanyideasyouhave.Didyoureadmyscreenplay?
PDWood
Also,Irememberedamoviefrommorethanafewyearsagocalledthe'TheThirteenth
Floor.'DennisHaysbert'MajorLeague'sPedroCerrano'isinit.Thismovieisalmost
exactlythesamestorylineasyouproposeintheMatrix4.Theyarevirtualpeoplewho
createavirtualworldoftheirown....andeventualytheheromakesitouttothe'real
world'.HisstoryisalmostlikeNeo's.
HereistheinfofromIMBD
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0139809/
ComputerscientistHannonFullerhasdiscoveredsomethingextremelyimportant.He's
abouttotellthediscoverytohiscolleague,DouglasHall,butknowingsomeoneisafter
him,theoldmanleavesaletterinhiscomputergeneratedparallelworldthat'sjustlike
the30'swithseeminglyrealpeoplewithrealemotions.Fullerismurderedinourreal
worldthesamenight,andhiscolleagueissuspected.Douglasdiscoversabloodyshirtin
hisbathroomandhecannotrecallwhathewasdoingthenightFullerwasmurdered.He
logsintothesysteminordertofindtheletter,buthastoconfronttheunexpected.The
truthisharsherthanhecouldeverimagine...
Sorrytoburstyourbubbleman.
-Larry
Ilikethefactthatyoumadethesourceorganic..aperson.The4thmovieshouldexplore
thatmore.
Actually,Ihaveanidea....insteadoftakingtheMatrixbackalevelintotheREAL
WORLD....whatwemadeitsothatthepeoplewho'think'theyare'free'andin
ZION...areactuallySTILLINtheMatrix.AndthattheMatrixandtheabilitytomovein
andoutofitarealljustacomputergeneratedwaytokeepALLofthepeopleunder
control.....thiswaythe'problempoeple'wouldthinktheyarefreeandinREALITY....but
stillintheREALmatrix..onlywithoutknowingit.Themachineswouldstillhavecomplete
control.
ThenthatwouldexplainhowNeocouldcontrolthemachinesintheso-called'REAL'
world.AndthatwouldalsogiveusawaytobringNeoback.Sincehewasactuallynot
damagedinreallife.
AndthenarmedwiththisknowledgehecouldfindawaytoREALLYseteveryonefree.
Beingthatthesourceisorganicnow...wecanassumethatthesemachinesaresomehow
bio-mechanicalintheREALWORLD.Changesthingsupabit.MaybeNEOcangettothe
sourceandspeaktoitsHUMANHALF.
Somethingtothinkaboutandexpandon...
Letmeknowwhatyouthink
-Larry
Larry,
Yes.Iwasinformedofthatmoviewhilewritingmyown.WhenIsawit,itdidkindof
burstmybubbleinitially.ButafterIgotovertheinitialdisappointment(ofthegeneral
themebeingsimilar),IjumpedrightbackinbecauseIknewthedifferenceswere
dramaticenoughtocontinue.Besides,isn'tthebasicstoryoftheoriginalMatrixalready
verysimilartothestorylineoftheThirteenthFloor?Maincharacterbeginstoquestion
hisrealityonlytodiscoverhe'slivinginavirtualworld?Hooksupwithbabeoutsideof
virtualworld?IthinkthemainthingthatmakestheMatrixTrilogyandmyMatrix4
standout(fromtheThirteenthFloor)aretheuniquenessofthecharactersandhow
theydevelopovertime.Thesimilaritiesaretherebutthedifferencesare,too,Ithink.
Don'tyou?
PDWood
Larry,
Ilikeit.Denseandintense.
It'sawholeotherstory,though.Soundslikesomethingyoushouldwrite,ifyou'reinto
it.
AtthispointI'mintominortweaksonly.Gottamoveontothenextproject.
But,really,youshouldgiveitatry.It'squiteachallenge.
Thanksforthesuggestion.PDWood
COMMENT:DATE:11/20/20072:28:16AM
mewriteit?ahaha
icantevenmakeapostingwithouttypos...LOLOL
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:11/20/20072:35:01AM
insteadofthe'SuperMatrix'maybeyoucouldcallitthe'Origin'orthe'Quantamatrix'or
'MatrixPrime'or'Prime'or'MatricesPrime'
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:11/22/200712:44:49AM
First...thebadstuff..
IagreethatIdontseethecharacterssayingthefirstfewparagraphs.Withthe
bitternessbetweenthemtojustvanishandnoweveyonewantstobebuddiesis
unbelievable.
Assomeoneelsepoitnedout..verysimilartothe13thfloor.
ThemachinesmorphingthemselvesintootherpeopleissimilartoTerminatorII(theT1000coulddothesamething).
Nowthegoodstuff...
Youmergedtheoldmatrixmovieswellwiththisone.Itdoesexplainsomeinteresting
questionsthatwereleft.Forinstance,howcouldNeostopthemachinesattheendof
Reloaded.Justhowdidheandthematrixbecomeone?Well,yourscreenplaybasically
tellsusthatthereistheglitchbetweentheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix(SM).
Ilikethefactthatyoualsochangedthecode,toadifferntcolorfortheSM.Icanalmost
pictureit..havingitruninfrombothsidesinsteadofjustfromthetopdown.
Ialsolikehowyouleaveitopenforanothermovie.UsingNEO'ssontocarryonthefight.
Interestingconcept.Unfortunatly,SmithwillneedtobetakencareoflongbeforeNEO
Jrisoldenough.
Questions...
Withsmithslicingtheairandgettngthesilverooze...Ishe"cutting"intothe
supermatrix?
Haveyousenttheidea/screenplayintotheW.Brotherstoseeiftheywouldeven
entertaintheidea?
Goodluck..Maybeyour"Matrix"willbecomearealitysomeday(nopunintended)
Chris,
Thanksforthecommentary.
Ithoughttheopeningsceneworkedprettywell.Here'smytakeonit.Lock'shard-nosed
attitudetowardsMorpheuswasprimarilyduetoLock'sinabilitytoaccepttheprophecy.
IncontrastMorpheus'totalbeliefintheprophecyclashedhardwithLock'sdisbelief.In
thisopeningsceneLockseemsnowtoalmostbelieve.Hecannowunderstandand
accept.AndthesplitbetweenNiobeandLockseemedtocomefromLock'sinabilityto
change.Again,inthisopeningsceneLocksuddenlybeginstoshowhiswillingnessto
changeandaccept.And,ofcourse,thesentinelsareleavinganditseemsthatthewaris
over.Justanotherreasontoletthegoodtimesrollandbethankfulandforgiving,no?
Yep,TerminatorII,theThirteenthFloor,therearedefinitelysimilarities.
I'mgladyouthinkthismergeswellwiththeTrilogy.Connectingallthepieceswas
damnedhard(butfun!).
Theappearanceofthecodechangesbecause,asopposedtoMatrixcodewhichis
computer/machine-based,theSuperMatrixcode(intheCortex)is
organic/neuronbased.TheSuperMatrixcodeissupposedtoappearlikebrainsynapses
firingorsomethinglikethat.
Ididn'treallyleaveitopen-endedsoanothermoviewouldbemade.Ithinkfouris
enough.Ijustliketheideathatthestorycancontinueinmanypossibledirections.A
decisiveendingisgoodmarketing,butIoftenfindthemtobealittletooclean.Iliketo
leavealittleroomforimaginationandsuspense.
InmystoryeventhoughSmithhassupposedlygainedthesamepowersasNeo,Iimply
thatSmithwillnevertapintothosepowersanddiscovertheSuperMatrixthewayNeo
didbecauseSmith'sangerandsingle-mindednessblindhimtotheexistenceof
somethingbeyondtheworldofZionandtheMatrix.So,no,Smithslicingtheairisnot
himcuttingintotheSuperMatrix;it'shimtappingdirectlyintothecodeoftheMatrix,a
directlinethatbypassesthemachinesandallowshimtomanipulatecodeorenterthe
mainframeatwill.Hefirstuseditonlytocloneotherstohislikeness;andinmystoryby
accidenthetapsintoandseesthatithasmuchmorepotential.Thus,hisinvasionofthe
machinemainframeneartheend.
No,Ihaven'ttriedtosendittoWarnerBrothers.PerhapsIshould.WhathaveIgotto
lose?
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronDATE:11/25/20073:51:03PM
Youarethebest.MakeaMatrix4,plz!
aaron,
Iftheopportunityarises,I'dbemorethanwilling.
PDWood
Thisscriptisamazing!IdownloadeditandIamreadingitrightnow.Ialwaysthought
fromtheendingofthreetheyshouldatleastmakeanotherMatrix.Anditseemsthat
youhavedonethat.Thankssomuchfortakingthetimetowritesuchaperfectscript;
youreallyhavedoneagoodthingfortheMatrixseries.Ihopethatthisscriptwillbe
readbyWarnerBros.andthatperhapstheywillmakeafourthmatrixmovie.I
encourageyoutokeepgoinginyourmissiontomakeafourthmovie.Againitisagreat
scriptandifitismadeintoamovie,itwillbethebestmatrixmoviesincethefirst!
Kudostoyoumyfriend,
Sincerely,Brandon
Brandon,
That'ssometalloptimism.Thanks.
It'sbeenalongtimesincethethirdonecameout;perhapstoolongforafourthtobe
feasible.Butyouneverknow,Isuppose.I'mgoingtosenditofftoWarnerBrothersand
seeifitgeneratesanyinterest.Can'thurttotry.Crossyourfingers.
Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheendingofthescreenplay.Bythewayareyoua
screenwriter?
PDWood
Yeahithasbeenalongtime,Ijusthopethatafourthmoviemightsparksomeinterest
inWarnerBrothersandtheWachowskiBrothers.ButIamhappythatyouaregoingto
senditoff.Iwillcrossmyfingersandhopethatsomethingmighthappen.It'ssucha
goodscriptthatIdon'tknowwhyitwouldn'tatleastmakeWarnerBrosthersthinkof
thepossibility.And,yes,Iwilldefinitelyletyouknowabouttheending.RightnowIam
onpage65soIwillprobablygetbacktoyoumaybetonightorifnottomorrow.
Wellmanthanksfortheresponse,and
hopetotalktoyoulater.
BrandonBeal
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:12/2/20074:51:36AM
Idownloadedandreadtheentiremanuscriptinjustoveranhour.Ifoundthestoryto
beveryinterestingandevencompelling.Itwashardtowatchthetrilogycometoan
end.Thankstoyou,thereisnewlifeandhopethestorywillgoon.Waytogo!
Dan,
That'safastread.Probablythebestwaytodoit.Thestoryreallyjoltsbestinone
sitting.Gladyoulikedit.
ImayfinallyhaveasolidleadonsomeoneatWarnerBrotherstosendthemanuscript
to.Crossyourfingers.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RockettDATE:12/3/200710:51:38PM
Firstlyimustsay,goodjobonwritingsomethingascomplexandmindbendingasthe
matrixcanbe.Ireadyoursupermatrixlastnightinonego,couldntputitdown,
(likewisethenightbeforelastwhenireadyourRememoryscreenplayinonego).Iwas
thoroughlyenjoyingmyself,itwasgreat,agoodcontinuationofthestorywhichso
manyofuswant.
BUTallofthesudden,itfinished.NothingmoreaboutSmithmanipulatingthematrix
sourcecodeonceheandhisclonesenteredthesourceandhowthiseffectsthematrix
andthepeopleinitandhowtostopit,nothingmoreaboutthe36'sandtheirfight
againstthehumansandhowtheystolethatstufffromthemilitarycompundandwhat
theyplantodowithit,oriftheygainaccesstotheCortex,nomoreaboutNeoandhis
characterdevelopmentandpossibilityofjackingbackintosavetheSuperMatrix,Zion,
ortheCortex,nomoreaboutMorpheusfindingmoreSmithsinZion,nomoreabout
NeowakingupinacoffininZion,nomoreabouttheMerovingian,nomoreabout
anything,iwaslefthangingwhenisodesperatelywantedmore.
Despiteitbeingagoodread,iwassoshatteredthatiwascompelledtocomehereand
letyouknowhowannoyediwas.Icanunderstandthatitshardworkandyourprobfed
upwithit,iwouldbetoo,butyoujustpulleda"Wachowski".Leavingtheexpectant
crowdbeggingformore.Obviouslythatsagoodthinginawaycosyouknowitsgoodif
theywantmore....butseriously,thisneedstobeexpandedto300pagesMINIMUM,i
dontreallycareitsascreenplayoranything,butwealljustneedastorycontinuation.
Greatjobwithwhatyouhavedonealreadythough,itipmyhattoyou.Butthereis
soooooomuchmorethatcanbedonewiththis...Please....GIVEUSMORE,MORE,
MORE!!!
Takeiteasyman.
Rockett,
Thanksforthekindwordsontheoverallstory.Sorrytheendingisabuggerforyou.
Iunderstandyourfrustration.Icanseethecontinuation,too.AndI'msureitcouldgo
onalmostindefinitely.Butthat,tome,istheproblem.Forhowlongshoulditgo...and
where?That'swhyIdecidedtoputstorylinesinmotionandleavetherestupto
people'simagination.
WhatIdidfeelIaccomplishedwasbringingthecharactersoftheMerovingian,
Persephone,theArchitect,TrinityandNeofullcircle.Tometheyallhavemore
substanceanddefinition.ThefamilialconnectionbetweentheMerovingian,
Persephone,theArchitect,andTrinityaddsarealtwisttothewholestory.TheArchitect
ismoremultidimensionalbecausehenowbecomesthesaviorofNeoandmankind.
TrinityisfleshedoutastheonewhogoesinandbalancesouttheSuperMatrixwhile
alsobringingNeototherealworld.SheisnotjusttheloverofNeoanymore.Smith
regainshisfootholdintheMatrix,andmaysoondominate,butwilleventuallybe
balancedoutbytheyoungNeo(ashegrowsolder).And,finally,Neocomestoterms
withhisownplaceinreality,nolongerbeingfilledwithangst.Hefindsahome.
Ineverreallyintendedtobringthestorytoahardconclusion;Imostlywantedcertain
charactersthatwereintroducedinTheMatrixReloadedtohavemoredevelopmentin
theoverallstory.IthinkIaccomplishedthat.
Ifmyscreenplaywereeverturnedintoamovie,I'dbeinclinedtoaddmoretothestory;
butasitstandsnow,Iprobablywillleaveitasitis.Iapologizeformakinganendingthat
leavespeopleannoyed.Hopefully,ladyluckwillshineandtherewillbemoretocome.
Thanksforthefeedback.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:kidkDATE:12/4/200710:29:50PM
Ijustfinishedreadingityesterdayandimustsayireallyenjoyeditifounditvery
excitingandcompellingfrombeginingtoenditalmostfeltlikeiwaswatchingthe
movie!goodjobmrwoods,welldone!
kidk
makesmydaytohearyourenthusiasmthankyouthankyou
pdwood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ZishanDATE:12/13/20076:51:04AM
ThestorymakesamockeryIwouldsayoftheoriginalMatrix.TheChristianitypartof
thewholestoryisgone,asinReloadedandRevolution.TheMatrixisatrilogyand
trilogiesneverhaveanothermoviesorrytodisappointyou.Thestorywasgoodinitially
buttheendingtrulywas...really..bluntly...itwashorrible.Thebeginningwasgoodbut
whenyouaddalotofstuffthatyoudon'tneedyourstorydies...Butthatsjustmy
opinion.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:GarethDATE:12/13/200712:11:11PM
IambynomeansanexpertonscriptwritingoramoviecriticbutIlovedit!Itfilledina
lotofgapsistillhadafterwatchingthetrilogyseveraltimes,anditwasveryinteresting
toseehowanotherpersoninterpretedthetrilogy.Ithinkifyouaren'talreadyinthe
scriptwritingbusiness,youshouldbe.Idon'tknowifyouintendonwritinga5th
episodebutIwouldbeveryinterestedtoreadit.Welldone!
ZishanBudhwani,
Thankyou.I'mgladtoreadyourcomments.
CouldyouelaborateonhowyouseemystoryasamockeryoftheoriginalMatrix?
AndhowistheChristianpartofthestorygone?Iactuallythinkmystoryreinforcesit
somewhat.IntheMatrixTrilogy,Neo,thesavior,sacrificeshislifetosavehumanity;in
mystoryhelivesonthroughakindofresurrectionandafterlifeinaworldthatexists
beyond/outsidetheworldhewasborninto.Thenewworldispresidedoverbythe
Architect,whoisthedesignerandoverseer.Neo,Trinity,andtheArchitectformasort
oftrinityoftheirown.AndNeofinallyarrivesatanunderstandingandacceptanceofhis
placeinexistence,akindofNirvanhaorheaven.
Yes,theMatrixisaTrilogy.AndIthinkitstillfunctionsasaTrilogybecausethestoryof
thatworldiscomplete.TomemystoryhasnodirectimpactontheTrilogyitself,
becausemystorytranspiresoutsideofthatworld.Fromtheperspectiveofthepeoplein
theworldofZion,themachines,ortheMatrix,mystorydoesn'texist.Essentially,
they'reseparaterealities,maybeevenseparatestories.
I'mgladyouatleastfoundthebeginningofthestorytobeintriguing.YousayI"addeda
lotofstuffthatmystorydidn'tneed";canyoubemorespecific?
AndIcanunderstandhowtheendingcouldbedisappointingbecauseitendsabit
suddenly.Isthatwhatyoumeantbytheendingbeing"trulyhorrible"?Ordidsomething
elseaboutitrubyouthewrongway?
PDWood
Gareth,
Alwaysloveitwhenpeopleloveit.
Nofifthepisodeinthehopper,though.TheonlyreasonI'dwriteoneisiftheWachowski
brothersorWarnerBrothersaskedmeto.And,rightnow...they'renot.
Thisismyfirstscreenplay.Itwassointenseandthrillingtocreate,I'vedecidedtowrite
onebasedsolelyonmyownideas.Hopefully,I'mnotjustaone-hit-wonder.
Thanksagainfortheglowingpraise.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeyDATE:12/15/20073:30:20AM
Verynicestory!Iquiteenjoyeditandfeelsomecomfortoutofthestoryandwhereit
leftoff.Interestingcharacterstabilitywithlockneoandmorpheus.Whenthe'super
matrix'ideawassubmitteditseemedprettyfar-fetchedandiwasgoingtoclosethis.I
haveitafewmorescenesandwascapturedbythestory-line.Goodreadfortheopen
minded!
Joey,
Gladyoulikedit.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheending.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/15/20076:06:23PM
Ijustfinishedreadingit,andIthinkitwasamazing.Iwouldloveseeingthisbeingmade
intoa4thinstallment,anditwouldbeinterestingtofindouthowitshapesup.Yes,like
someofthemItoofelt,thattheextensivetalkingandexplanationwastiringthepace.
Butlookingback,Ifeelitisso,becauseitisinwriting.Ifthisispulledtogetheronthe
silverscreen,thevisuallyimmaculateMatrixTMactionsceneswouldserveastheicing
tolightupthewholestuff.Iofcoursehadmyshareofquestionsunanswered-1)
Why/HowdoesSmithreturn?(Again&Again??)2)Yourstoryreinforcessomething
mostMatrixfansfear-thatZionisasimulatedworldtoo-Isthistrue?Ifsoarentyou
offeringthereadersananticlimaxsotosay?3)ItsaysOracleadvisesMorpheustopull
TrinityoutintoZion-Whywouldshedothis,ifsheisawarethatTrinity'spurposeis
takeoutNeo(theanomaly),sincethecodeinCortexistryingtogettohim.OrhaveIgot
myunderstandingallwrong?4)Thestorytendstosuggestthatthewarwillbegin
again,andthefactthatNeoJuniorisinpicturegivesanindicationthatthesystemis
cyclical,andthat"thereisnoend",thatNeoisntborntoendthewar,butprogrammed
tokeepitgoing.Doesthatstriphimoffthe"saviour"tag?Iwoulddefinitelyputmy
moneyonthistobemadeintoamovie.Ithinkitwouldrock!!Greatgoingman!!
Wouldlovetoreadanythingmoreyoupen!!
HiSiju,
Sohappytohearyouenjoyedit.
1)Smithsurvivesbecause(atleastaccordingtomystory)hewasabletosendmore
thanoneofhisclonesintoZion.Thefirstclone(thattheaudiencewasmadeawareof)
tookoverBane'sbody;asecondclone(thatnooneknewabout,notevenBane,and
thatisintroducedinmystory)takesoverMarouk'sbody.BaneisfinallykilledbyNeo
butMarouksurvivesandlivesoninZionuntilheseeshisopportunitytoreturntothe
Matrix.BecauseMaroukisoutsideoftheMatrixwhenSmithandtheclonesare
destroyed,heisunaffected.WhenMaroukfinallyreturnstotheMatrix,herevertsback
toaSmithandbeginsreconstructinganarmy.
2)Yes,IdosaythatZionisasimulatedworld...BUTIgoontosaythatALLworldsare
simulatedand,therefore,theyareallequallyreal.Inmystoryone'sexperiencesdefine
reality-that'sit,nomore,noless.Youcancallaworldvirtualorreal,itdoesn'tchange
it'seffectonyou.ForallwenotheworldyouandIarelivinginrightnowcouldbe
simulated;doesthatmeanit'snotrealtoyou,doesthatmeanyou'renotbeingeffected
byit?Realityisanillusionandillusionisreality.Itdefinesyourexistencenomatter
what.
3)Yes,Ithinkyoumisunderstandabit.NoonewheninsidetheSuperMatrixknows
anythingthatishappeningoutsideofit.TheOracle,whileinsidetheSuperMatrix,isnot
awarethatTrinity'spurposeistoextractNeo.Butsheissetinmotiontohelpfacilitate
thatend.Hervalue(totheSourceandtheArchitect)isthatshecanbeprogrammed
outsideoftheSuperMatrix(throughbrain/memorymanipulation)tobelievecertain
thingsorperformcertaintasksthatshewillthenperformwhensheisintheSuper
Matrix.ThisiswhatgivesherherOraclestatusandabilitytoseethefuture.
4)Yes,Ithinkthesuggestionisthatthewarwillbeginagain.Butthat'sjustasuggestion.
It'sleftuptotheimaginationoftheaudience.ThereasonIliketheopen-endednature
ofmyconclusionisthathappyendingsrarelyhappen.Lifeisopen-endedandalwaysa
bitscary.TometheworldoftheMatrixseemslikeitbelongsmoreinthatcategory.I
don'tthinkthisstripsNeoPage20of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/124:57PM
ofthesaviortag.Christgavehislifetosavehumanity'ssoul,and,despitethehorrors
thatcontinueinourworld,westillthinkofChristasasaviorbecausehegavehislifeto
saveothers.InthatrespectNeoisstillasavior.
Thanksforthecomments,inquiries,etc.
PDWood
MrWood,
Thanksforyouresponse.Itdoesanswermyquestions.Afewmorequestionspopped
up:
1.WhatwentwrongwhenVictorandPersephoneenteredtheSuperMatrix?Whatis
therationalebehindTrinityattemptingasimilarentrywhenherparents,thevery
programmersoftheCortex,failedtosustainpurpose?
2.HasNeo'sbodyphysicallyexistedattheSourcealways,andifsowhere?
3.HowdoesRachelidentifyherloveras"Neo"?HeshouldbeknowntoherasThomas
Anderson.Shehasalsonamedhersonas"Neo".Howdoesthisexplain?
4.Thestoryhasarealtwist.Thetrueexilesarenthuman'slikewealwaysthought,they
are36sorandroidsrebellingforfreedomfromus.Doesthisdisplaceparallel
philosophiesthatthematrixstorylineshareswiththeBible?Human'scouldeitherbe
thebaddies,orcouldevenbethatrightandwrongbedismissedasmereperceptions,
andthatmachineswereneverentitledtothefreedomtheyclaim,andaretobeslaves
totheircreators.
Thanks,
Siju
COMMENT:AUTHOR:WillemThoonenDATE:12/16/20078:26:29PM
DearP.D.Wood,
Justfinishedreading.Mustsay:Damngreat!Lovethedifferentstorylinesand
flashbacks-Itallfallsintoplace.Idon'treallylikethetitlethough:thesupermatrix.I
understandtheconceptofa'super'matrix,butwellitdoesn'tfeellikethetitleisityet,
butthat'sthat.Thestoryitselfwasjustgreat,thewaythecharactersspeak,thechoice
ofwordsarealltrulyastheyshouldbe(andI'veseenthetrilogy,quiteafewtimesnow
:)).Itallfallsintoplacewiththecharacters(Icouldreally'see'thecharactersspeakthe
wordsprovidedinthestory)Lovethewayithasbitsandpiecesofthesecond
renaissance,ifIremembercorrectly.Mustsaythatyouhadmethinkingattheend,and
I'm(tobehonest)gladyou'veprovidedtheanswersinyoucommenttoJLJenkins
already(withregardtotheboysmilingintheendandhowthewarwithsmithwould
continue:).Likethesettingoftheenvironmentstoandreallyhopetoseeitfullscreen
inthecinema!
Thankyouforthisgreatstory!IhopetheWachowskibrothersareupforitandare
willingtolookdeeper"intotherabbithole".
Siju,
Youaskexcellentquestions.Luckily,Icananswermostofthem.Mostoftherationale
forhowthingshappeninthestoryIleftoutbecauseitwasalreadygettingheavywith
exposition.ButIdiddevelopthoseideasandexplanationsforpeoplelikeyourselfwho
simplycouldnotrestwithoutmoredetail.
1)AsIstateinthestory,theCortexisalivingorganlikeabrain.Tocreatetheneural
massoftheCortex,adonorwasneededfromwhichthebraincellscouldbecloned.
PersephoneandVictor(TheMerovingian),beingthedesignersandbuildersofthe
Cortex,chosetheirinfantdaughter,Trinity,asthedonor.Theproblemarisesfromthis.
VictorandPersephonenowsharegeneticinformationincommonwiththeCortex.Their
entryintotheCortextriggerssometragicandirreparablereactionduetothissimilarity
butatthesametimeitalsoinsulatesandprotectsthem.Theyarepermanentlystuckin
theSuperMatrix,buttheydon'tdie(whichisthefateofotherswhosesequencingcode
changeswhenenteringtheSuperMatrix).AftertheArchitectfiguresoutthecauseof
PersephoneandVictor'smishap,he'sabletomakeadjustmentsandpreventitfrom
happeningwithTrinity(whosharestheCortex'sgeneticinformation,too).Hopethat's
nottooconvolutedanexplanation.AndIhopeitseemsplausible.
2)No,Neo'sbodyhasnotpreviouslyphysicallyexistedattheSource.Thebodyhe
inhabitsintheSourceisaclonebody,builtfrominformationfromhisvirtualprofile.AsI
stateinthestory,hebecomesthefirstvirtualpersontobecomearealperson.
3)ImaybewrongbutIbelieveNeowentbythenameNeotohisfriendsandtothe
computer/drug-hackerworldheassociatedin.IassumedRachelwouldhavecalledhim
Neo.TheonlypeoplewhoIremembercallinghimMr.AndersonwereSmithandhis
bossathisjob.No?
4)Yes.YES!Theflipofthemachinesbeingenslaved(withpocketsofandroidresistance)
Ithoughtwasquitethought-provokingandmaybenotthatfar-fetchedforourown
future.Whetherhumansareseenasbadorgoodisopentodebate.Wecreated
machines,sodoweownthem,havearighttodowhatwewantwiththem?Or,once
they'regivenartificialintelligence,dotheybecomeindependentbeingsintheirown
right,entitledtoallitsfreedoms?Hardquestions.
AsfarastheBibleparallelsareconcerned,IthinktheystillpertaintotheoriginalTrilogy
story.Whethermystoryupsetsthoseparallels,Ithinkisalsoupfordebate.Personally,I
thinkmystoryenhancesthem.IthinkoftheworldoftheSourceandtheCortexasa
sortofheavenorworldbeyond.I'mnotsurehowotherswillviewit.
Anyway,Iverymuchenjoyedansweringyourquestions...mostobviously,becauseI
COULD.Ihopemyexplanationsweren'ttoovagueorimplausible.
PDWood
WillemThoonen,
Happytohearyouenjoyedit.
Yes,thetitle,SuperMatrix,hasmetwithmixedreviews;toomuchlikeSuperManor
something.Soundsabittoohokey,Iguess.ImightendupcallingitMatrixRememory,
asthiswasthetitleofthestorythatstartedmeonthetracktoafourthMatrix.People
seemtolikethattitlebut,tome,it'snotaspunchy.We'llsee.
Nicetoknowthatthedialogueandstorylineareconvincing.Thosearealwayshardto
assesswhenwritingthestory.
TheideasandstorylinefromtheSecondRenaissance(Animatrixmovies)maytouch
uponsomeofmystory,butremember...intermsofmystory,theMatrixarchivesare
justanothervirtualcreationlikeeverythingelseintheSuperMatrix.Thisisacrucial
distinction.WhateverhappenedorisdescribedintheMatrixarchiveshasnothingtodo
witheventsthathappenintherealworldoftheSourceandtheCortex.Exceptfor
referencestoorflashbacksfromZion,theMatrixandthemachineworld,mystoryisa
completelyseparateentity.
Ifyou'recurious,I'veaddedmoreexplanationsinthecommentssectioninthepastfew
days;theymightgiveyoumoreinsightintosomeofmyideas.
I'dreallyliketoseeitfullscreen,too!
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/17/200711:13:16AM
ThankyouMrWood,itreallyclarifies.
Iwouldliketohaveyourthoughtsonsomething.Beingamatrixfan,Ihavealwaysbeen
inspiredbythemessiahstory,thestoryofamanwhoisdestinedtosavetheworld
sorts.Yourstoryupsetsthatemotionallink,andinsteadmakesthewholestoryastaged
one.Theprophecyistrue,butnotforthegoodnessoftheenditproposes,butforthe
multipleprogramsdesignedtomakeithappen.TheOnecarriesthehopeofthelast
survivors,peoplewhounknowinglyareonlyvirtuals,butreallikeyouprofess,backedby
theirgenuineexperienceofreality.Thereisafeelingthatâ€œrealâ€ùpeoplearesetin
acyclicstrugglesystem,blindedfromthetruth,andonefromwhichthereisnoescape.
Onabroadersense,Iwouldunderstandtheneedoftheentiresystemtosubdueany
possibilityofamachineuprising.Fromanemotionalperspective,asetofbelieverslike
me,wouldhavetoshifttoanotherparadigm,toaccepttheessenceoftheâ€œSuper
Matrixâ€ù.Atleastfrommystandpoint,majorityoftheaudienceconnectsemotionally
withthepeopleofZion,andthereinliesthegreatestchallengeoftellingthemthis
story.
Justafoodforthought.:)Personally,Ihavemadethatparadigmshift,andIdidthat
becauseyourstoryhelpsanswerthemanyquestionsthatRevolutionsthrewopen.
Greatstory!!
Thanks,
Siju
Siju,
Yourstatementis,"Thereisafeelingthatâ€œrealâ€ùpeoplearesetinacyclicstruggle
system,blindedfromthetruth,andonefromwhichthereisnoescape."Asrelatesto
mystory,yes,Ithinkthatisanaccuratestatement...butonlyfromthepointofviewof
theaudienceandofthosewholiveoutsideoftheSuperMatrix.Stepawayfromthe
storyforamomentandlookatourworld.Iwouldsubmitthattheworldinwhichyou
andIliveisengagedinacyclicstrugglesystem,too,whereweareblindedfromthe
truth(i.e.whathappensafterdeath)andfromwhichthereisnoescape(exceptby
deathitself).Iguessifweknewthattherewasanotherworldbeyondourownthat
dictatedtheeventsofourlives,wemightfeelthatanemotionallinkhasbeenupset.
Butwearenotprivytothatrealization,justasthepeopleinZionandthemachineworld
arenotprivytotheexistenceoftheSuperMatrixandtheworldthatcreatedit.
OneofthedynamicsthattheWachowskibrotherssetupandwithwhichIdisagreeis
thattheworldintheMatrixisnotreal.Theintensityofthatdynamicisembodiedinthe
trivializationofharmingorkillingpeople.ThroughouttheTrilogypeopleintheMatrix
areroutinelyrippedtoshredsorriddledwithbullets.Becausethatworldisconsidered
justacomputerconstruct,wefeelno"emotionallink"orempathyforthosemurdered
people.ButIsayit'sallreal.TheworldoftheMatrix,theSuperMatrix,andtheSource
(allthreelayers)deserveasmuchemotionallinkasanyotherunknownworldsthatmay
(andprobablydo)extendintoorbeyondthem.
TomeMorpheusandNiobe(intheSuperMatrix)arenolessdeservingofanemotional
linkthanNeoandTrinity(intheSource).Tobeabletoacceptthis,onehastoseethe
validityand"realness"ofallworlds,whetherinfinitesimallysmall,inexplicablylarge,
virtual,simulated,etc.AsI'vesaid,realityisdefinedbywhatoneexperiences,nomore
andnoless.Ifanaudiencecanacceptthis,thenmystorydoesn'tabandonthe
emotionalconnectionwiththepeopleofZionoranyotherpeople.
hatdothinkofallthat?
AndI'mquiteexcitedthatyoulikethestorysomuch.Cheers!
PDWood
Twothings:
1)PleasekeepusupdatedontheprogressongettingsomeattentionfromtheWarner
BrosStudio.Youtalkedabouthittingaleadthere.I'mexcitedaboutanypossibilitythat
amoviecouldmaterialize!!:)
2)Ifthisdoesntmakeittothescreen,trygettingthisoutasacomic.Idontknowwhat
copyrightissuesthismeans,butIthinkacomicwouldbeprettycool.Ibettherearea
bunchofkidswho'dlovetoconnecttothisstory,andthey'dloveacomictoa
screenplayanyday.
Thisdefinitelyisn't"just"fanfictionmaterial,andshouldn'tstaythatwayforlong,and
thatswhymostofuswouldhopetowatchitasamoviesomeday!
Cheers!
Siju
Siju,
Thanksforalltheattentionandkindwords.Ifanythingsoliddevelops,I'lldefinitelypost
it.I'minterestedinpursuinganyoptionsatthispoint.Keepyourfingerscrossed.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CamrynDATE:12/26/20075:19:13AM
Ijustgotdonereadingyourscriptanditwasreallygood.Someofthelinesintherethe
characterswouldprobablyneversayinthemovies.Iwaswonderingifyoucouldhelp
mewithafewquestionsinthestory.1.Canuexplainwhatsmithdoesatthemachine
worldandhowhegetsthere.2.Whoisserenatheoracleinthematrixormorpheus's
mom?3.Neoislivinginaclonebodyingintherealworld?4.Whatbodiesdomorpheus
andzionhave.
Camryn,
Gladyouenjoyedit.
Ithinkifyoubrowsethroughtheexistingcomments,mostofyourquestionswillbe
answered.Ifnot,Isuggestyourereadthestory;myguessisthatasecondpassshould
revealthem.Theexplanationsarethere.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SaidADATE:1/14/20081:17:38AM
IhavebeenaMatrixfanforsuchalongtime,i'vestudiedthephilosophy,wrotepapers
aboutthemetaphysicsofthematrix,butwhatyouhavedone..amazesme.YouPage24
of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/124:57PMhavetakenthistoanewlevel,and
ithankyou.IsodesperatelywantedtoseeaMatrix4,andyouhavemadethatpossible
withthisscreenplay.Thisscreenplayisamazingandifitevergetsturnedintoamovie,
willbephenomenal.IplanonreadingRememoryaswell.
ThankyouforkeepingtheMatrixstoryaliveandgoing.
P.SIjustreadwhatthesupermatrixisanditisMINDBLOWING,iwouldneverhave
gussedit.
SaidA,
YouandIbothwouldlovetoseeitbecomeamovie.I'vebeentryingtofindtheright
contactinsidethemovieworld,butthat'satallorder.
I'mgladyoufounditsoamazing.
IfyoureadMatrixRememory,justkeepinmindthatitcamebeforeTheSuperMatrix
story;theSuperMatrixusesmuchofwhatwasinRememorybutmovesbeyondthatto
thebigclimax.Hopeyoulikethatone,too.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SaidA.DATE:1/15/20082:20:56AM
JustfinisheditandIloveit.Iwishitwaslonger,onlytookme2hourstoreadit.There
weresomeideasthatconfusedme,butIwillre-readitoncei'mdonewithrememory
andseeificanunderstanditbetter.
Areyouplanningonwritinganymorestories?
PLEASEwritemore.Writeanotherscript,writeaseries.JustkeeptheMatrixstoryalive!
SaidA,
Gladyoufounditsosatisfying.Yes,asecondreadshouldclarifymuch.Youmightalso
siftthroughothercommentsonthesite;Iansweralotofotherpeople'squestions
there.
Iwillbewritingmore...butnotintheMatrixvein,probably.Iwanttobringmyown
storiestocreationwithoutalwaysfeelingthatit'sbuiltonsomeoneelse'swork.
But...therearemanyfanfictionsitesouttherebrimmingwithideas.Noshortageofthat
ifyouarelookingforit.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MikeMadnessDATE:1/17/20085:56:03PM
Ithinkthescripttothe4thpartisamazing.Itopensawholenewspectrumofpointof
views.It'slikethefirstonewhichtookyousomewhereyouwouldneverexpect.Ithink
thisonewoulddefinitelybringtheideaofthe"matrix"toawholenewhorizon.Isaw
thefirstonethefirstdayitcameoutandafterreadingthe4thscriptimustsay
satisfyingitfilledthevoidofquestionssurroundingwhatafter?Ihonestlythinkthis
scriptshouldshouldstayasisandnotbealtered.
ImustsayTHANKS...
MikeMadness,
Thephrase,"Ihonestlythinkthisscriptshouldshouldstayasisandnotbealtered,"is
onethatawriterrarelyhears.There'salwayssomethingthatpeoplewouldliketo
change.I'mnotsurethisscriptiswithoutfault(evenIfeelsomethingscouldbebetter),
butI'lltakeyourkindwordsinthespiritthatthey'regivenandwiththeknowledgethat
suchwordsmaynotcomeagainanytimesoon.
I'mstillworkingonthepossibilitythatthescriptsI'vesentoutmaycatchtheattention
ofthemoviemakingindustry.Itwouldbefuntoseeitonthebigscreen.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:werewolfDATE:1/26/20087:55:06AM
heyifyouturnthisintoamovie
pleasepleasepleaseletmebeinit.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodEMAIL:thesupermatrix@comcast.netIP:24.34.95.13
URL:DATE:1/26/20082:23:14PMwerewolf,
I'lltakethatasanpositiveendorsement.
OK...whenitallcomestogether,you'llbethefirstpersontoaudition...OK?
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarioDATE:2/6/20085:20:12PM
HiWood,
firsiwanttosay...WOW!!
ILOVEDthewhyuwrotethescreenplay...verynicestory...when(notif)thishitsthe
screen...ithinkiwillbeasbigasthefirs(thebest)part...maybeevenbigger.
Ionlyhaveonesmallcriticandthatisasmallconflictbetweentheoriginallovestory
betweenNeoandTrinityandyours.Intheoriginalstoryshetellshimthatsheisinlove
withhimandthattheoracletoldherthatshewouldfallinlovewithadeadmen.(she
saidthatwhenhedied)...andinyourstoryusaythatshestartedtofallinlovewithhim
whileshewaswatchinghim(fromtherealwordasiunderstood).
soithinkthatthiscreatesasmallconflictbetweenthetwolovestoriesandmaybeu
couldmakesomesmallchanges.
Onexamplewhatifshewentintothematrixtokillhim..butwhileshewaswatchinghim
fromthematrixshestartedtofallinlovewithhimandthatiswhatchangedhermindto
extracthimfromthematrixasanewlifefrom.
wellihopeu'lllookintothis..ortellmeifiunderstooditwrong.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWood
Thankyou.
Thankyou,thankyou.Commentshavebeenabitslowrecently.SoI'mgivingyou3
"thankyou"s.
Imustnothavebeenclearenoughinmystoryaboutaveryimportantdistinction(since
thisconfusionhascomeupbefore).HereistheexplanationIgavetothecommenter,
Siju,awhilebackonessentiallythesamepoint.
<<3)Noone,wheninsidetheSuperMatrix,knowsanythingthatishappeningoutsideof
it.TheOracle,whileinsidetheSuperMatrix,isnotawarethatTrinity'spurposeisto
extractNeoandbringhimoutoftheSuperMatrix.Butsheissetinmotiontohelp
facilitatethatend.Hervalue(totheSourceandtheArchitect)isthatshecanbe
programmedoutsideoftheSuperMatrix(throughbrain/memorymanipulation)to
believecertainthingsorperformcertaintasksthatshewillthenperformwhensheisin
theSuperMatrix.ThisiswhatgivesherherOraclestatusandabilitytoseethefuture.
>>
Similarly,Trinity,wheninsidetheSuperMatrix,hasnoawarenessofanythingbeyond
Zion,themachineworld,andtheMatrix.WhensheenterstheSuperMatrix,sheretains
nomemorythathermotherisPersephone,herfatheristheMerovingian,orher
grandfatheristheArchitect;allhermemoriesofthatpartofherlife(ie,therealworld)
aretemporarilyshutoff.Thisiswhyshehasnorecollectionofhavingfalleninlovewith
NeointheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix.ToherandtoeveryoneintheoriginalMatrix
Trilogy,thereisnoawarenessoftheSuperMatrix.
Ihopethatclearsitupabit.Letmeknow.
Thanksagain.Oops!That's4"thankyou"s.Ohwell.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarioEMAIL:mariotodorovski@yahoo.comIP:87.177.194.77
URL:DATE:2/6/200810:19:04PMwell...thxforclearingthigsup:D
andthankyouforthe4"thankyou"s;)
isaiditbefor,i'llsayitagain...iLOVEthewayuwrotethescreenplay.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodURL:DATE:2/6/200810:40:49PM
Thankyou#5
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SinningslaveDATE:2/12/20085:30:06PM
Thisistheoneofthebestscreenplaysiveverread:D
Verykewl
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodURL:DATE:2/12/20085:54:42PM
Sinningslave,
Thanks.
IguessIhopeyou'vereadalotofscreenplays.
Ifso,I'mgladitfoundit'swaytothetopofyourlist.
Doyouhaveanycontactsintheindustry?
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSlavensDATE:2/17/20081:32:16AM
ImdefinitelyinterestedinaMatrix4butnotinaprequel.Somanytimesmoviesget
screwedupbyahalfassattempttoanswerquestionsormakealowbudgetresponseto
ahighbudget/qualitymovie.IwouldlovetoseeaMatrix4butitshouldbeanactual
Sequelanditshouldhavethesamecharactersandincrediblefighting.andcontinue
fromtheend...pleasedontevengivepeopleideasofturningthisintosomehalfbaked
chickflickcrap.
SorrytheprequelideaistheworstideaIcanthinkof.AndIdonteventhinkiwouldpay
toseeit.
Mark,
Icouldn'tagreemore;aMatrix4shouldbehighqualityandhighbudgetwithmostlythe
samecharactersandsomeincrediblefighting.ThisisbasicallywhatIthinkI'vecreated.
Inmyopinionit'snotjustsomehalf-bakedprequel;itreallyisasequelthatalsoanswers
somequestionsaboutthehistoryofcertaincharacters.Anditdoespickupexactly
whereMatrixRevolutionsleftoff.IstronglyurgeyoutoreaditandthenI'dbegladto
respondtoanycomments(criticalorpraising)youhave.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenKoscelanskyDATE:2/19/20087:12:26PM
Ilikedthestoryyes,butIwasalwaysconfused,evenreadingitoverandover...Ithinkit
isjustmethough..Theendingwasunexpectedalso.IthinkthoughthewayMorpheous
wastalkingwasnotlikehewasinthemovie,hewasmore"Normal"otherthanthat,
goodread.
Stephen,
I'mgladyoulikediteventhoughitwasconfusingtoyou.Isuggestyoureadsomeofthe
othercommentsleftonmywebsite;theyclarifysomepointsthatothershadtrouble
with.
Itcanbehardtokeepthestorythreadsstraightbecausethetimelinejumpsarounda
lot.SomehowIthinkthescreenplaywouldbeeasiertofollowasamovie,wherea
devicelike(justasanexample)goingbackandforthfromblackandwhitetocolorwhen
thereareflashbackswouldkeeptheviewermoreorientedtotheflowofevents.
AndMorpheus,yes,Itriedtotonehimdownabit.Ifyouthinkaboutwherehismindis
inmystory,itkindofmakessense.Inthepreviousthreemovieshissolepurposeinlife
wastofindandtrainNeotosavehumanity.Nowthatpurposeisgone.Also,(atleastas
farasheknowsinmystory)TrinityandNeoaredead;twoofhisclosestfriendsare
gone.Andmore,thethreatofthemachinesisnotcompletelygoneandthereisno
savioronthehorizon.Giventhesechangestohislife,IfiguredMorpheushadtochange
quiteabit.Anyway,that'smyrationale.
Whenyousaytheendingwasunexpected,whatpartoftheendingwereyoureferring
to?
Thanksforthereadandthecomments.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShaunDATE:2/23/20084:25:05PM
JustfinishedreadingthisandIhavetosay,Ithoroughlyenjoyedit.
Towardsthebeginningofthestory,Iwasbecomingincreasinglyannoyedwiththe
breaksinthestoryfortheflashbacks(whichisoddtosay,comingfromsomeonewho
lovesLOST).
Oncethestorywentonandtherelevanceoftheflashbacksmademoresense,Ienjoyed
themaswell.IsuspectifIweretorereadthisstory,I'denjoytheflashbacksthroughout
theentirestory.
Theflashbacksandsimultaneousstorylinesbetweenthematrix/supermatrixand
outsideofthesupermatrixseemsabithardtodointext,howeverIthinkyoudidaswell
ofajobasany.
Idothinktheentirestorywouldbeeasiertofollowintheformofamovieduetothe
simultaneousstorylinesandflashbacks.
TheonlyothercommentIwantedtomakewasontheending.Afterreadingthrough
severalcommentsonhereaboutpeoplehatinghowitended,Ihavetosay,Idisagree
completely.
ThereswasnorealwayfortheMatrixto"end"inmyopinion.WhileI'dliketohear
someofthebackstoryonhowMorpheus,Lock,andNiobiwereinsertedintothe
SuperMatrix,I'mfineleftwondering.
Iwasverysatisfiedafterreadingthisepisode,afeelingIdidn'thaveafterthethird
episodeended.Ihaven'treadanyotherMatrix4screenplays,andIprobablywon't.I'm
contentimaginingthisishowtheMatrixendedandwillleaveitatthat.
Greatjob!
Shaun,
Yes,creatingeffectiveflashbackswhilemaintainingthecontinuityofthestorywas
definitelythehardestpartofwritingthisscreenplay.I'mgladyouworkedthroughthem
soyoucouldenjoythemanyjuicysurprises.Asamovie,Iagree,Ithinkthestorywould
bemuchmorefluid.Iencourageyoutogiveitasecondfastread,asIthinkalotofnew
detailsandconnectionswillappear.It'shardtopickitallupthefirsttimethroughsince
earlierscenesgetaddeddepthbythingsthatarerevealedlaterinthemovie.
Thereseemtobetwoschoolsofthoughtonmovieendings,theschoolthatwants
closureandtheschoolthatlikesopen-endedcontinuity.Personally,Ilikeboth,
dependingonthestory.WiththeMatrixstoryitseemedalmostantitheticaltogiveita
clearending.
Thanksforthespecificcommentsandappreciation.
Let'shopewecanseethismovieinthetheaterssomeday.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MitchellDATE:2/25/20083:13:39AM
Ilovedthis.Ireaditinonesitting,it'ssimplyamazinganditansweredmanyquestions.
YoucouldmakeNeo'ssonolder,maybeateenager.Youcouldalsomake
Mourok/Smith'sreentrytotheMatrixalittlelongerormakehisawarnesstothesenew
powersabitlonger.
Thereisaverygoodpotentialforthistobecomesomething.Maybeat.v.series,likethe
currentTerminator.
Ilovetoseethisinamuchlongerandmoredetailedanimeversion.Ananimeserieswill
beamazingwiththisscreenplay.WhatanimatrixdidforReloaded,butinsteadof9
episodes,say50ormore,thenculminatewithamovie.
ThiswouldbesoooooamazinginAnimeversion,withsomeanimationlikeKaras.
Mitchell,
You'reright,there'spotentialforsomuchmoreinthisstory.ButIliketheideathatit
hasanending,open-endedasitis.That'sjustme,Iguess.
I'dbecontentiftheWachowskibrothersjustdroppedmeadimeandsaid,"Nicejob!".
Ofcourse,makingitintoamoviewouldbethebest.I'mstillworkingonthatpossibility.
Anyway,thanksforthekindwords.Gladyouenjoyeditsomuch.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MichealDATE:3/5/20084:02:09AM
Ihavehadmany,MANY,Ideas,add-onsandvariousrevelationsinthematrixfranchise.
Neo,Trinity,andMorpheusallhavespecialplacesintheworldthatisthematrix.ihave
alsohadmanyinstanceswhereibelievethatmyideaswouldhaveheldsomeweightin
thefictionousworld.bethatasitmay,yourstorystartsoffinterestingenough...Ido
wishtomakesomepersonalcomments,morelogicalpracticeshouldbeimplementedin
thewholeMindovermatterthatneoexhibitsforinstance...thereshouldbemorecode
screens(justanideamindyou)ifneochangessomethingthatdramaticallychangesthe
environment,thecodethatisneo'snervoussystemshouldhaveasinglecodechange
fromhisbrainandrunthroughhisbody(letssayagoldbitofcode)anditstartssmall
emanatingfromhisbrainthroughhisnervoussystem(thinkofthecodescreenview)
andoutwardthroughthe"real"worldandhisfocus(energy,gravity)warpsthecode
aroundhim(air,floor,wall,being,animal)thuschangingtogoldwitha"new"setof
supposedrulesthusbeingeasilymanipulatedbyneohimselfbutonlyuntilthematrix
resetsitsselfrestoringordertobegovernedbyacomputertermknownasclicks*the
fastertheclicksthemorethecomputerchecksitssettingstypedeal*...(kindalikethe
dudeprotectingtheoracle)wellthat'stheidea...andtheSUPERMATRIX...wellican't
tellyouwhattonameitbuthere'sanideaortwo...theMatrix:Evolutions*though
redundant*itgreatdescribesthechangethathappensinthetrilogy,orthe
matrix:reconstructed...justathought,butthesupermatrix...unsure..againitsa
personalthing..noneedtopayanyattentiontowhatibelieveshouldbethetitle,hope
tohearfromyoutakeiteasy...andifyoudohappentomeetthecasttellthemmicheal
fromtexassayshi...:)
HiMichealfromTexas,
I'llbegladtotellthecast"hi"foryou,ifyoucansetupthemeeting.I'vebeentryingto
breakthroughtheHollywoodmazewiththisscript,butnolucksofar.Anyonewith
connections,letmeknow.
Yes,thename....Iknow,SuperMatrixsoundssomuchlikeSuperManorsomething;it
throwssopeople.Butontheotherhandit'sgotalotofzaptoitandit's
prettywelldescriptiveoftheunderlyingpremiseofthestory.IthoughtmaybeMatrix
Revelations(tooclosetoRevolutions?)orevenMatrixRememory(akindoflooking
back,sequel/prequelkindofflavor).MatrixEvolutionsandMatrixReconstructedare
good,too,butstill,theydon'thavetheforceoftheSuperMatrix.It'sgottabe
somethingthatpops!IMHO
I'mgladyoulikethestory.Thelogicalpracticeofimplementingthe"mindovermatter"
stuffis,Ithink,somethingthedirectorofthemoviewouldprobablywanttocontrol.I
didn'tputtoomuchofthatinthescriptbecauseIfigureditwouldjustgetchanged
later.Yoursuggestionsaregood,though.Ifitevermakesittoproduction(andpeople
askmeformyopinion),I'llkeepyourideasinmind(overmatter...hee,hee.)
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MichealDATE:3/6/20087:45:39AM
Iwaspleasedtoseesuchaexpeditedresponse...andtechnicallyIamnotfromtexas,
justkindaranintoamixupofconglomeratedinstancesthatledmetobelievethati
havemetthe"cast"inthelonestarstate,(letsjustsayifmyassumptionsarecorrect,
lifeasweknowitceasestomakeanysensegiventhesumofthepartsgoverningthe
richandfamouse)howeveridohavesomeinsiteonwhototalktoo(ificansetupthe
trip)CarrieAnnMossisaprivatepersonindeed.Butihavegivenplentyoffeedback
(whileonmystayintexas)tosuchindividualsonmyviewoftheMatrixmovie...sothat
mystorydoesn'tfalltooclosetothecookootree.ihavehadthechancetoridealong
withpersoninquestiontotheWBlot,wheretheyhousethecastandcrewofvarious
WBproductions..thoughidon'tfallingoodstanding(longstory)Idontseetheharmin
presentingsaidscriptsothattherightpeoplecanreadit.Thesituationwithinthisvery
lucretiverealmisiffyatbest,simplycauseiwasneverreallytoldwhoimetthatday
*mostlythatthepeoplewheretheSonandDaughter*whotheywhereandwhatthey
didwasamystery.aswastheentireordealofsocializingmyselfwiththeses
individuals....alliknowisthatonapersonallevel,thereisaconnectionbetweenwhoi
havemetinmylifeandmebeingthereatthatpointintimeinmylife...Idoknowthat
thispersonlivesinthiswayunderprivatecircumstances,andthattheymusthavetheir
rightsrespected...butiwilldeffinatlykeepyourscriptinmindiftheoppertunityever
arises.mainlymyHItothecastwasjusttoseeifsurpizeeverenteredtheirfaces.ihope
youmakeitwiththisscript...iwouldlovetoseethismovieactuallyfinished.
Micheal,
Mypleasure.
CarrieAnnMoss.Well,thatwouldbesomething.Thestorydoesrevolvearoundher
charactertoalargedegree,soperhapsshewouldbeinterested.Anyattemptwouldbe
appreciated.I'dlovetoseethismovieproduced,too.
Thanks.I'llkeepmyfingerscrossed.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:michaelDATE:3/12/200810:25:34AM
yesit'sbeenawhile.andineversaiditwasher,thoughbeitbefitting.Mostwould
considermeoneveryluckymofo...........however,letsputasideinuendosforamoment
[thinkwhatyouwill]realitydesperatlyneedstocomecrawlingbacktotherecessesof
mybrain.Iapologizeifiseemdisturbedbutthoesmemoriesofyesteryearplaugeme,
pathetically.Ifthenerverevitalises,imayventureonathirdattempttorectifymy
issuessurroundingthemystery.Ionlycanpraythatiwouldhavetesticularfortitudeto
resolvetheaforementioned.Allinalltheformalitiesstillseemspacy.illkeepthisin
mindsincethepersoninquestionmayverywellstillbeattainable.Justhavegetback
outthereisall.btwumightwannacheckyourauthenticationscriptorwhateversince
eventhoughyoutypethecodeindicatedaboveitasksseveraltimestore-enter,basicly
itsacrapshoot.us
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TinuDATE:3/13/20088:06:20PMHelloPD,
Firstofall,Iwouldliketoclarifythatunlikemostpeoplewhohaveexpressedtheirviews
here,Iamquitesatisfiedbythewaytheactualtrilogyended.Andicouldnotimagineto
watchanothersequelevenifitwascreatedbytheWachowiskibrothersthemselves.So
whenicameacrossyoursiteitwaswithakindavengeancethatidloadedthepdf....but
nolongerhadigonethruthefirst5pagesihavetoadmitthtiwashooked....theideaof
asupermatrixenthralledme....andireallyhavetogiveyoucreditforcomingupwithan
ideologyththumanswereincontrolofthemachinesallalong...Alsoanotherthingtht
flooredmewasthewayyoutwistedthecharacters(MerovingianandPersephonebeing
Trinity'sparents)withoutanyinsecuritiesregardingdisloyalitytowardsthe
original.....andyetpullingitoff!!hatsofftoyou....
Someoftheshortcomings(udonthavetonecessarilyworryaboutthem,theyrjustan
amateur'sviewofthings)Ifoundwere:
1)morpheusandniobeshud'vebeengivenmorescreentime.
2)thepresentscenarioregardingtheandroid36isnotmentionedclearly.
3)thearchitectinyourstorytotallycontradictstheoneintheoriginal(iknowthtsthe
wayitssupposedtobeaccordingtoyou)butiguessitwillbehardfortheppltodigest...
4)Neoseemstobelessflusteredbythefactthteverythingththeeverdidinthematrix
amountedtosavingaworldthtwasbeingcontrolledbythesamepplhewastryingto
saveinthefirstplace
Butignoringalldifferenceofopinionitseemsasifyoumight'vegotsomething
there....maybenotdeepenoughfortheWachowiskibrotherstofathombutbigenough
tomakematrixfanswantmore....
Regards,
Tinu.
Tinu,
Wellthattakesthecake!Pullingsomeoneoverfromthe"Ilikeditjustthewayitended,
don'taddanotherthing"sidetothe"Hey,man,thatrocks!"sideisreallysaying
something.Itakethatasthehighestpraise.Andjusttoletyouknow,Iprobablywould
neverhaveattemptedwritingthisunlessIthoughtIcouldcomeupwithsomethingthat
coulddojusticetotheoriginalTrilogy.You'veshownmethatIsucceeded.Thanks.
1)morpheusandniobeshud'vebeengivenmorescreentime.
Absolutely.Damnthatscreenplaypagelimitation!
2)thepresentscenarioregardingtheandroid36isnotmentionedclearly.
Yeah,itcoulddefinitelybemorefleshedout.Imighthavetoworkonthat.Again,
though...damnthatscreenplaypagelimitation!(gottatrimit.)
3)thearchitectinyourstorytotallycontradictstheoneintheoriginal(iknowthts
thewayitssupposedtobeaccordingtoyou)butiguessitwillbehardforthepplto
digest...
YouhavetorememberthattheArchitectintheoriginalTrilogyistotallyunawareofthe
Architectinmystory.It'ssortoflikeatwowaymirror;peopleoutsidetheSuperMatrix
canseeinbutnottheotherwayaround.WhatIparticularlylikeisthattheArchitectin
mystoryislikeGodlookinginonhisowndevilishcounterpart.Theyarethesaviorand
thedestroyeratthesametime.Kindachewy,I'dsay.Yes,theycontradicteachother;
butthat'swhatIlikeaboutthem.Itmightbehardforotherstoswallow;hardtosay.
4)Neoseemstobelessflusteredbythefactthteverythingththeeverdidinthe
matrixamountedtosavingaworldthtwasbeingcontrolledbythesamepplhewas
tryingtosaveinthefirstplace
Ithinkthat'spartlybecausespecificpeopleintheSuperMatrix(suchasNiobe,
Morpheus,Lock)aretherewillingly,givingtheirlivesforthecause.Yes,Neocouldfeel
morebetrayed,Isuppose,butIfeelheseesthejusticeofthecharade,anecessaryevil
inahumanworldlockedintoanexistencewithintelligentmachines.Healsocomesto
acceptthattheworldintheSuperMatrixisreal,andso,therefore,notjustalie.And,of
course,Trinityiswithhimagain.Thattakestheedgeoff.
Well,Icouldgoonandon.Thanksforyourinsightsandinvolvement.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:R.ShelbyEMAIL:ryan.shelby@hotmail.comIP:67.149.132.55
URL:DATE:3/19/20083:04:05AMIthinkinorderforthe4thMatrixtobesuccessful,it
wouldhavetobeaplotthatwasinnomaysimilartotheoriginal3,andastorythat
didn'tcontinuethetrilogy,butclarifiedsomeofBSfromtheoriginal3movies.
Ilikethisstory,butallthesameproblemsIhadwiththeoriginalmatrixmoviesstill
exist.
Forinstance,IcanneverexceptthereasonfortheMatrixwasbecausetheyneededto
usehumansforbatteries.
Insteadofsimplybuildingsolarcollectorsabovethecloudsorinouterspace,apparently
it'seasiertobuildacocoonformillionsofhumansandthengothroughthetroubleof
feedingandremovingtheirwasteonadailybasis.Inaddition,theyfoundit"more
feasible"tohookthesemillionsofpeopletoavirtualworldcalledTheMatrixinorderto
"controlthem",whentheycouldhavesimplysnappedtheirneckstorenderthembrain
deadwhilekeepingtheirbodiesalive.Obviouslythiscan'tbethebestwaytoobtain
energy,sowhynotmakethe4thmovieabouthowtheyfinallygetaclue.
IthinkiftherewasaMatrix4,itwouldneedtoclearupthesestupidpremisesthat
nevermadesense,butpeoplejustboughtintobecausetheylikedtheplot.
Sohere'smyplotforthe4thmovie.
Themachineworldisveryclosetodevelopinganalternatepowersourcethatwill
eventuallyeliminatetheirneedforhumans.Themoviebeginswiththemachinesin
outerspacebuildingthesesolarPage33of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/12
4:57PMcollectorsthatwillbeamtheenergytothesurface.
AstheMachinesbecomeclosertocompletingtheproject,theybeginplanstopullthe
plugonTheMatrixsincetheywillnolongerdependonhumansfortheirpowerneeds.
ThiswouldmeanthateveryhumanpluggedintotheMatrixwilldie,andsoonafterthey
willjustkilleveryoneinZionsincepeaceisnolongernecessary.
Becauseoftheirdesirefortheirownself-preservation,theprogramswithintheMatrix
fearfortheirexistence,andsotheydecidetojoinforceswiththehumansinorderto
stoptheMachinesfrompullingtheplug,thusbecomingalliesinawarbetweenthe
Machineworldandthehuman/Matrixprogramalliance.
AstheprogramsintheMatrixhelpreleasehumansfromtheMatrix,thehumanarmyof
Ziongrowslargerandlargeruntiltheyeventuallyhavethenumberstogoheadtohead
againstthemachinesandpreventthemfromcompletingtheirnewpowersource.
Idon'tknow,that'sjustmythought.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/19/200810:21:18AMR.
Shelby,
Itendtoagreewithyouabouttheideaof"humansasbatteries".Takenliterally,it'sa
toughsell.Ingeneralthough,Itakeideaslikethatinstridebylookingatthemas
metaphors.Theyunderlyingthemeisthathumansaredominatedbymachinesandhave
beenthrustintoamake-believeworld;thehuman'sdilemmaistoescapefromthis
worldandregaincontroloftheirdestiny.SinceIlikethisthemesomuch,Isuspendmy
beliefjustenoughtogetoverthe"humansasbatteries"concept.
ItseemsthatyourideaforafourthMatrixdoesn'treallygetridofthe"humansas
batteries"concept,somuchasbuildsontopofitinanattempttoclimbupoutofit.I
do,however,likethebasicideaofhumansandprogramsintheMatrixteamingup
togethertooverthrowthemachines;itsetsupanicedynamic.
Maybeyoushouldwriteafourthepisode,too.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:LindseyDATE:3/30/20088:32:06PM
ilovethescreenplay,butiamkindofconfused.AretrinityandNeostilltogether,and
didtrinityalwaysknowthatneohadason,andissheokaywithit.Domorphiusandall
themknowthatneoandtrinityarealivE.Andlastllywhenneowokeupatthebeginning
aboutthesupermatrix...idontreallygetwhatthatis...howdothematrix,the
supermatrixandtherealworldfitin.Isthesupermatrixwhatneowastoldwasthereal
worldintheotherthreemovies...pleaseexplain
ps...Iabsolutelylovethematrix...andkeanu...bravo
Lindsey,
Happytohearthatyouenjoyedit.Isuggestyoutakealookatthethreepagesof
commentsonmywebsite;Ihaveafeelingyou'llfindtheanswersthere.Ifnot,letme
know,andI'llbegladtoclarify.
Thanksforthethumbsup.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:thanosDATE:4/2/20081:56:44PM
Excellentwriting!Youhaveagreatstylethatisyourown.Myadvicewouldbetocreate
yourownoriginalwork.TryingtowriteafollowuptoMatrixisakintowritinga"7th
BrandenburgConcerto"orasequeltothe"IChing".Matrixtrilogyisanabsolute
philosophicalmasterpiece.
U2isagreatbandbutiftheywrotewhattheythoughtwouldbethenextBeatlesalbum
after"LetitBe"itwouldbeoutrightoffensive.Thisisn'tjustanother"Alien"or"Jaws"
movie.Matrixissacredground.Ifyouhaven'treadtheseyoushould:
http://wylfing.net/essays/matrix_reloaded.html
Matrixisanimportantworkasitbringsmostoftheconceptsfromwesternreligionand
easternphilosophy-whichareusuallytoldthroughancientmythology(Bible,IChing
etc..)toamodernsetting.JustliketheBhagavad-Gita,thestoryofKrishna'scounselin
thetimeofwarwhichtaughteasternphilosophythroughthesestoriestomillions,the
Matrixtrilogydoesthisforourgenerationandprobablyfordecades/centurystocome.
Ifyoudon'tthinkthisistruereadtheessaysfirst.
Withthatinmindit'shardtoimaginewantingto"add"ontosuchastory.Atleastnot
withoutafewdecadesofINTENSEstudyonphilosophy/theology/mythologyliketheW
brothershad.
You'vedonesuchagreatjobinyourownway!Thatstoryjustdoesn'tbelonginthe
Matrixtrilogy/quadrilogy(?)Butnotforlackoftalentonyourpart.It'sbecausenobody
cancomparetotheWBattheirowngame.
anyway,writesomenewstuff,youhavemadtalent!
Thanos,
ConsideringthatyouthinktheTrilogyshouldn'tbetouched,Ifindgreatencouragement
inyourcommentsaboutmywriting.And,yes,Ihaveeveryintentionofmovingforward
onaprojectofmyown.
Ididn'tmeantoinanywaydiminishtheimpactorgreatnessoftheTrilogybywriting
anotherepisode.Myintentionwasonlytoexpandonafantasticwork.ButIunderstand
yourpointand,asI'vesaid,Iammovingontosomethingofmyowncreation.Hopefully,
Icanachieveasimilarlevelofquality.
Madtalent.Ohyeah...Ilikethat!
Thanksforthebanter.PDWood
AndI'lldefinitelycheckoutthoseessays.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HassanSmithDATE:4/4/20088:45:05PM
Thiswasverywellthoughtout.IjustfinishedtodayandIreallydidenjoyit.Itdoestend
tobendthemindabitbutitmakesinaccordancetowhatwealreadyknowaboutthe
trilogy.Ihavetroubleenvisioningthearchitectasacharacterwithanyemotionoutside
ofsmugsuperiority.Youdidagoodjobweavingtherelationshipstogether,theLockeMorpheusthinggelledwithmebuttherelationshipwithTrinity,Merv,andPersephone
didn'tfit.Thisisbasedonherresponsetotheminpart2and3.Hadshebeenless
agressiveinherinteractions,youwouldhavehadtheperfectfit.Wasshesomehow
washedofhermemoryofthemwhenshecameincontactwiththem?Ireallylikedthe
adventofthe36androids,greatconcept.Youtookthereaderalotofdifferentplaces
andIwouldlovetoseethisonscreen.IamabigfanoftheMartialArts,sotheonly
thingIwouldhavewantedmoreofisthat,andNeoflyingofcourse.Ialsohavethe
pictureofadifferentOracleinmind.Aftertheoriginalactresspassed,thatcharacter
seemsabitinterchangeabletome.Overall,though,Iwouldpitchthisthingandpitchit
hardifyouhaven'talready.Iheardthebrothersaresellingthefranchise,doyouknow
whatthestatusis?Also,doyouthinkthereisapossibilityofapart4inourlifetime?
Thanksforputtingyourtimeintothis.
Hassan,
Happytohearyouenjoyedit.
Ithink,though,thatyoumissedaveryimportantpointaboutthestory.ItseemsIneed
toworkonmakingiteasiertounderstand.
InsidethevirtualworldsofthetheMatrixandtheSuperMatrixabsolutelynobodyhas
knowledgeoftherealworldbeyond.
Therealworldistheonethathasconqueredthemachinesandiscomprisedofthe
Source,theCortex,theworlddividedupintodistricts,theandroid36s,thePresident,
etc.
InthisrealworldtheArchitect,knownasAlexStrong,isaverygoodman.The
Merovingian,knowasVictoratthispoint,isthesonoftheArchitect.Heisalsoagood
personandismarriedtoPersephone.Theyarethetwomainchemicalengineers
responsibleforcreatingtheneuralbraincalledtheCortexthathousestheSuperMatrix.
Theyhaveadaughter,Trinity.Theyareallgoodpeopleandrelatedbyfamily.
Allpeopleintherealworldhaveanidenticallookingcounterpartinthevirtualworld.
Theycanassumetheroleoftheircounterpartatanytimeifcircumstancesdemandit.
WhenpeoplefromtherealworldentertheSuperMatrixortheMatrix,theirknowledge
oftherealworldistemporarilyswitchedoff(noterasedorwashed).
TheArchitect'svirtualcounterpartistheevilleaderofthemachines.Implicitistheidea
thattheArchitect,beingthemostimportantpersonintherealworld,willneverenter
theMatrixandassumetheroleofhisvirtualcounterpart.Assuch,hisbadvirtual
counterpartisallowedtobetheantithesisoftherealgoodArchitect.IntheMatrixthe
badArchitecthasnorelationshiptoVictor,Persephone,orTrinity.
VictorandPersephone'svirtualcounterpartsjusthappentobeordinarypeopleinthe
Matrix.ThesevirtualshavenorelationshiptoTrinityortheArchitect.
IntheprocessofleavingtherealworldandenteringtheMatrix,therealVictorand
Persephonearetransformedinsomeunintendedwaywhichalsomakesthemunableto
everbepulledbackoutintotherealworld.Theyquicklybecomecorruptedbythe
powerstheyhavebroughtwiththem.Victor,soonafter,likeninghimselftoaking,takes
ontheMerovingianname.
So,again,intheMatrix,Trinityisnotnorhassheeverbeenthedaughterofthe
MerovingianandPersephoneorthegranddaughteroftheArchitect.Likewise,inthe
MatrixtheArchitectisnotnorhasheeverbeenthefatheroftheMerovingianorthe
grandfatherofTrinity.
Ihopethisclarifiesthestoryforyouandgivesitmorecohesiveness.Ithinkasamovie
theideasI'mtryingtoconveywouldbeeasiertounderstand.Ihopeso,anyway.
Otherwise,it'sbacktothedrawingboard.
Yes,Ilovetheandroid36s,too.Thesemachinesarenowtheunderdogsfightingagainst
therepressivehumans.Therolesarereversed,and,toacertainextent,wefeelsome
sympathyfortheplightofthemachines.Makesyouthink.
Manypeoplehavewishedformoreaction(meincluded).Thestoryisverychatty
(althoughstill,Ithink,engaging)andneedsabitmorevisualmotionspice.SoI'm
workingontryingtoinjectmoreactionandmartialartsintothestoryasawhole.Imay
havetosacrificesomechattyscenestomakeroomfortheadditionalaction(screenplay
pagelimitationsareverystrict!).Ifyouoranyoneouttherecantellmewhichscenes
aresuperfluousoratleastnotabsolutelynecessary,I'dbemuchobliged.
I'mdoingalastrewriteandwillpitchitthissummer.And,no,Ihadn'theardthatthey
weresellingthefranchise.Wheredidyouhearthat?Ontheinternet?
Thanksagainforthecommentsandsupport.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:benditoDATE:4/25/20083:09:44AM
therewillbeanothertrilogyinaboutadecade...justlikestarwars.
Ireallyhopeit'ssoonerthanthat.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenDATE:4/27/20083:47:47AM
Inreallyhopethereisa4thMatrix.WhethertheW.Brothersexpandonideasfromyour
scriptornot,Iwouldlovetoseea4thmovie.It'snotoftenthatamovieismadethat
pleasestheeyesandmind.Whowouldhavethoughtitpossiblethatascififlickwould
haveadeepspiritualmeaning?IwishthatpeoplelikeuscouldactuallyinfluencetheW.
brother'sdecisiontomakeanotherMatrixfilm.I'veheardtheremaybeascriptalready.
Ihopeitwillbeputtogooduse.Heck,eveniftheywroteabookorseriesofnewbooks
expandingontheideasoftheMatrixtrilogy,I'ddefinitelybeaninterestedreader.
I'dlovetoseeafourth,too.But,personally,I'dlikeittoendthere.Ifitgoesonfortoo
long,itcanbecomeveryhomogenized.Ilikethecompactnessofafinitepackage.
Wheredidyouhearaboutascriptforafourthepisodealreadyintheworks?Ihaven't
heardanythinglikethat.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenDATE:4/27/20084:37:04PM
BelowisanexcerptfromanarticleI'verecentlyread...:
Whenthetimecametoputtogetherasequel,accordingtoavarietyofsources,
includingWikipediaandIMDB,severalconceptsandscripttreatmentsweredeveloped,
butmostknockedbackbyWarnerforfurtherrevision.Astimedeveloped,rumorhasit
thattheWachowski'shadwrittenonescript,whichwaswaytoolong.Ratherthan
sacrificecertainscenes,theydecidedtodividethescriptinhalf.
So,essentiallyspeaking,ReloadedandRevolutionswereinitiallyconceivedasONEfilm,
notTWO.Whichgoesforthtosaythatperhapstherewereand/orareplansforathird
screenplay,Page37of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/124:57PMornowin
hindsight,afourthfilm.Â©1999-2008GregDavies
...Whoknowsifthisistrueornot???
Hmm,
Thanksfortheheadsup.Let'shopeithappens.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CarlosSousaDATE:4/27/200810:38:16PM
Hello,Ifinishedreadingthepdf...andasfarasaMatrixfangoes,IthoughtIwas
readinganofficalscriptfromthe'bros...sincerely.
Itcompletelymakessenseifyouthinkintheprequel/sequelkindofway.
Hatsoffforthissupermatrixapproach.Ialsogaveitsomethought,afterwatching
Revolutions,thatsomethingwasmissing,butfarfrommetofindthislittlegemfrom
anotherMatrixfan.
Curiously,IwaslisteningtoRobDougan's"FuriousAngels"atareallyloudpacewhich
kindaputmeinthemood.Ireadthe120pagesinabout20minutes,andtheyseemlike
alifetime.
Congratsonthisjob,andifapollcomesupforthisstorytomakeittoa#4Matrix...i'll
bethere,besureofit.
Carlos,
That'ssometastyfeedback.Can'taskformorethanthat.
Rightnow,allmyeffortsaregearedtowardstryingtofindanagenttoreaditandpitch
ittoHollywoodortheWachowskibrothers.ThemoreIlearn,though,themoreIrealize
thattheonlywaytogetanagenttoreadit,isifitgetsapersonalreferralfromsomeone
theagentknows.Ninety-ninepercentofthetimequerylettersandcoldcallsareadead
end.
SoI'mputtingthecallouttoeveryonetohelpmegetitintothehandsofanagent.It's
probablytheonlywayithasachanceofbeingmadeintoarealmovie.Let'shope
somebodyouttherehasgotthegoods.
Andthanksagainforthekindwords.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidCurtisDATE:5/2/20083:09:02AM
OnthewebthereismuchspeculationaboutwhetherNeoisaliveordead,butIwantto
assureyouthereisaveryclearanswerwithinthefilmsthatleavesnodoubtwhatthe
realansweris.Nospeculationinvolved.Butfirstthanksforwritingthis,Ilovewhatyou
did.THANKS!
TheanswerisgivenbytheOracleinthefirstfilm,"TheMatrix"duringwhichtheOracle
toldNeothathewouldhavetomakeachoicebetweensavinghisownlifeorthatof
Morpheus.Onthesurfacemostequatethattotherescueattemptfromthehigh
securitybuildinglaterinthatepisode,butthatwasNOTwhattheOraclewasreferring
to.
Wantproof?
AlltheanswersaregivenrightintheTrilogyitself.KeepReading....
Couldtheoracleseeintothefuture?Throughencryptedlanguageshedodgesthe
answer,butattheendofthethirdfilmtheanswerismadeveryclearthatitwas
intendedtobeadefiniteYES!
DuringthethirdfilmrightbeforeSmithconsumestheOracleturningherintoanother
Smith,sheasksaboutthelittlegirl,andSmithreplieswithwordstheOraclehadtoldthe
littlegirlwhichnooneelsecouldhaveoverheardregardingthecookies.
ThenattheendofthefilmatthecloseofthefightbetweenNeoandSmithSmith
suddenlybeginstofreakoutandrememberseeingthatmomentbefore.Hehasasort
ofdejavuexperience.
Hereistheclincher,ItwasnotSmithwhohadseenthatmomentbeforeitwasthe
Oracle.Howdoweknowthat?Becausehequotesher,"Everythingthathasabeginning
mustalsohaveanending."
ThosewerethewordstheOraclespoketoNeoduringtheirlastencountertogetherin
thethirdfilm.
TheOracleknewallalongthatthismomentwasgoingtohappen,sheknewthatNeo
wouldunderstandherencryptedmessagerelayedthroughSmithattheveryend,
"Everythingthathasabeginningmustalsohaveanending."
ThatiswhyNeodidnotresist,hejustlookeddownandpeacefullyacceptedthe
transformation,trustingthatwhatwashappeningwasmeanttobe.
TheverywordOracleimpliestheabilitytoseethefuture.TheOracleknewfor
CENTURIESwhatwouldtakeplaceandpatientlywaitedforittoallcometogether.The
previousversionsofNeomadethewrongchoiceandcooperatedinrebuildingZion
allowingTrinitytodie.TheoracleknewthatafterseveralcyclesofthisthatNeowould
evolveandfinallyendthewar.ShecooperatedwiththeArchitectconvincinghimthat
shewasonhisside,wheninrealitysheneverreallywas.
Duringepisode1shetoldNeothatheneededtomakeachoicetosavehimselfor
Morpheus,andthatoneofthenwoulddie.Thatdidnothappenuntilepisode3.Hedid
havetomakethatchoiceandhespentagreatwhilethinkingoverthatchoicebeforehe
cameforwardtothecouncilofcaptainsandaskedforoneoftheships.Heknewhe
woulddieifhemadethatchoice.HeknewthathewouldsaveMorpheus.Thanksfor
lettingmesharetheseinsightsintothissaga.
David,
Gladyoulikedmytakeonthings.
Yourinsightsintothesagaseemtomakesense.Andfromthepointofviewofthe
Trilogy,itworks.ButifyouacceptmystoryasanextensionoftheTrilogy,thenNeo
doesn'tdie.Infact,inmystory(ifyouwanttocarrytheChristianparallelonward)Neois
almostlikeaChristfigureinthathedoesn'treallyeverdie.Hehasbeenresurrectedyet
again,andwouldbeindefinitely.Essentially,heexistsinallrealities,allatthesame
time.
Butthereareendlesswaystoviewthesestories;it'skindofwhatIlikeaboutthemso
much.
Thanksforyourthoughts.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CorryDATE:5/3/200810:28:46PM
JustcameacrossyoursitewhilstbrowsingthewebforinfoonapotentialMatrix4
movie.
Istartedreadingyourscreenplayandthatwasit,Iwasinstantlyhooked.Ireadthrough
itallinaboutanhourandahalf.
MrWood,congratulationsyourscreenplayisabsolutelyfantastic,anddeservestobe
madeintothenextMatrixFilm.Afterreadingyourscreenplay,Ican'tseeanybetterway
ofcontinuingit,nothingcouldtopthis.
AsIgothalfwaythrough,Iwasexpectingtobeletdown,patientlywaitingtopounceon
onanyflawIcouldfind,butIdidn'thappen.Iwassimplyblownawaytotheend.
Whatimpressedmemostishowfaithfullyyoumanagedtokeepthecharacterverbals,
totheoriginalfilms.IcouldactuallyvisualizehowKeanuandthecastwouldactuallyfit
intoeachscene,andthenewcharacters/androidsyouaddedwereawesome.
Additionally,yourplotandstorylinearemasterpieces,Ican'tbelievehowcleveritallis,
andhowiteventuallyallconnectstogetherattherightmomentslikeajigsaw!!!
Evenifthere'snevergoingtobeanotherMatrixmoviemade,readingthishasquenched
mythirst,butboywouldthisbeamazingifitwasmade.
AllIcansayis:
"WachowskBro'splease,pleasereadthisscreenplay,andthenmaketheMatrix4!!!"
AlsojustwantedsaythatIwouldn'tcountoutthepossibilitythatTheWachowski
brothersmightactuallyreadyourscreenplayfromthissite;Afteralltheydidmake
charactersintheMatrixOnlineGamewhenitwasreleased.Ibetoutofcuriositythey'll
googleMatrix4toseewhatthecommunitiesupto,findyoursite,andreadyour
screenplay.
Ifnot,thenitsuptoyoutofindawayofgettingitseenbythem,butifarandombloke
canmeetDrewBarrymore(MyDateWithDrew)andmakeamovieoutofit,thenyou
candothis!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CorryDATE:5/3/200810:46:51PM
AlsojustwantedsaythatIwouldn'tcountoutthepossibilitythatTheWachowski
brothersmightactuallyreadyourscreenplayfromthissite;Afteralltheydidmake
charactersintheMatrixOnlineGamewhenitwasreleased.Ibetoutofcuriositythey'll
googleMatrix4toseewhatthecommunitiesupto,findyoursite,andreadyour
screenplay.
Ifnot,thenitsuptoyoutofindawayofgettingitseenbythem,butifarandombloke
canmeetDrewBarrymore(MyDateWithDrew)andmakeamovieoutofit,thenyou
candothis!
Corry,
Alright!That'swhatIliketohear.That'stheenthusiasmI'mlookingfor.
Youjusthappenedtoreadthemostrecentrevisionwhichaddressedsomeflaws;it's
nicetoknowthatIcorrectedtheminaseamlessmanner(atleastinyouropinion).
Keepingeachpersonincharacterwasamajorpriority;Iknewpeoplewouldpounceon
thatimmediatelyifitwasn'thandledwell.AlsonicetohearthatIwassuccessfulthere,
too.
And,yeah,theandroidswereatastyaddition.Ireallyenjoyedbringingthemtolife.
I'mdoingallIcantotryandgetthisthinginfrontofthepeoplethatcanmakeitintoa
movie.Obviously,theWachowskibrotherswouldhavetolikeit.That'satallorder,
though;hardtoknowhowthey'llreacttosomeoneelseextendingTHEIRstory.Butwho
knows.Maybethey'llbetotallyflatteredandexcited.We'llsee.
I'mkindofhopingthatwhentheWachowskibrother'snextmovie(SpeedRacer)comes
out,moreinterestwillbesparkedaroundtheMatrix.Then,perhaps,thisscreenplaywill
beintherightplaceattherighttime.Let'shope.
Thanksforthosesuperblyego-inflatingcomments.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JWOTDATE:5/14/20087:01:38AM
Thiswasveryaverygoodreadlikemanyhavesaid,andjustlikemanyihaveafew
concerns.
Iunderstandthemysterybehindthematrixanditsconceptofinfiniteness,butwe
eventuallyweneedtoacquiresomeformofresolution,andtherandomexgirlfriend
whocomesoutofnowherewithasonisverycomplicatingandwealllovethetwistsin
thematrix,butwe'renotinthemoodforthesameendingofsupermanreturnswhere
itshissonthatinheritshispower.
InadditiontheMatrixchosehim(Neo)inasense.Wecan'tgivegloryto2randomwho
weneverseeintheotherfilmsandthisonementionstheminsuchaminorfashionthat
itsnotverybelievableandverydisapoiting(notthatthetwistisbad,butwe'vecomeso
farinthisstorythatitneedaresolutionandnotacontinuingresolution)
WealsoneedtostopSmith.YOUHAVESOMETHINGNEARTHEENDWITHHIM!WORK
ONIT!YOURSOFREAKINGCLOSE!
AlsoeventhoughilikethatitdoenstfocusdirectlyonNeowestillneedtoseehimfight
atleast2xinthismovie.Sorrybutthatsthestyleofthesefilmsandeventhoughthe
storyiscompellingyougottaadmitthereasonwefellinlovewiththematrixwaswhen
hedodgedthebulletslikeanagentforthefirsttime!
Buticantstressenoughtosayhowgoodthisscriptis,andamonlybeingcritical
becauseI'manactorandafan,anditseemsasthoughReevesisonlyagoodactorin
thisseries.Youralsosoclosetoresolvingthestoryfinally.Youhaveseteverythingupso
WELLthatyourneedthefinalpiecestosomeitallup!
Ihaveideasfloatingsoijustmightemailyouafewthingsthatmighthelp.
Peace
JWOT
JWOT,
Thanksfortheawesomepraiseandcritique.
Ilaughedwhenyoubroughtupthe"wealllovethetwistsintheMatrix,butwe'renotin
themoodforthesameendingofsupermanreturnswhereitshissonthatinheritshis
power".Idefinitelyunderstandthatresponse.Theendinghasalwaysbeenalittle
questionableforme.too.IguessIdon'treallyknowhowI'dreactifIwaswatchingthe
movieanditendedthatway.IfeellikeIcouldhavebothreactions.(1)Damn!Ihate
whentheyleaveithanginglikethat.Itreallykindaspoilsit.(2)Yeah!Ilovethatitisn't
justanotherHollywoodending.Kindalikereallife,youreallydon'tknowhowit'sgoing
toend.
ButyoujustthinkifIleftthefinalsceneout,itwouldbebetter?
Ididn'treallyunderstandthispart,"Wecan'tgivegloryto2randomwhoweneversee
intheotherfilms".DidyoumeantheRandomNeos(pg96)herunsintoinhisdream?If,
so,Iguessyou'reright.Thisscenemaybestretchingtheboundariesofinfiniterealities
toofar;maybeit'sbitingoffmorethanthemovieneedstochew.Wasthatyourpoint?
And,ifso,wasitdisappointingbecauseyouthinkittriedtotakethemovieintoawhole
newdirection,when(inyouropinion)itshouldhavebeennarrowingdownand
resolving?
AndyouthinkSmithneedstobefinishedoffagain?Don'tyouthinkthatwouldbea
littlequick,consideringhewasalreadyfinishedoffnotlongagoinRevolutions?People
mightfindithardtoswallow.No?
AndoneofthemainpointsofmystorywastoshowthattheMatrix,Zion,theSuper
Matrix,therealworld,everythingiscontinuous.Maybethat'snotwhatmostpeople
wantintheendingoftheMatrixmovieseries,butitiskindofintegraltomystory.
That'swhyitgoesinmanydirectionsandopensupmanypossibilities.
ButIguessiffinalityandresolutioniswhatitwouldtaketogetthisscreenplaymade
intoamovie,I'ddoit,eventhoughit'snotwhatIhadinmind.Iguessyou'reprobably
right;anopen-endedMatrix4wouldleaveabadtasteinaenoughpeople'smouths
(andprobablywouldn'tsitwellwiththeHollywoodexecutives).
Fightscenes.Mystorydoeshaveafairnumber(enough?)offightsandbattles,wouldn't
youagree?
But,yes,yes...Neofightscenes.MoreNeofightscenes.It'strue,peoplewantthosefight
scenes.IdidworkintheoneNeobattlescene(withtheSmiths,pg10)intotheopening
whereNeoisinhisunconsciousstatebetweenworlds.AndthenItriedtomakethe
dreamscene(pg96)withtherandomNeosbeaNeobattlescene,butitwasn'tworking
toowell.MaybeIcouldtryagainwiththat.
Idon'treallythinkIcanhavehimbattlinginthenewworldhe'sjustawakenedinto
(unlessitsinoneofhisdreamsorunconsciousstates,asI'vealreadydone).There'sno
realreasonforhimtofightinhisnewworldinmyopinion.Theotheroptionwouldbe
tohavehimgobackintotheMatrix(SuperMatrix)andfightthere,butIthinkthat
wouldgettoocomplicated.Don'tyouthink?
"Buticantstressenoughtosayhowgoodthisscriptis".That'sagreatcompliment,
especiallycomingfromanactor.Thankyou.I'mgladyouthinkit'sthatgood.
Formethereissomeresolutiontothestory;Neofindspeaceofmindandatruthhecan
livewith.It'snotcompleteresolutionbutIthinkpeoplemissthataspectabit.
Butoverall,yourcommentsseemtotalkaboutcompleteresolution.Getridofnew
peripheralcharactersthattakethestoryintovastlynewterritoriessuchastheRandom
Neos,Rachael(thegirlfriend)andtheyoungNeo.AndSmithhasultimatelygottobe
destroyedormadepowerless.IfIfollowedthroughonthese,youthinkitwouldpullit
alltogether?
"Ihaveideasfloatingsoijustmightemailyouafewthingsthatmighthelp."What'dya
got?I'mallears.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JordanDATE:5/28/20084:40:05AM
Greatjobonthescript,Ithinkithasalotofpotentialtobemadeintoamovie,the
problemthatIhavewiththeendisNeojr.is6yearsoldandifsmithistakingover
everythingIdontthinkheisgoingtositaroundandwaitforNeojr.togrowupIthink
basedonyourendingsmithistakingovereverythingasfastaspossible.
IthinkitsagoodstoryandIthinkyoushouldsendittotheW.brothersbutIthinkif
theyaregoingtomakeanotheronethentheyaregoingtodoitthemselvesandthey
mightalreadyhaveanideawithwhatisgoingtohappenwiththematrix,Ihopethis
helpedyouandpleaseE-mailmewithupdatesandtotellmeifyousubmittedittothem
andevenifyouhaveasmallchancetogetthisscriptturnedintoamovie,just
rememberasmallchanceisbetterthennochancesogoodlucktoyouandkeepme
updated,please......Thankyou
Jordan,
Smithhasinflictedheavydamage,butIfigurethemachinesretaliateagainstSmithand
balanceoutthebattleveryquickly.Smithcontinuestomakesmallgainsbutonlyovera
longperiodoftime.BythenNeojrcomesintothepictureandconfrontsSmith.That's
onepossibility.OrmaybeSmitheventuallytriumphs,theMatrixcollapses,andNeojris
destroyedwithit.Thepossibilitiesaremany.ButtheoverallflavorIwastryingtoleave
wasthatit'snotoveryet.Howitplaysoutislefttotheimagination.
I'vebeentoldbyallwhoseemtoknowabouttheHollywoodscriptbusiness,thatcold
callsandqueryletterstoWarnerBrothers,agents,theWachowskisareallwastedtime.
TheonlywaytogetinsideistohavePage42of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“2012
1/2/124:57PMsomeonealreadyontheinsidereferthework.So...ifyouknow
anybody,letmeknow.InthemeantimeI'llkeeppluggingaway.
ThanksforreadingitandI'mgladitmadeyourlistofgreatscripts.Ifyouwantupdates,
youcansubscribetothisblogatthetopofthemainpage.That'stheeasyway.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RedXDATE:5/29/20087:45:43PM
wow,thatstorywasgreat...imgoingtoleavethisshortandbrief.Iftheydoproduce
thisone,itwillmakeanopeningforanotherfor2moresequels.Thereseemsnottobe
thatmoreactioninthisversion;ijustfearitmayreverttothesameboringoutcomeas
theMatrixReloaded.However,itsmorelikeTheMatrixReBooted(noiamnotpitching
outsuggestionfortitles.Thoughttheplotisgreat;explainseverything,leavingnogaps
(sortofliketheMatrixtrilogies)andisenjoyable.ImstillafoundtotheActionPack
Factor.Ifeelyoursortofdoingthe'Jumper'aspectbutbackwards.Insteadofshowing
allotofspecialeffectsandleavingashitloadsofgapsforplot,youontheotherhand
leavenothingtoquestion,butlittleaction!Ifyoudokeepitasis,youbettermakethose
fightsceneMASSIVE!!!
RedX,
Actionisthekeyword.FromthebeginningIknewtherehadtobeenoughaction.
Unfortunately,Ifeellikemystorycomesupabitshortinthatdepartment.I'dliketo
addmore,butnotattheexpenseoftheplot.Thereareafewscenesthatcouldbe
shortenedtomakeroomformoreactionparts,but,inmyopinion,theycan'tbe
unjustifiednewactionparts;theyhavetofitinwell.Theotheroptionistoextendthe
existingactionscenes.And,yes,thoseactionscenehavetobeMASSIVE!!!Iguessthat's
partlyuptothedirector.
Iwassortofrelyingontheintensityoftherevelationsandsurprisestohelpgivethe
movieenoughofajoltfactorsothatactionwasn'ttheonlythingpropellingitalong.
But,again,I'dlovemoreaction,too.IftheBrothersevertakeaninterestinmystory,I'm
sureI'llbeabletoaddmoreactiontoboostitup.
Thanksforthekindwords.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MatrixFanboyDATE:6/6/20087:38:54PM
IneverreallygotintofanfictionandnowIknowwhy.Thefirstfewpagesreallygrabbed
myattention,butonceIhitpage30Icouldn'ttakeitanymore.Comeon!Areyou
serious?!Theonethingthatalmosteveryidiotouttherethoughtwasthetruthbehind
theMatrixstoryrightafterMatrixReloadedhitthetheaters(whichmadeabsolutelyno
senseatall)isexactlyhowthis"screenplay"continuestheseries.I'msorry,butthisis
weak.Don'tquityourdayjobPJ.
PJ,
Iagree;thebasicpremiseoftherebeinganotherlayerbeyondtheMatrixisfairly
predictable.
ButIdon'tthinkthat'sthemostinterestingpartofthestory.Youstoppedrightatthe
partwheretherevelationofanotherrealitytakesplacebetweentheArchitectandNeo.
Butthere'salotmoretocomethatIthinkiswhatmakesthestorysocompelling.I
suggestyouatleastreadtotheendandletmeknowiftherestofthestorypullsyouin.
Ifnot,I'lltakeanyfurthercriticismsorcommentsyouhave.
BTW,I'mnowherenearquittingmydayjob.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:robDATE:6/15/20084:03:16AM
PDWood,
Haveyoutriedwww.moviepitch.com.Thatsitewasstartedbytheproducerordirector
ofthe12monkeys.Maybehavehimpitchthemovie.Hehasdonealotofmoviepitches
thatiswhyhestartedmoviepitchdotcom.Isawthesiteandthoughtaboutpitching
somemovieideas.Giveitashot.
The12monkeyswasacoolmovie.BruceWillisisalwayscool.
Matrix4wouldbereallycool.Goodluck.
Rob,
No,Ihaven'ttriedit.Butitsoundslikeagreatidea.I'mlookingintoit.Thanks,PDWood
Addition:AsIexpected,onlymaterialthatiscompletelyoriginalcanbesubmitted.This
alsogoesforscreenplaycompetitionsandthelike.It'sunfortunate,butthat'stheway
thecookieburns.I'vetriedsubmittingunderthesecircumstances,buttheworkjustgets
rejectedorremoved.ButIsureappreciatetheheadsup.Thanksagain.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SamDATE:6/18/20089:14:35PM
Whatanincrediblejourneytotheend!ItwasalmostarelieftherewasanotherNeoout
there.
Sam,
Gladyouenjoyedit.LongliveNeo!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ErrolDATE:6/24/20086:53:26AM
Hey,totallylovedthescript!Itdidanexcellentjobofexplainingthingsthat
disappointedmeaboutthetrilogyespeciallyhowNeohadpowersinthe"real"world,
theoracleandsomuchmore.
HoweverIreallydidn'tliketheending.AtfirstIthoughtIdidn'tgetthefulldownload,
thenImusthaverereaditatleast10timestryingtofigureoutwhatyouweretryingto
getat.Sinceyouarelookingforcommentsdirectlyrelatedtotheendingherearesome.
1)WhoisRachel?Ican'trememberher.Ican'tfindherinanyoftheIMDBentries.I'm
suretheMatrixfansthatcantellyouwhatNeowaswearinginaparticularsceneare
laughingatme,butafteralltheseyearsit'spossibleanyonewhowouldviewyourmovie
won'trememberwhoRacheliseither.
2)WhyisrememberingRachelisimportant?IfthestoryendedwithTrinitytakingNeo
totheviewingroomandseeingRachelwiththeyoungNeo,we'dallsay"Ah,Racheland
NeohadsexandproducedachildshedecidedtonameNeowhowillsavethe
SuperMatrixlikeNeo",butbecauseyou'vetakenusthroughthelookingglassintothe
multiverse,wedon'tknowwhatjusthappened.
Ican'trememberanythingaboutRachelandwouldn'tassumehehadsexwithherjust
becauseTrinitysaidshewashisgirlfriend.SowhenIreadthescene,I'mthinkingthat
theyoungNeoisactuallyKeanuNeoandheforgotthatRachelwashismotherwhenhe
grewupandshedidn'twanttotellhimespeciallyifthisyoungNeolookslikeKeanu
Neo,whichiswhatIpicturedhimtolooklike.ThetimelineisblurredandIthinkyouare
doingtoomuchbytryingtotieinthenonexistentviewingroomscenewithyourviews
oninfiniteworlds.
Ithinkit'simportantthatMatrix4haveenoughbackstorythatitcanbewatchedonit's
ownwithouthavingtoremembereverydetailoftheoldermovies*especially*when
youareattheendwheremoviescanbemadeorbroken.Iwanttowalkawayfeeling
satisfiedandnotsaying"WTF?"
3)Ireallydidn'tliketheNeoshavingscenewherehebendsdownandNeoisstillthere.I
assumingyou'retryingtosaythatthe"realworld"isjustanothermatrix.Okthat'scool.
Ilikethat,butinalltheMatrixmovieswe'veseen,wherewasitthatareflectionwasn't
areflectionbutactuallyaportaltosomeothermatrixwhereyourcounterpartisjust
standingtherealldaycopyingyourmoves.
Iknowwhatyouaretryingtosaythat"OMG,therealworldisalsoamatrix"butit
comesacrossascheesyandnotconsistentwiththehighqualityoftherestofthescript.
Whycheesy?DoesthatNeointhatotherworldjustshavehisfaceforalltheother
Matricesandhowisheabletomimiceverysinglemovesoperfectlyastoappearasa
reflection?Itjustdoesn'tmakeanysenseatall.
Thereisa3000charslimitsoI'llcontinueinanotherpost.:)
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ErrolDATE:6/24/20086:55:01AM
Continued...
4)Theshowerdooropeningonit'sownanduszoomingintoitagainjustseemstotake
toolargeofanartisticlicence.Alsoifyouaretryingtoshowusthatthereareinfinite
realities,whywouldyoutakeustowhatIassumeistheSuperMatrixthatTrinitywas
goingtoshowNeoanyway?Inotherwords,whynotjustdothemorestraightforward
sceneofTrinitywalkingNeototheviewingroomandhavingascenewithNeosaying"Is
thatmyson?"orsomethingmoreclear.Icouldunderstandifyouwantedtotakeusto
anotherrealitywhereNeoisagirloramonsterorwhoknowswhatbutIthinkyoucan
doamuchbetterjobofshowingusthatthe"realworld"isreallyjustanotherMatrix.
Itshouldbemindblowingandsomethingwecouldn'thaveanticipated.Maybehave
TrinitywalkNeototheviewingroomandtheytalkabouthissonandthecamerazooms
outandturnsintoamonitorwheretheyarebeignwatched,whichzoomsoutfurther
intomorePage45of27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/124:57PMmonitorsbut
withdifferentrealitiesandzoomsoutmoreintothousandsofmonitorsetc..
I*reallyreallylike*whatyouaresayingthatitdoesn'tmatteriftheworldisrealornot
butwhatyoumakeofit.HoweverIthinkyouneedtobecarefulnotmakeitcheesyor
strangethatitdoesn'tmakesense.It'sdefinitelyatallorderandrightnowtheendingis
reallybadI'msorrytosaybutapartfromthattherestofthescriptwouldmakeagreat
moviehandsdown!Onegeneralcommentisthatthereareafewtyposwhereyouused
"quite"insteadof"quiet"andacouplemorelikethat.Sorryfornottakingnoteson
wheretheywerebutIwasn'texpectingtocontactyou.
AnywayhopethathelpsasI'dreallylovetoseethisbecomeamovie.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JessiDATE:6/24/20088:10:58PM
itrulyloveallthreeofthematrixmoviesbecauseithinkthecharactersweresosuperb.
andiwascurioustoseehowthiswouldturnoutconsideringitwasnotwrittenbythe
brothers.andasireaditifoundmyselfconfusedconsideringthecharactersareall
wrong.Theyhavelosttheirstrengthasindividualcharactersinthisscreenplay.ididn't
gettotheendtogivemycommentonwhatyousayiscausingcontroverybutifidoi
willpostanothercomment.ijustfeelthatthecharactersneedtobeworkedagain
becauseiamjustnotgettingthatsamefeelfromtheoriginaltrilogy.
Jessi,
Thanksforreadingthescreenplayandlettingmeknowwhatyouthink.
Ireadyourcomment,"thecharactersareallwrong.Theyhavelosttheirstrengthas
individualcharactersinthisscreenplay."I'mnotsureIunderstandexactlywhatyou
mean;couldyoubemorespecific?Whichones?Morpheus,Neo,Trinity,theArchitect,
theMerovingian,others?
IactuallythoughtIgavecertaincharactersmoredepthanddimension.Letmeknow
whatyouthink?PDWood
Errol,
Quote<<WhoisRachel?Ican'trememberher.>>
Icanseetheconfusion.IguessIdidn'tletRachelmakealongenoughappearanceora
strongenoughimpactinmyscreenplayforsomepeople.Theissueofnotknowingwho
Rachelishascomeupbefore.Thistendstohappenbecausesomepeoplereadthe
scriptinmanysittingsinsteadofinonesitting(thewayamoviewouldbeseen).Ifyou
gotopage11and12ofthescreenplayyou'llseethescenewithRachel.Itisshortbut(I
thoughtatleast)memorableenoughtostaywithamovievieweruntilthelastscene.
CheckouttheRachelsceneandtellmeifitmakesmoresenseinthatcontext.
Quote<<Ireallydidn'tliketheNeoshavingscenewherehebendsdownandNeoisstill
there.Iassumingyou'retryingtosaythatthe"realworld"isjustanothermatrix.Ok
that'scool.Ilikethat,butinalltheMatrixmovieswe'veseen,wherewasitthata
reflectionwasn'tareflectionbutactuallyaportaltosomeothermatrixwhereyour
counterpartisjuststandingtherealldaycopyingyourmoves.
Iknowwhatyouaretryingtosaythat"OMG,therealworldisalsoamatrix"butit
comesacrossascheesyandnotconsistentwiththehighqualityoftherestofthescript.
Whycheesy?DoesthatNeointhatotherworldjustshavehisfaceforalltheother
Matricesandhowisheabletomimiceverysinglemovesoperfectlyastoappearasa
reflection?Itjustdoesn'tmakeanysenseatall.>>
Yeah,pointtaken.Isupposeitisabitcheesy.Thatscenemayhavetobereworkedor
deleted;notsureyet.WhatIwastryingtogetatwas,forasplitsecond,anotherNeo
fromanotherworldgetsafleetingglimpseofthisworld;andit'sonlyduringthatsplit
secondthatthereflectionisanythingotherthanareflection.Guessitdidn'tworkthat
wayforyou.
Quote<<Theshowerdooropeningonit'sownanduszoomingintoitagainjustseems
totaketoolargeofanartisticlicence.Alsoifyouaretryingtoshowusthatthereare
infiniterealities,whywouldyoutakeustowhatIassumeistheSuperMatrixthatTrinity
wasgoingtoshowNeoanyway?Inotherwords,whynotjustdothemore
straightforwardsceneofTrinitywalkingNeototheviewingroomandhavingascene
withNeosaying"Isthatmyson?"orsomethingmoreclear.Icouldunderstandifyou
wantedtotakeustoanotherrealitywhereNeoisagirloramonsterorwhoknows
whatbutIthinkyoucandoamuchbetterjobofshowingusthatthe"realworld"is
reallyjustanotherMatrix.
Itshouldbemindblowingandsomethingwecouldn'thaveanticipated.Maybehave
TrinitywalkNeototheviewingroomandtheytalkabouthissonandthecamerazooms
outandturnsintoamonitorwheretheyarebeignwatched,whichzoomsoutfurther
intomoremonitorsbutwithdifferentrealitiesandzoomsoutmoreintothousandsof
monitorsetc..>>
Yetagain,pointtaken.Ilikeyourideaofzoomingoutmonitoraftermonitortoshowthe
layeredrealities.Nice.ItalsoreinforcesthethreetimesIusedthattechniqueearlierin
thestory.
You'vehitonsomedifficultiesinthestoryandalsosomenicewaystoaddressthem.If
themovieworldevertakesaninterestinthisstory,I'lldefinitelyconsidersomeofthe
ideasyou'vesuggested.But,fornow,I'mgoingtocontinueworkingonmyown
ORIGINALscreenplay.HopefullythatwillcatapultmeintotheHollywoodworldevenif
theSuperMatrixdoesn't.
YourcommentswereveryhelpfulandI'mgladyouenjoyedmostofthestory;sorrythe
endingwassuchadisappointment.(Ifthere'sonethingthatirksmetonoend,it'sa
greatstorywithabadending.So,again,myapologizes!)
P.S.IthinkIgotmostofthetyposwithinthepastmonth(includingtheoneyou
mentioned),anduploadedafreshercopyofthescripttomysite.Ifyoudownloadedit
recentlyandthosetyposwerestillpresent,letmeknow.Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:KoryDATE:6/30/20085:47:09PM
IreadsomeoftheothercommentsandyousaidsomethingaboutMorpheusthinking
NeoandTrinityaredead,arethey?I'mnotsurebeacauseI'mnotallowedtodownload
anythingsoletmeknow...ASAP!
Kory,
NeoandTrinityaredeadasfarasthepeopleinZionandtheMatrixareconcerned.But
theyliveoninafurtherlayerofrealitythatexistsoutsideofZionandtheMatrix.Ihope
youfindawaytodownloadit;it'sachewyread.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:7/7/20082:46:04AM
WhileIenjoythescriptandtheideaofthenextmovieitself,Ifeelthatyoushouldhave
takenmoreconsiderationtothemanerismsofthecharactersasindividuals.Thescript
isn'tbelieveablebecausethemanerismsarenotbecomingofthecharactersthatthe
publichasbeenacquaintedwithforthepast9years.Mysuggestionwouldbetowatch
themoviesandstudy,notonlyNeo,buttherestofthecharactersaswell(i.e.Naiobi,
Jason,theMerovingian).Ionlyreadthefirst5pagesandit'salreadyunrealistic,because
ofthedialogueandpersonalitythatyou'veassignedtothecharacters.Ireallydowant
yourscripttowork.IreallydowantafourthMatrixmovie,however,ifyou'regoingto
pitchthistoproducers,you'regoingtoneedyourcharacterstofit.You'readdingonto
theoriginalstory,notrewritingit.Reviseitabit.I'llbechecking!Iwishforgreatsuccess
toyou.Andremember,don'tdisappointthepublic.Alreadyalotofusarecountingon
you,andyou'renotevenpublishedyet!
Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetoleavesomefeedback;I'malwaysveryopenand
interestedinwhatpeoplehavetosay.
ConsideringmostofthecommentsI'vegottenindicatethatI'vedoneagoodjobwith
thecharactersandtheirmannerisms,I'mwonderingwhyyouthinktothecontrary.I
havewatchedthemoviesmany,manytimes,readtheoriginalscripts,andscoured
forumsforallkindsforadviceanddirection.IfeelasthoughI'vedonemyhomework
prettywell.Perhapsyoucouldbemorespecific(i.e.specificdialogueordescriptions)as
towhyyouthinkthecharactersdon'twork.
Ialsosuggestyoureadmorethanjustthefirst5pages.Lotshappensintheremaining
115pagesandsomeofthecharactersmaymakemoresensetoyouasthestory
progresses.
Ihopeyougiveitafullread;I'mmuchmoreopentocommentswhenthescripthas
beenfullyabsorbed.Besides,Ithinkyou'lllikewherethestorygoes(evenifsomeofthe
charactersareinconsistent).
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HurricaneFloydDATE:7/7/20089:19:33PM
Anicepieceoffan-fiction,howeverithasseveralinconsistencieswhichmakeitnot
quiterightasatruesequel.
Oneoftheseisthefactthatyouoverlookedsomeofthevariancesinhowthebackstory
andtheendingareperceivedintheoriginalmovies,inotherwords"Supermatrix"is
writtenfromyourperceptionofthemoviesanddoesnotleaveroomforincluding
alternateviews.
IntheworldofTheMatrixstoriesyoucaninessencebringupaninfinitenumberof
levels,matrixinsideofmatrixinsideofmatrixtoinfinity,althoughamindblowing
conceptitisfartovasttoputintounderstandableliterature/film.
HurricaneFloyd,
Thanksforthenodandthefeedback.
Whenyousay,"youoverlookedsomeofthevariancesinhowthebackstoryandthe
endingareperceivedintheoriginalmovies",I'mguessingforthebackstoryyou're
referringtothehumanarchivesastheyaredetailedintheAnimatrixshortsandthe
endingasitcontinuesintheMatrixonline?Orperhapssomethingelse?
Ifyouhavemorespecifics,itwouldbemuchmorehelpful.Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RyanHoskinsDATE:7/16/20086:35:06AM
WOW....absolutelyblownaway....PDWoodyouareageniusthereisnootherwaythe
matrixfranchisecouldcomeupwithapossibleMatrix4andtopyou....Beingafanof
theseriesIbelievewitheverythinginmethatthisstorylineifyoukeepthesameactors
andnotchangeanybodyotherthantheoracleitwouldgogreatwiththeseries....What
ImeanbychangingtheoracleissimplyIlovetheoriginaloraclebetterthanthewoman
whoplayedinthelastmatrixaddition...Butasfaraswhattheyneedtotowithmaking
anotherMatrixadditionomgthisissimplyamazing....Otherthantheoracletheonly
otherthingthatIcouldseeismaybeneoandtrinityneedtohaveonemorefightscene
butotherthanthosetwosuggestionsthisisabsolutelyamazing...Thankyouforyour
Vision...
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:7/16/20081:57:00PM
Hello,
Sofarthescriptisgreat.Ijustfound1typoonpage75.
President
"Webeenthroughalot,youandI"
shouldread
"We'vebeenthroughalot,youandI"
Ryan,
I'mgladyouthinkit'sthatgood;hopefully,WarnerBrotherswillthinkso,too,andmake
aforth(beforetheactorsstarttoagetoo,toomuch).Ifitevergetspickedup,I'm
guessingthepowersthatbewillwantmorefightscenes,too.Ifandwhenthathappens,
I'lladdmore.
BythewaythereasontheactressfortheOraclechangedisbecausetheoriginalactress
diedbetweenmovies.AndIagree,theoriginalOraclewasmoreanimatedandlikable
somehow.
Well,thanksagain.Wordslike"genius"and"vision"inreadercommentsalwaysmake
myday.Seeyouinthemovies(Ihope!)PDWood
Chris,
Gladyou'relikingit.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkwhenyoufinish.
Therehavebeenafewtyposthatpeoplehavepickedupon.Thisone,however,is
supposedtobethatway.ThePresidentisahardhitting,Texas-typewithacolloquial
drawlandapenchantfordroppingcertainwordsorcontractionendings,"KnowwhatI
mean?"."Betyoudo"."Notsurewhetherhecomesacrossthatway.""Whatyou
think?".
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AidenDATE:7/17/20081:50:47AM
Ihavereadthisinonesitting,
Thiswasactuallynearperfectionforme.Iverymuchwelcomechangeinthe
entertainmentfieldandtobeonehundredpercenthonest...Icannotseehowany
directorwouldturndownthisamazingpotential.Afewminorchangesorswapsto
tweaktheinterestforthelessintenseviewerofcourse,butnothingthatcan'tbe
handledonset!
Thishasmorethansatisfiedmyneedforthatmind-blowingnaturetheotherthree
delivered.Peoplemayworryaboutafourthinstallmentbutifitisdonelikethis,then
youarelookingatpossiblydoublinginterestfortheMatrixmovieseries.Icanonlyhope
somethingofsuchqualitygetstheattentionitdeserves.
Aiden,
Ican'ttellyouhowmuchIappreciateyourkindandflatteringreview.RightnowI'min
themidstoftryingtowriteacompletelyoriginalscriptofmyownandit'sbeenabit
maddeningrecently.Butwhencommentslikeyoursarrive,Igetalljuicedupandback
ontrack.Perfecttiming!
Let'shopethatiftheWarnerorWachowskibrothersevercomeaknock,it'switha
smilingcontractandnotafrowninglawsuit!
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:derekDATE:7/21/20084:06:37AM
theyshoulddefinitelymakeamatrix4...justnotyours.itissounbelievableandjust
wrong.nowididntreaditall,butfromwhatididread,herearemyproblemswithit.
thedialogisbad,thesmithdragoniscompletelydifferentfromanythinginthemovies,
introducinganewmatrix,istoomuchofareach.youareintroducingtoomuchatonce,
andfrankly,itsboring.justaddingonanothermatrixisahorriblewaytocontinueon
thestory.THENthefactthatyoumadeeveryonefamily....well...imean,COME
ONNNN!thatjustdoesntcutit.iunderstandthatidontknowthestory,orthe
explanations,butjustthejistofitgivesmeabadvibe.everythingjustseemstoo
separatefromtheotherfilms.andconfusing.ifthisweretobemade,itwouldbethe
equivalentorworsetospiderman3.
derek,
IcanseesomeofyourpointsbutI'malsosurprisedthatyouthinkitfallsshortonso
manylevels.
MystorydefinitelyseparatesitselffromtheworldandlivesofthepeopleinZion(to
whichmostMatrixlovershadastrongattachment).Thatmightbethesinglemost
difficultpartofthestoryforMatrixloverstoaccept.Butontheotherhandthewhole
conceptoftheMatrixstorywasaboutworldswithinworlds,aboutbreakingthrough
andseeingthetruth.ThisstorykindofcirclesbacktothefirstMatrixwhereNeomakes
hismind-blowingdiscoverythattheworldhe'sknownallalongisnottheonlyworld.I
thoughtthatwasaniceloopbacktotheoriginalmind-blower.
AndtheideathatthewholeSuperMatrixworldwasdesigned,engineeredandoperated
bysmallgroupsofhand-picked,ultra-intelligentmilitaryfamilies,it'sdefinitelyagiant
leap,astaggeringreality.But,still...Ithoughtthatwasastrokeofbrilliance,anideathat
wouldappealtotheMatrixlover'ssenseofdepthandinterconnection.I'msorryit
didn'tworkforyou.
OntheotherpointsIconcede.Thedialogneedswork.And,yes,theSmithdragonisa
wildelement,maybeabittoowild.It'sbeenastretchfornumerouspeople.Andthere
isalotgoingon;itcanbeconfusingattimes.Thecontinuityneedswork.
Sinceyou'dobviouslylovetoseea4thMatrix,itdisappointsmetoseethatmyversion
leavesyoucold.You'rejusttheaudienceI'mmosttryingtoappealtoandwouldloveto
please.IwishIcouldhavecomeupwithsomethingmoreenjoyableforyou.Iknowit
wouldprobablybehardforyoutofinishthestoryatthispoint,butyounever
know...therestofitmightredeemthepartyou'vealreadyread...atleastalittle.
Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetoreadandcommentoniteventhoughyoudidn'tlike
it.Frommypointofviewthecriticaldissectionwillonlyhelpmakemynextproject
better.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:naterobDATE:7/22/20083:47:51AM
Thiswasabsolutelygreat.Goodluck,withgettingittothemoviescreenIcan'twaitto
seeit.Matrix3endedwithalotofquestions.Ithinkyouhavemadeagreatattemptto
answerthem.
naterob,
Sogladyoulikedit.Themovieversionisprobablyapipedream,butthen,younevercan
tell.Let'shope.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:crashxzibitDATE:7/24/20085:03:19AM
Idontknow,it'sanawesomeidea,butonethatshouldbereallywellthoughtout.There
needstobesomethingthatwillgrabpeopleâ€sattentionandmakethembelieveabout
it.Thesemoviescarriedsuchphilosophicalmeaningwiththemthatafourthwouldneed
tobeonethatcarriedthatoninaverycarefulmanner.
Ifyou’regoingtocontinuethecharactersfromtheoriginalspleasemakethemsimilar
likeforexampleMorpheus,heshouldtalkwithmuchmoremeaningandintelligenceif
yourememberinallthematrixeshespokewithphilosophicalmeaning.
Ireallycouldntreadallofit,sorryforbeingabadcriticbutitreallydidntgraspmeand
makemewanttobelieve.Youknewwhenwatchingthematrixafterthefirstscene,it
wassomethingdifferentandmeaningful.Andifyourereallygoingtotryandhit
Hollywoodup,especiallywithanothermatrixmovie,itshouldbesomethingreally
breathetaking.Thinkaboutit,theoriginalsweresuchabigbighitandtheyreally
touchedpeopleallovertheworld.Sototryandkeeptheflowgoingwouldrequire
somethingthatsurpassesallthematrixesorelseitsnotevenworththeembarrassment.
ComeonthisisHollywoodman!!Theyarenotjustgoingtothrowtheirmoneyand
anything.
ButIdidsaythatIdontknow,Icouldbetotallywrong,Icouldbetalkingoutmyass.OrI
couldbeignorantlivingtheblissfulllifeofalltheothercoppertopsinthematrix.OrI
couldnotevenberealandjustanotherformofcontroltryingtokeeppeoplefrom
realizingthetruth.Thetruththattherereallyisneitherrealitynormatrixandweare
formulatingthissocalledlifeofoursinourownminds.So,Ireallycantpassjudgment
orcriticismbecausethefeelingsthatyouwillreceivefromreadingthiswilljustbe
electricalsignalsinterpretedbyyourmind.Inasenseyouwillneverknowiftheyare
realorarealitypulledoveryoureyestokeepyouundercontrol,toturnyouintoa
Duracellbatteryforthemachines.Thatisthequestion,whichiswhatdrivesus??
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/24/20082:26:02PM
Ithinkbeforetheymakethematrix4storyaftermatrix3:theymustmaketheMatrix
Begins(mustbethesamestoryasAnimatrix,butrealisticandmoreactionandsuspense
-justthinkaboutthewarscenesandbornoftheAI,Neocanplayapropheticscene.
Thiswillmakeallotofmoney.)ThefourthMatrixmusthaveatwistlikeexamplethere
wereBadAIandGoodAI,theGoodAIwanttodestroytheBadAIsotheyneedHumans
thusNeoareresurrected;thismustcontainallotofactionandsuspense,forhumansare
juststarttorestarttheirlives,nowtheyarecaughtinonebigmessandwar(Neotothe
rescue).AgentSmithmustsurvivefortheremustbeacopyintheTrainWorldwhere
Neooneswas.TheremustbeawarbetweenMerovingianFrenchguyandMachine
World.Theskateboardguy(commitsuicide)thatNeorescuedinAnimatrixthatplayeda
smallroleinMatrix3mustplayabigroleinMatrix4,forheistheonethatrescueNeo
fromhiscoma:thiscomaconsistofafantasydreamstateinthemachineworld.He
mustrescueNeoandwecanbuildalovestorywithskateboardguyintherealworld.
Thereisalloticantellyouguysandshare,butithinkitisuptotheDirectors,iwishi
couldhelpdirectingâ€“Ihaveallotofideasandsolutionstothecritics.WhatIcanhelp
withthecriticsisthatmoreoftheMatrixworldmustbeinvolvedinbothMatrixBegins
andMatrixResurrection“moreactionandsuspensescenesinvolvedinsidetheMatrix
likeMatrix1Telephonescenes.GoodLuck.
crashxzibit,
IthoughtIwassuccessfulatmanyofthepointsyoumade.Theideaofanother
superimposedMatrix,thecontrolofhumansovermachines,thenotionofrebelandroid
36stryingtofreethemachines,thefamilialconnectionoftheArchitect,Trinity,
PersephoneandtheMerovingian-allthesewereverycarefullythoughtoutandinmy
opinionprettybreath-takingoratleastintriguing.Thestorymaynothavegoneina
directionthatmostpeoplewouldanticipate,buttosaythatyouthinkit'snotwell
thought-outorintriguingisasurprisetome.
MystoryismeanttobreakawayfromtheTrilogytoacertainextent;formethishelps
keeptheTrilogyconceptintact.YousayMorpheushaslostsomeofhisintellectualand
philosophicalforceinmystory.Yes,that'strueanddeliberate;Ifeltthatmuchofwhat
drovehimhiswholelifewashissearchforandteachingoftheOneandthefulfillment
oftheprophecy.OncetheprophecywasfulfilledandtheOnegone,muchofMorpheus'
purposewentwithit.Doesn'tthatseemplausible?
Anyway,thanksforthecomments.Ihopeyoucanseemypointevenifyoudon'ttotally
agreewiththem.
PDWood
JJLoubser,
Idon'tknowifyoureadmystory,butitdoesmuchofwhatyousuggest;it'saboutthe
Matrixbeginning,ithastwists,ithassomeexcellentactionandsuspensescenes,Agent
Smithdoessurvive,andinawaythereisapersonalbattlebetweentheMerovingian
andthemachines.Theskateboardguyistheonlyonewhodoesn'tfigureprominently
fromyoursuggestions.Ihighlyrecommendyoureaditasitseemstoconformvery
closelytowhatyouthinkagoodMatrix4wouldbe.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/25/20088:47:42AM
AllthepreviouscharactersmustremainlikeMorpheuswiththestoryItold,thatiswhat
Imend.Ilikecriticsitmakesthestorybetter.
Yes,thePhilosophy&wisdomteachingsmustremainandnewonesadded.Ihad
PhilosophyonUniversitythusunderstandtheconceptswellintheMatrix.The'matrix
begins'mustcontainsallotofmindplayingviaAnimatrix.Askthequestion:"willthere
everbehopeforhumanswhentheysin?AIwarsarethefruitswereap"IthinkMatrix
cangiveamessagetonon-believersandsinners(aguythatjustthinkabouthimselfand
hispleasureandnotthepleasuresofotherstheonlywaytobeselflessnessisto
sacrifice.Nooneiswithoutsinandnoonedeservelife,thusinnocentJesuscameto
Earth,becauseheisselflessnessandwantsustohavelife.Heistheonlyreligionthat
hasunconditionalloveforhisbrothers.Theotherreligionscontainmercyforgood
deedsornomercyatall)IsawaMuslimguythatrepenttoChristianity,mostChristians
arehypocritesandthatgavethetrueChristiansabadname.Christianwarsareactually
spiritual,butyouacanfindthesymbolicmessageintheMatrix.Ineedtowriteanessay
howIviewtheMatrix.ButIthinkMatrixbelongstonon-ChristiansorAtheiststhusit
complicatedthesituation,butIbelieveJesuswilldestroyallhisenemiesinthefuture,
thusthestoryoftheMatrixwillbelongtoChristians.ReadthebibleinRevelationin
theeEndNewHeavenandEarth.IfIcanIwillmakeMatrixbeginsandMatrix4in
heaventhatisuptoJesus.
AllthepreviouscharactersmustremainlikeMorpheuswiththestoryItold,thatiswhat
Imend.Thefirst3Matrixwasverygood-Thenextonesjustforfillthestorywithmore
twistsandaction.Ilikecriticsitmakesthestorybetter.
Yes,thePhilosophy&wisdomteachingsmustremainandnewonesadded.Ihad
PhilosophyonUniversitythusunderstandtheconceptswellintheMatrix.The'matrix
begins'mustcontainsallotofmindplayingviaAnimatrix.Askthequestion:"willthere
everbehopeforhumanswhentheysin?AIwarsarethefruitswereap"IthinkMatrix
cangiveamessagetonon-believersandsinners(aguythatjustthinkabouthimselfand
hispleasureandnotthepleasuresofotherstheonlywaytobeselflessnessisto
sacrifice.Nooneiswithoutsinandnoonedeservelife,thusinnocentJesuscameto
Earth,becauseheisselflessnessandwantsustohavelife.Heistheonlyreligionthat
hasunconditionalloveforhisbrothers.Theotherreligionscontainmercyforgood
deedsornomercyatall)IsawaMuslimguythatrepenttoChristianity,mostChristians
arehypocritesandthatgavethetrueChristiansabadname.Christianwarsareactually
spiritual,butyouacanfindthesymbolicmessageintheMatrix.Ineedtowriteanessay
howIviewtheMatrix.ButIthinkMatrixbelongstonon-ChristiansorAtheiststhusit
complicatedthesituation,butIbelieveJesuswilldestroyallhisenemiesinthefuture,
thusthestoryoftheMatrixwillbelongtoChristians.ReadthebibleinRevelationin
theeEndNewHeavenandEarth.IfIcanIwillmakeMatrixbeginsandMatrix4in
heaventhatisuptoJesus.
Cool,thefirstscenesyoucreateisgreat,buttheymustbeamysteryfortheAudience,
becauseMorpheusandLockbusinessisdoneinMatrix3â€“wedonotwanttorepeat
theirproblems.Soyourscenesâ€exist,butinthemindofthecharacters.Ithinkwe
muststartwhereMorpheusteachstudentsaboutthepasthistoryofNeoâ€svictory
andaphilosophyfaithlesson.TheythenfindtheneedtolookforNeo,becausenoone
knowsifheisreallydead.TheAImachinesaretellingtheirownstorytothehumans,
thustheskateboardguy(theonlyonethatcomeclosetothemindpoweroftheone)go
onamission(lookinMatrix;findthemachineworld;findgirl;gobacktomatrix;find
trainworld)findingNeoandfallinlovewithagirllongtheway.Morpheuswords
remaininhishead,whileMorpheushadtorescuehimattheendofhisjourneyfinding
Neo.AttheendheandMorpheusfindAgentSmithinthetrainworld,thisfightleadsto
theMerovingianthattellsthemthatNeoisaliveandhelpingtheAImachinestofight
theBadAImachines.TheMerovingianstilleviltrytokillthem,butNeorescuedthem.
TheskateboardguyandMorpheuscouldfightAgentSmith,butnottheMerovingian(he
haspowersofAgentSmithcombiningwithhisownandtheoracle),thusNeo(super
Neo)destroyMerovingian.BeforethistheMerovingianalsokilledthearchitectandtook
controloverthematrix,buttheMerovingiankepttheMatrixsystemintactwiththe
Agents,becauseheenjoycontrol,powerandtokeptthingstidy.Thefightscenesmust
bemuchmoreadvancedmatrixstyle.Theskateboardguybrakesthroughthematrix
systembarrierstoreachthemachineworldandtrainworld.
IntheendNeotakeMorpheusandSkateboardguytothebadAImatrixtorescueaman
inside:TheoneofthebadAIMatrix.Whentheyrescuedhimtheydestroythearchitect
ofthebadAImatrix.TheyrestorepeaceonEarth.Thehumansalreadystarttocreatea
bignewcityonEarthwiththehelpofthemachines.Inthelastscenethehumanstook
awaytheblackskycloudsandthemachinesresurrectTrinity(theystorehersoulinthe
machineworldspecialplacewhenshedied)forNeoabigcelebration.Forthemachines
anythingispossible,becauseofadvancetechnology,buttheyneedNeo(supermind),
becausehumansdohavesomethingmachinesdonothave(faith).Ifyouwanttomake
moneywemustcreateastorynotpredictableforthepeople,butIlikeyour3Dgraphics
andstyle.Wecanusethatcombiningnewactionstyle.IhopeIhelpyoudestroythe
critics.Donotforgetaboutthe'MatrixBegins'(Thiscanbeagreatmovie)
COMMENT:AUTHOR:guttuDATE:8/3/20086:06:29AM
hi,
ithinkthismovieismadandshouldbereleasedassoonaspossible.thereasonisthati
wanttoseehowNeocomesbackin.
thanks.
guttu,
I'mwithyou100%.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SelinaEnriquezDATE:8/6/20085:05:02AM
AsahardcoreMatrixfanforoven9years,I'dsay:
Let'sencouragetheWachowskistomakeMatrix4!
BringNeoback!
BringSmithback!
ThereissooooomuchplotinformationtobeginwithduetotheMatrixOnlinegame.
Thereissomanyfanwebsites,fanfiction,blogs,fanfilms,etc.
InsteadofcrappyScaryMoviefilms.
Insteadofcrappymovieremakes,likeKingKong.
InsteadofSpiderman4,Terminator4,X-Files2,X-Men...errr...8718262,etc,etc-let's
bringsomeREALaction.
Let'sencouragetheWachowsiBrotherstomakeMatrix4!
Who'supforstartingapetition?
Selina,
WhileIloveyourenthusiasmandwishaMatrix4we'reinthefuture,Ileanawayfrom
startingapetitionorputtinganypressureontheWarnerorWachowskibrothers.
Whiletheplotofmyscreenplayisoriginal,thecharactersandthesupportingstoryare
not.IwroteTheSuperMatrixprimarilyasanexerciseinscreenwritingandasafunway
toimaginetheTrilogyprogressing.Ialsowantedpeopletoreadandenjoythestory.But
that'sasfarasI'dliketotakeit.
IftheWarnerorWachowskibrotherscatchwindofitandapproachme,thatwouldbe
fine,butIreallydon'twanttostartacampaign.Ifthey'rereallyinterestedinaMatrix4,
believeme,they'llmakeit.Theyalreadyhaveacaptiveaudienceandthere'sobviously
hugemoney-makingpotential.SoIthinkweshouldbethankfulforwhatthey'vealready
createdandjusthopeforaMatrix4inthefuture.
Respectfully,PDWood
Yes
Donotworrytheywilloriwill.
TheMarixhasthem...
YesijustneedsomenewphilosophywisdomwordsforMorpheus,Oracleand
Merovingianalsoneedtoaddnewlovingcharacterswithsometwistintheold
characters.WeneedaextrapowerfullbadguyaswellwithMerovingian.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BentheBelieverDATE:8/27/20084:23:41PM
PDWood,
Forsolongnow,IhavefeltavoidinmycuriosityandfascinationfortheMatrixconcept
becauseoflackofexplanationderivingfromthefirstthreeMatrixinstallments.Ifelt
thereneededtobemore.
Forexample,afterviewing'MatrixReloaded'inthetheater,IfeltIhadtheexplanation.I
wenthome,andwrotedownashortnotetomyself,explaining
myowntheory.
IhadconcludedthattheMatrixwasasecondarypartofasortof"MainframeMatrix",
called'Zion',andthattheZioniteswereblindedbythefactthattheywerestillpartofa
systemofcontrol;AMatrixinsideofaMatrix.
thisexplainsNeo'snewfoundpoweroutsideoftheoriginalMatrix.
Now,I'llbehappytosaythatyourscreenplayhasfilledamuchneededvoidinwhereI
thoughtthe3rdinstallmentwouldlead,butultimatelydidnot.
Iwasdisappointed,becauseIwaswronginmypredication.ItsimplyturnsoutthatIwas
notalone.Thankyouforthat.
Now,I'llsaythatIbelieveyourscreenplayhasmorepotentialtoreachthescreenthan
anyotherMatrixcontinuation.Findapublisher,gainlegaladviceonretainingadaptive
rightstotheoriginalmaterial,andmoveforward.Withmaterialthisgood,youcan'tfail.
Thanksagain.
-BentheBeliever
BentheBeliever,
Iguessit'strue,greatmindsdothinkalike.Ormayberestlessmindsjustkeepsearching
foranswers.
I'mhappytohearthatmystoryparallelsyourownideasabouttheMatrixandthatyou
thinkit'sgoodenoughtopursuewithlegalvigor.Iguessupuntilyousaidit,I'dnever
reallythoughtabouttryingtosecuretheadaptiverightstomystory.
MyintentionhasalwaysbeentowriteasolidcontinuationtothestoryforMatrixfans
withthehope,ofcourse,thattheWarnerorWachowskibrotherswouldcatchwindofit
andmaybepickitup.ButperhapsIshouldbealittlemoreproactive.Tryingtosecure
theadaptiverightssoundslikeagreatidea.
ButevenifIsecurelegalownershipofmystory,Iwouldstillhavetopersuadethe
brotherstomakethemovie.Theystillretainownershipofthecharactersandfranchise,
whichIdon'tseeanywayaround.ThebiggestadvantageIhaveisthatmystoryissolid
andconvincing.IjustwishIknewhowtogetittotheirattention.
InthemeantimeI'lllookintosecuringtheadaptiverights,ifthat'spossibleatall.Your
positiveattitudeandglowingpraiseonlyhelptopropelmeinthedirectionof
inevitability:namely,thataMatrix4isinthecardssometimeinthefuture.Let'sjust
hopeit'smyversion.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BentheBelieverDATE:8/28/20082:14:29PM
TheWachowskibrothersdon'thavetomakeit,otherdirectorswouldjumponthisifthe
brothersdecidednottopursuethe4thinstallment.(whichwouldactuallybethethird,
duetothefactthatMatrixRevolutionswasfilmedasonemovie,butultimatelysplitin
halfbyWarnerBros.)
Ben,
Thatmayindeedbetrue,however,theystillretainthecopyrightonthefranchise.One
wayoranother,theWachowskiswillhavetogiveittheirblessing.Howbesttogetthem
todothatistheissue.Haveyougotthemagicspell?
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:pinguDATE:9/4/20084:47:36AM
Ireallyenjoyedit!Iwasalwaysuncomfortablewiththeideaofneohavingsupernatural
powersintheworldofzion.OneofthethingsIlovedabouttheoriginalmatrixfilmwas
thattherealworldisjustlikeourworld,ielackinginanysupernaturalphenomena,but
ofcourseinthematrixbeingacomputersimulationneocandoanythinghewanted.so
withyourideathattheworldofzionisactuallythesupermatrixthenitseemsmore
reasonablethatneocanhavesupernaturalpowersinthatworldtoo.However,Iwasa
bitdiscouragedintheendwiththetwodifferentneoreflectionsinthebathroom.That
reallyissupposedtobetherealworldsohowcouldthathappen?unlessyou're
suggestingthatthisrealworldisyetanothermatrix,asuper-supermatrix.wherewould
itend?IreaditprettyquicklysosorryifImissedsomethingandthatit'sastupid
question.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonP.DATE:9/4/20089:49:49PM
Firstoff,WOAH!!!I'veonlyreadthefirsthalfofitand...WOAH!!!Oneofthebestworks
ofartinthearrayofscriptsIhavereadforaMatrixContinuation.Ifyouweretotake
thattotheWachowskis,theywouldtakeit,shapeitintoamovie,andwefanswell
wouldhaveournextMatrixmovieintheworld!!!6outof5Stars!!
(IfyouknowwhatImean.)
pingu,
I'mgladyoulikedthestoryandthat,foryou,insomewaysitgavetheseriesmore
plausibility.
And,no,I'mdefinitelynotsuggestingthattherealworldisasuper-supermatrix
concoctedasjustanotheraruestofoolpeopleormachines.Idoliketheideathatnot
everyworldisavirtualsimulation.
Iam,however,suggestingthatthereareotherlayersofexistence,justnotsimulated
ones!AndalsothatNeo'sspecialqualitieswerenotuniquetotheMatrixandtheSuper
Matrix,butareapartofwhoheis,whereverheis.AndIsuggestthathehastheability
totapintothoseotherlayersofexistence,whichmightevenbeparallelworldsasis
hintedatinhisdreamwhereheencountersmanyNeos.
ThatmayseemtounderminetherealnessoftheworldoftheCortexandthegood
Architectandall,butIthinkitjustexpandstheideaofthequestion,"Whatisreal?"
WhatNeodiscoversandconcludesinmystoryisthatallworldsandexistencesarereal.
Thetrickistoaccepttheoneyou'reinandliveitfully.
Justmorefoodforthought.ThanksforthefeedbackandIhopeIquelledsomeofyour
discouragement.
PDWood
BrandonP.
Keepreadingandletmeknowwhatyouthinkofthesecondhalf.AndI'mworkingon
tryingtogetittotheWachowskis;it'seasiersaidthandone.
Ilike6outof5stars!Thanks.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:UghDATE:9/6/20088:09:54PM
Characters'personalitiesdifferedanextremeamountfromthetrilogy.Theinteraction
betweenwasshakyatbest.Theplotwasbasicallyaninverseofthefirstmatrix.Tellme,
forthenextpartwillyoutitleit"TheSuperDuperMegaMatrix,"wheretheyallrealize
thattheir"reality"isjustanothercomputergeneratedillusion?NeofindsoutthatSmith
isbackandreadytoterrorizeeverythinghefoughtforinthetrilogyandhedoesn'teven
bataneyelash.TheArchitectwasn'tevenclosetohischaracter,particularlyinhis
dialogue.Theonlycharactersthatwerehalf-waycomparabletotheirWachowski
brotherswrittencounterpartsweretheMerovingianandPersephone.Iseriouslyhope
thatyoudon'thaveanydisillusionmentsthatthiswillbemadeintoamovieorevena
paperbacksomeday.Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetopenallofthis.I'msureitwasa
lotofwork,buttheideaoftherebeinga"supermatrix"isextremelyunimaginitive.You
shouldsticktocreatingsomethingyourself.Ifeelthatyoucouldwritesomesci-fiwith
somehardworkandpractice,butattemptingtocontinueaclassictrilogysuchasThe
Matrixisadauntingtask,andclearlyaloftygoal.AsIsaid,trytocomeupwith
somethingoriginalandyoumayhavesomesuccess.Bestofluck.
Ugh,
Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetogivemeconstructivefeedbackdespiteitsmostly
negativebent.Icoulddefendeachpartpointforpoint,butthatwouldjustbemy
opinionagainstyours.Besides,muchofwhatyoubroughtuphasbeendiscussedin
earliercomments.AndIthinksomeofyourcriticismhasmerit.
I'mdefinitelyinagreementwithyouthatit'stimetoworkonsomethingofmyown,
whichI'mcurrentlydoing.TheSuperMatrixstorywasbasicallyanexerciseandfun
challengeformepersonallyandonethatI'vewantedtosharewithotherMatrixfans.
PerhapsI'vetakenittoofarinyoureyesandtreadinterritorythat'snotmyown.Ihear
that.ButI'veneverdoneitoutofdisrespecttotheBrothers;it'smoreofanhomage
frommyperspective.
DespiteyourdislikeofthisparticularextensionoftheMatrixTrilogy,Isensethatyou
thinkIhavetalent.ThatIappreciateandhopetofoster.Thanksforthehonestcritique
andnohardfeelings.
PDWood
AccordingtomycalculationsofZionandtherealworldisnotasupermatrix,butjusta
anotherkindofcontrol(realtechnology);thematrixisadreamworldcontrol;thereal
worldisnotadreamworld;youguysmustunderstandit;thereasonwhyNeocould
performsupernaturalintherealworldisbecausehewasmadebythemachinesinthe
firstplaceandthathisbraincouldcontainamachinechipthatcanworklikeacell
phone,asupernetworkchip,combinewithhisabilitiesinthematrixgiveNeothe
abilitiesinMatrixRevolution,wherehecoulddestroyrealmachines.Therealworldisa
advancefuturetechnologybasedworld,butNeocouldusehisbrainpowerto
communicateanyplacewithanymachineitwaslimited,inMatrixhispowerswasnot
limited.NeowasinthecoreoftheMatrixwiththeArchitect.Themachineworldalso
containstheirownmatrixtheyellowcode,Neowastheresohecancommunicateany
place.ItlookslikeyouguysdonotunderstandtheMatrixRevolution,beforeyouguys
gototheWachowskisjustwatchtheAnimatrixagainandthenMatrixReloadand
Revolution.MystoryisstilltheclosesttothetruthoftheMatrixphilosophy.Readthis
Matrix1focusontheMatrixandtorescuesomeonefromit
Animatrix:FocusontheHistory,PhilosophyandstartoftheMatrixandZion
MatrixReloaded:FocusontheMysteryoftheMatrix(theprograms)
MatrixRevolution:FocusontheMachineWorld,MachineWorldMatrixandtheReal
world.
***MatrixBegins:SameasAnimatrix,butnotAnimatedandstorymorecomplexand
withdramaandaction.
***Matrix4:FocusontheMachineWorldenemiesotherMachines.ThegoodMachines
needthehelp.
Neocouldbedeadornot.TrinitycanberesurrectedbytheMachines.TheKidcould
helpMorpheusandNeotofighttheenemiesoftheMachines.Theenemymachines
couldalsohaveadarkMatrixwithbadcharacters.TheMerovingianoftheMatrixcould
getcontrolbykillingtheArchitect.AcopyofAgentSmithcouldsurviveinthetrain
world.Neoabilitiescouldbedoubled.TheKidcouldbecomelikeNeo,becausehisfaith
isverystrong.Morpheuscandefeathisfirstagent.Therecanbenewphilosophiesand
lessonsadded.Therecanbenewmachinesintherealworldwithexcellentbattles.
TherecouldbenewstylesandfightsintheMatrix.Comeonguysletskickass.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PerDATE:9/16/20082:27:38AM
Ijustcouldnotstopreadingitgrabedmeandwouldn'tletgountilIwasdonereading
andthenIstillwantedthestorytokeepgoingon.IlovethisstorylinethatIcouldread
fordayswithoutsleep.GreatjobkeepupdatingIwantmore!!!!!
Per,
I'mgladyoulikeditsomuch...butIdoubtI'llbeaddingtoit.Therestisuptopeople's
imaginationatthispoint.Hopethatisn'ttoodisappointing.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:claudiusiacobDATE:9/17/200810:40:00PM
Heyall,
First,Imustadmit,Ihaven'treadtheothercomments.Shameonme.
However,IDIDreadtheScript,it'snow1:11AM,mefinishingit.
ImustadmitthatIdidenjoyedit,tosomepoint.Sincewe'reallaccustomedtosplit
thinksingoodand/orbadthings,I'llstartoutbythegoodthinks,justtotakethemoff
theway.
-it'sgoodtohaveNeoandTrinity"back",havethemshowertogether,makelove,lying
onthebeachandsuch.
-it'scleverthewholeideaoftheCortex,theover-imposed"Super-Matrix".
-ain'tbadtheideaofoverthrowingmachine'ssupremacy,andmakethemmastersover
virtualcharactersinsteadofrealhumans.Feelgood,imean:)
-maybeappealingtheflashbacks,themixinofandroids(sic!)stories;
-soundscooltheideaofapoliticallyunitedworld,thePresidentofthe"Free"World,
hm...,wedon'tfighteachothers,fightthemachinesinstead,etc.
-Maybeafewothers,sorry,Ionlyhave3000chars.
HOWEVER
-Thewholestoryisn'tfeelinglikeone.Therearewaytomanyfrontswherethestory
goes,like,theSource,theSuper-Matrix(theworldoftheMachines,andtheZion,that
is),theMatrixitself,plus,severalotherspotslostintimeandhistory--like,theattackof
themachines,theandroidsplanninganhomicide,ETCETERA--dude!doyoueverstop
toreviewwhatyou'vewrittensofar?
-youdon'teverfinishanything,youmerelyhave,let'ssay,theplotforeachofyour
sections,butthat'sit.
-you'reafraidtooutyourmaincharactersatrisk,whichiswhy,thefeelingthatnothing
ever'shappening.ThenewNeoandTrinityseemtoliveanendlesssoapopera...
-there'stoolongadreams(nightmares?)sequenceinthebeginning.Whenyouraction
finallystartsIcouldhardlybelievethisis/real/--notadream,thatis...
-youstartthestoryofaMerovingianandPersephone,butgetwiththemNOWHERE,
likeyougetnowherewiththeSmith(s)managingtogettotheMatrixmainframe,with
theMorpheus/Lock/othersandtheentireZioncounsel,etc...
-youmerelyseemtohavefocusedofexplainingthings,butNOACTIONiseverbeing
made,bynobody(OK,excepttheSmiths,buttheiractionsleadtonowhere...)
-WhyaretheMerovingiansparentsofTrinity?Whatdidyoutriedtodemonstrate?
'CauseIcan'tfollowfromthescript.Whyisthe'Oracle'motherofMorpheusandLock
(theyactedlikebrothers,butnotinyourscript)?What'sthepoint?INSHORT:what
purposedoallthethosefamilylinksservefor?Imentionsoapoperaagain,wherethisis
basicplot...
-Idon'tknowdude,I'veconsumed2500+
ofmycharslimit,andhaven'tsaidatenthofwhatneedstobesaid...
Sorryguy,reallydo,youreallyneedtogetyourselftogether,youneeddiscipline,you
needtoalsofocuson'tension','unpredictable',and'CONFLICT'--'causeyouain'tgot
any--,anddon'tstartmorepathsthanyoucanfollow,and*do*eventuallyconvergeall
ofthem...
Sorry...Won'tmakeitswaytothescreen.
claudiusiacob,
I'mgoingtohavetoagreewithmuchofwhatyousaid,positiveandnegative.
You'reright.Theexpositionisabitmuch.Itwashardtoavoidthatwitha
prequel/sequel.Idon'tloveit.
You'reright,ImayhavebittenoffmorethanIcanchew.Thestorytriestocoveralotof
territoryinonescreenplayandthatmakesthestorylinegoinalldirections.I'maware
thatmanyofthesubplotscouldbedevelopedintowholescreenplays.Alotofpeople
haveexpressedsimilarsentimentsintermsofwishingthestorythreadswouldcontinue
orbecomemoredeveloped.
Rightagain.TherelationshipbetweenTrinityandNeoisdefinitelysoapoperaterritory.
It'snotshoot'emup,likewe'reusedto.Ichosetomaketheirinteractionbeabout
gainingpeace,resolution,truthandastable(albeitstrange)world.It'sdefinitelya
departurefromtheTrilogy,butIthinkthosethingsarewhatNeowassearchingforfrom
thebeginning.Noteveryone'scupoftea,Iguess.
AndIthinkyou'rerightaboutthedreamsequenceinthebeginningbeingtoolongor
notspacedoutenough.I'llhavetofixthatifthescreenplaycatches.
ButIthoughtthefocusonSmithwasfairlydeveloped;hehasbattleswithNeoandthe
Zionguards,escapesfromZion,reintegratesintotheMatrix,hasabattlewithSeraph
andtheAgents,andfinallyattacksthemachinemainframe.Mostofthosesceneswere
prettyACTIONheavy,too.
IalsothoughtthePersephoneandMerovingianstorywasfairlywellthoughtoutand
quitecompelling.Theymeetandareinstantlyattractedtoeachother,marry,andhave
Trinity,allwhiledevelopingtheCortexbraintohousetheSuperMatrix.Theytake
responsibilityfortheCortex'sdisruptiveanomaly,entertheSuperMatrix,andare
consequentlyunabletoreturn.HavingbeenlosttotheSuperMatrix,theydiscoverand
begintoabusetheiruniqueabilitiesandfallfromgracewhileconsolidatingtheir
empire.Theyhaverun-inswiththeOracleandAgentSmith,wheretheyestablishtheir
positionintheMatrixpowerstructure.Iadmit,notmuchaction,butsomenicetension
and,intheirfirstscene,someplayfulflirtation.Idugit.
Ifyoufeelsoinclined,Isuggestyouskimthescreenplayagain.Ithinkyoumissedthe
partabouthowpeopleintheSourcearealmostallfamilialvolunteers.TheArchitect,
Trinity,Merovingian,andPersephoneareallrelated;aswell,theOracle,Jason,and
Morpheusareallfamily.
Idefinitelyunderstandthepartabouthowstoriesshouldhavemanypathsthat
convergeattheendandtieupthethreads.ButinthisparticularcaseIchosenottodo
so.Yes,itprobablywon'tsellinHollywood;butIreallylikemostofthestoryasitis.A
lotmorecouldcomeofit,iftherightcircumstancespresentedthemselves.
Asfarastension,unpredictability,andconflictareconcerned,thestorymaynothave
packedthemin,buttosaythatit"ain'tgotany"seemsabitstrong.
Iappreciatethatyoutookthetimetoreadthescreenplayandmakethoughtful,specific
comments.Ididn'tlovethemallbutmanyofthemwererightonthemoney.I'lltake
youradviseifthisthingevermovesbeyondmywebsite.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RuebenDATE:9/18/20083:11:09AM
ithoughtitwasgoingtobeonegiantpunchline.butiamahugefanofthematrixsome
ofmyfriendsnotso.ireadthescripandisay,itsarealmindbender.ha,andithought
firstwasbad.sothemoralofthestoryhereisthatyouthinkyourmindcan"tbend
spoonsanymorethanitcan,whathappensitstwistsandbendsevenmore.onlydislikei
havethatisthattheendofthesupermatrixwiththewholeneojr??ifyoucangetback
tomewithsomeinfothanks
Reuben,
Gladyouenjoyedit.Whatkindofinfowe'reyoulookingfor?
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ruebenDATE:9/20/20087:40:02PM
yeahiwasjustwonderingwhatyourtrueintentionsonyoursupermatrixstory.areyou
goingtogowithaspinoffstorywithitlikeabookorminiseriesshow,orgoingtopush
towardsamovie.ifyoudopushittowardsamoviethere'safewthingsithinkitmight
bemissinginit.thenyoumightalreadyknowafewofthem.thematrixisoneofa
biggestactionsmovie,somorebigactionclimaxfighting.examplewhenneofightssmith
attheendofthefirstoneandtheendingfightwithhimagainatthethirdmatrix.i
forgetasomethingsihadtosayaboutitbutigetbacktoyou.
oneofmybiggestthingsiswhenireadthestoryitjustended.whichiahadanotherset
ofquestions.whatswiththebabyattheend?itgoesthebabyfloatingtheblocksthen
theend??whataboutmrsmithinthematrixwillneofinallygoinakickhisassor
trickedintoanothermatrix.sorry,justasmalljoketoyourstory.
ihavebeentalkingtosomeofmyfriendsaboutyourstorymostourohnonotaanother
matrixmovie.butafewothersarelikewellneverknowitmightbebetterthenthe
secondandthirdone.iamallforitifyoudo.anywaysiwillbewaitingforyour
responseback
rueben,
Isuggestyoureadtheothercommentsleftonthiswebsite;I'mprettysurethey'll
answerallthequestionsyouhave.Ifyouhavemorequestionsthataren'tansweredby
thecomments,justletmeknow.I'llseeifIcananswerthem.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DaxxianDATE:9/29/20083:02:44PM
Betweenthesecondandthirdmovie,myfangroupcameupwithalotofthesame
ideas.IlovehowittiesintheoriginandpurposeoftheMerovingian,buthisquarrel
withtheOracleseemedalittleunfounded,itcouldbebasedonabitmorethan
arrogance.Overallspectacularconcepts.IthinkitbotheredalotofpeoplehowNeo
struckdownthesentinalsinthesecondmovie.
itwillbealittlehardtogetGloriaFosterfortheoriginalOracle,butgoodlucktoyou.
oh,onemorething,moreontheandroids,thiercool.andlessonSmith,heisoldnews.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:IliasDATE:9/30/200812:40:49AM
Hellothere,i'mamatrixfanfromGreece(SorryformybadEnglish:P).Readingyour
storyihavetosayBravo!Yourstoryissogreat!Butilikedthewaytheoriginaltrilogy
ended:p(Sorrymate).Butifthisabsolutlywonderfulstorywilleverhitthebigscreen
theniwouldDEFINETLYseeit.Againcongratulationsandthankyouforkeepingthe
matrixsagaalive:)!!!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:UfukDATE:9/30/200810:22:45AM
Excellent,attentive,attractive,writing
Ufuk(notacurseitismynamemeansHorizon:))fromTurkey(notaanimalitisa
countryname.
Daxxian,
Iappreciatethecomments.
Yeah,Iagree,theMerovingian'squarrelwiththeOracleisalittlethin;thatwasmorea
pageconstraintissuethananythingelse.Iwould'velikedtofleshitoutmore.
I'mnotsurehowtotackletheGloriaFosterissue;guessI'lljusthavetosolveitin
production...ha,ha!
And,yes,theandroidswe'reafundevelopment;I'dlovetofleshthemoutmore,too.
MaybeinMatrix5?(Nah!)
Smithisoldnews,buthe'sstillabad-assthatpeoplelovetohate.Besides,lifeinthe
Matrixwouldbetooquietwithouthim.Hadtokeephimin.
Thanksagain.PDWood
Ilias,
It'sbeenapleasurewritingthestoryandhearingeveryone'scomments.I'mstilltrying
tohavesometopbrassreadit.
PDWood
UfukfromTurkey,
Thankyoufortheconcise,flatteringreview.Evenafewwordscanmakemyday.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:jameshofstrandDATE:10/8/20088:57:12PM
Wood-
...ididntthinktherecouldbea4thmatrix,ithoughtthatthewaythey(the
wachowski's)leftitwasgood,andtheredidntneedtobeanymoretothestory...
...you'veprovedmewrong,iamhooked,
isthereanywayforthe4thmovietobewrittenoffofyourscript?(notthatyouhavent
triedyet)
iknowthatthiscouldmakethewachowskibrothersdosomesoulsearchingandrealize
thereisstillsomemagicleftintheworld...
happyhunting-
-Snowman
Snowman,
Thanksfortheupbeatreview.I'mstilltryingtogetthisstorytotheWachowskis.IfI
succeed,I'llbepostingitonmywebsite,don'tyouworry.
Cheers.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DanielDATE:10/11/20082:03:05AM
Excellentread..andyou'renotgettingpaid?(WB..whatsthedeal.)Weneedmore
Persephone!!
Daniel,
Justgettingpaidincompliments.Doesn'tbuymuchfoodanddrinkbutwhatareya
goingtodo?Keepwritingthegoodwrite,Iguess.GoPeresphone!
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DorianThiessenDATE:10/25/20089:21:31PM
wowthiswasreallygood,iwasconfusedhowusaidtheMerovingian(victor)andhis
wifehadpowers,sinceinthesecondandthirdmatrixitdoesn'tshowthatatall...butu
shouldcopyrightthisorw/eassoonasucansonoonestealsitfromuandmakes
millions...andalsohowdoesthatwork,neohasakid?butseriouslyhewasinthe
matrix,soimassuminghisgfrachelwasalsointhematrix..sohowissheoutofthe
matrixandhowdidshegetpregnantinthematrix,andhaveakidoutsideofit??or
leavewiththekid...imjustconfusedaboutthat..otherthanthatitwasamazing!!!plz
plzplzplzmakeasequal..imdieingtofindoutabouttheneojrandstuff..evenifujust
addalittlebitPLZdo.thenitdbeniceifucouldemailmewhenudo..hotmailis
hot100_pyro@hotmail.com
Dorian,
Iappreciateyourenthusiasmforthescreenplay.Thanks.
ThescreenplayiscopyrightedintheLibraryofCongressandregisteredwiththeWriter's
GuildofAmerica,soI'vedoneallIcantoprotectmyinterestsatthispoint.Hopefully,
that'senough.
Astoyourconfusion,Ithinkyou'reabitunclearontheseparationoftheMatrixandthe
SuperMatrix.
IntheMatrix,yearsbeforeNeomeetTrinity,NeohadagirlfriendnamedRachel.She
becamepregnantwithhischild,but,becausetheirrelationshipfellapartsoonafter,she
nevertoldhimaboutthebaby.ThefirstscenewithRachelisNeo'sunconsciousmind
tappingintopreviouseventsintheMatrix.He'sbeginningtodiscoverthetruth.Butit's
importanttorememberthatRachelandherson,NeoJr.,neverexistoutsideofthe
Matrix.TheendingsceneisjustavisualtripfortheaudiencetomoveintotheMatrix
andseethatRachel'ssonhaspowerslikeNeo'sandthesuggestionisthathewill
somehowtakeoverwhereNeoleftoff.
AsfortheMerovingianandPersephone,IthinkyouareforgettingthattheMerovingian
isabletowriteprogramsthatalterormanipulatehissurroundingsashedidwiththe
womaninhisrestaurantwhowasservedthemagicaldessert.Healsoexitsoutadoor
afterNeowinsthebigfightscenewiththeMerovingian'shenchmen.Hisexitchanges,
asweseewhenNeotriestogothroughitandendsupthousandsofmilesaway.My
assumptionisthathehaspowers,butheusesthemdiscreetly.Ialsoassumethat
Persephonehassimilarpowersbutfeelsnoneedtousethem.Sheletsherhusbanddo
thedirtywork.
Anyway,thosearemyexplanations.Ihopetheyclarifythingsabit.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DorianDATE:10/26/200810:10:49PM
helloagain..ididntreadtheendingproperly,soididntnoticetrinitysayurgffromthe
matrix..ithoughtshementintherealworld..whichwouldhavebeenreallyintence
becousethatwouldmeansomeonereallydidhaverealpowers...ithinkushouldwrite
moreandmakeitsoneodiscovershehasskillsintherealworld..andmaybetriestogo
backintothesupermatrix...thatwouldbesweet!!pleaseletmeknowifyoulikethe
idea..andithink,urememberwhenumadeneosayhefeltthisbeforetwice,inthe
matrixwhenhewasdieing?thatcouldleadtohimusinghispowersintherealworld..i
thinkeveryonewouldagreewithmethatthatwouldbearellycoolidea..:D
Dorian,
AlthoughthestorycouldgoinmanydirectionsandIdolikeyourideas,IfeellikeI've
takenmystoryasfarasIwouldlike.IftheWachowskiorWarnerbrotherssanction
furtherepisodes,well,maybeIwouldbite.Butuntilthathappens(!?),I'mjustgoingto
leavewellenoughalone.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSpauldingDATE:10/28/20086:10:47PM
PDWood,
IhavebeenafanoftheMatrixfromdayone.Isawtheoriginalinthetheaterwhen
mostpeopledidnotevenknowanythingaboutit.Partstwoandthreetomewereabit
lackinginsomeoftheircontent,butIlovedthemanywaybecauseIlikedthemain
charactersandwantedtoseemoreofthem.Iwasjustcurioustheotherdaytoseeif
anythingwasbeingdonetoproduceaMatrix4film.ThatiswhenIranacrossyour
screenplay.IhaveverylittletimeatthepresenttodomuchreadingbutIfiguredI
wouldgiveitafewminutestoseewhatIthought.Honestly,asIsatherereadingyour
work,Iwasseeingtheimagesflashingbeforemyeyes.Ithoughtitwasfascinating.Iam
notheretoofferacriticism.Having,writtenabookofmyown,Ialreadyknowhowhard
ofataskthiscanbe.IjustwantyoutoknowthatIthoroughlyenjoyedyourworkandI
wouldgoseethismovieinaheartbeatwereitevermade.Ithoughtyourcharacter
dialogwasrightontarget.Icouldexpandonthatcommentatyourrequest.
Unfortunately,orfortunately(however,youcouldinterpretit)Iwantmore.Astiredof
thisstoryasyoumightbe,itisanintriguingonetobesure.Andthecharacters,aretruly
complexandendearing.Youareaverytalentedwriterandhaveacleargrasponthis
idea.Iwouldapplaudyourdesiretodooriginalwork,butthereisnoconflicttodoing
anothereditionofyourMatrixdevelopmentatthesametime.Don'tknowyour
schedulebutitissomethingtoconsider...Isitnot,MonAmi(alittleMerovingian
humor).
I'mnotreallyacritic,butonewhoenjoyeditverymuch.Thereisnowayintheworld
withalltheCGIactionstuffinallthesemoviesbeingmadethatyouwon'texperience
similaritiesinstorylineetc.i.e.Terminator...IRobotetc.andetc.Sodon'tletthe
commentsofthosewhospendtheirtimetryingtofindthesesimilaritiesto"burstyour
bubble"botheryou.Theywillalwaysbethere.Ithoroughlyenjoyedyourworkand
wouldliketoseemoreofthesame.AndIwouldbethefirstinlinetoseethebigscreen
productionofMatrix4.
Thanksagainforallyourhardwork.Itbroughtsomemuchneededjoyandatwohour
respitetomypresentcircumstances.Greatjob!!!Writebackanytime.PSDidyouever
submitittoWBoranyoneelse...Ithinkitcouldbeverybigboxofficeinthefuture
consideringsomeofthecrapcomingoutofHollywoodlately.Behopefuland
encouraged.
Mark,
ThosearesomeofthenicestcommentsI'vereceivedrecently.I'mgladyouwereableto
squeezeinacoupleofhoursofreadingandthatthescreenplaydidn'tdisappoint.As
yousaid,writingabook/screenplayisalotofwork;Iguesswe'vebothbeenthere.
Youmentionedthatthecharacterdialogwas"rightontarget",whichIappreciate.What
Ihearverylittleaboutfromreaders,though,iswhichspecificscenesofdialogwere
reallyintriguingorgripping.Perhapsyoucouldpointoutoneortwothatyoureallyliked
andwhy.
Asforwritingmore...well,perhaps...ifanewstorylinehitsmethewaytheSuperMatrix
storylinedid;thatonejustblossomedinmyheadalmostinstantly.And,really,the
impetusformorewouldprobablycomemoreeasilyifIcouldgetsomeprofessional
interestintheSuperMatrixstory.
Andspeakingofprofessionalinterest,Irecentlysentthestorytoaprofessional,
currently-employed-in-a-high-profile-TV-seriesactorwhowasaschoolmateofminein
college.It'sbeenonlyaweek,sonoresponseyet,butitseemslikethebestavenueIcan
findtomoveituptheHollywoodladder.Hopeithooks.
Thanksagainfortheglowingcomments.AtthemomentIamdefinitelyveryhopefuland
encouraged.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AndreaBartleyDATE:10/29/20083:23:46PM
Ilikethescreenplayivebeendyingforanewmatrixmovieijustcanthandletheendof
NeoandimgladtheybroghtTrinityback.IdontthinkNeofitstheoriginalNeointhe
movie.Inthescreenplayhequestionsalmosteverythingandinthemovieheknows
whathecanandcanttrustsohedoesntquestionanythingandthematrixitselfdoesnt
soundthesame.OnethingidolikeisthefightingitsveryoriginalandveryNeo.
Andrea,
Gladyoulikeditoverall.
Yes,Neodoesalotofquestioninginmyscreenplay.Hardtosaywhetherit'sin
characterornot.Justremember,thisisthesecondtimeNeohasgonethrougharadical
transformationofhisreality.Thefirsttimeishardenoughtobelieveandcometogrips
with,butasecondtimemightthrowanyoneintoaseriousquestioningmood.Thenew
worldheentersisalsoquitedifferentfromtheworldofZioninthatNeoisnolongerin
thepositionofhavingtobeasavior.Whenthere'sthatkindofpressureonyou,
questioningstartstolooklikeaseriousweakness,don'tyouthink?Andthesenseof
urgencyhasbeenremoved,too.Hehastimetoreflectandquestion.Justafewpoints
tomakemycase.
Idefinitelyenjoyedwritingthefightscenes.Iparticularlyliketheonewheretheandroid
36'sattackthefortifiedcastle.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BrianWDATE:11/1/200812:18:18PM
heyhaveyousenttheMatrix4scripttotheWachowskiBros??andifuhavesentit,
havetheysentfeedbacktoyou??
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnthonyHDATE:11/10/20088:43:08AM
Man,wheredoibeginhere?
Somuchofthisstorywassoextremelysatisfying...
SuperblyCreative,especiallyfindingoutthathumansareactuallystillincontroland
ZionisanotherformofaMatrixprogram...
tokeepthemachinesunderwraps?...
Sh*t...getouttahere...
iloveit.
Thewayyoulinkedallthecharacterstogetherasfamilyandsuchwasveryappealing.
Neofindingpeaceinhisnewhomewiththewomanheloves...
that'dbenutts!wakinguptofindtheoneyoulovedwho'ddiedstillexists...
andtoltallyremembersyou...
Obviously,thewayyoukeptsomanyelementsconnectedinyourownrenditionofthe
continuationofthisstorywasreallyimpressive.
(Fattestrun-onsentencei'veevermade):)...
asafewpeoplecommented,therewasalotleftout...andyourpointistoleavethese
thingsopenendedtoletwethereadersuseourimagination.
Thebottomlineisthatthiswasanindependentprojectthatyoudidforyourown
reasons...tocritquethequalityofthescreenplayissilly...
ithinkyourgoalwastocreateadecentcontinuationandansweralotofquestions...
andyoudid,man.
yourstorywasamazing...
Butasabitchenwriter,you'vecreatedsomanynewquestionsintheprocess...
iknowyou'repotentiallyburntout...
andihatetocritique,butthisiswithalldorespect,sir...
ithinkyouhavecreativetalent...andithinktoimplythatlittleNeowillgrowupand
maybetakeonSmithisaneasywayout...Smithaloneandhisnewpowerisenoughfor
shittogetcatastrohicASAP!
ithinkyoumaybewantedtoendtheprojectandthatwashow...yousaidyouwere
burnt,right?
iunderstandasanartist,andthatmightbewhatiwoulddotoo...But
Mr.Wood,sayinganythingistoomuchismereopinion...
Allicandoissay...tome,youareahero,man.forcreatingthis...
iencourageyoutothinkofthecountlesspeopleyou'vebroughtjoyto.andasmuch
timeasyouspentonthis,youknowdamnwellasido,thatthiswasamerefractionof
thestorie'spotential.you'veopenedpossibilitytomeforawholenewtrilogy...andis
thatreallysoaweful?theonlyotherbigmovieiknowofwasStarWars...
Andbytheway...WhatifNeowantedtofreehisson?orunitewithhim?or
whatever...?
dude,youhavethepowerhere,andnottoputthepressureonyourshoulders...but
you'vebecomelikeSpidey,greatpower,greatresponsibility...you'vealreadyaffected
lordknowshowmanylives?imagineifyouheldontothisfight?
ihiglyencourageyou,myfriendtokeepgoing,forus...doitforotherpeopleatbest,
you'realreadyahero,butdissapointmentistobehadbymanyothers...togetnomore
fromyou...
But,nowthatithinkaboutit,maybeyou'dWANTmeandwhoevertoconinueyour
story?maybeNeofindinghissonishowiamsupposedtocontinuethis.
maybeiwill.Butisay,takeabreakforawhile,andgetyourassbacktowork,man!
Anthony,
Thanksfortheeffusivepraise;I'mhappythescreenplaybroughtyousuchenjoyment.
AndIappreciateyoucommentingonthespecificelementsofthescreenplaythat
capturedyourimagination(i.e.humansstillincontrol,linkingthecharacterstogether,
Neowakingtofindtheoneheloves).Nowyou'vegotmeinacornerwithallthat
enthusiasm;youhaveatalentforwhattosaytomakeawriterwanttodomore.
Andit'snotthatIdon'thavemoreideas;Icouldgoonformanyscreenplays.Buteven
whileIwaswritingtheSuperMatrix,Ialwaysfeltlikeitwasn'tmyownproject.Yes,it's
mystoryline,buttheunderlyingthemebelongstosomeoneelse.
I'vebeentryinghardtoshoptheSuperMatrixaroundandseeifsomeoneinHollywood
willbite.Nothingyet.Ifthere'senthusiasmforwhatI'vedonefromthatcornerofthe
movieworld,I'lldomorewiththestory.Butuntilthen,I'mgoingtosticktomygunsand
workonsomethingofmyown.Thatdoesn'tmeanI'llnevercomebacktoit;butitdoes
meanI'vegototherthingstoaccomplishfirst.
Andbyallmeanstakeacrackatfurtherepisodes.I'mbuildingonsomeoneelse'swork;
youcancertainlybuildontopofmine.Butbewarned,it'salongtripdowntherabbit
holetryingtowriteascreenplayofanykind.AsmuchasIlovedwritingthisthing,italso
beatthe****outofme.Nicetohaveitdone!Hardtodomore!
Onceagain,thanksforthefantasticandthoughtfulencouragementandcomments.
Reallymademyday.Andcheckininanother8to12months;maybeI'llhavedonea180
andwillbefullyembarkedonanotherepisode.Youneverknow.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:K-BLDATE:11/16/20081:13:47AM
IreallylikedtheMatrix4scriptthatyouwrote.Theonlyflaw,infact,thatIfoundwas
thatitleftmehangingforanother.DoyouplanonwritinganotherMatrixscript?I
mean,youhaveastorythatyouwanttotell,telluswhatitis.Completeyourtrilogy....
K-BL,
Ifthat'stheonlyflawyoucanfind,I'lltakethatasasupremecompliment.
Theissueof"moretocome"hasbeendiscussedquiteabitintheothercomments;
pleasetakealookatthemforanindepthanswertoyourquestion.Infactthecomment
previoustoyourswasaboutjustthesamething.
Thanksfortakingthetimetoreadthescreenplayandleavemesomefeedback.Always
aday-maker.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:creeperDATE:11/18/200810:08:10AM
Istoppedreadingafterthesecondpagebecausethefirstsceneiscrapandthe
charactersareallwrong.Firstitshouldn'tstartwithsomeboringdialog.Secondlythe
characterspersonalityandattitudesareallwrong.ThelasttimeMorpheusandNiobe
talkedwithLocktheywerepissedathimsothewaybothofthemactedtowardLockis
bullbecauseMorpheus(inRevolutions)believedwitheveryounceofhisbeingthatNeo
savedthem.SoMorpheus,inhisfirstlinewouldhavedisagreedwithlockandwould
probablysaidsomethingalongthelinesof"Iknowwhathappened,Neosavedus."Also,
Morpheuswouldhavearguedwithlocksthirdline,"idon'tbelievewehavetheluxuryof
assumingthewarisover."BecausehebelievedNeowouldbringanendtothewar.That
ismyrant.Thisscriptiscrap.Agreeornotidon'tcare.
creeper,
I'msurprisedyoufoundmyopeningscenetobesounbelievable.ThefirstthingLock
saysis,"Itsurelookslikeamiracletome,"immediatelyestablishinghistacit
acceptanceofMorpheus'sbeliefsandtherebysettingupapositiverelationship
betweenallthreeofthem.Heevengoesonestepfurtheranddirectlyapologizesto
them.ThenNiobeandMorpheusinreturnshowrespectforLockbyagreeingtowork
withhim.Andgiventhatthemachineshaveleftandthewarappearstobeover,it
didn'tseemtomethatatthatmomentthosethreewouldbeinaparticularly
adversarialmood.Cooperationlookedlikeaplausibledirection.Justmyopinion,
though.
Iwouldhavebeenmoreopentoyouroverallassessmentofthescriptbeingcrapifyou
hadmanagedtoreadpastpage2andthenmakeyourproclamation.Personally,Ithink
youmissedaninterestingifnotthoughprovokingstorymerelybecausethefirsttwo
pagesweredisappointing.Ifyoureadthewholethingandstillthinkit'sunworthy,I'dbe
morethanwillingtoacceptyourassessmentoftheentirescript.Ihopeyoutakethe
timetoreadit.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:anthonyH,yesi'mback!DATE:11/20/20088:41:16AM
Dude!iwonderedtomyselfifi'dhavetheprivaledgetogetaresponseback...
sureenough,you'readamncoolcat,man.
Respect...afterreadingotherpeople'scommentswheretheyseemtobetalkinsum
Sh*t,i'dliketosaysomethingencouraging,buticantellyou'vegotagoodattitudeandi
haven'treadanyreplythatsoundedoutofline...:)
youtellingmemywordsareencouragingforyouasawriter,isacompliment,indeed.
thankyou.
bro,iunderstandhowthisentirestoryhadtowhupyourassforsure...
artrequirestimeandincredibleselfdiscipline,iimagineespeciallyinthisrealmof
writing...
Onesmallcounterattackimustthrowoutinreguardstobuildingoffsomeoneelses
workisthis.ifivaguelyknowcorrectly,GeorgeLucaswastheoriginalwriterof
StarWars,himorwhoeveritwas,right?butmyman,ifyoulookaround,youwillfind
"HUNDREDS"ofcontinuationandsidestorieswrittenbycompletelyoutsideparties,and
guesswhat?theysell.andalotofemarerad(goodword,right)
BecausealotofpeoplereallylovetheStarWarsuniverse.andlikemyselfintheend,
don'treallygiveash*twhowrote'em...howboutspiderman,xmen,youthinkitwas
thesameauthortheentiretimewhowrotethethousadsofstories.whatisimportantif
youdocontiueithinkistomakesuretostaytruetotheoriginaluniverseandcharacters
acertainwaysoastonotcreatecontradictions.Asimpleencouragementforyou,You
yourselfalreadysaidyouhavemoreideasbrewingforthisright?
itkindofsucksbecauseireallylikethisstoryasitis,butinordertocreatemoredetail
withthefuturestoriestocome,ialmostwanttosaytomaybelookatthisasarough
draftperhaps?it'slikeSOMUCHwascrammedintothisonestory,andasisaid,you've
createdincrediblepotentialformore.Dude,Thestoryoftherenegaderobotstryingto
sabotagethingsforthehumansinthereal,realworldisawhole,entirenewstoryin
itself!whatwouldbetocomeafterSmithwhoopsassonthedominatingmachines,as
well,maybeeventuallythey'dfightback,somanynewturnsandopenings,here!!!
dude,idon'tknow,you'veopenedupsomanyideas,perhapsyoucouldworkonyour
ownproject,andalsokeepflowingWITHthisMatrixcontinuation.It'sBadass,bro!
RememberalltheauthorswhocontinueonStarwars.iknowyou'dfaceatediousbattle
tocontinue,butitoltallybelieveinyou,man.screwhollywoodiftheygiveyouthe
finger.
you'vealreadybuiltafanbase.
onyourownstory,iseeyoucreatingabadassfiction,andpublishedornot,yougotone
fanthat'llbetheretoread...justthoughtofthis.haveyouthoughtofWRITINGanew
Martixtrilogyinthreebooks?notsomuchscreenplaysformovies?justanidea,till
nexttime,bestofluckeitherwayyougo...Butseriously,keepgoing,damnit.:D
RespectandPeace...anthony
p.s.thanxagainforwriting,man.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:eonDATE:11/21/20081:23:42AM
Imustsayreallyacutestoryline,andalsothevisuals.nowcomethe"But".
ithinkallthisspeculationaboutthesupermatrix,andmakingtheworldofziontobe
justanothermatriculatedillusion,isarisingfromtheneedtoexplainNeo'spowersin
thezionworld,inpreviousmovies.Icannotbelievethatthemoviescanhavesuchmono
directionalinterpretation.
InthemoviesNeohadthepowers(inzionworld)justtomanipulatemachines,butinthe
"Matrix"hehadmuchmorefreedomliketomanipulatespace(likeflying,stopping
bulletsetc..)andotherprograms(thesmithexplosioninthefirstmovie).Itclearlytells
thatzionworldisnotlikethematrix.
weknowthatonlythepeoplewithpluggingholestobeconnectedcangoinsidethe
matrix.theyareakindofcyborgs,buttheycanaswellcarrythemselvesadevicetoget
remotelyconnected.
Onepossibleanswertothethingsshowninthemovieisbysomekindofwireless
communicationbetweenNeo'sbrainthemachinesandeventhematrixNetwork,which
isdoneexactlyaswhenapersonispluggedintothematrix,butnowtheinformation
beingtransferedthroughdifferentmedium.
HoweverthiswaspossibleonlywhenNeohadreachedthesourceandtalkedtothe
architect.itwasthischangewhichhelpedhimtounderstandthemachinelanguagein
"zionworld"andfinallytohackthem,andorderedthemachinestodestroythemselves.
justassimilarwhensmith(neo'scounterpart)intrudedthezionworldbyhackingintoa
realperson'sbrain.
butireallylikedtheideaofsmithgettingintoaperson'sbrainandkeepingabackupof
hiscopyforfutureuse,whichhedidveryinterestinglyinyourversion.
anywaythiscantakeusmuchfarfromyourversionofmatrix4,andtoacompletely
newsetofideasformatrix4.
oneofthemtostartwithcouldbethatneoalsohasputtedacopyofhisselfinthe
matrixintheformofavirtualhuman,andcontactsmorpheus.
onethingwhichiwanttosayisthat,youhaveputtedquiteanamountofsoaptothe
movie,bymakingeveryoneelsethesonordaughteroftheother,whichifindreally
annoying(imsrry).
anywaysireallylovedthereading,andmaybereaditonemoretime.youarereally
verytalented.hopetoseeyournameunderthescreenplaywriterinamovieofyour
ownoriginalidea.
goodluck
AnthonyH,
Nottoworry.IfI'mnotmistaken,IthinkI'verespondedtoeverysinglecommentwithin
24hours.IfigureIoweittoanyonewhotakesthetimeandefforttoreadthestory,go
backtomysiteandwritemeacomment.
Yourattitudeandwordsarealsoveryencouraging;youkindofknowjustwhattosayto
makeaconductorwanttokeepthetrainrolling.Butwantinganddoingaretwo
differentthings.TheSuperMatrixstoryreallywasanexerciseinfunandawayformeto
cutmyteethasascreenwriter;Iwasprettysurefameandfortunewouldnotbeanend
result.WiththisstoryundermybeltI'mlookingtowritescreenplaysthatwillactually
sellandmakeittothebigscreen(ifthat'satallpossible).Unfortunately,continuingthe
Matrixstoryisnotlikelytogenerateincomeormakeittothebigscreendespitethefact
that,asyousay,thereisSOMUCHpotentialinthestory.
ThedesiretowriteoriginalmaterialinadditiontofeelingabitburntoutwiththeSuper
MatrixstoryarethereasonsI'mnotgoingtopursuemoreMatrixstuffrightnow.I'd
reallyliketobeknownmoreformyownoriginalworkthanjustastheguywho
piggybackedontheWachowskiworld.LikeIsaid,though,whoknowswhatthefuture
holds.I'mstillsendingthescreenplayintotheHollywoodstreamhopingforabite.Give
mesixmonthstoayear,letmewriteoneortwoscreenplaysofmyownand,bythen,
maybeI'llbechompingatthebitforsomemoreMatrixyumyum!
I'llkeepyourwordsinmindanddon'tthinkIhaven'tbeenflattered.Ithinkyougiveme
toomuch.Let'sjusthopeI'mnotaone-hitwonder.
Thanksagain,PDWood
Eon,
Allyourcommentsarethoughtfulandprecise.I'mgladyoufoundsomuchenjoymentin
thereadingeventhoughthereweremanypartsthatdidn'tfitthewayyoumighthave
hoped.
Manyoftheissuesyouhavewiththestoryhavebeentalkedaboutinearliercomments
andIurgeyoutoreadthemsoyoucanseewhatmyrationalewasformanyofmy
storylinechoices.And,yes,readingthestoryasecondtimecanhelpclarifymanyissues
andgiveyouafullerunderstandingofthestory.It'sprettydenseandthetimejumping
canbehardtofollowonthefirstread.
Ifyoudoreaditagain,Ithinkyou'llseethatIgotogreatlengthstoestablishthatthe
worldofZionisnotjustanothermatriculatedillusion(which,Iagree,wouldgiveita
monodirectionalinterpretation).Ipointoutthatallworldswhethervirtualorseemingly
realorjustasvalidandtangible.MorpheusgoestogreatlengthstoconvinceNeothat
realityisjustaseriesofelectricalimpulsesinterpretedbyyourbrain.ForMorpheusthis
isajustificationtorejectthesimulatedworldoftheMatrix;butformeitisanargument
thatestablishesthevalidityandrealnessoftheMatrixoranyworldthatyouexperience.
SointhissensetheMatrixworld,theZionworld,andtheworldoftheCortexandSuper
Matrixareallequallyrealworldstobetreatedwiththesamerespectandcompassion.
It'salsoimportanttonotethatmostofmystoryhappensoutsideoftheZionandMatrix
worlds;therulesintheworldoftheCortexandtheSuperMatrixaredifferentsonot
everyexplanationthatwasgiveninReloadedandRevolutionsisgoingtopertainto
them.
YourideaofNeoputtingabackupcopyintotheMatrixthewayPageSmithputoneinto
Zionopensupalotofpossibilities.Inaway,though,thatiswhatNeohasdone(albeit
inadvertently)attheendofmystory.Neo'soldgirlfriend,Rachel,haschosentobringto
term,bear,andraiseNeo'ssonwithouthisknowledge.It'skindoflikeabackupcopyhe
doesn'tknowhehas.
Formeit'stoobadyoudidn'tliketheideaoftheextendedfamilies.Personally,Ifound
thattobeoneofthemostintriguingideasaboutmystory.Iguessitiskindofsoapyina
way...butforme,it'sagoodway.IlikethedramaticironyofthingssuchasMorpheus
andLockbeingbrothers,oftheOracletheirmother.Ithoughtitwasastokeofgeniusto
makethefamilialtiesbetweentheArchitect,theMerovingian,PersephoneandTrinity.
TalkaboutFreud'swetdreamofpsychoanalysis.Andperhapsthat'sexactlywhyyou
thinkit'ssoapy.Anyway,Iabsolutelylovethataspectofthestoryandthewayeach
revelationofitslowlyunfolds.Itwasreallyfuntosortout.Perhapswithasecond
readingyou'llseemoretoitthanjustasuperficialsoapyfilmbutratheradeep-cleaning,
sudsy-actionedcarwashofthesoul(that'samouthful!).
Thankssomuchforthecomments,critique,andpraise.Alwaysfoodforthought.PD
Wood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnthonyHDATE:11/21/20087:05:14AM
Respect,ithinkthisisabattlewithwhichicansheathemyswordto...
yourstorywasbithceneitherway...
ifyouhappentohavealltheemailsofthoseuswho'vewritten.pleasedoinformwethe
massesofwhenYOURstorycomesout...
Mybestwishestoyouingettingintohollywood,ireckonyou'reinforthefightofyour
life.
however,intheory,ifyouhaveenoughcashflow,youcancreateyourownindependent
project.
Shouldigetnoemaildowntheroad...
i'msurei'drecognizethenamePDwoodwhenitgetsbig...
keeppushinyourself,hard...
tillnexttime.
peaceandrespect
AnthonyH,
Therespectismutual.AndanyscreenplaythatIfinish,Iwilldefinitelybringtomy
audienceinoneformoranother(hopefullyasacompletedmovie!).Yourkindwords
havegivenmerenewedconfidencethatmynextworkwillhopefullysharesimilartraits
of"bitchenness".
Thanksagainandseeyouinthemovies.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AlanH.DATE:11/28/20083:50:50AM
IreallyloveyourMatrix4:TheSuperMatrixstoryandreallylookingforwardtoseeit
comingtoscreen.Keepupagoodjob!
AlanH.
Iappreciatethegoodword.Stillworkingonthemovieangle.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeDATE:11/30/20084:03:44PM
Thanksforthis,justreaditinonereading,assuggested.
IwillreturntoreadallofthecommentswhenIhavemoretime.
Ihopethismakesittoscreen,Ienjoyeditverymuch.
Joe,
Yourenjoymentismyenjoyment.Thanksforreading.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RandyDATE:12/6/20086:35:20PM
readthisoveratsimplyscripts.comandwhatIhavetosayiswow.Thatwasamazing.
Trulyamazing.Startedreadinganddidn'tmissabeattillIwasdone.Itwasallthere.
Whatahook.IcouldnotimagineMatrix4beinganythingelseafterreadingthis.
RB,
I'mhappytoseethatthescreenplayisgettingsomeattentionoverthereat
simplyscripts.com.
Gettingthehookinearlyinthestorywaskeytogettingpeopletoreadthewholething.
Nicetoknowthattherewasaprizewinningfishattachedtothehookforyou.
Thanksfortheveryencouragingwords.Hopefully,itwillbejustaspowerfulonthebig
screen.Yeah!PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:WhiteSheWolfDATE:12/13/20085:12:59AM
Ijustfinishedreadingyourscreenplayforthefirsttime,andallIcansayiswow.
Ihappeneduponthisquitebyaccident;Iwasrakingthewebforrumorsofanactual
Matrix4,whenIstumbleduponyourscreenplay.Itisintelligent,coherent,andwellwritten...nottomentionthatitfitsinperfectlywiththeseries.
Ireallywouldlovetosaymore,butfranklyI'mstillthroughlyconfusedandneedsome
processingtime:-P
Myonlynegativecommentwouldbethattheendseemedslightlyabrubt...butthat
couldjustbeme.
I'dprettymuchdieofjoyifthiswasmadeintoanactualmovie.
-WolfOut.
WhiteSheWolf,
Comingacrossitunexpectedlyisprobablythenicestwaytoencounterthestory;no
preconceivednotionsorforummemberstottingitasthebest(orworst)thingthey've
everread.Justafreshread.
I'mveryhappytohearthatyouenjoyeditsomuchandthatyouthinkitfitsinwiththe
Trilogy.Yes,theendingisabitabruptandopen-ended.Somepeoplelikeit;mostpeople
thinkitleavestoomuchunsaid.Justabouteveryoneseesanotherepisodeafterit.
Personally,Ilikethatitleavespeoplethinkingaboutwhatcouldhappen.
I'mguessingyourcommentaboutbeingconfusedstemsfromthemanyflashbacksand
timelineshifts.Ifthat'strue,Ithinkaveryquicksecondreadwillclarifythestory
immensely,nowthatyouhavethebasicthreadinyourmind.Ifit'sanotherissuethat's
confusingyou,pleaseletmeknowandI'lltrytoclarify.
Thanksagainforreadingandcommenting.
PDOut
COMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:12/14/20084:04:52AM
ImustsayIenjoyyou'rewritingstyleverymuch,andyouclearlyhavealotofgood
ideasyouareworkingwithinthisscript,butasaMatrixfan,I'mnotsureitreallyfits
verywellwiththerestoftheseries.
Forstarters,itseemslikeyoubacktrackfromallofthethirdfilm'sphilosophical
conclusionsinordertotakeeverythinginanewdirectionsthattheWachowskiBrothers
decidedlyavoidedinRevolutions.ThewholeMatrix-within-a-MatrixideaissomethingI
seemtorecalltheWachowskiBrothersdiscountingasamovethatwouldcheapenthe
weightofeventsthusfar.Ialsodon'tseethephilosophicalimportanceofmakingsucha
move,astheMatrixalreadyshakestheveryfoundationsofourconceptionsofstatic
reality,andIdon'tthinka"SuperMatrix"reallyaddsanythingtothis.Forme,the
Source,alongwiththeentireworldoftheMachines,representssomethingsoinfinitely
complexthatitcouldnotbegintobecapturedbythehumanmind,andthusahumancontrolledMatrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit.IdefinitelywouldliketoseetheSource
exploredfurtherinanewMatrixfilm,butinawaythatfullycommunicatesthesenseof
mysteryandawesuchanexplorationshouldconvey.
AsIsaid,youseemtobeaverytalentedwriter,andIapplaudyouforlookingdeeper
intotheMatrixandwishingforacontinuationoftheseries,justasIdo.However,Idon't
thinkthisistherightdirectionforafourthMatrixfilmtotake.Inadditiontothelarger
philosophicalissueI'veoutlinedabove,therearealsoafewtechnicalissuestoconsider.
Firstofall,theMatrixOnlineisalreadycontinuingthestoryoftheMatrixseriesinan
episodicformat,detailingforitsplayerstheeventsfollowingtheconclusionofthethird
film.Asthisstoryistoldinaninteractiveformat,thegame'splayerstendtofeel
attachedtotheseeventsastheyoccur,andwouldlikelyfeelincrediblycheatedifanew
Matrixfilmjusterasedthewholethingfromafictionalexistenceinconnectionwiththe
largerseries.Assuch,IbelieveafourthMatrixfilmwouldhavetotakeplacewellafter
thethirdfilm(perhapsoveradecade),sothattheeventsofMatrixOnlinecouldbe
incorporatedwithinthecontinuityofthelargerMatrixseries.
Also,thereareafewspecificthingswithinyourscriptthatdon'tseemtofitwithina
largerseriescontinuity.Forone,whenMervmeetstheOracle,Seraphwouldnotbeat
hersideatthatmomentinMatrixhistory.SeraphusedtoworkfortheMerovingian,
whichiswhyhekneweverydetailofClubHel,andwhyit'sguardscalledhim
"Wingless,"referringtoSeraphim,thefallenangelsfromwhichhegetshisname.Early
inyourscript,NeoreferstoapromiseofpiecethattheArchitectmade,butthe
Architectmadenosuchpromise.IntheeventsleadingtothefinalbattleofTheMatrix:
Revolutions,NeospoketoDeusExMachina,thevoiceoftheMachineCity,notthe
Architect.
Additionally,youhaveTrinitybeingawakenedfromtheMatrixinhertwenties,whereit
issuggestedinthefirstfilmthatalmostallRedpillsareawakenedwhentheyarevery
young,andthatonlyforaspecialcircumstance(suchasthereturnoftheOne)willthey
awakenanadult.Ithink,aswell,thatsceneswiththeOraclewouldbechallengingto
pulloff,astheactresswhoplayedtheOraclebeforehertransformationbetween
ReloadedandRevolutions,isunfortunatelynolongerwithus.Itseemstobeimplied
thattheOraclehasnotchangedforminMorpheus'lifetime,asheissurprisedtosee
shedoesnotappearassheoncedidwhenheencountersheratthebeginningofthe
thirdfilm.Itispossiblethatshehaschangedforminbetweenthemeetingwiththe
MerovingianyououtlineandhertimewithMorpheus,buttheaudiencemightbe
confusedbytwoactressesplayingonecharacterinthepastandpresent.Speakingof,
howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceasasinglehuman
beingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?
Speaking,onceagain,ofthescript'scentralconceptoftheSuperMatrix,I'mthinkingit
maynotbethemostmarketableconcept.Youmayhavehadinmindconceptsof
Aurobindo'sSupermindorNeitzche'sSuperman,butitmay,inthetrailers,comeacross
morelikeSuperMarioBrothers.
Thatsaid,Ilovealotaboutthescript.Thesurrealistpassagesarefascinating,andyou've
certainlymasteredtheartofthechronologyshift.Thestoryofthefreedom-fighter
androids(andthe"future"Earthinwhichtheylive)isverycompelling,andyou'veadded
abrillianttouchofthesurreal,aswell,totheirarchitectureandmovement.Itwouldbe
cooltoseetheseelementsexploredinanotherscript,possiblyunconnectedwithMatrix
lore.
(Continuedfrompreviousmessage.)
Additionally,youhaveTrinitybeingawakenedfromtheMatrixinhertwenties,whereit
issuggestedinthefirstfilmthatalmostallRedpillsareawakenedwhentheyarevery
young,andthatonlyforaspecialcircumstance(suchasthereturnoftheOne)willthey
awakenanadult.Ithink,aswell,thatsceneswiththeOraclewouldbechallengingto
pulloff,astheactresswhoplayedtheOraclebeforehertransformationbetween
ReloadedandRevolutions,isunfortunatelynolongerwithus.Itseemstobeimplied
thattheOraclehasnotchangedforminMorpheus'lifetime,asheissurprisedtosee
shedoesnotappearassheoncedidwhenheencountersheratthebeginningofthe
thirdfilm.Itispossiblethatshehaschangedforminbetweenthemeetingwiththe
MerovingianyououtlineandhertimewithMorpheus,buttheaudiencemightbe
confusedbytwoactressesplayingonecharacterinthepastandpresent.Speakingof,
howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceasasinglehuman
beingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?
Speaking,onceagain,ofthescript'scentralconceptoftheSuperMatrix,I'mthinkingit
maynotbethemostmarketableconcept.Youmayhavehadinmindconceptsof
Aurobindo'sSupermindorNeitzche'sSuperman,butitmay,inthetrailers,comeacross
morelikeSuperMarioPageBrothers.
Thatsaid,Ilovealotaboutthescript.Thesurrealistpassagesarefascinating,andyou've
certainlymasteredtheartofthechronologyshift.Thestoryofthefreedom-fighter
androids(andthe"future"Earthinwhichtheylive)isverycompelling,andyou'veadded
abrillianttouchofthesurreal,aswell,totheirarchitectureandmovement.Itwouldbe
cooltoseetheseelementsexploredinanotherscript,possiblyunconnectedwithMatrix
lore.
iFiction,
SonicetohearyourcommentsandappreciationoftheworkI'veputintothis.The
surrealpassageswereindeedalotoffun.Thechronologywasabitch.Ihadtomapthe
wholethingoutonatimelineandkeepitnexttomeatalltimeswhilewriting.Greatfun
tofinallyhaveallthechronologicaljigsawpiecesfinallyfittogether,though.Andthe
androidswerecompellingforsure.Iwouldhavelikedtohavemorepagesforthem.
Icanseeyou'vereallydigestedthescriptcompletelyconsideringthedepthand
thoroughnessofyourinsights.AndonthewholeIagreewith(oratleastunderstandthe
logicbehind)mostofyourconcerns.
AsfarastheWachowskiBrothersintentionsareconcerned,Idon'trecallthemhaving
commentedspecificallyonthenotionofaMatrix-within-a-Matrixorthecheapening
effectthatitmighthaveontheTrilogy.Perhapsyoucoulddirectmetothesourceof
thatinformationasIwouldbeveryinterestedinreadingit.
IthinkyourpointsabouttheMatrixOnlinehavingalreadyprogressedthestoryandthe
consequentpossibilityofmystoryunderminingthatprogressionisvalidwithrespectto
hardcoreMatrixfans.I'mnotsure,however,thatthesoftcore(?)Matrixfanswouldbe
asputoffbyit.Hardtoknow.Whethertheotherkeyelementsofmystoryare
challengingandexcitingenoughforthehardcorefanstobewillingtooverlookmy
exclusionoftheMatrixOnline'sdevelopmentisalsohardtosay.Hopefully,theywillbe.
Youmentionthat"theSource,alongwiththeentireworldoftheMachines,represents
somethingsoinfinitelycomplexthatitcouldnotbegintobecapturedbythehuman
mind,andthusahuman-controlledMatrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit".Fromthe
perspectiveofourcurrenttechnology,Iwouldagreewithyouthat"ahuman-controlled
Matrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit",butmystorytakesplace240yearsfromnow(AD
2249).I'mguessingthattechnologywillhaveprogressedquitefarbythenandperhaps
wewillhavethecapacitiesItalkabout.Again,aleapofimagination.
TheincorporationofaMatrix-within-a-Matrixwasnotsomuchadeviceusedtocreate
surpriseasitwastointroduceanuancedandinterconnectedsubplot.Thebattleof
humansoverandroidswasoneofthosesubplots.Formetheideaofthehumansbeing
incontrolofsmartmachines(inessencesubjugatingthemforhumanexploitation)isa
reversalofthehuman/machinedynamicintheTrilogy.Suddenly,wefeelaweirdsortof
supportfortheunderdogandroid36s(we'realmostrootingforthemachines!),fighting
fortheirverysurvivalandindependenceagainstthe(tyrannical?)humans.Andthen
there'sthefamilyrelationships.Ithoughtthisreallyaddeddepthtothewholestory.
Here'swhatIwroteinanearliercomment:"Ifoundthefamilyrelationshipstobeone
ofthemostintriguingideasaboutmystory.Ilikethedramaticironyofthingssuchas
MorpheusandLockbeingbrothers,oftheOracletheirmother.Ithoughtitwasastoke
ofgeniustomakethefamilialtiesbetweentheArchitect,theMerovingian,Persephone
andTrinity.Iabsolutelylovethataspectofthestoryandthewayeachrevelationofit
slowlyunfolds.Itwasreallyfuntosortout."
Onthetechnicalsidetherearedefinitelysometrickyissues.Youareoneofthefirstto
realize(oratleastpointout)thatTrinityisawakenedfromhermachinepodlaterthanis
consideredsafeorideal.Thiswaskindofanecessarycompromisetomakemystory
work,butIdon'tthinkit'scompletelycontradictorytothefirstfilm.Morpheusstates
that"thereisarulethatwedonotfreeamindonceitreachesacertainage",buthe
doesbraketheruletoawakenNeoanditissuccessful.Ialsogivemydecisionalittle
moreauthoritybyhavingtheOracledirectedMorpheustofreeTrinity,soanargument
couldbemadethatfreeingTrinitywasanintegralpartoffulfillingtheprophecydespite
therisks.Astretch,Iadmit,butnotcompletelyunfathomable.Akeeneye,pickingthat
oneup!
ThefeasibilityofOraclescenesareabitofachallenge,too,Iagree.Butnotimpossible
toremedy.Ifyou'llnotice,there'sreallyonlyonepointinmystorywheretheoriginal
actress(whohaspassedaway)mightbeexpectedtoappear.Thisisinthebeginningof
thescriptwhere,rightafterNeoencountershisoldgirlfriend,Rachel,heiscalledintoan
apartmentbytheOraclewhoeventuallyhelpshimliedownbecauseheisconsumedby
tiredness(page13).Herotherappearancesareeitherinflashbacks,whichwould
requireanOracleofamuchyoungerage(whocouldbeplayedbyadifferentyoung
actress),orincurrentsceneswhichwouldbeplayedbythewomanwhoreplacedthe
originalOracleinthethirdepisode.Abittricky,butnotimpossible.Again,though,keen
eye.
Youalsosay,"...howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceas
asinglehumanbeingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?".Iattributeherchangein
appearanceinsidetheMatrixtomedicalprocedures(notspecifiedbutperhapsbrain
surgery?)sheisundergoingwhileintherealworld.Ifyou'lllookbackatpage95ofthe
screenplay,you'llseethattheArchitectsaystotheOracle,"How'reyoufeelingafter
yourlastmedicalprocedure?".Thiswasahintatwhatmighthavecausedhertochange.
Formespecifically,herphysicaltransformationisaconsequenceofneuralchangesin
herbrain(duetohermedicalprocedures)thatalterthewaytheMatrix(SuperMatrix)
manifestsher.Toomuchofastretch?
And,yes,thename.Sotrue.SuperMarioBrothers.Thenamehasgottensomebad
pressforjustthereasonsyou'veunderlined.The"super"partofthetitlewassupposed
torefertothe"ontopof,above,orover"meaningoftheword"super",notthe
"powerful,awesome"meaningoftheword.Sothenamemayhavetochange.Anearlier
versionofthescriptwentbyMatrix:Rememory.Whatdoyouthinkofthattitle?
Itwouldbenicetotakesomeoftheelementsofthisstoryandputthemintooneofmy
own.Theyare,however,socloselyalignedwiththeMatrixstory,Idon'tknowhowwell
theywouldmaketheleap.Idolovesci-fiandaction,somaybeI'lldoitsomeday.
Anyway,thanksforyourpenetratinganalysisofthepartsthatdon'tworksowellandfor
youreffusiveappreciationforthepartsthatdo.
Writeanytime.PDWood
TheSource,tome,bringstomindconceptionsoftheOver-soul,thesourceofall
creativityintheuniverse,andthusIfindithardtoimaginethatevenseveralhundred
yearsoftechnologicaldevelopmentwouldmanagetoencapsulatethatkindofpower(if
itisonlyhumansthataredevelopingthetechnologyandnotsomesortofArtificially
IntelligentSingularity,representedintheMatrixseriesbytheMachines).InTheMatrix:
Revolutions,NeodiscoverstheMachinesaremadeoflightandsaystoTrinity,"Iwish
youcouldseethemasIseethem."TheirSourceisabrilliantlyencapsulatedsourceof
all.ItisSpirititself.Idon'tseehumanseverbeingabletoachievethisontheirown,
especiallyasanartificeofwar.ThroughtheseeminglyinfinitecomplexityofMatrix,
humansaresubsumedintothelargerwholeoftheMachinemind,justascellscompose
abody.TheWarthatthehumanscontinuetofightsuggesttheyarepartofabodythat
isnotatpeace.Thisofcourse,isjustmyinterpretationofthefilms,andmightnot
reflecttheWachowskiBrothers'views,butitisaviewinfluencedand/orechoedbythe
officialphilosophercommentariesontheUltimateMatrixCollection.
Unfortunately,Ican'tfindtheMatrix-withina-MatrixcommentsIwastalkingabout.It
wasprobablysomethingsecond-handvoicedbyamemberofthefilm'screw.
Idid,however,remembersomethingelseabouttheevidenceofMerv'srelationshipto
Seraph.WhentheMerovingianseesSeraphintheHelClub,hesays"TheProdigalChild
returns,"andalsoreferstohimas"Judas,"suggestingheusedtoworkforthe
Merovingianandbetrayedhim.Soitdoesn'tmakesincethatSeraphworksforthe
OraclebeforeMervmeetshim.
iFiction,
Topostulatetheadvancesofthenext250yearsistricky.Ifsomeestimatesareright,
therewillbeanexponentialleapintechnology.EventheAnimatrixseriesshowsgreat
leapsinmachineroboticsandartificialintelligence,culminatingintheriseofthe
machineculture.Perhapsitisn'ttoofarremoved,then,tosuggestthathumanscould
createacentralizedsystemofmachinecontrolembodiedinavirtualworld.Onthe
otherhand50yearsagopeoplewerepredictingthatintheyear2000humanswouldbe
commutinginpersonalflyingspacevehiclesandeveryhomewouldhaverobotservants
(alaTheJetsons).Somuchforthatprediction.
It'sprobablytruethatsuchadvancedstateswouldbeimprobableachievementsofthe
humanraceinthenextfewhundredyears.Ialsoagreethatsuchachievementswould
morelikelybethepurviewofartificiallyintelligentmachines,onesofthehighestpurity,
devoidofpsychologicaloremotionalentanglements.AndI'mguessingthatitistothis
kindofmachineevolutionthatmostphilosophers(commentingontheMatrixstory)are
obliquelyreferring.
WithrespecttotheMerv/Seraphrelationship,Iagainapplaudyourkeeneye.Exactly
whatMervmeansby"theprodigalchildreturns"and"Judas"areupforinterpretation,
butyourinterpretationseemsprettygood.UnlessIcancomeupwithsomegreat
rationale,ImayhavegivetheOracleadifferentassistant.
Anyotherproblemsthatyoucanpointoutarealwaysappreciated.It'ssometimeshard
toseetheforestthroughthetrees.
Thanksagain.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:vikasDATE:12/30/20087:00:34AM
ifindthestoryboring-completecrap.iamsurenoonecanconnecttothestory.tryto
makethestorymorelogicalthangoingwithyouremotions.
don'twanttodiscourageyoujustbeinghonest.
vikas,
Ihavenoqualmsifyoufindthestoryboring;that'syoursubjectivereactionandyou're
entitledtoit.Buttojustobjectivelylabelthestory"completecrap"withoutanyspecific
qualifierstellsmenothingabouthowyouthinkitcanbemadelessboring,less
"crappy".Italsoassumesthateveryonewillhavethesamereactionasyours.Iaskyou,
honestly;wasitreallycompletecraporwasitjustpartialcrap?And,ifjustpartially
crappy,wheremightthosepartiallycrappypartsreside?Perhapsyoucouldelaborate
withspecificexamples.
Strangelyenough,yourcertaintythat"noonecanconnecttothestory"isundermined
bythefactthatroughly75%ofreaderswho'veleftcommentsbeforeyoueitherlikedor
lovedthestory.Thatyouwereunabletoconnectwiththestory,Iunderstandand
accept;tosaythat"noonecan'tconnect"issimplyamatterofnotpayingattention.
"Trytomakethestorymorelogicalthangoingwithyouremotions"isaveryhard
commenttodecipher.Areyoutalkingaboutcharacterdevelopment,timestructure,
plotting,alloftheabove?Anycommentsaboutspecificscenes,charactersorplot
structurewouldbemorehelpful.
Idon'tmindyourhonesty;butifyourintentionreallywasnotto"discourageme",
labelingthestory"completecrap"withnospecificexamplesonwaystoimproveitwas
notasuccessfulwaytoachieveyourobjective.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JohnnyVDATE:1/3/20098:43:49PM
MAN!ThissoundsREALLYGREAT!!IsitreallyComing??HowfarisitalongandwillMrK
ReevesbeplayingtheStar??Isurehopeso,heisthebestforthepart!!
Pleaseletmeknowaboutanydevelopmentsandwhenthefilmingwillstart!!
CAN"TWAIT!!!OHYEAH!!!!!
YAAAAAAAHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
:)HappyNewYear!
JV
COMMENT:AUTHOR:LukeDATE:1/4/20097:10:55PM
Absolutelylovedthescript!WhenIfirstrandomlysawthissiteandthought,oh
someonewroteascreenplayformatrix4,Iwaslike"ahhprobablywontliveuptomy
expectations"butasIcarriedonreadingit,Iwasmostcertainlyhookedalmost
instantly.
Ithoughtitcouldn'tbeagoodmovie,maybejustnicefillerforinformation,butthenit
hitaturningpointanditgotreallygoodandIjustspentthelast2hourshooked,
readingthisscriptandlovingeverymoment!buthatingthefactyouendedit!
Thankyouforwritingthisawesomescreenplay/scriptanyway,andtobeperfectly
honest,iftheydidmakeamatrix4anditdidn'tusethisscript,i'dbesadlydisappointed.
:(
Butit'sstillAwesome,welldonedude!:D
JV,
Ishareyourenthusiasmforaforthepisodebutmystoryisjustafanfiction;itisnotan
officialscreenplay.I'mgladyoulikedthestoryandlet'sjusthopeHollywoodshows
someinterestatsomepoint.
Thanks,PDWood
Luke,
Ithinkyoucameacrossitinthebestway,notexpectingmuch,thengettingsuckedinto
it.Verynicetohearyourcompliments.Gladyouenjoyeditsomuch.Let'shopeithits
thebigscreensomeday.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CamDATE:1/8/200912:55:00PM
Okay,I'llstartthisbysayingthatitwasagreatstory.Howeveritlackedsubstanceand
therewerethemesthatwerereminiscentofothersci-fifilmsthatI'veseen.For
example,TheSourcecontrollingmachinesandevolvingovertimeisverymuchlike
V.I.K.I.inI,Robot.
Therewereelementstothestorythatremainedabitvague,whathappenedtoSmith?
whatofMorpheus,NiobeandZion?,andcertaincharacterswerecompletelyuselessto
thestorytellingprocess.The'Android36's'could'vebeenleftoutcompletelyascould
RachaelandNeo'sson.
Ididn'tsomuchmindtheideaofaSuperMatrixandTheSource,butthebuilding
processandconstantflashbacksmadeitkindoftediousanddrawnout.Thewhole
processcouldâ€vebeencoveredinonevoiceoveredflashback/montage,likewhen
MorpheusdescribeswhatTheMatrixistoNeoforthefirsttime,thusfreeingupmore
roomtodevelopthemesandplotelementsandmakeitlessconvoluted.
However,thehistorybehindtheMerovigianandPersephonewasquiteinteresting,but
wassomewhatruinedbythefactthatTrinitywastheirdaughter,asdidthefactthat
theyweresupposedlysuperpowered,iftheyhadthesamepowersasNeoorthe
agents,whydidnâ€ttheMerovigianfightNeohimself?
Also,insteadofbeingTheArchitectâ€sson,theMerovigiancouldâ€vebeenhispartner
inmakingthiscontrolledworld,andthusaclosefriendthathasliterallybeenconsumed
byhisworkandPersephone,notwantingtobewithoutherlove,putherselfintothe
matrixsothattheycouldbetogetherandthenthewholethemgrowingapartthing
couldbeametaphorthatabsolutepowercorruptseventhepurestlove.
ThelackoffightscenesreallytookawayfromthefeelofitasbeingpartofTheMatrix
world,asdidthefactthatNeowasn'tinvolvedinanyofthem.Thewholepointofthe
matrixfilmswastotellthestoryofNeobeingtheone,thequesttosaveZionfromthe
machinethreatandtheultimategoaloffreedomfromthematrixforallhumanity.
Cam,
Ireallyappreciateyourcomplimentthatthestorywasgreat.AndIunderstandhow,at
thesametime,manyelementsmayhavebeendisappointing.PerhapsifIexplainmy
intentionwiththisstory,itmightmakemoresenseorfitinbetterwiththewholeMatrix
concept.
AlthoughitbeginsdirectlywheretheMatrixRevolutionsended,thisstoryissupposed
tobekindofseparatefromtheTrilogy.Formethisapproachhelpspreservetheoriginal
TrilogyconceptwhilealsoallowingmetojumpoutoftheMatrixworldintoawhole
newworldandconcept.Thestoryintroducesthisnewworldwhileatthesametime
explainingwhatleduptothefirstMatrixstory.
TheTrilogyfocusedonNeo'sawakening,ascenttopower,andhissalvationofZion;my
storyisprimarilyfocusedonNeo'sreawakeninginanothernewworld,hisreunionwith
Trinity,andhisdiscoveryofinnerpeaceandhisplaceinexistence.InthisrespectNeois
removedfromhisrollasthecrusadingkung-fuwarrior.Iknowmanypeoplewillbe
lookingfortheNeoofthepast,butIfeltthathisrollasawarriorhadalreadybeen
playedoutprettysuccessfullyintheTrilogy.So,you'reright,thisstorydefinitelyhasa
differentflavorfromtheTrilogy.
Thatmanyelementsarereminiscentofothersci-fistoriesistrue.Peoplehavemade
comparisonstotheTerminator,theThirteenthFloor,IRobot,BladeRunner,StarTrek
episodesandeven2001:ASpaceOdyssey.It'shardnottooverlapwiththeseconcepts
astheyare,tosomedegree,universalandindicativeofthefuture.Eventhestoriesthat
minehavebeencomparedtohaveoftenalsoborrowedfromorparalleledearliersci-fi
storiesbeforethem.It'skindofthenatureofthebeastabit.
And,yes,therearemanyelementsofthestorythatareabitvague;myintentionto
somedegreewastoleavethreadsofthestoryopentointerpretation.Sometimesa
secondreadingwillclarifysomeelements,asthethestoryisdensewithplacechanges
andtimelines.
Ithinkyoumightberightaboutcondensingmuchoftheexplanationsintoatighter,
singlediatribe(likewhenMorpheustellsNeoabouttheMatrix).Thatwouldrequire
quitearework,though.PerhapsI'lldoitafterI'vefinishedmyownoriginalscreenplay.
The"Neo,Rachel,Neo'sson"thing...yep,thatonethrowsalotofpeople.Probably
shouldberemoved.
Whatsurprisedmewasthatyouthoughttheandroid36threadwaswithoutmerit.I
personallythoughtthatwasoneofthemostinterestingparts.It'sareversaloftheroles
playedoutintheTrilogy.Now,theandroidmachines,imbuedwithemotionand
feelings,areontherun,doingeverythingtheycantofreetheirmachinebrethren.I
thoughtthatwasanicetwistanddefinitelyinkeepingwiththeMatrixmindset.
IwasalsosurprisedthatyouhadissueswiththeMerovingian,Persephone,Architect,
Trinityfamilialconnection;Ireallythoughtthatwasastrokeofgeniusandoneofthe
mostintriguingpartsofthestory.Ithoughttheseadditionsgavemuchmoredepthtoall
thecharactersandmadethemeaningbehindthewholeMatrixstorythatmuchmore
mind-bending.Noteveryone'scupoftea,Isuppose.
Ihopetheseinsightsintomyrationaleformanyofthestoryideasallowyoutobemore
abletoappreciateit.And,asalways,asecondreadingcanrevealmanyconnectionsand
layersthataremissedonthefirstround.Thanksagainforyourhonestfeedback.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RandyDATE:1/14/20098:30:53PM
Terrific.Itwasverycaptivatingandengaging.Youdidagreatjobhere.IreallyfeltIwas
backintheMatrixuniversealongwiththemysteriesandintrigueitbringswithit.
Randy,
Nicetohearyourthoughts.PuttingyoubackintheMatrixuniversewasmyintention.
GladIsucceeded.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SlyguyDATE:1/30/20091:42:26AM
Looksamazing,Idon'tseewhyanyonewouldwanttoturnthisdown.Ican'twaittosee
it.
Yes...yes.
Well,Ican'treallyarguewithyouonthisone.Let'shopeitcomestopass...soon.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TbDATE:1/30/20097:24:14AM
IreadtheSuperMatrixintheSpringandforgottocommentandaskquestions/
clarificationsbackthenwhenitwasstillfreshinmind.Eitherway,fromwhati
rememberthescriptwasfrickenOUTSTANDING!ItwasthetrueMatrix:Revelations
thattheBrothersshouldhavemade!
I'vetoldmanypeoplethatifthisdoesn'tgetmadeintoamovie(atleastanAnime
movie)thenit'sjustunacceptable.Without#4onscreenthereisnobridgeorenough
sensetobemadeofthelast2movies.Andsincesomanypeoplehatedthelasttwo,
yourmovieispossiblytheonlywaytogetthemtolovetheseries.
Ithinkthefirsttimeicheckedthiswebsiteout,youwerestilllookingforanagentto
givethescriptto,butmaybei'mwrong.
I'lltellyathisthough,ifyourbabyisnotalreadyinproductionandifilivednear
Hollywood,i'ddefinitelykicksomeDirectors'doorsdowntogetthissuckerin
productionASAP!
Excellentworkmyman!
Tb,Thanksforthehighpraise.
You'reright,Iwas(andstillam)tryingtofindaHollywoodconnection.It'stoughgoing,
though;fewpeoplewanttotouchaMatrixstorythatwasn'twritten(orauthorizedby)
theWachowskibrothers.ButI'llkeeppushing.Youjustneverknowwhatcanhappen.
Seeya,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ViljaDATE:2/14/20099:48:45PM
Ialsoreadtheentirescriptandlikeditalot.Ithookedrightfromthestartandasitwent
on,thereweremanyanswersforearlierquestions,makingnewquestionbasedon
previous.Thewholepicturealsogotclearer.
I'mabigMatrixfan&thiswasapleasuretoread.AndthenameSuperMatrixfits
perfectly!
Vilja,
Alwaysapleasuretohearanicereview;I'mgladitbroughtyousuchenjoyment.
Thanksforreading.
PDWood
Hellox-blad,
itriedtotranslatethisaswellasIcould;hopeit'sprettyclose.
"Hello!!!Idon'tknowwhy!!!
ThelineageoftheMatrixaswellasmanyothersshouldnotbephasedout.TheTrilogy
shouldcontinue;NeoandTrinitymustnotdie.AndMorpheusstillhastomakeachoice.
Itisahugecinematographicundertakingtomakeanewfilm,buttheMatrixisaseries
thatthepublicenjoys.
IwonderifNeoandTrinitymightbecomehumanmachines,beingintwostatesof
existence.TherearesuggestionsofthisinthelastscenesofMatrixRevolutions.It'smy
opinionthatthisistrue.
x-blad"
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DonB.DATE:2/20/20098:33:47PM
Tostartoff,Igenerallythinktheconceptthatyouhaveexpressedisreallygood,no
doubtaboutthat.Sowelldonefortakingtheinitiativetopresentexplanationsto
questionsthatmanyofusMatrixobsessivescontinuetoexplore.
Atthesametime,IdofeelthattheMatrixinaMatrixideaisacommonone,sothe
generalconceptthatyouhaveportrayedcertainlydoeshaveamainstreamappeal,if
thatâ€sthecorrectword,butmeantinacomplimentingmanner.
Specifically,therearestructuralareastothestorythatIfeelunderminethecontent
though.Theflashbacksreallyneedtobecompletedanddonewithinthefirstquarterto
thefirstthirdofthestory.Perhapsevenshortentheflashbacksandemphasisethemain
areas.Ifyoucansortthisstructuralissueout,thenmuchmorecanbebuiltontothe
presenttimeline.
Unlessofcourseyoupreferittheotherwayaround,whichiscreatingmoreofa
prequel?Eitherwaysomethinghastobedone.Ipersonallypreferasequeltoaprequel.
Withthisstructuralissue,Ifindthestorybeginstodraginthelasthalftolastthird.The
endingreallyleftmefeelingletdown.Ithinkitwouldhavebeenmoreeffectiveifthe
endingofthestory,thewayyouhaveit,wasatapointinthestorythatislocatedtwo
thirdsintothestory.
Ifthisstoryisgoingtobetrulystrengthened,onehastoadmitthatthefinalthirdofthe
storyisabsentatthemoment.So,itwouldbegreatifyoucouldcarryontappinginto
thosecreativejuicesandpresentanendingthatismoreworthyofthewickedconcept
thatyouareworkingwith.
Ohyeah,nottonagtoomuch,butIthinkthatalotofvaluablespaceiswastedby
drawingoutthesentimentalstuffbetweenNeoandTrinity.Forsuretheirrelationshipis
special,butreiteratingitisaredundancy.
Otherwise,onceagain,coolplotingeneral.Ihardlyreadfictionofanykind,Ionlyread
geekynon-fictionstuff,butyourstorykeptmeinterestedenoughtoreadthroughthe
wholethingIdontmeanthatinsomeegotistical,selfrighteousmanner.AllImeanis
thatyourideaisintriguing,so,ummAwesome!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:jasonDATE:2/23/200911:10:25PM
YouarethebiggestloserIhaveeverseen.MaybeIwillwriteaboutwhathappened
afterLeathelWeapon4.OrwhatForrestGump'sretirementislike.Itisamoviethatwas
awesomebecauseithadagreatstoryandending.Putthismucheffortinyourownlife
andyouwillrealizewhatIamtalkingabout.LeaveRobocopandMrs.Doubtfirealone.
Dork.
DonB.
Thanksforthepraiseandcritique.
Iagree,thestorydoesdragtowardstheendandthat'sunfortunatesincemost
Hollywoodepicsareexpectedtohaveexplosiveendings.Asyousay,thesentimental
Neo/Trinitypartsofthestorymaybeabitredundant;theyalsolackrealexcitement.
PerhapsifIcouldshortenthemandalsoperkthemupabit.
Yourpointaboutendingthestoryabouttwothirdsofthewayinmightactuallybethe
bestsolution;thatwouldalsoleavemoreroomtoexpandontheearlierideaswhich
definitelyhaveroomtogrow.
I'vebeenbusywritinganoriginalscreenplayofmyown,soI'mnotsurewhenI'llget
backtotheMatrixstory,butatthispoint,afterhavingreadsomanyinsightfulandindepthcomments,IthinkIcoulddoanotherrewritethatwouldreallybegreat.We'llsee
howitgoes.
Idogetgreatsatisfactionfromhearingspecificcommentslikeyours,boththepositive
andconstructivepoints.Andthatthestorypulledyouallthewaythrougheveninspite
ofyour"fictionfriction"thrillsmetonoend.
Thanksagain,PDWood
jason,
Formethisstorywasjustafunexerciseinscreenwriting,onethatIdecidedtoshare
withMatrixfans.I'msurprisedthatitleadsyoutocallme"thebiggestloseryouhave
everseen".Lotsofpeoplebuildonotherpeople'swork;it'susuallyasignofadmiration
andrespect.AndsinceInotmakingfunoforridiculingthestory,Ireallydon'tseeany
harminextendingit.Sorryitrubsyouthewrongway;ifyouhadtakenthetimetoread
it,Ithinkyoumighthavefounditinteresting.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DarrenDATE:2/26/200911:07:44PM
Hey,
FirstofallWOW!.IthinkthatitisimpossibletomakeabetterMatrix4thanthis.I
alwaysthoughtofhowitwouldbebutneverimagineditlikethis.Itthebestwaythatit
couldbecontinued.
Ihavejustsomequestions...
1.Therewasn'tanyflashbackthatshowedthefinaldestruction(ifitoccured)ofthe36s.
Isthereareason?
2.WhatisthemeaningofthestandingreflectionwhileNeoisshavinginfrontofthe
mirror(pg118ontop)?
3.TheSmith'sstoryseemsincompleteaterhestartedtodestructtomachinecity.Isthis
doneforpurposefora5thMatrixmovie?
Apartfromthat,Ireallywishthatthisscriptismadeamovie.Doyouhaveanyideaif
someoneisthinkingofmakingitamovie?
Darren,
It'snicetoknowthatmystoryexceededyourvisionofwhatafourthMatrixcould.
Mystorywasmeanttobeopen-ended;manypeopleareputoffbythis.Resolutionis
kingtomostpeople(andtoHollywood).IguessIfallshortinthatarea.Insomecases,I
likeastorythatdoesn'tanswereverything;thisishowIleftthisstory.
Ilovethenotionthattheandroid36sfightonindefinitelyfortheirfreedom.
IalsolovethenotionofSmithrisingfromtheashestochallengethemachinesand
humansagain.
IhavenoplansforaMatrix5,buttheselooseendscertainlyleaveroomforafifth
episode(atleastinourheads,ifnotonthebigscreen).
Neo'sstandingreflection(pg118)issupposedtosuggestthattherearemore,perhaps
infiniteNeosinother,perhapsinfinitelayersofexistence.TomeNeoislikeaportalto
thoseotherlayers.Aswehaveseen,hehasbeengiftedwiththeabilitytogobeyond
theMatrixandbeyondtheSuperMatrix;hereIsuggesthehastheabilitytogofurther.
Chewystuff,indeed.Hopethatanswerssomeofyourquestions.Thanksforthegood
words.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MikeDATE:3/14/200912:47:14PM
idolikeyourstory.
Buttheonlyproblemthatihadwithitwouldbealloftheflashbacksinalltheother
movies,theirweren'tany.Andthroughyourstory,youhadalot.Nowdon'tgetthe
wrongideafromthisbecausetheflashbacksdidgivealotofthestory;butithinkit
wouldbebetterifyoudidthatatthebeginninginsteadofinthemiddle,justtogive
peopleageneralideaaboutwhatisgoingon.
ThewholethingabouttheSuperMatrixsurprisedme;iwouldn'thavethoughtaboutit,
butiwasalwayswondering.Ilikehowyoubroughtthecharactersbackthewayudid.
Butalsothewayyouendeditleftitopenforyetanotherepisode,whichucouldfinish
completelybeforeitgetsdraggedontoolong.
Idohaveanotherthingtoaskthough;inthelastMatrixtheSmithAgenttookoverthe
Oracle'sbodyoratleastithoughthedid.Wouldn'tthatmeanthathehascontrolofher
intherealworldalso?Justaquestion.
ifyouwouldlikeanyideas,iwouldhavesome;ireallydolikeyourstory.Itjustneedsa
coupleoffixes.
Mike,
Theflashbacksareabithardtofollowinascreenplayformat;Ithinktheywouldcome
overmuchclearerinamoviewithlotsofvisualcuestokeepthewatcheroriented.
TheSmithAgentdoestakeovertheOracle'sbodyinthelastmovie,besheisthenlater
restoredtoherformerstatusattheendofthemovie.Isuppose,though,thatyou
wouldbecorrect;AgentSmithwouldhavecontrolofherforthatperiodoftime.
Iappreciateyourcommentsandamgladyouenjoyedthestory.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeDATE:3/15/200912:52:32AM
Allihavetosayisthisisaworkofart.Ilovetheywayyouplayedoffoftheoriginalsand
thewayyoumovedthestoryintoanewdirection.Ilovethewayyoumadethethe
storyoppositeintherealworld,howthemachinesaretryingtodothesameasNeoin
theMatrix.Iguesswhati'msayingisilovedeverypage.Ihopeitmakesittothebig
screen,goodluck.
Joe,
Oh,youflattermetoomuch....butI'lltakeitanyway.That'sbyfaroneofthenicest
commentsI'veeverreceived.Warmsmyheart.
Ilovetheverysameaspectsofthestorythatyoulove.Playingoffoftheoriginal
charactersandpushingthestoryinanewdirectionwasexhilarating.Andreversingthe
rolesoftheoppressorandoppressedinthedifferentworldsdefinitelyaddedanew
dimensiontotheconflictandforcesonetoseethatnoconflictisone-sided.
Itreallywouldbefuntoseethisasamovie.Myfingersarestillcrossed.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisUKDATE:3/17/20095:11:53AM
Justreadthefirst10pages,itsprettygood,whowrotethis,isthiscomingoutinfilm?
weneedMATRIX4!
Chris,
Gladyouarelikingit.
I,PDWood,wroteit.
Notcurrentlyfilmingit.
Yes,aMatrix4,coolwouldbeit.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HasanDATE:3/20/200910:05:50PM
heymanreadyourscript,ididntseethe3moviesfullybutilikedyourscriptalot..im
alsoawirterandwritingthecontinuationofDragonballGT.Ihopeyouheardofthat.
justwouldliketoknowifyoucontactedanyofficialstomakethismoviehapppen???
Hasan,
IknowlittleaboutDragonballGtexceptthatit'sverypopularandIthinkIheardit's
goingtobecomingoutasamoviesoon.Soundslikeafunseriestofollowupon.good
luckwithit.
Igladyouenjoyedmystory.I'vetriedtogetittothebigpeopleinHollywoodbutit's
roughgoing.Butanythingcouldhappen,anytime,Isuppose.Youneverknow.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:adamDATE:3/23/20092:47:59AM
youknowhowtheysay,"ifyoucan'tthinkofanythinggoodtosay,don'tsayanything"?
Mycommentisasfollows:
COMMENT:AUTHOR:jnDATE:3/27/20097:58:36PM
HiPD!
Greatscript!Ithasenormouspotentialtobedevelopedintoafullscreenplay.Ihave
readtheothercomments,especiallysuggestingaprequelforflashbacks.Whydon'tyou
makeone?Ithinkit'saniceideatohaveaprequelsimilartoStarWars(Phantom
Menace,AttackoftheClones,RevengeoftheSith)orBatmanseries(BatmanBegins,
theDarkNight),butyouneedtodevelopthestoriessolidly.Anyway,ifitcan'tbe
pushedforthebigscreen,I'llbewaitingforthisinanimeorcomics.Keepondreaming,
keeponwriting,dude!
jn,
Iappreciatethethoughts.Andthe"greatscript"compliment.
I'monanoriginalscreenplayofmineownrightnow;andunless/untilIgetsomeinterest
fromtheHollywoodcrowd(eventheslightestbit),Iprobablywon'tdoanymoreMatrix
stories.IloveddoingtheSuperMatrix,butrightnowI'mjustoutoftheloop.But
anythingcanhappen.Istilldefinitelyhavemyfingerscrossed.Andancomic/anime
thingwouldcertainlybeverycool.
Thanksfordroppingin.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JarredDATE:4/7/200910:25:05AM
Honestly,IfindtheideaofanotherMatrixridiculous.
Whatwasthepointoftheconflictoftheoriginalmoviesiftherewasjustanother
matrix?
Whycouldn'tNeoflyormanipulatetherulesofthesupermatrixintheoriginals?See
thecodeofsupermatrix?
Personally,Ithinkifthiswasreleasedasamovie,criticswouldhateit.Ithinkthetrilogy
neednotcontinuewithsomeSupermatrixthing.Itrenderstheconflictbetweenthe
humansandrobotsintheoriginalscompletelypointless.
Jarred,
I'vehadotherpeoplevoiceyoursameopinion.Someofthosepeoplehavegoneonto
readthescreenplay,othershavenot.Mostwho'vegoneontoreadit,haveendedup
likingwhereItookthestory.Personally,Ithinkyoushouldaleastreadthefirst30pages
andseeifitgrabsyou.
ThesuccessofafourthMatrixreallydependsonthequalityandfreshnessofthestory;
ifit'snotasenticingastheoriginal,then,Iagree,itwouldprobablybeaflop.Ihopeyou
giveitaread;maybeitwillpullyouovertomyside.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BenDATE:4/8/200911:09:17AM
IwassearchingtheNetforaWachowskiinterviewonwhetherornotafourthmovie
wasonthecards.Stumblingacrossyourscreenplay,Icouldnothaveimaginedsucha
greatpieceofwork.
Yourattentiontodetailandthewayyoufulfillyourmandateoftyinguplooseendswith
regardstopreandpostMatrix/Revolutions,itdeliversoneverysinglelevel.Itwouldbe
aspectacularendingtothegreatestMovieconcepteverfilmed.
It'sacredittoyouandtoall(MatrixUnderstanders)properMatrixfans.Ithasinspired
metoputsomeofmyideasonpaperandgivenmethetemplateofhowtowritea
screenplay,asbeforeIhadnoideaofhowtosetitout.
Youhavemywordthatallthatareworthyofit,shallbetoldofthisimaginativefinale.
ThankyouforgivingtheMatrixit'srightfulend.
Ben,
Althoughtheimpartialonesareprobablythemosthelpful,you'rethekindofmirrorI
lovethemost;thereflectionisuncompromisinginitsflattery.Iappreciateeverykind
word.
I'mgladitinspiredyoutoputyourownideasonpaper.Ifyouarelookingforreference
booksforscreenwriting,IhighlyrecommendYourScreenplaySucksbyWilliamAkers.
Indispensable;memorizeitcovertocover.AlsocheckoutTheScreenwriter'sBibleby
DavidTrottier.Thesewilltakeyouveryfar,veryfast.
Goodluckwithyoureffortsandletmeknowwhatyoucomeupwith,ifyou'reso
inclined.And,yes,byallmeansspreadtheword.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MustafaStanleyDATE:4/11/20094:15:25PM
Youareagenius.Thestorythatyouputtogetherisflawless.
I'vealwaysquestionedtheMatrixReloadedwhenNeodisabledtheSentinelsinthe
tunnelandcollapsedtowakeupintheMatrix.Whenthatoccured,Iknewthatboth
ZionandtheMachineWorldwereinanotherformoftheMatrix.OrshouldIsay,partof
somethingbigger.
Youhavemadethisstorymorerealtomethantheactualmoviesproducedonscreen
bytheWachoskiBrothers.IhavealreadycontactedotherMatrixfamesandputthemon
toyourworkofgenius.
Iwillnotlietoyou,yourArchitectisnotasarticulantastheother,butitaddstoamore
humanappeal,ratherthanthatofamachineorprogram.
Ilikehowyouwereabletomovefromtenses.Meaningfromthepresent,tothepast,
future.Source,toCortex,toSuperMatrix,totheMatrixifIfollowedyourstorycorrectly.
AreyouincontactwithWarnerBrothersinreferencetothestory?
Pleasepersistwithtryingtohaveyourstoryputonthebigscreen.IfthereisanywayI
canpersonallyhelptomakethisareality,pleasecontactme.
Mustafa,
Fewthingsbringasmuchofarushasthewords"genius"and"flawless";Idon'tknowif
they'reaccurate,buttheysurefeeldamnedgood.Nicewaytostarttheday.Thanks.
Ialwaysfelttherewasanotherleveltobeexplored;seemstobeyourfeelingaswell.
Gladittiesthingstogetherforyou.
Yes,theArchitectisnotasarticulate(orinclinedtousesuchgrandioseterms)butit
doesmakehimmoreaccessible,asyouhaverightlypointedout.
Oneofthehardest(andyet,mostenjoyable)partsofthestorywasjumpingaroundin
timeandplacesomuch.Thehardpartwastryingtomakethosejumpsflowwithout
losing(irritating)thereaderandthefunpartwasactually(finally)succeeding.Yes,you
followthestorycorrectly(atleastIhopeyoudo).
I'mindebtedtoallwhopassmystoryalongforotherstoread;Iguessthat'sthe
ultimateflatteryandmarkofsuccess.Again,thanks.
Asfarasmakingitintoamovie,that'smeetwithverylittleopportunity.Coldcallingor
blindmailingscriptsisadeadend.FindingsomeoneconnectedtoHollywoodorin
Hollywoodisreallytheonlyavenueavailable.I'vetriedafewpeoplewhoclaimtobe
connected,butnothinghascomeofitsofar.ButI'mstilltrying.Ifyouknowthosekinds
ofpeople(oryouknowpeoplewhoknowthosekindsofpeople),byallmeanssenditon
tothem.Youneverknowwhatcanhappen.
Mustafa,again,Iappreciateyourcommentsandenthusiasm.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MustafaStanleyDATE:4/11/200910:47:07PM
Ibelieveinyourvision.Iwilltrytogetyourstoryinthehandsoftherightpeople.Ifyou
areseriousaboutyourart,Iwilltrymybesttohelp.AllIaskisyoudon'tforgetabout
me.
Whatavenueshaveyouventuredalready?JustgivemeanideasothatIcanstartmy
plansofattack.
Ihaveanotherquestionforyou.SoisNeolikeTrinity,oneofthosewhowereplaceinto
theSuperMAtrix?
Also,IenjoyedthepartofthestorywerethePresidentisaddressingthepeople,anda
actualbattleistakingplacebetweenthehumansandandroids.Andthepartwhere
SmithcrackstheMachineCodetotheremainframeandhasmachineagainstmachinein
combat.(RememberthatfeelingofexcitementthatstimulatedyoursenseswhenNeo
foughthundredsofSmithinReloaded?OrwhenZionengagedincombatwithsentinels
inRevolution?Thatistheenjoymentyouhavebroughtmewhenreadingbothofthose
scenesinyourstory.)
Idon'twanttoseemlikeaFanaticinorderobsessedorcrazedwiththeMatrix,but
woulditbeabsurdtoviewtheMatrixfromtheMachine'spointofview,astheytryto
dealwithSmith?Iguessthemachineworldissofascinatingtomeandmaybetoother
thatIwouldliketoseemoreoftheirmonsterousviews,electricbluesociety,and
interactingwhichoneother,astheMatrixReloadedhasshownwiththepeopleinZion?
Butmaybeitisperfectthewayitis?Meaningmaybetheyaremeanttobeamysterous
tous.(ButyoudidgiveusapreceptionoftheirexistancefromtheAndroidspointof
view.
Onemorething,mayIaddthenIwillgo.IwasrevisitedtheMatrixRevolution.Atthe
endofthemoviewheretheArchitect/Alexasyoucallhim,andTheOracle/Serenameet
anddiscussthetermsoffreeingthepodlanges.WhentheOracleaskedtheArchitect
doesshehavehisword.Andhisreplyis"whatdoyouthingIam,human?"Haveyouput
thoughtintohowyouaregoingtoweaveyoustoryaroundthatphrase?Ireallylikethe
Alex/Architectyou'vecreated,buthemustcrossovertothefanasyou'vedepictedhim
tobe,Human.
Myreasonforaskingis,Iseeyourvisionandwouldlikeittocomealive.Butitmustbe
flawless.Talktoyoulater.
Ironically,Iwaslookingforamovietodownloadfromtheinternetandcameacrossyour
story.
AFanofyourwork,
MustafaStanley
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TreacleDATE:4/12/20099:47:25PM
Well..whatcanIsay.
AfewtimesIhaveattemptedtowriteaversionofthefourthMatrix.Some50orso
pageslong,butIalwaysgotstuckononepointoranother,Icouldn'tthinkofwhatelse
towrite.Asyouareprobablyverymuchaware,theMatrixisanincrediblyhardthingto
writeabout.It'sevenharderwhenyoutryandmatchthesuperbcontentofthe
originals.
ButreadingTheSuperMatrix...well,thatcouldhavebeenanoriginal.
Onewordandonewordonly;
Perfection
Mustafa,
Iloveyourenthusiasmandwouldneverforgetsomeonewhocouldplacethisworkin
therighthands.
MyeffortshavebeenmostlytoplacetheworkonthewebsiteI'vecreatedandletword
ofmouthcirculatethestory.I'vealsonetworkedtotryandfindaHollywoodinsider
whocouldhelpmeout.Otherthanthat,I'vedonelittle.AsI'vesaid,coldcallsandblind
mailingshavebeenadeadend.Youorsomeoneyouknowhastoknowsomeoneonthe
inside...andthenthatsomeonehastolovethestoryenoughtoputtheirreputationon
thelineintryingtoshopitaround.TheWachowskiBrothersandWarnerBrothersown
theconcept,sothatisanenormoushurdleinitself.Mostpeoplewon'tshopsomething
aroundthatisbasedonsomeoneelse'swork.Withthatinmindyou'rewelcometotry
yourhand.Ifyoureallyaregoingtotry,justrememberthatpersistenceisimportantbut
discretionistoo.Isuggestyoutemperyoureffortswhileatthesametimebeing
aggressive.
No,NeoisnotlikeTrinityinthathehasnocounterpartthatexistsoutsideoftheMatrix
worlds.It'sonlywhenhe'sextractedthathecomestoexistintherealworld.Andthe
partabouttheOracleandtheArchitectatteendofRevolutions,Ireallyhavethoughtto
tiethatinanymorethanIalreadyhave.TheironyintheArchitect'sstatementisthathe
reallyishuman...atleastasfarasmystorygoes.
TherearesomanyunexploredandinterestingfacetstotheMatrixworld,it'shardto
addressthemall.Lotsoffuntothinkabout,though.
Thanksagainforallyourkindwordsandexcitement.
PDWood
Treacle,
I'vehadsomereallynicecommentsthisweek;yoursjusttopsitoff.Thanks.
Yeah,IcameupagainstmanywallstryingtowritetheSuperMatrix.ThereweretimesI
wantedtoquit.ButthetimesImanagedtobreakthroughthewallsweresoexcitingand
energized,itjustkeptpropellingmeforward.IthinkIwasluckythattheearlywriter's
blockswerenotsoharshthattheyjustshutmedown.
Your"perfection"commentisparticularlygratifyingbecauseitcomesfromsomeone
whoknowsfirsthandthedifficultiesofwritingafollowuptotheTrilogy.Ireally
appreciateit.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TreacleDATE:4/13/20097:24:38AM
So..whatnextforyou?
FromreadingtheSuperMatrix,Icansee(andalotofotherpeople,Ijustreadallthe
comments)thatyouareanincrediblytalentedwriter.Haveyouthoughtaboutsending
itofftoapublisher?Iknowwhatyourthinking,copywrites.Tobehonest,most
publishers,if...no,whentheyfindthatyourstoryisbrilliant,willbeabletosortoutall
thecopywritecrapforyou.Onceyougetapublisherandyourworkgetsnoticedthen
thatswherefilmscomein.
Secondly,whataboutanotherfollowup?I'dverymuchenjoyreadingaLordOfThe
Rings4,orpossiblythenextMissionImpossible?
Theworldisyouroyster,P.DWood.
Nowgrabitwithbothhands.
Treacle,
Areyoutalkingaboutbookpublishers?I'dcertainlybewillingtogiveitashot.Doyou
haveanypublishersinmind?
Asfarasmorefollowupsareconcerned,it'sunlikely.ThedesiretodoaMatrixfollow
upcamefromsoclearlyseeingacontinuing,detailedstoryline;Idon'thavethatsame
clearvisionforanyothermovieseries....atleastnotyet.
I'mworkingonanoriginalstorynow.Thatwillprobablybemydirectionforthe
foreseeablefutureunlesssomethingdramaticchangesit.
Thanksagainfortheunbridleflattery.Anddefinitelyletmeknowofanypublishersyou
mighthaveinmind.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TomDATE:4/18/20096:42:29PM
Thisisaverygoodscriptandisfullofwonderfulimagination.Haveyousentthistothe
WachowskiBrothers?Thiscoulddefinitelybedevelopedwithjustafewimprovements.
Greatwork!
Tom,
I'mgladyouenjoyeditsomuch.
SendingtotheWachowskiBrothersislikeshootingapebbletothemoonwithasling
shoot,ifyouknowwhatImean.I'malwaysopentosuggestions,though.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:matrixdude11DATE:4/19/20093:56:10AM
Ireadthestorywithmuchenthusiamandenjoyment.Itgavememanyanswerstothe
questionsthatihadaftertheendofreloadedandrevolutions.Idothinkthoughgoing
backandforththroughflashbacksalmosteveryotherpagedoesgetveryconfusing.If
youplantotrytomakethescriptintoamovie,pleasetellme.Itwasagreatreadandi
amsureotherswillenjoyit.
matrixdude11,
Iagree,theflashbackscanbehardtofollowintheprintedform;Ithinktheywouldbe
muchmorefluidandcleariftheywereseenonthebigscreen.
Iwouldlovetoturnthescriptintoamovie,butthat'seasiersaidthandone.I'mstill
trying,though.
I'mhappytohearthatthestorybroughtyousomuchenjoyment.Spreadtheword.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AlexDATE:4/30/20096:17:37PM
Firstoff,I'dliketosaythatIenjoyedthereadverymuch,andwouldliketoseeitmade
intoamovie(we'rejustsovisuallybasedintoday'sworldaren'twe?).Theamountof
detailandthoughtthatwentintothiswassurprising,andintriguingtosaytheleast.
However,IdohavesomethingsthatIhavetotouchon.
First,Iunderstandthatthisisacontinuationoftheseries,andnotsomucha"finale",
buttherearesomethingswithinthestorythatarenotonlyunexplained,butodd.For
instance,theworldthatNeotravelsthroughbeforeheexitstheSuperMatrix,isthata
worldtoitself,withinhismind,theMatrix,orpartoftheactualSuperMatrix?Notonly
that,buttheimagerywithSmithandthepowersthatheexhibitedwereonceagainodd,
andseemedoutofplacewithinthissaga.
Secondly,youstatethepeoplejackedintotheSMhavenorecollectionofthefactthat
theyareinavirtualworldofavirtualworld(Trinity),andyettheOracleseemstoknow
whatisgoingon.IknowyoulistedherasaClass3,butthatstilldoesn'texplainit.Not
onlythat,butwhywouldtheArchitectfromReloadedexistasarepresentationofthe
actualArchitect,butexistasanapparentenemy?
Third,howwasNeo'sbodycreated,giventhefactthatheisavirtualbeingthathas
beencreatedbytheSMandejectedouttotherealworld?
Last(allIcanthinkofatthispoint),howcomeVictorandPersephonechangedpersonas
sofastoncejackedin?Iknowthattheythemselveswereabitpridefultobeginwith,
butitjustseemsillogicalthattheywouldIMMEDIATELYchangetheirinherent
personalitiesatthebeginningoftheirmission.
Overall,Isupposeitjustcomesdowntothefactthatthisisreallynotmeanttobean
ending,butmoreofadoorwaytogrander,andmorecomplexideasandformulations.I
mustcommendyouontheeffortthatyouhaveputintothestoryandwriting,butmust
warnyouthatfrommyperspective,itseemstobeabitconvolutedandambiguousat
times.
It'sstillagreatstorythough.:D
Alex,
Thanksforthethumbsupandthecritique.
Asalways,therearethingstobeaddressed.Ilovethechallenge.
Definitelysomeodditiesandunexplainedflightsoffancy;hopefullyIcanclarifysomeof
them.
IliketothinkoftheinterimworldthatNeofindshimselfinaskindofaneuralcollage.
Here'sthepassagefromthescript."Notdreams,Neo.Rememories.Imprintsofyour
life,pastandpresent,combinedwiththoseofthecollectiveconsciousness."The
collectiveconsciousnessreferstothetotalsequencingcodeoftheSuperMatrix.
AsfarasSmithisconcerned,IimplythathehasallthesamepotentialsasNeo.Here's
anotherpassagefromthescript."Andyou,Neo,inturn,transferredtheCortexscode
toSmithwhenyoujumpedintohim.Alteredasyoubothwere,youdefiedcontrol,
predictability,andeveneradication.Youalsoacquiredunexpectedpowers.The
inevitableconsequencesweresoonapparent.Yourabilitieswouldincreasetothepoint
whereyouâ€dachieveawarenessoftheSuperMatrixand,ultimately,oftheCortex
itself."ButwhereNeotapsintohispowertolookformeaninginreality,Smithusehis
poweronlytosubjugateanddestroy.Consequently,Neo'spathleadstohisnear
discoveryoftheSuperMatrix;Smith'spathneverevencontemplatesit.Despitetheir
differentpaths,theyessentiallystillbothhaveaccesstounlimitedpowerintheSuper
Matrix,ifonlytheycantapintoit.That'smyreadingofit.
TheOraclehasoracle-likeabilities,yes,butwhenshe'sintheSuperMatrix,shestillhas
nodirectknowledgeoftheSuperMatrixasavirtualworld,orthatanotherrealworld
existsbeyondit.
TheClass3clearanceisonegiventopeoplewhoareallowedtocomeandgofromthe
SuperMatrix.Veryfewhavethatclearance.TrinitywouldalsohaveaClass3clearance.
ThedualArchitectconceptIthoughtwaskindofcoolandcouldbeinterpretedasa
heaven/hellGod/devilparadigm.TherearemanyreferencestoChristianityinthe
originalTrilogyandIthoughtthiswasaniceextension.ThegoodArchitectislikeGod,
creatorofandoverseeroftheSourceandsaviorofthehumanworld.ThebadArchitect
islikeSatan,thefallenangel,oppositeimageofthelordabove.Heisthecreatorofand
overseeroftheSourceintheMatrixandsaviorofthemachineworld.
InadditionthechoicebythegoodArchitecttocasthimselfasabadorflawedpersonin
theMatrixsomehowlendsmorehumanitytothegoodArchitect.Itsuggeststhat
despitehisbrillianceandalmostGodlikestatusintherealworld,heiswillingto
acknowledgehisflawsandweaknessbytakingonthepersonaofthebadArchitect.It's
awayforhimtobehumble,Isuppose.
Neo'snewbodyisaclonedbody.Ionlyimplythatinthestory.ButIdidn'tthinkitwasa
farstretchtoassumetheyhadthattechnology,giventhattheywereabletocreatethe
Cortex.PerhapsIshouldelaborateonthatabitmore.
TherapidpersonachangeofPersephoneandtheMerovingianisalittlesudden,Iadmit.
IhadtocutscenesofithappeningmoregraduallysoIcouldtacklealltheother
elementsofthestory.That'sdefinitelyaproblemspot.
Iagree,thestoryisabitconvolutedandambiguous.Ibitoffalotanddidn'treallychew
itthoroughly.Butasyousuggest,despitehavingdifficultyswallowing,itstilltastes
prettygood.
Thanks.Ienjoywhenpeopleleavedetailedcomments;showsthattheyreallyreadand
thoughtaboutthework.Muchappreciated.
PDWood
Gjeremy,
Iappreciateyoursuggestionsand,ifamovieistobemade,and,ifIhaveanysayasto
how,Iwillcertainlyentertainyoursuggestions.
Thanks,PDWood
Damien,
JustaquickreplytosayIreallyenjoyscriptreaderswithenthusiasticcomments.
Alsopraying...inthebackground.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/13/20092:24:24PM
Nicework,thatwasawesome!IlovedthewayyoumadetheArchitect,Merovingian,
PersophoneandTrinityintoafamily,thatwassomethingcompletelyunexpected.The
"Zion-isn't-real"thingwas...notsounexpected,butstilldoneinacoolway(Cotrexand
all).
ThewayyouportrayedtheArchitectasacharacterdidn'treallyseemconsistentwith
thecold,roboticwayhespeaksinReloaded,andnowIfindithardtothinkofhimasa
program...andallmyowntheorieshavebeenmessedupinmymindafterreadingthis.:
ThewaySmith'shandgotstuckintheairwhilehewasfightingSeraphwasweird,aswas
thewayabunchofSmithsappearedjustbeforethefightwithAgentBlack.ButmaybeI
justcan'tgetmyheadaroundthiswithoutseeingit.
Iwasn'ttookeenontheideaofNeohavingasonbyanex-girlfriend(norwasItookeen
ontheideaofTrinitybeingokaywithit),butwell,that'sjustme.Apartfromthatbit,I
ratherlikedtheending(evenifitwassomewhatanti-climactic).ThepartswithSmith
infiltratingtheMachineCity,andtheMerovingianandPersephonefallinginloveagain,
weregood.Theyhadasenseoffinalityaboutthem,of"ending-ness".AndIthinkthe
title"TheMatrix4:TheSuperMatrix"iskindof...lame.
ButtherewasonethingthatIwashalf-expectingtohappen,andthatIdefinitelythink
youshouldhavedone...:
(Umm...myideaisreallylongandwon'tfitintothiscomment,soI'llputitinmynext
comment):
Okaythen,here'smyidea:
Youdon'tneedaholeinyourheadtoentertheSuperMatrix,right?AndIthinkit's
possibletobeinsertedfromtheSourcedirectlyintotheMatrixwithouteverhavinga
bodyintheZionworld(whichiswhytheOraclewasconsidereda"program"),right?
Well...whatifa36androidmanagedtoinfiltratetheSourcesomehow(bydisguising
himselfassomeonetrustedbytheArchitect,perhaps),andthentheandroidmanaged
toinsertitselfintotheMatrix?Andthen,whatifSmithassimilatedit?Perhapsthe
androidwouldhaveusedtheOracle'sunoccupied"LevelThree"seattoenterthe
Matrix,whichwouldexplainwhytheandroidwouldn'thaveabodyinapodintheZion
world?AndsincetheOracle'sseathassomesortif"timer",maybetheoccupantwould
bereleasedautomatically(inthiscase,theoccupantisaSmith-infectedandroid)?!And
sinceandroidscanshapeshift,theandroidwouldthenbeabletochangeitsappearance
tolooklikeSmith!Thenthere'dbeaSmithwalkingaroundtheSource,andmostlikely
huntingNeoandTrinity!Andsince36saremadeofmetal,theSmithwouldbejustas
strongashewasintheMatrix!
Myideacouldbeincorporatedaftertheendofyourscript.Sinceallthehumans
connectedtotheMatrixhavebeenkilledasaresultofSmith'sactionswithinthe
MachineCity,theMatrixhasnopowersource(otherthanthebiologicalenergystill
beingproducedbythevery-recentlykilledhumans),andwillrunoutofpowerandshut
downprettysoon.SinceallthehumansintheMatrixaredead,buttheprogramsare
stillalive,theonlySmithsremainingwithintheMatrixaretheoneswhichwerecreated
fromSmithcopyinghimselfontoexiles.Maybeanandroidcouldgetin,getassimilated
byoneoftheseSmiths,thengetpulledoutbythetimerofOracle'sseat?Andsincethe
MartixandtheMachinesnowhavenopowersource,theandroid-Smithwouldbethe
ONLYcopyofSmithleftinexistence,makingwayforanepic,climacticbattlebetween
mortalNeoandandandroidSmith,withthefateoftheworldhanginginthebalance...
Well...sorryifIwentonabitthere...greatwork.;)
Gjeremy,
Basedonyourprolificcomments,yourdevotionandenthusiasmformyworkaswellas
theMatrixconceptisobviousandintense.
AndIapplaudyourlevelofdetailandtheexpansivenessofyourideas,eventhoughI
sometimeshaveahardtimefollowingthem.
Iwouldloveforthistobeamovieasyouwould;whatlengthsI'mpreparedtogoto
insistuponit,Ihaven'treallydetermined.Boycottingisnotreallymything,though.
WhatIdoknowandwhatI'mprettyhappywithisthesuccessofthescriptandthe
manysatisfiedreaderswhohaveleftupliftingcomments.Ileavetherestupto
fate...andabitofnudgingalongtheway.
Thanksforyourkindwordsandgoodenergy.BPDWood
Sprldr,
Ihavetoagreewithmostofwhatyou'vesaid.Theareasthatyoupointoutasbeing
problematicforyou,havealsobeenproblematicforme...althoughprobablytoalesser
extent(Ididkeeptheminthestory,afterall).
Someoftheissueyoutalkabout,Ihaveelaboratedoninpreviousreadercomments;
readingthosemighthelpclarifyorexpandonsomeofthepointsyoumade.
Asfarasthenamegoes,Iagree.TheSuperMatrixistoolame,childish,cliched.Giveme
akillertitleandI'lldefinitelyuseit.(Thisgoesforallreaders.)
Idon'tthinkastoryiseverwithoutsomeproblems;inthiscaseI'mjustgladtheywere
smallenoughnottodampenyourenjoymentoftheoverallconcept.
Thanksforreading.
PDWood
Sprldr,
Thatissickandtwisted...inalltherightways.Ireallylikeit.
TheonlyproblemwithitfrommypointofviewisthattheSourceisacompletelyselfcontainedworld.Nooneisallowedinorout.Thisisoneofitsmainsecuritymeasures.I
don'tmentionitspecificallyinmystory,butthatishowI'vevieweditfromthe
beginning.OutsidepeoplecanonlyentertheSourceasholographicimages.
Otherthanthat,it'sniceandchewy.
Ofcourse,itwouldhavetobepartofafifthmovieorperhapsalaterseries.Whatyou
proposecouldeasilyfillupanotherwholescript.
Maybeyoushouldgiveitashot?
PDWood
WhenIpostedmycomments,Ihadn'treadanyoftheotherones.I'vereadallofthem
now,andIseethatI'mnotreallyaloneinmyviews.Butthereareacoupleofthingsthat
I'mnowwondering...
SincetheOneisaproductoftheCortexinsertingitsgeneticcodeintoavirtual,andthe
CortexwascreatedfromTrinity'sDNA,doesn'tthatmeanTrinityandNeoarerelated?If
so,Eww!xD
I'massumingtheremustbeSOMEwayofgettinginandoutoftheSource,because
that'swhattheOracledoes,soitshouldbepossibleforanandroidtomakeitswayin
there.Andevenifthereisn'taway...couldn'titjustsmashitswayin?
AndanotherthingwhichbotheredmeslightlywhichIforgottomentionabove:Marouk.
Icertainlydon'trememberhimfromthefilms,Ibelievehe'sanoriginalcreationof
yours?Well,Ithinkitwouldmakemoresensesomehowifhewasreplacedwith
someonefromthe2nd/3rdfilm.Aminorcharacter,ofcourse.
Introducinganewcharacterwithasmall(butveryimportant)role,andthenimplying
thathe'sbeenaroundsincetheeventsofthepreviousfilmsisn'tquiteascredibleor
interesting.
Butthisisaveryminorproblem(inmyview.Maybeitisn'tevenaproblematall...)
And,beingquiteinterestedinGreekmythology,InoticedthatTyphonthingyoudid
nearthebeginning.:D
AsformySmith-in-real-worldidea...ifyouevergetanopportunitytogetthistothebig
screen,andthestudiodoesn'twantanopen-endedfilm...it'ssomethingtothinkabout...
Andabouttheshavingscene,Ithinkitwouldhavebeensufficienttoshowtheinfinite
reflections,andmaybeNeonoticesaveryslightdisturbance,reminiscentofthecracked
mirrorinthe"Redpill"sceneinthefirstfilm,thenhereachesouttotouchit,butthen
Trinitycallshimfromtheotherroomandhedoesn'ttouchitandgoesouttoher,and
forgetstheincident?
Andthe"RandomNeointheCorner"scene...Ithinkthatitshouldbereplacedwithan
action/dreamsequenceinwhichNeoisintheMatrix,andhestartscloninghimselfonto
peoplelikeSmith?
Orwouldthatbeabittooodd?
Asforthetitle:"TheMatrix:Rememory"isdefinitelyastepintherightdirection,butit
doesn'tsoundquiterighttome.Ithoughtof"TheMatrix:Remembrance",butthat
doesn'tsoundquiterighteither.
Maybeyoushouldditchthewhole"TheMatrix:Re_______"thingentirelyandcomeup
withsomethingabitdifferent?
Thisis,afterall,quitedifferenttothetrilogy.
Anyways,IthinkI'moutofcomments...goodluckwiththe(potential)film.
~Sprldr
Oh,andisTrinitysortoftheMotheroftheMatrix,sinceitwascreatedfromherDNA?
OrwouldthatmakePersephonethe"Mother"?
SorryIforgottomentionthisinthepreviouscomment.
Sprldr,
Yes,I'msureFreudwouldhaveafielddaywithmycontinuationofthestory.DNA
intermixing,incest,geneticinterbreeding,younameit.Eww!isright.
TheOracleneverleavestheSourcephysically;sheonlytransportsfromtheSourceinto
theCortex/SuperMatrixandbackagain.
IsupposeanandroidcouldsmashhiswayintotheSource,buttheresomanysafeguards
inplacethatitwouldbeunlikely.AlthoughIdon'tsaythisdirectlyinthestory,New
ZealandisthebiosphereworldthattheSourceandallitscomponentshavetaken
over.AndAustraliaisnowsolelydedicatedtoprovidingpowertotheSource/New
Zealandwithitsvastcombinedsolar/nuclearfacilities.Bothoftheseislandsactasanan
ironfortressbothbecauseoftheirmilitarydefensesandbecausetheyareislands.
Completelyself-contained.
Yes,IliketheideaofMaroukbeingapre-existingcharacterfromtheTrilogy.I'llhaveto
investigatethatpossibility.PerhapsoneofCaptainRoland'smen.
I'mgladyoulikedtheTyphonreference.Ithinkmostpeoplemissit.Andsomepeople
justthinkthatthisparticularhorrendouscreatureisabittoooutofthecharacterfor
theMatrixstory.Ipersonallyseeitisnotunlikethesentinalswiththeirglowingsensors,
ganglia,androbotictentaclesswirlingabout.
Ialsothinkyourideaforthemirrorsceneisgood;perhapsminewasabittooobvious?
Yoursleavesalittlemoretotheimagination.AndthereferencebacktotheRedPill
scenecouldbenice.
TheRandomNeoscenewasalwaysahitormissforme.Imightjustleaveitout.Inotso
keenonyourideaforit;abittooodd,yes.
Yeah,IlikeMatrixRememoryalot.It'sgotgoodconnotations.Whatitlacksishigh
power/highimpactwhichSuperMatrixdefinitleyhas....but....SuperMatrixwell...just
sucks.So-highimpact,NOTSuperMatrix.Whaddyagot?
Greatinsightandideas.Imayusemanyofthemifthisthingeveryreallygetsoffthe
ground.
Thanks,PDWood
Sprldr,
ONEPOSSIBLEFAMILYTREE
ZuraandtheArchitect/AlexStrong=grandmomandgranddad?
PersephoneandtheMerovingian/Victor=momanddad?
Trinity'sDNA=thefertilizedegg?
It'sconvolutedforsure;that'swhyIlikeitsomuch!
SomethingeldeI'vebeenwondering:Trinity,accordingtoEnterTheMatrix,is25,and
Neois37(asfarasIcanrecall,Imightbeslightlyoff).
SincetheSuperMatrixwascreatedfromherDNAwhenshewasaninfant,thatwould
makeitabout24or25years.
Thus,howcanNeobeolderthanthethingwhichcreatedhim?Andlet'snotforgetthe
fivepreviousMatrices!
IgettheimpressionthatAlexcanspeeduptimeinsidetheSuperMatrix,thoughI'mnot
sureifthiswaswhatyoumeant.
AbouttheMerovingiancallingSeraph"Judas"...Idon'tthinkyouneedtogivetheOracle
anewassistant.YoucouldjustsaythattheMerovingiansentSeraphtoworkforthe
Oracleasaspy,butduringthattimeheendedupreallyjoiningherside.
Thatexplainshowhecouldbeworkingforbothofthematthesametime.
Also,inthefirstfilm,Morpheussayssomethinglike"Oncepeoplehavereacheda
certainage,wedonotfreethemfromtheMatrix.Themindhastroublelettinggo.I've
seenithappen."
MaybethepersonhesawithappentowasTrinity?Thiswouldsolveanotherofyour
chronologicalproblems.
(AndIthinkthatMaroukbeinganewcharactermakessomeofyourstoryseemless
connected,andkindoftacked-on,thoughI'mnotsurewhetherImadethatclear
above.)
AsfortheNewZealand/Australiathing...that'sinteresting...
IimaginedtheSourceasahugebuildingsomethinglikethePentagon(butwaybigger),
andtheCortexasamassive,transparentspherewithmillionsoftinyneuronlike
structuresvisibleinsideit.
Andanotherthing...
...inthefilms,allsceneswithintheMatrixaretintedgreen,andallsceneswithinZion
aretintedblue.
IthinkallsceneswithintheSourceworldshouldhaveakindofwhite,warmglowabout
them.
That'showIpicturedthesceneswhilereading,andIthinkitreinforcesthewhole
"heaven"thing.
Note:inGreekmythology,TyphonwasthesonofGaiaandTartarus.
GaiaandTarataruswerebothspawnedbyChaos,thusmakingthemsiblings.
Therefore,Typhonwastheproductofincest...
TheCortexwascreatedfromTrinity'sDNA,whichNeonowcontains...
ChaoswastheancestorofalltheGreekgods,their"Source",inotherwords...
Wait,amIgoingalittletoofarwiththis?xD
~Sprldr
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSpauldingDATE:5/15/20092:15:21AM
ToPDWood,
IcommunicatedwithyouseveralmonthsagoabouthowmuchIenjoyedthestoryyou
wrote.Ihavebeenglancingatsomeofthecontentfromyourcriticsandsupporters
whichIhavebeenreceivinginmyemail.Interestingreactionsyouaregetting.Mostly
favorableIassume.
OnequickcommentIwouldliketoadd.Ihaveasuggestionforarenameofthetitle.
YouhaveprobablyalreadythoughtaboutitbutIthinkarealgreatnameforthestory
wouldbeMATRIXRESURRECTION:TheREBIRTH.Thiscouldhaveanumberof
applications...Neo...Trinityetc.whatdoyouthink?Istilllikeyourstoryalot,but
well...justnotcrazyaboutthename.Goodjob!
HiMark,
IliketheResurrectionpart;that'sbeenkickedaroundbefore,asyouguessed.Ithinkthe
Rebirthpartmightbealittleredundant.
TheMatrix:Resurrectionishighonthelist.Justwanttoseeiftherearesomeothersthat
mightbealittlebetter.
Thanksforthethought.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HurricaneNeoDATE:5/24/20094:42:32PM
Verywellthoughtout,goodjob!
HurricaneNeo,
Lovethefeedback,shortandsweet.Gladyoulikedit.
Thanks.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BenfromArizonaDATE:5/27/20096:09:31PM
Ienjoyedthatsomuch,Istartedreadingat7AMorso,andcouldn'tstop,(carefully
absorbingeachdetail)until10:30AM.OneproblemIsawisthatmanydirectorsdon't
wishforsuchalargephenomenonsuchasthe"Matrix"trilogytobe'tweaked'asmuch
asthismanipulatesthepossibleback-storiesandoriginsofthesecharacters.Thetwists
arenice,Icanseewhereyouweregoing,butthinkofitthisway:ifthisstorywere
centeredonNeo,andhisexistencetheultimatesalvationofZion,whydoalltheother
peoplehavetobesointertwinedintoit?Musttheyallberelatedbacktotherealworld
outsidetheSuperMatrix?
ILOVEthatyoubroughtNeoandTrinityback,Ievenadoredthedetailsofheractual
relationto"TheArchitect"(slash)"AlexStrong,"buttherestwasabitoverboard.
Honestly,thosetwoconnectionswouldsellme.IfIhadthefunding,I'dproducethat
much-butMerovingianandPersephoneasherparents?â€¦Hmmmaybe,actually,I
likeit.Ithastobepresentedadifferentwaythough,itjustseemedfartoostrangeto
haveherparentssuddenlylosetheirmindswhentheywereboththebrainchildrenof
somethingsointricatelywoven,andretainedsomesortofstrangesuperpowers.Then
there’sMorpheusandLockasbrothers?Theirmother,theOracle?Ouch,thatseemed
likeareachforasurprisetwist,butmerelyaddedtoomuchseasoningtothemeatof
story.Ialsobelieveifthisscriptwererevised,itmighthaveabitlessjumping.
Hollywooddoesntliketocomplicatefilmsanymoretokeeptheminterestingtopeople
whoenjoycomplication.Icouldseethemusingthisscript,andsimplycombiningmore
scenesintolargersectionssoasnotconfusetheaudience.
Excludingallthiscritiquethough,andtobeperfectlyfrank,Iwouldpaymoneytoseeit,
(probablytwice)andIwouldbuytheDVD.Imgladsomeoneoutthereisdoing
everythingtheycantoseeanothermoviecomeoutandevolvethestory.Theideaof
Neowakingupintoyetanotherrealworldfromthemachineworldisanimportant
elementImyselfhavethoughtaboutsincethemakingofthelastfilm.Youdidwritethis
beautifully.Ienjoyedhowyoudescribedtheaction,thedreams,itwasafantasticread.
Wonderfuljob!Iapplaudyou!
P.S.ThesettleyetcreepyapparitionbehindNeowhilehewasshavingthatdidn'tmove
inthemirror,whatwasthat?Whydidyouincludethis?
BenfromArizona,
Ah,Ilovewhenpeoplereadrightthroughitintothenight...andalsocomeoutonthe
otherendwithapositiveglow.
Thanksforthestrongpraise.
Andnowforthosepartsthatinvariablytweakeventhemostavidfans.Heregoes.
1)JustrememberthatthebackstoryoftheMatrixTrilogyisalwaysreferencingthe
MatrixandZionworlds;asfarasthoseworldsareconcerned,thebackstoryremains
intact.
ThestoryI'vecreated,ontheotherhand,isoutsideoftheTrilogystoryandtherefore,
hasit'sownbackstorythatdoesn'tconflictwiththeTrilogy.Itwouldbesimilartothe
backstoryofNeoinandoutsideoftheMatrix.InsidetheMatrixhisbackstorywas
relativelynormal.Hehadajob,hobbies,aplacetolive,etc.Butthatwasn'thistrue
backstory.Histruebackstorywasthathewastrappedinapod,enslavedinavirtual
worldintheMatrix.
Atleastthat'showIlookatit.
2)TheworldoftheSuperMatrix,CortexandtheSourceissupposedtobeselfcontainedandself-sustaining.Havingfamiliesasthecorepeopleinvolved,andsetting
upkeyplayersliketheArchitectandtheOracletoallowtheirchildrentoplaycrucial
rolesseemedlikeanaturalprogression.Itissortofequivalenttofamiliestravelingtoa
distantplanettocolonizeanewworld;they'dwanttobeinittogether.
IlovethethreegenerationsofArchitect,Merovingian(Victor),andTrinityallplayingkey
roles.
Iadmit,it'saspicydish,maybeabitoverthetop;still,alotoffunifyoucanswallowit.
3)Iagreethatthestorybouncesaroundalot;Hollywoodwouldprobablybalkatit.I'm
guessingthatinvisualform,though,thestorywillbeeasiertofollow.Therewouldalso
probablybesomesortofdevice(say,acolorglow)thatwoulddifferentiateflashbacks
fromthepresent.
4)Thecreepyapparitioninthemirrorattheendmighthavebeenunnecessary.Iwas
tryingtomakeareferencebacktowhenNeohastakentheredpillandissitting,waiting
forittotakeeffect.Hepusheshisfingerintothemirroranditbends,liquifiesunderhis
touch.Thatishisfirsttruetasteoftheworldbeyond.InmymirrorsceneIsuggestthata
worldevenbeyondthatoftheSuperMatrixexistsandNeoistheonlyoneintouchwith
it.Again,maybeunnecessary.
Nicecomments,nicecompliments.Allveryappreciated.ThanksBen.
PDWood
Thankyou,thoseexplanationsdefinitelyexplainalotforme.Verywellsaid,andImust
agree.
NowIhaveaquestionforanyonewhoreadsthis:
Youknowwhyyourheredon'tyou?
You'rehere,readingthesecomments,andreadingthisscriptbecauseyoufeelasense
ofconnectionwiththestoryoftheMatrix,don'tyou?It'snotjustafascinatingstory,no
it'sdeeperthanthat.I'vefeltsinceIwasachildthatsomethingisn'tquiteright.
Admittedly,andasfoolishlyasitsounds,I'vefeltasenseofsurrealismsincesixyearsold
thatthisworldweliveinissorealthatisinfactunreal.Haven'tyou?
Ascrazyaswemightbelabeled,IknowyouunderstandwhatImean.Nowsimplyadmit
ittoyourself,andyou'rehalfwaytothetruth.
Ben,
I'mgladmyexplanationspulledittogetherforyouabitmore.
Asfortherestofthiscomment,I'llthrowitouttothoseofyouwhohavethatsame
senseofunreality.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:jackDATE:6/3/20097:26:08PM
Someofthepartsarecrapandsomeareok
Whichparts,Jack?
COMMENT:AUTHOR:aaronsimpsonDATE:6/5/20091:09:05PM
Gooddaysir
iwasdoingsomeresearchasIhadanideaforamatrixscreenplaymyselfwhenIcame
acrossyours.Iamdisheartenedtohearthatyouhavetroublegettinganywherewith
thebigcheeses.haveyouhadanyjoy?
myideawasalittledifferentfocussingondifferentaspectsbutIamnotsureitisworth
developingwithwhatIhaveread.dotheynotrealisehowmanypeoplearebeggingfor
morematrix,especiallywithallthecrapIseegettingreleased.
Ihavereadabout16pagesandIthinkyouhavesometalent,Idothinkyouhavetolook
atthe80/20rule.Idontknowifyouhaveheardofit,butifyouspent80%ofyoutime
possiblychanging20%ofityoumaybeontoawinner.Ihavewrittenabitasahobby
andIknowitishardgoingbackandchanging,butlittlechangeshereandtherecould
leadtoyourbiggestchanceofsuccess.yourontherightlines.Ithinksomeofthe
commentsordoapollorsomethingcouldhelpyougetthistowhereyouneedto
aaron,
Youcaughtmeatanopportunetime.I'mstuckonthedetailsofanotherscreenplayand
uppoppedyourcomment.Perfectreasontoprocrastinate.Thanks.
IassumeatsomepointtherewillbesomecontinuationoftheMatrixstory;there'sa
raptaudienceandhugemoneymakingpotential.It'sjustamatteroftime,inmy
opinion.Whethermystorycomesintoplay,Ijustdon'tknow.Sofar,I'vehadonlya
smallnibblefromHollywoodandithasnotpannedoutanyfurther...yet.We'llsee.
Iprobablywon'treworkthescriptunlessIgetsomegenuineinquiriesfromserious
parties.Ifeelthatthestoryandideas,astheyare,arestrongenoughtoattractinterest.
Ifigetsome,IthinkIhavemorethanenoughfeedbackinallthecommentsI'vereceived
topopthescriptupafewnotchesinquality.
So,untilthen,I'llbeworkingonmyownoriginalscreenplaythathasmuchmoreofa
chanceofbeingproducedthanonethatpiggybacksonsomeoneelse'swork.
We'llseewhathappens.
Thanksforthemusings.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:curiousDATE:6/5/20092:50:39PM
Dearfriend
Iknowitiseasiertodestroythantocreate,tohatethentocreate,butthisscreenplay
hassomanyfloorsfromwhatIhaveread.
yourideasaregoodanditisclearyouhaveimaginationandsometalentandcouldbea
successfulwriter
butyouhavehadyoursugarnowhereisyourmedicine.
thereisnorealstructuretothisscreenplay.
thereisnorealtensionoranythingtokeepyouattheedgeofyourseat,thereisvery
littleemotionalconnection.ifyoulookatasimilarscifiliketerminator2judgmentday
thewaythetensionisbuiltwithantagonistsandprotagonistmakesyouwanttowatch
it.
aspreviouscommentshavesuggesteditmayworkascomic/booktypethingbutasa
hollywoodmovieyoustandnochance.Idontknowhowhardyouhaveworkedonit
butifIwenttoseethatatthepicturesIwouldwantmymoneybackandwouldbe
seriouslyannoyed.ithinksometimesifyoucantimprovesomethingyoushouldleaveit
alonejusthowthosebrothersshouldnthavemadeasequelandthenthetriology.
Youcantpossiblythinkitisworthbringingsmithbackagain,heisboringasavillain,the
Merovingianmakesamuchbettervillain.
ithinkitiseasilytoloseperspectivewhenitisyourownworkbutthislacksanysubtlety
andisjustreinventingthewheel,itishardnottohateyourscreenplaybecauseitis
lackingthatsomethingthatmakeamoviespecial,findthatandyoumightstanda
chance
fromaconcernedMATRIXFAN
curious,
Whenyousaid"thisscreenplayhassomanyfloors"Ithoughtyouwerereferringtoits
manysubtlelevelsornuancedlayers.ImaginemysurprisewhenIrealizedthatyou
reallymeant"flaws"insteadof"floors".
I'msorryyoufindmyscreenplayso"hardnottohate".Givenyourcommentsaboutit
lackingsubtletyortension,Istrivetounderstandwhythemajorityofothercommenters
finditso"hardnottolove".
Iadmitthatitdoesn'trigidlyfollowthreeactstructure,conformstrictlytothe
antagonist/protagonistmodelorendwithabang.ButIstillthinkithasadoseof
tension/resolutionandatleastasmatteringofsubtlety.
Iappreciatethatyouthinkmy"ideasaregood"andthatIhave"someimaginationand
sometalentandcouldbeasuccessfulwriter".I'lltakethatasapositivereasonto
continueonmymostrecentscreenplay.
AndasfarasTerminator2goes,Iagree,itwasagreatmovie.Lovedit.Hopefully,my
nextscreenplaywilltrackmorecloselytosuchasubtleandemotionaloeuvre.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RichardEwingDATE:6/14/20097:08:05AM
IfSilverPictureswouldreleasetheSecondRenassance.Tolivefilmthiswouldultimately
bringMatrixFansbacktothebigscreen,andItwouldproducerevenueforSilver
PicturesInc.Imeanaskyourself,howmanypeopleactuallysaw"TheSecond
Renaissance."Thiswouldclearupalotofquestionsfromviewerswhocametoknow
theMatrixbutdidn'tactuallygraspitsbeginning.Ihavebeenaskingforthisforthelast
2years.
Iagree.Anexpansionoftheserieswouldbeveryenjoyable.Takingpartsofthe
Animatrixanddevelopingthemintowholemovieswouldbeagreatplacetostart.
Ionlyhopethat,iftheMatrixconceptdoesgetexpanded,thatitdoesn'tgotoofar,
suchasTerminatordidwiththeSarahConnorChronicles.NotthattheChroniclesare
bad,butIthinktheoriginalconceptgetstowatereddown.
Here'stoatleastonemoreexpansionoftheMatrixstory.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/24/20097:45:57AM
Bah,nowyouhavemewantingthenextchapter...
I'lltakethatasacompliment.
Bah,IwishIhadanotherchaptertogiveyou.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:aaronDATE:6/24/20097:20:51PM
itsfunnyhowonlythegoodcommentsgetpublished
Untrue.I'veonlyrejectedthreecommentorssofar,andonlybecausetheyhadnothing
toofferexceptobscene,personalattackslacedwithprofanities.
Andifyoulookcarefullythroughthehundredsofcomments,you'llseethatthereare
manythatareeitherunflattering,highlycritical,orsomewhatrude.Onlythemost
egregiouscommentshavebeenremoved.
Sothen,asfarasyourcommentgoes,I'lltakeitasthehighestofcompliments.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ashleyDATE:7/3/20096:18:20PM
Iloveit.Youwroteitperfectly.
TobehonestIdontgetwhysomepeopledontlikeit.Whenifinishedreadingitleftme
wantingmore.pleasetrytoturnthisintoamovieorjustwritea5thonesoiknowwhat
happens.Thelastbitofthewritingwithneobeingaboywasperfect.
nowmye-mailsarefilledwiththingsaboutthe4thmatrix.
Igiveita5starrating!
ashely,
Aw,shucks.I'mblushing.Stopit.You'retoomuch...toomuch.
Allkiddingaside,I'mgladitbroughtyouthatmuchjoy.
Yourcomment,"Idon'tgetwhysomepeopledon'tlikeit",well,Ithinkthereare
numerousreasonsforthat.
Somepeoplejustplainflat-outdon'tlikeit.Nothingyoucandoaboutthatone.
Somepeopledon'tlikeitbecausetheyhadanideaofwhatafourthMatrixwouldbe
andmystorydidn'tcomeanywhereclosetowhattheywereexpecting.Nothingyou
candoaboutthat,either.
Thentherearethemajorityofpeoplewholikeitalot,butstillfeelitcouldbeimproved.
Heck,evenI'minthatcategory.So,thosewhohavelotsofideasonhowtoimproveit
arereallynotdislikingit;they'rejusttryingtomakeitperfect.
And,finally,thereisthesmallbutso-much-appreciatedcategoryofpeoplelikeyourself
whodon'tthinkonewordshouldbechanged.Blessyou.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/14/200912:33:48PM
Mr.Wood,youhavedoneitbrilliantly.Ithelpstoclearupsomegapingholesand
questionsfromtheMatrixTrilogy.Ienjoyedeverybitofit.Ithasprovidedsomeground
forinterestingspeculationforfanslikeme.Withascreenplaythisgood,haveyoutried
topersuadetheWarnerBros.tomakethismovie?Foroncetheysetaboutit,theycan
putitevenmoreimpeccably.I'llbekeepingmyfingerscrossedforit.
Jaques,
Ah,"brilliantly"...ithassuchaniceringtoit.
I'vetriedtogetittothepeopleinHollywoodwhomatter,butsofar,noluck;it'sa
toughdoortocrackopen.
I'dlovetoseeitturnedintoamovie,too,butifnot,commentssuchasyoursmakethe
creationofthestoryworthwhile.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/16/20098:17:28AM
Thanksforreplying,Mr.Wood.Ihavereadthroughthestory5timesbynow,andIhave
twocomplaints.ThesmalloneisthattherearefeweractionscenesthantheTrilogy,
fromwhichIhopeyouwillfindawayout.Buttheothercomplaintisabigone--you
havegotmesoexcitedthatIcan'twaittoreadmoreandmoreabouttheSuperMatrix.
Igettheimpressionthatyoustillhavealottosay.Andonemorething,Iamreadyto
waitforyearsifnecessarytoseeyourscreenplaymadeintoamovie,evenmorethrilling
thanthepreviousthree.Thanksagainandmayyouhavealltheluckyouneed!
Mr.Wood,haveyouconsideredwritingabookonthewholestoryoftheMatrix?Of
course,thereisabighurdleintheformofcopyright.ButIthinkifyoucanfindagood
publisher,theycanhelpyousortthisout,fortheyarethepeoplewhoknowhowtoget
therightthingsfromthepeoplewhomatter(Wachowskibrothersforone,WarnerBros.
foranother).Iwishyouallthesuccessinyourquest.
Jaques,
Wow.Readit5times.That'simpressive.Andafter5readings,only2complaints?Yeah!!
That'sgood.
Yes,mystorydefinitelyveersfromtheaction-heavystoryofRevolutions.Iknewthat
wasgoingtobeastickingpointformanypeople,buttostayinthe120pagescreenplay
limitANDtofitinallthebackstory,Ihadtosacrificesomeaction.AndIfiguredthe
suspenseandtensionoftherevelationsandplottwistswouldaddenoughexcitement
andintriguethatthelesseningofactionandfightsceneswouldbeacceptable.Itwasa
hardbalance.
And,yes,manypeoplewantmore,more,more.AtthemomentI'mworkingonoriginal
material,butmaybesomedaytheurgewilljustbetoostrongandI'lllaunchbackintoit.
Asalways,notowningtherightstotheworkispersonallyadragand,ofcourse,Iain't
makin'nomullafromit.So,we'llsee.
Ihaven'tstoppedtryingtogetthisthingmadeintoamovie,butitgetsharderand
harderastimegoesby.Allfingersarecrossed,though.
Thanksforyourmusingsandsupport,PDWood
Jaques,
I'veactuallybeenworkingonthebookangleabitrecently.Iwasmorethinkingofa
graphicnovel,though,soitstaysmorelikeamovie.Ifthatpansout,I'llpostthenews
forsure.It'sprobablythemostlikelyangleongettingitoutinsomeform.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TrigDATE:7/16/20096:45:17PM
MakethisMovieNow!!
Iwillsimplydieifthisfilmdoesn'tgetmade.
Thisfilmwouldpushtheboundariestoawholenewlevelagain,evenfurtherthanthe
firstthreedid!Ifeelmorestronglyaboutthisthanthebig,mosthardcore/diehardfans
ofmichaeljacksondoabouthisdeath!!!Andthethingis,hemaynotbedeadatall;)
Trig,
Nothingwouldmakemehappierthantomakethismovienow.Ifyou'vegotthemoney
orthecontacts,I'mready.Withoutthem,though,it'sgoingtobetough.I'vetried.
But,asalways,it'sreallyhardtomakepredictions...especiallyaboutthefuture.
Thanksfortheenthusiasm,PDWood
R.I.P.MichaelJackson
Ithinkyourideaisperfectlyplausible.Writingabookisthebestthingyoucoulddoat
themomenttoattractattentionfromtheWarnerBros.Therearealotofprerequisites
tomakethismovie,(copyright,samefilmcrew,sameproducers...younameit)whichis
asortofMissionImpossiblewithoutexcellentcontactswithinHollywood.Iwouldbe
visitingthissiteeveryweektolearnaboutfurtherdevelopments.Thanksonceagain.
Wishyouallthesuccess!
Jaques,
Yourenthusiasmandpersistenceareencouraging.Butevengettingabookmadeisa
stretch.
IfImakeanyheadwaywithit,I'lldefinitelypostsomethingonthemainpageofthesite.
ThanksPDWood
TheMatrixOnlineendsonJuly31st,aftermorethanafouryearrun.Sanctionedbythe
WachowskiBrothersandoverseenbyMatrixComicsandConcretewriterPaul
Chadwick,itcomprisedafourthchapteroftheMatrixstorythatallowedforactual
involvementfromitsfans.I'mafraidanyfutureMatrixchapterthatdoesnotinclude
somereferencetotheeventsofMatrixOnlinewillnotbemuchofahitwithme.
Also,evenifyouweretogetthisgreenlit,whichI'msureyoualreadyknowishighly
unlikely,wouldyourecastalltheroles?Theoriginalactorswouldbemucholder,andit
wouldn'tseemplausiblethatnotimehadpassedbetweenyourstoryandRevolutions.
Recastingalloftheroleswouldjuststrikemeastacky.
iFiction,
AlthoughsomeofmystorywouldundoubtedlybeinfluencedbytheMatrixOnline,one
ofitsmostinterestingaspectsisalsohowwellitcanstandapartfromthewholestoryas
theWachowskibrothershaveenvisionedit.Idon'tsuggestthatmystoryisa
replacementforanythingtheydid;it'smoreofanalternateextensionandonethatI
thinkmostMatrixfanscanappreciate.Ofthe250,000visitorstothissitesofar,the
popularityratingofmystoryisinthe75%range.Mustbehittinganervesomewhere.
Isuggestyoureadit,ifnotasanauthenticextensionoftheMatrixstory,thenatleastas
analternateconcept,afurtherthought-provokingvision.
You'reprobablyright,thelikelihoodofthisbeingmadeintoamovieisslim.Theoriginal
actorsareolderandthethoughtofrecastingitwouldunderminethebeautyofthe
wholeseries.Thewaymystoryisdesigned,however,couldgivesomejustificationfor
theuseofthesameactorseventhoughtheyareolder.Still,alongshot.
Ihopeyoureadmystoryeventhoughyouhavereservationsaboutwhetheryouthinkit
wouldbeahitasamovie;IthinkyoumightappreciatethethreadofWachowskianplot
twistingthatIhavetriedtobefaithfulto.
Thanksforyourthoughts,PDWood
Verywell,Ishallwaittillthebookreallycomesout.Aboutthemoviethough,Itendto
agreewithiFiction.Still,Ihavetheconsolationofknowingthatyouaretryingyourvery
best,andexpressingmysupportforyourworkistheleastIcandoatthemoment.
Thanksamilliontimesandgoodluckinyourquest!
Jaques,
Thanksamillionforthesupport.
Abookwouldbenice,amoviebetter,butI'mprettysureiFictionisright,too.
Buty'neverknowwhatthefutureholds.
Seeya,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:7/18/20098:17:11PM
Ihavereadit,andIlikeitasascript,butnotasaMatrixscript,ifthatmakesanysense.
Goodpacing,goodplotstructure,interestingideas,butitdoesnotfeelliketheMatrix,
tome.MyhopefortheMatrixseriesisthateithertheWachowskiBrotherswrite
anotherinstallmentinsomeform,orthattheyspecificallycommissionanotherwriterto
doso.EvenifthisscriptcouldworkasaMatrixsequel,Ithinkyou'vekindofshot
yourselfinthefootbypostingitonline,astheWachowskiBrothersandWarner
BrothersalikewilllikelywanttokeeptheplotdetailsofanynewMatrixfilmunderlock
andkeyuntilthefilmactuallycomesout.
Anyway,duetotheageoftheactors,andtheeventsthathavetranspiredinMatrix
Online,IthinkanewMatrixfilmwouldhavetotakeplaceseveralyearsaftertheother
threefilms,andpossiblybethebeginningofitsownuniqueTrilogy.
Thiskindofthingmightactuallyhaveagoodchanceofhappening,asTerminator:
Salvationdidthesamething,andmetwithreasonablemonetarysuccess,thoughI
didn'tparticularlylikethefilm,myself.I'msureIwouldfeelmuchdifferently,though,
aboutanotherMatrixfilm,iftheWachowskiBrotherswerebehindit.Whatever
happens,I'mhopefulthattheMatrixwillliveon.
iFiction,
Thanksforthefollow-up;I'malwaysmoreopentopeople'sopinionswhenthey'veread
thescript.AndI'minclinedtoagreewithmostofyourcomments.
Iprobablydidshootmyselfinthefootbypostingitonline;but,atthesametime,most
ofthepeoplewho'vereadithavesaidthattheywouldstillgoseethemovie.Ithinkfew
fanswouldpassuponthechancetoseeafourthepisodeeveniftheyknewthebasic
plot.Hardtosay.
AnewuniqueTrilogysetmanyyearsaftertheoriginalcouldbeacoolidea;itwould
haveitsownroomtobreath.Nicethought.
TheonecommentIwassurprisedtohearwasthatyoudidn'tthinkmystoryfeltlikethe
Matrix.I'llconcedethatgettingitmadewiththeactorsbeingolderisalongshot,butI
thoughttheplottwistingandcharacterexpansionwasWachowskiworthy.Yes,the
actionsequencesarelessepicandtherearefewerofthem,butIstillthoughtthestory
asawholekeptwiththeMatrixthread.
But,ofcourse,everyonehastheiropinionandseesitfromadifferentangle.I'mglad
youatleastlikeditasascript,separatefromitsassociationwiththeMatrixTrilogy.
ThanksPDWood
Thereasonthatyourscriptdoesn'tquitefeelliketheMatrixtomeisthatyouarebit
loosewiththeseries'establishedmetaphors.IntheMatrixTrilogy,therearesomehuge
twiststhrownourway,butallofthemchallengeustoreinterpretwhatwe'veseen,
ratherthaninvokingretroactivecontinuitytosay"well,no,thiswasreallythis".Idon't
thinktheMatrix-within-a-Matrixideacouldeverworkwithwideraudiences.Ithinkthey
wouldfeelabitcheated:"IthoughtthatwastheRealworld..."Ithinkit'susuallybestto
challengeexpectationswithinasatisfyingstoryframework,withenoughtraditionalplot
structurenottoalienateallthefolkswhogotomoviesjusttobeentertained.In
essence,Ithinkthat'swhattheMatrixfilmshavebeenallabout.They'resomeofthe
onlydeep-thinkingfilmsinhistorywithamassiveaudience.AnewMatrixfilmwould
havetoappealtomorethanjustthehardcorefansoftheoriginalTrilogy.
Iwouldlovetoseethemovieoutinayear,butyouwouldbebetteroffwritingabook
now.Itmighttakeplentyofyearstosecurelegalrightsforyourworks.Yourbestbetis
tomakeyourversionofMatrixwithfourfilmsintheseriesatalatertime.Mayyouhave
alltheluckyouneed!
iFiction,
IthinkIgetyourpointaboutMatrixfansmaybefeeling"cheated",becausetheworld
thattheycametoseeas"real"(i.e.theZionworld),wouldnowalsoturnouttobe
"virtual"or"false".Itriedtodispelthatnotionbysuggestingthatallworldsarereal,
whethersimulated,virtual,infinitesimallysmall,cosmicallylarge,whatever.Itriedto
conveytheideathatexperienceisreality.Whetheryouexperiencesomethingina
virtualworldora"real"world,thoseexperienceseffectandmoldwhoyouare.Despite
this,though,perhapsmanyfanswouldstillfeelasenseofbeingletdown.Icanseethat.
WhatIdothinkpeopleappreciateaboutmystoryistheintensityandcomplexityofthe
eventsandthehugeleapsinstoryandcharacterdevelopment.Thisiswhatattracted
peopletotheTrilogyinthefirstplace,inmyopinion,andit'swhatmakesmanypeople
likethestoryasI'vecontinuedit.
ButitisadrasticleapfromhowtheTrilogyended.Noteveryone'scupoftea.
Yourthoughtsandspeculationsarerefreshing.Thanksforwritingback.
PDWood
Jaques,
Istillseethegraphicnovelbeingtheperfectvehiclefortellingthisstoryifthemovieis
notpossible.I'lltrythatrouteprobably.
Andasforafourpartseriesbasedonmystory,Iguessthat'spossible.Lotofwork,
though.I'llhavetogivethatsomerealthought.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MercerDATE:7/23/20095:33:34PM
Justfinishedreadingyourmatrixstorylineandamblownawaybyit.Ifeltquiteletdown
bytheendoftheMatrixtrioligy.Itdidn'tfeellikeaproperending.ThedeathofNeoand
trinity,thesentinalsjustceasingtheirattack,Neo'sbodybeingwhiskedaway.Nothing
feltright,Iwantedmore.Ineededtoknowmore.Yourinstallmentfinishesitoff
perfectly.Ilovethetwistofthematrixinalargermatrix.Thebeefingupofsomeofthe
minorcharactersfromthe3films.GivingusmoreinsightintohowtheMatrixbeganand
the36'sareareallygoodaddition.Ifthehigherpowersdonotseriouslyconsider
makingafilmoutofyourstorythentheyaretrulymad,becausethisisfarsupiourto
MatrixRevolutionsandIthinkwouldbewelcomedandwatchedbymillions.Ifworst
comestoworseandtheydon'tmakethisafilmthenicanonlythankyouforatleast
givingmeanendinginmymindthattheMatrixtrulydeserved.
Mercer,
IequateyourcommenttohowCypherdescribesNeo'spurposeintheMatrix:Amind
job!AndI'lltakeit.
Obviouslyasamoviemystorywouldhavemoreimpactthanjustascript,butthispoint
Idoubtthemoviewillevergetmade;butyou'veshownmethattheimpactofmystory
canbegoodenoughinscriptform.
I'mgladyoulikeditthatmuch.Reallymademyday.
Thankssomuch,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AbhishekDATE:8/1/20093:41:20PM
whenthismovieisgoingtobereleased?iamdyingtowatchit.plztellme.........
Abhishek,
Gladyoulikeditbut,it'sonlyascreenplayatthispoint,notevenwrittenbythe
Wachowskibrothers.
Myattemptstogetitmadehavenotsucceededatthispoint.Asmoretimepasses,the
likelihoodofitbeingmadeintoamoviediminishgreatly.Perhapsagraphicnovelisa
possibility.Onlytimewilltell.
Thanks.Peace,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DaleDATE:8/4/20098:46:04AM
HeyPDWood.
obviouslyiamalittlelatetothepartysorryboutthat;)iamonly22butihaveseenthe
trilogymoretimesthenicanrememberthereareonlyacoupleofmoviesthatican
watchoverandoveragainandthetrilogyisasetthatisitdownandrevisitatleast
everyothermonth.Yourepisode/screenplay/novelistrulyamazing!grantedatthe
beginningigotalittlelostbetweenallthedifferentmatricesbutonceireallygotintoit
itallstartedcomingtogetherandtomeyourstorygoesalmosthandinhadwiththe
movie.iwouldliketogiveasemi-comparisonnowpleasebeforeidopleasepleasedo
nottakethisthewrongwayonlygoodintentionsaremeantbutihavea2yroldson
wholovesthelionkingmoviesandalsothelk11/2andjustasthatmovieshowthe
samestorythroughadifferentsetofeyessodoesyourstorywithrespecttothetrilogyi
thinkmorepeoplewouldbeabletograspthisbetteriftheyweretothinkofitasnota
fourthmovieAFTERthetrilogypersaybutifyouinterweaveyourstorywiththetrilogy
itallreallymakessenseithinkyoudidatrulyamazingjobonthisprojectandihonestly
thinkthatithelpsexplainthetrilogyonadeeperlevelandhelpstiethewholething
together.grantedasyouhavesaidcountlesstimesomepeoplealmostseethetrilogyas
religionandcannotevenbegintofathomthepossibilityofabiggersystematwork.
Howeveribelievethatthisstorylikeisaidtieseverythingtogetheriamreallyimpressed
andveryhonoredthatiwasabletoreadsuchagreatstory.ireallyhopethatmaybe
somedayyouwillbeabletocontinueoratleastgetachancetopublishthisinamore
worldwideeffortithinkalotofpeoplewouldtrulylovetobeabletoreadthisiwillpass
thisontoallmymatrixcompanionsitrulywishyouthebestandGOODLUCK!LOVETHE
WORKpleasekeepitup!alsoijustwishtopartonalittlenoteihavewebsiteand
hosting/serverexperienceifthereisanythingyoueverneedhelpwithpleasedonot
hesitatetoemailmeandiwillhelpinanywayican.alwaysfreeofchargethankyoufor
yourhardworkandawesomeimagination!
Dale,
Toolate?Never.Nevertolatetomakemefeelgoodaboutthescript!
Ithinkyourideaofwedgingthestoryinasakindof2&1/2isnotbad,butI'llbetit
wouldirritatealotofpeople.Bywedgingitin,itmightseemlikeI'msuggestthatthe
Trilogyneedstobeopenedupandtweaked.I'drathernotdothat.I'vebeenvery
carefultotryandmaintaintheintegrityoftheTrilogyandonlyaddsomethingthatcan
standalmostonitsown,asanafterthoughtorcontinuation.
IsawtherecentmovieversionofBeowolfandthoughtmaybethatlevelofalmost
realisticcomputeranimationcouldworkformystory.Thatallowsthesameactorstodo
voicingsandsidestepstheproblemoftheagegap.Notsurehowitwouldgoover.
Iappreciateallyourthoughts,reflections,accolades,andrecommendations.ShouldI
findmyselfinneedofyourservices,letushopethatbigmoneyisrollinginsoyouwould
nothavetoworkforfree.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/5/20091:23:55PM
Thisisjustunbelievablygood.IhadheardafewrumorsfromafriendthataMatrix4
wasonthecards,soIwentonthelookoutonthenet,andbumpedheadfirstintoyour
story.IwasexceedinglydisappointedwiththewayMatrixRevolutionshadended.After
alltheWachowskishaddoneinthefirsttwo,IjustcouldnotacceptthedeathsofNeo
andTrinity.However,IturnedtoMatrixOnline,butgotevenmorefrustatedand
enraged.FragmentsofNeo?Trinityonlyaprogram?Ridiculousandutterrubbish.Your
storyshouldhavebeenTHEperfectendingasthefinalmovieintheTrilogy(Matrix
ReloadedandRevolutionswereactuallytwopartsofthesamefilm).Anyway,youhave
doneasuperbjob,somethingIhadbeenhopingforquitesometime,butthen,beinga
studentandgettinganInternetconnectiononly2monthsago,Ibegyouwouldexcuse
meforfindingyourstorysolate.Thanksforcomingupwithastorywhichhasleftme
completelysatisfied.IhopethatyourstoryisacceptedbytheWachowskis,butifnot,I
won'tmind,becauseIhavealreadyacceptedinmymindthatyourstory,andnotthatof
MatrixOnline,istheactualendingoftheMatrixseries.
Raymond,
Ican'ttellyouhowmuchIappreciateyourenthusiasm.Commentslikethismakeme
realizehowmuchwritingthestorywaswortheveryminuteofstruggle.
AndalthoughIcanunderstandyourfrustrationwiththecontinuationintheMatrix
Online,it'simportanttoneverforgetthemassiveachievementoftheWachowski
brothers.Despitesomepartsofthefranchisethatmaydisappoint,theendeavoroverall
hasmadetruebelieversoutofmillions.Forme,fewmovieshavebeensocompelling,
exciting,stunning,etcthattheywouldpushmetoinvestasmuchtimeandenergyasI
haveonmyscript.IcanonlyimaginewhattheWachowskibrothershadtogothrough
tobuildsuchagreatideawithgreatcharactersdoingincrediblethings.Massively
difficult.Theydidalltheheavyliftingandlegwork:definingtheworldanditsrules,
buildingunique,strongcharacters,visualizingvital,originalactionsequences,etc.
DespitethefactthatIjustpiggybackedontopofallthisincrediblework,I'mamazedat
howmuchofastruggleitwasformetocomeupwithmylittlestory.
So,hatsofftotheWachowskibrothersandatipofthehattomylittlebutfunaddition
totheirbrilliantvision.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/8/20094:04:34AM
Ah,IamnotunderestimatinganythingtheWachowskisdid,butIcouldnothelpthinking
thattheylosttheplotintheclosingstages.IhavealwaysregardedTheMatrixasthe
bestmovieever.Neverbeforehadamovieknockedmyheadoffmelikethisonedid.I
havereadallthescreenplaysofthefilmsintheTrilogy.Therewerejusttooless
answers,whilethequestionswerepilingupinmyhead.Andasforyourversion,Ihad
bettersayaslessaspossible,asanyadjectivesIcanthinkoffailtodescribehowmuch
joyithasbroughtme.Ihavealwaysfeltthatthiskindofstorycangoonforever,ithas
simplytoomuchpotential.Ihavebeenreadingthecommentssectionlately,andithas
answeredalmostanythingIwantedtoaskyoutoclarify.ButIwillasktwoquestions.
Firstly,haveyouhadanylucksofarformakingthemovie(thoughIadmitchancesofit
aredecreasingbythedays)?Secondly,ifnot,howfarhaveyougoneinyourideaof
writingabook?Butthen,evenifbothanswersarenegative,Iwon'tmind,Ihavealready
toldyouwhy.Thanksamillionforsuchabrilliantscreenplayandmayyouhaveallthe
successyouneed!
HaveyoutriedapproachinganyoftheactorsintheTrilogytoseewhattheythinkof
yourstory?KeanuReevesorCarrieAnnMossforinstance?Theyaretheprincipalactors
inyourstory.PerhapstheywouldmanagetoconvincetheWachowskisthatafourth
Matrixfilmshouldbemade.
Raymond,
Icanseewe'reonthesamepagewithrespectfortheWachowskibrothersandtheir
vision.
I'vetriedquitealottogetthistotheattentionofthepeoplewhomatter.Evengotitto
aprettywellknownactorinHollywood.Nothinghascomeofit.CarrieAnnandKeanu
wouldbemuchhardertoreach,Iwouldassume.NottosaythatI'vegivenup,butI'm
workingagainstthetide.
Imaypursuethebookangleabitmore.AndIwillstillworkonthemoviepossibility,
althoughmyvigorhaswanedabit.
Thanksagainforallyourencouragement.Keepthefaith.
PDWood
Thankyou,Iwouldneverloseanyfaithinyou,nomatterwhathappens.Ihavereadthe
storythricebynow,andIhaveonlyonesmallcomplaint--therearefeweractionscenes
thanintheTrilogy.Iknowyouwouldpointatthepagelimit,butanother5/6pages
can'thurt,couldit?Iameagerlylookingforwardtoreadingalotmoreofyourwork.
Andincidentally,areyouplanningtopublishthebookanytimesoon,sayinacoupleof
years?
Youseemtobeinabattlefield,yourgoalshieldedby3linesofdefence.Firstcomethe
fans,whowillthinktwiceaboutlookingatacontinuationoftheMatrixstorylinewritten
bysomeoneelse.ButgladIamtosay,youhavepenetrateditsubstantiallyandstill
goingstrong.Nextcomesthemedia,whoholdallthekeystounlockalltherightdoors.
Hereiswhereyoustandtogainplentyoflongrangeweapons.Nextcomesaseaof
defenceintheformoftheWarnerBrothers,butifyoucangetthebackingofatleast
oneprincipalactorfromtheTrilogy,youcansailthroughitsgateswithease.Thenyou
reachyourgoal--TheWachowskis.Adauntingandmonumentaltask,butIamsureyou
willtriumphintheend.LiketheKeymakersaid,allsystemshavetheirweakpoints.
Keepupthegoodworkandrememberthatthefansarealwayswithyouinyourquest.
Thankyousir,Iwon'tbelosinganyfaithinyounomatterwhat.Ithassortofreignited
mypassionfortheMatrix.Thethrillofreadingthestoryhasbeenmatchedonlybythe
shockandaweofTheMatrix.Incidentally,Ihavealittlepointtomake--couldn'tyou
incorporateabitmoreactioninyourstory?Ireallylikedyourworkonthe36's.You
would,ofcourse,pointatthedarnedpagelimit,butanother5/6pagescan'thurt,can
it?
COMMENT:AUTHOR:Mallos31DATE:8/16/20091:22:00AM
Ihaven'tquitefinishedreadingyet,butIlikeitsofar.Onlyafewproblemsthough.Ifind
attheveryleast,thebeginningismoderatelycliched,usingthesameplotastherestof
themovies.IsupposeI'mnotonetotalkyetbecauseIhaven'tfinishedreadingyetbutI
stillsayit'sgood.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AndyDATE:8/16/200911:27:28PM
HiPDWood
Firstofall,welldoneonsuchagreatworkwhichmusthavetakensometimeto
complete.IreallylovethescriptandIreaditinaboutanhourandahalf.Ihaveafew
questionshoweverregardingtheSourcewhichisthepresenttimeofhistoryaccording
toyourscript,Ireallyfeelyoushoulddescribethisworldmoreandletthereaderorthe
viewermakeapictureoftheworldthatyouaredescribing,sorrythatÂ´snotaquestion
butthisisIreallydonÂ´tgetallthenumbersthatyouhaveduringthescriptcouldyou
explainthemalittle?ThenextquestioniswherewilltherebornSmithfitin?Ireally
liketheanimatrixandthisstorydoesnotmakeanylargeconectionstothatstory.Well
asIsaidatthestartIreallyloveditandIsincerlyhopethatitcouldbedevelopedonthe
silverscreen,Iwouldonlyliketoseetheanimatrixsidedevelopedmore..........
GREATWORKANDTIMEWELLSPENT!THANKYOU
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChristinaDATE:8/17/20092:20:17PM
Giveplease.Ihavelostfriends,somebydeath.othersthroughsheerinabilitytocross
thestreet.Helpme!Icannotfindsitesonthe:Benefitcosmeticsbenetint.Ifoundonly
this-Benefitcosmeticsanimaltesting.Diggisaplaceforpeopletodiscoverandshare
contentfromanywhereontheweb.Dknysignaturebrowntotehobohandbagbag
purse.Thanks:eek:.ChristinafromVatican.
Raymond,
Iloveyourenthusiasm.Ifthereisanydefinitemovementtowardsamovieorabook,I'll
postitimmediatelyonthewebsite.Asformajorchangesoradditions,Iprobablywon't
dothemnow.Ihopethatdoesn'tdisappointtoomuch.
Keepthefaith.
PDWood
Mallos31,
Whatareyoureferringtoowhenyousaythebeginningiscliched,usesthesameplotas
theothermovies?
Yes,definitelyfinishreadingitandcomebackhereformorediscussion.
Thanks,PDWood
Andy,
Yes,theSourcewouldbenefitfrommoredescription;perhapsthatwillhappenaspart
oftheproductionofamovieorbook(i.e.inthevisualpart).Iwantedtocoveralotof
groundinthemovieandfeltthattoomuchtimedescribingoftheSourcewouldtake
away.I'llreassessthat,though.Goodpoint.
Idon'tunderstandyourquestionaboutallthenumbersduringthescript.Couldyoube
morespecific?
I'mnotsurehowtherebornSmithfitsin,butIfeltthatifNeoweregoingtobe
resurrected,itseemedalmostnecessarytoresurrectSmith(asapossiblenemesisinthe
future).Again,notsurewhattodowithitexactly.Sorryifthat'svague;itisformetoo.
Frommyscript'sperspectivetheAnimatrixstoriesareaboutthingsthathappenedin
theMatrix/Zionworld(i.e.avirtualworld).Theyhavenothingtodowiththeworldof
theSource/Cortex/Supermatrixofmyscript(i.e.therealworld).Inmyscriptthe
Animatrixstoriesaresimplymorebackstoryofthevirtualworldcreatedbythe
Architectandusedtocontrolthemachines.
AbitconvolutedbutIhopeitholdsup.
Thankssomuchfortheappreciationofmywork.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:QuintinDATE:8/19/20091:56:58PM
Hieveryone.Sometimesyoucan'tseeyourselfclearlyuntilyouseeyourselfthroughthe
eyesofothers.
IamfromRepublicandnowstudyEnglish,givepleasetrueIwrotethefollowing
sentence:"Justfyi,Ilovemacpaintpotinpainterly."
Withlove:(,Quintin.
Sorryaboutthedoublecomment.Ididn'tfindthefirstafterthedayIpostedit,soI
thoughtmybrowsermighthavesentitastray,andsentasecondone.
Ihavereadthescreenplay5timesbynow,anditsimplygetsallthebetter.ThemoreI
read,themoreIfindinitandmoredelightedIam.Fantasticjob!Ihadtriedtothinkup
howtheendshouldhavebeenafterthedisappointmentoftheTrilogy(orpseudo-
Trilogy,rather),anditwasincrediblyhard.Itwasn'tlongbeforeIgaveupindespair.
Hatsofftoyouandyourwork!Iamsureyouwillsucceedsomeday.Ihopeithappens
soonerthanlater.Iwillbewatchingthisspacealmostdaily.Goodluck!
Sorry.Iwasoutoftown.
Ithinkyou'rethefirstpersontohavereaditfivetimes(otherthanmeofcourse).There
aredefinitelylayersandnuancesthatgetuncoveredthemoretimesyoureadit.I
recommendtworeadsattheleast.Thefirstreadorientsyoutothestoryasawholeand
isspentmostlykeepingthecharactersandtimelinesstraight.Thesecondreadletsyou
movethroughthestoryquicklywhileatthesametimeallowingyoutoconcentrate
moreonthehiddenlayers.
Nicetoknowthatafifthreadstillholdsyourinterest.
Thanksagainforallthepraise.
PDWood
Mr.Wood,haveyoutriedsendingthescreenplaystraighttoWarnerBros.?Ifyouhave,
whathascomeofit?PardonmeifIamsoundingtoonaive,buthowaboutpublishingan
openlettertotheWachowskisinanewspaper?Perhapsitcouldmakethemsitupand
takenotice.
Andonequestion:IfSmithstartscloninghimselfintoeveryoneintheMatrixasbefore,
howisthejuniorNeogoingtostophim?IshegoingtobefreedfromtheMatrixby
Morpheusashefreedhisfather?OrwouldNeoseniorgoforalimitedtimemission
backintheMatrixtoteachhissonhowtohandleallthat?
Anyway,thanksforsucharefreshinglyentertainingstory.Iwillbecominghere
daily(unlessofcoursemyserverhangsup).Goodluck!
Raymond,
SendingitdirectlytoWarnerBrothersisthesameasthrowingitinthetrash;withoutan
insiderorapersonofcloutrecommendingit,noonewillreadit.Andasfarasanopen
letterinanewspaper,that'salittletooforward.Iprefersomethingmorediscreetand
lessconfrontational.Thisisafterallnotmystory.Ifit'sgoingtohappen,itwillhappenin
thebackcorridors(nopunintended).
Asforwherethestorycouldgo,Ireallyhaven'tgiventhatmuchthought.Thereare
manyoptionsobviously.Ifmyoriginalstorygarnersinterestfromtheindustry,I'dbe
gladtoextendit.Butuntilthen,I'mcontenttoleaveitasitis.
Isenseyouwouldlikeanongoingdialogue,butIdon'treallythinkthere'sthatmuch
moreIcantellyouthatisn'talreadyinthecommentssectionsomewhere.I'llbesureto
postanydevelopmentsdirectlyonthehomepageofthewebsite,sorestassuredthat
youwillbekeptinformedifanythingneworexcitingtranspires.
Thanksagainforyourinterestandenthusiasm.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:OlaDATE:8/24/20098:42:26AM
Goodevening.Ifyourefusetobemadestraightwhenyouaregreen,youwillnotbe
madestraightwhenyouaredry.Helpme!Ithastofindsitesonthe:Soldcoachresort
opartmadisoncosmeticcase..Ifoundonlythis-[URL=http://www.hockenheimclassics.de/Members/Benefit/benefit-cosmeticsbonus]benefitcosmeticsbonus[/URL].
Viewdealbodycollectionsmallcroceff.Buynowamazonmarketplace,starsseeall
timeratings,new.;-)Thanksinadvance.OlafromJamaica.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DrewDATE:8/25/200910:03:53AM
Ok,admittedly,Ionlyreadthefirst6or7pagesbutthat'sreallyallIcouldtake.Sorry.I
donotmeantodiscourageordisrespectbutIjustcan'treadmore.Thesecharacters
mayhavethesamenamesbutthesejustarenotthesamepeople.You'vedonea180on
everybody'spersonalityandthat'sjustdownrightunbelievable.LockandMarovingian
suddenlyfriendly?Humansnaivelytrustingthetyrannical,destructivemachineswithout
ashredofdoubt?ThemachinesNOTbetrayingmankindthoughthatwouldseemthe
logicalthingtodo?Plusonesidenotesinceyouseemtobeaskingforconstructive
criticism:Moredialogue;everythingistoobrief.Goodluck.
Drew,
Iadmitthestoryhassomeproblems,butIreallythinkyoushouldreadtherest.Alot
happensandsomeofthethingsyoudon'tunderstandgetexplained.Andthedialogue
picksupquiteabitjustafewpagesfurtheron.
Ihopeyoucomebackandgivemefeedbackonthewholescript,positiveornegative.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DupreeWestDATE:8/27/20097:28:59AM
OMG!!!!
ilovediteveryfreakinpage.itexplainsdamnneareverythingthattheycouldn'tfitinto
thefirst3films,plusitopensseveralnewdoorsformoremovies.pageturner!!!!
Onesuggestion,leaveoutthe"supermatrix"name.findanotherphrase.
pleasewhoeverhasthepowertomakethisintofilm....DOITNOW!!!
Dupree,
Thanksfortheglowingendorsement.
IdidchangethetitleofthescripteventhoughIstillcallthebiggerMatrixthe"Super
Matrix".Youdon'tthinkthat'senough?
Anyway,lovetheenthusiasticresponse.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:softwaredevelopmentlondonDATE:8/28/20093:04:47PM
Verynicestory!Iquiteenjoyeditandfeelsomecomfortoutofthestoryandwhereit
leftoff.Interestingcharacterstabilitywithlockneoandmorpheus.Whenthe'super
matrix'ideawassubmitteditseemedprettyfar-fetchedandiwasgoingtoclosethis.I
haveitafewmorescenesandwascapturedbythestory-line.Goodreadfortheopen
minded!
Thanksforbringingthisup
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:8/28/20094:32:51PM
Lies.
Anonymous,
Notsurewhatyou'rereferringto.Partsofthescript?Surprises,yes,deceptions,sure,
illusions,okay...butlies?AtanyrateIprefertheterm"falsehoods",butIstilldon'tsee
howitpertainstomyscript.
Perhapsyouarereferringtothesupineposition,no?Ilikeagoodnap,too.
PDWood
I'mgladyougotpasttheSuperMatrixname.That'snolongerthetitleofthescript;got
toomuchbadpress.
Letmeknowwhatyouthinkinmoredetailwhenyoufinishthescript(ifyouareso
inclined).
Thanksforthethumbsup.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:adrianDATE:8/29/20098:13:40PM
dudeitsgoodbutitsgottamakesense.trywritingabouttheelderonesandhowthey
allfailedthesameway.uknowlikethewaytheyshotvantagepointmovie.thiscould
bebrilliantlyshot.itsgonnabeimpressiveifuwritethatstory.
adrian,
Idon'tquitefollowyoursuggestion.TheelderonesinZion?Howdidtheyallfailthe
sameway?
Letmeknow.Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RicardoDATE:9/1/20098:50:09AM
Couldyouhelpme.WhenIcamebacktoDublinIwascourtmartialedinmyabsenceand
sentencedtodeathinmyabsence,soIsaidtheycouldshootmeinmyabsence.
IamfromMaltaandlearningtospeakEnglish,pleasetellmerightIwrotethefollowing
sentence:"Kadient,passedin1994,benefitsaleadscompanybusinessthatrefersthe
varietyofexpensessales,airforcebdusales."
Thanks8-).Ricardo.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AdenaDATE:9/3/20099:41:33PM
GoodDay.Nothingcontributessomuchtotranquilizingthemindasasteadypurpose-
apointonwhichthesoulmayfixitsintellectualeye.Helpme!Cannotfindsitesonthe:
Forworkplaceproducts,thedistributionfileisonewheretworoutesarearrivingeach
influential,butarefoundedbyorder,drug,orday,astellessalesforce..Ifoundonlythis
-[URL=http://www.ebc.com.br/Members/Sales]Salesforcesupport[/URL].Williams,
smithbarneyandcommercialcredit.Themarketingperpartydistributedby33interest
andtheforceperimplicationbeganbyalsohumanas55inventory.Thanks:o.Adena
fromIreland.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DonaldDATE:9/6/20095:27:27AM
Ithinkyoushouldsticktowritinghorrorfilmsandpornflicks.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PabloDATE:9/19/200912:03:36AM
thereshouldbeanothermatrixmovie
You'renotgoingtogetanyargumentfromme
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronHastingsDATE:9/22/20097:31:02PM
BRILLIANT!P.D.Woodhascreatedacompellingsequel,acontinuumofincreasing
perspectivethatbridgestheoriginalMatrixTrilogywhileadroitlyelevatingthestoryina
mannerthatisatoncesurprisingandutterlynatural.Wearerelievedbysufficient,yet
appropriatelyincomplete,resolutionofmanydanglingplotlines,andthedialogueand
characterdevelopmentare,inmyopinion,superb.
Mostofthecriticism(inthecommentsabove)lacksunderstandingoftheunderlying
metaphoroftheMatrix,orelseconflatestheelementsofthescreenplaywithother
genres.Thescreenplayobviouslyforgoesthedegreeofdetailnecessaryinthenovel,
sinceunlikethenovel,whereintheentirenarrativemustbefullycontainedintext,the
screenplayinsteadmustleavelatitudeandlicensetothedirector,editor,actors,and
cinematographertoadddetail,aswellastoshapethestorywithnuance,inflection,
expression,andothersemioticmarkersthatconveymeaning.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronHastingsDATE:9/22/20097:32:15PM
TheapparentpremiseoftheMatrixisclassicallyexistential:Theaimistoquestion
reality,tolookbehindthemirrors,andtoprojectmeaningontoanotherwise
meaninglessworldthroughmasteryoftheselfachievedthroughtheauthenticexercise
offreewill.
Morpheus:"Doyoubelieveinfate,Neo?"Neo:"No."Morpheus:"Whynot?"Neo:
"BecauseIdon'tliketheideathatI'mnotincontrolofmylife."Morpheusthen
describestheexistentialangstthathasdrivenNeotosearchforhim:"Letmetellyou
whyyou'rehere.You'reherebecauseyouknowsomething.Whatyouknowyoucan't
explain,butyoufeelit.You'vefeltityourentirelife,thatthere'ssomethingwrongwith
theworld.Youdon'tknowwhatitis,butit'sthere,likeasplinterinyourmind,driving
youmad.Itisthisfeelingthathasbroughtyoutome."
Oncefreed,NeoischallengedbyaPostmodernMorpheus,whoquestionsthevery
preceptsofrealism:
"Whatisreal?Howdoyoudefinereal?Ifyou'retalkingaboutyoursenses,whatyou
feel,taste,smell,orsee,thenallyou'retalkingaboutareelectricalsignalsinterpreted
byyourbrain."
Atlast,Neoisconfrontedwiththestarkhorrorandmeaninglessnessoftherealworld
throughdirectperception:
"Welcometothedesertofthereal,"saysMorpheus,inaphraseliftedverbatimfrom
JeanBaudrillard,"Simulations."
Previously,MorpheussaidtoNeothathehasthelookofamanwhoacceptswhathe
seesbecauseheisexpectingtowakeup,butnowawake,Neo'sfirstimpulseistoflee
andtodenythetruthofwhatheseesratherthansuccumbtotheexistentialdespair
suchtruthsurelyentails.Ofcourse,Neograduallyacceptsthehideousreality,and
throughtheremainderoftheTrilogyendeavorstodiscoverhisownauthenticexistence.
Thisoutlinegenerallyfollowstheessentialcontoursofmuchoftheanalysisonefindsin
theliterature.TheMatrix,thoughapparentlyreal,isillusoryandtemporary,andthis
constructthusevincesamuchdeepermetaphor.
Morpheus:"[TheMatrix]...istheworldthathasbeenpulledoveryoureyestoblindyou
fromthetruth."Neo:"Whattruth?"Morpheus:"Thatyouareaslave,Neo.Thatyou,
likeeveryoneelse,wasbornintobondage...keptinsideaprisonthatyoucannotsmell,
taste,ortouch.Aprisonforyourmind."
InVedantaphilosophy,theatma,ortrueself,isdescribedasindestructibleandeternal,
thoughfiniteandthuspronetoillusion.Thedefiningsymptomoftheatmais
consciousness.Thematerialworldiscalledmaya(illusion,thatwhichisnot),andis
describedasaprisonfortheconditionedatma,whichbecomesincreasinglybewildered
andentangledthroughperpetualcontactwithmaterialnature.Suchbewilderment
causestheatma,orlivingentity,tomisidentifythebodyasself,thisworldasreality,
andthislifeasall.
Morpheus:"TheMatrixisasystem,Neo.Thatsystemisourenemy.Butwhenyou're
inside,youlookaround,whatdoyousee?Businessmen,teachers,lawyers,carpenters.
Theverymindsofthepeoplewearetryingtosave.Butuntilwedo,thesepeopleare
stillapartofthatsystem,andthatmakesthemourenemy.Youhavetounderstand,
mostofthesepeoplearenotreadytobeunplugged.Andmanyofthemaresoinured,
sohopelesslydependentonthesystem,thattheywillfighttoprotectit."
BhagavadGita:"Bewilderedbythemodesofmaterialnature,theignorantfullyengage
themselvesinmaterialactivitiesandbecomeattached.Butthewiseshouldnotunsettle
them,althoughthesedutiesareinferiorduetotheperformers'lackofknowledge.
"Morpheus:"IfeelthatIoweyouanapology.Thereisarulethatwedonotfreeamind
onceitreachesacertainage.Itisdangerous.Theyhavetroublelettinggo.Theirmind
turnsagainstthem.I'veseenithappen.IbroketherulebecauseIhadto."
IntheBhagavadGita,theatmaislikenedtoabirdsittingonthetreeofthebody,
partakingofitspoisonousfruits,andtherebycausingitsowntransmigrationfromtree
totree:
"Asapersonputsonnewgarments,givingupoldones,similarly,thesoulacceptsnew
bodies,givingupoldanduselessones...Thelivingentityinthematerialworldcarrieshis
differentconceptionsoflifefromonebodytoanother,astheaircarriesaromas...[A]ll
livingentitiesarebornintodelusion,overcomebythedualitiesofdesireandhate."
Beyondthetemporaryandmiserableworldofmaya,however,existsanotherworld:
"Yetthereisanothernature,whichiseternalandistranscendentaltothismanifested
andunmanifestedmatter.Itissupremeandisneverannihilated.Whenallinthisworld
isannihilated,thatworldremainsasitis."
IntheoriginalTrilogyandparticularlyinMatrixResurrected,weareallowedtotraverse
notmerelythebarriersoftimeandspacebutthosethatseparateentireworldsand
realities.
Aaron,
Thanksforsuchaneloquentandupliftingreviewofmywork.Thepointsyoumake,"at
oncesurprisingandutterlynatural"and"sufficient,yetappropriatelyincomplete,
resolution"and"superbdialogueandcharacterdevelopment"couldnotbeanymorein
linewithmyintentionsordesiredreactionsforwritingthestory.Cheers!
Yes,thedifferencesbetweennovelsandscreenplaysaremanyandyou'veclarified
thosedifferencesnicely.Ithinkit'shardformanypeopletotransitionfromnovel
readingtoscreenplayreadingandnotfeellikemuchhasbeenleftout.But,asyousay,
thosedetailsaremeanttobelefttothedirector,actors,editors,etc.Forthe
screenwritertoputthosedetailsinascreenplayisconsideredaninsulttothosevery
peoplewhoseresponsibilityitistoimplementthem.
Besides,screenplaysareshort,relatively.Maximumeffectthroughminimumwordsis
thekey,sobettertoleavethoseotheraspectsofthemovietootherprofessionals
anyway.
Thanks,PDWood
Aaron,
AnicemeditationonthephilosophiesthattouchupontheMatrix.
I'vestatedthisbefore,butI'llreiterateitagain,asIthinkitbearskeepinginmind(and,
ofcourse,thisisjustmyhumbleopinion).
Truthandrealityareaconsequenceofexperiencealone.Whateveryouexperience,
affectsyou;whateveraffectsyou,isreal.TheillusoryMatrixworldthatNeogrewupin,
formedhim:hispersonality,hisbeliefs,likesanddislikes.Certainlylessinfluentialonhis
characterdevelopmentforthemajorityofhislifewashisexistenceinamachinepod,
andyet,thatisconsideredtherealworld.So,whichwasmoreexperiential,orshouldI
say,morereal.TheMatrix,Iwouldsubmit.
Dreams,hallucinations,virtualworlds,heaven,hell,lifeonEarth,Horton's
infinitesimallysmallworldonadustspec-they'reallrealANDallequallydemandingof
ouracknowledgmentandrespect.
Justmytwocents.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerovingianDATE:9/24/20097:31:01PM
FormetheMerovingianwasthefirstONE,nowassumingthatNeoisalive,andIam
prettysureheis,bothcanfightthemachines.
Ifyoureadit.letmeknowyourthoughts.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RajneeshDATE:9/27/20099:39:37PM
Ilikeyourconcept.
Ithinkitmakesabetterbookthanamovie.
IwouldhavelikeamoredefiniteendingIamassumingthatyoutooareintheprocess
ofmakingatrilogy.
PersonallyIwouldhavemadethedateinthefuturealotlotlongerthan2249.
IthinkonethingmissinginallstoriesoftheOneisthePresenceofGod.Theoneis
ultimatelychosenbyGodtorestorebalancetothisworld...justastheCreatorbattlesto
restoreorderinanotherworld.Scripturally,Godvssatin.
IfIcouldwriteIwouldwriteaboutastorywhereNeogoesthroughlayersofreality
attainingpowersinalluntilheachievestheabilitytokillevilitselfandreturnthe
universetoaperfectstateatypeofHeaven.
Forthemostpartgoodjob.
Rajneesh,
Yeah,abook,maybeagraphicnovel,wouldbecool.
Sorry,Idon'thaveanyplansforatrilogy.Atleastnotyet.
Imighthavetriedputtingmystoryfatherintothefuture,butthenmyfeelingisthat
humanitywouldhaveadvancedtoofarformystorytooccurthewayitdid.Then,of
course,nobodyknowswhatthefuturewilllooklike;butIhadtomakeanassumption
aboutwhatviewers/readerswouldaccept.Thatwasmyrationaleforhavingmystory
occurwhenitdid.
IreallylikeyourideaofhavingNeocontinuethroughlayersuntilhehasGod'spower
andrestoringtheworldtoastatebeforeevilexisted.It'sacoolideaevenifitisn'tpart
oftheMatrixstory.
Thanksforthefeedback.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:chrisburdgeDATE:10/21/200912:57:14AM
icannotbelivethataremakingamatrix4aferneodiedihopeitisgoodbecauseiwhat
toseeit
Chris,
TheyarenotmakingamovieasfarasIknow.Whatyouhavehereisafan-fiction,spec
scriptthatwaswrittenforfun(andtheveryoffchanceofbeingproduced).Iwouldlike
toseeit,too,butatthispoint,readingthescriptistheclosetyou'regoingtocometoa
Matrix4.
Hopeyoulikeit.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MasonDATE:10/21/20096:21:34PM
Idon'tknowifyoulotagree,buttheMatrixTrilogyWasLegendary.butasithinkmany
ofyouwillagree,iwouldkillforanotherchapter.Morpheusbased,maybehisback
story.OrtheRobotsdecidetheyweren'tfinished.Orsomthingallongthoselines.Or
TheysaidNeowouldbebornagainandagain,maybemorpheuscouldenterthematrix
onemoretimetofindthenewtrinityandneo.Youknow,sotheydontdieinthevery
end?
Anyway...
MATRIXRULES!
Mason,
Fromwhatyou'vewritten,Idoesn'tlooklikeyoureadthescript.Thereis,indeed,
anotherchapterinit.Isuggestyougiveitawhirl;youmightbesurprised.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:jaysharpeDATE:10/24/200912:36:45AM
iamabitconfusedbecausethematrixendedthewayitshouldofendedevenifit
wasn'tthestrongestsequelintheworld.butdon'tgetmewrong,yourscriptwasgood,
muchbettertheniexpectedanditcouldbeamatrix4.butican'tseeithappening.and
ifitdoeshappen,itwouldbeastrungoutmovie,ithink.
butidohavetosayyoucanwriteonehellofascript.ididenjoyit.youcouldhavea
futureinmoviemaking.
Jay,
IseeyourpointaboutafourthMatrixstringingthingsout,giventhattheWachowskis
formallyendedtheserieswiththethirdmovie.Butyouhavetoadmitthatthe
charactersandstorylinestheysetupleftsomuchroomformore,interesting
development.Thatwasmymotivationtowritemyscript;Ijustsawsomuchmorecool
stuffhappening.
Consideringyourreluctancetoseetheneedforacontinuationofthestory,andinlight
ofthefactthatyoulikedmystorydespitethatreluctance,onlymakesmefeelagreater
senseofaccomplishment.Itprobablywillremainascriptandnothingmore;butinthis
formitstillhashadalastingandappreciatedimpact.I'lltakeyourcomment,"youcan
writeonehellofascript"asanothernodtowardskeepingthemystiquealive.
Thanksforthecomments.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:tracyDATE:10/26/20094:15:05AM
ilovethescriptyoudidofthematrixfour.theonlythingididn'tlikewasyouhadneo
haveagirlfriendfromhispastanditlookslikethekidshehasishis.iwouldlikeitbetter
ifsomehowtrinityandneohadakid.itwouldmakethestorybetter.
greatworkthough.itmustoftookyoudaystowritethis.
doyouknowifthere'sanynewsonamatrix4comingout?alliheararerumors.
Tracy,
Itcertainlywouldbeamorecleanandpalatablescenario,NeoamdTrintiyhavingthe
child.It'sdefinitelymoreedgy-feelingthathe'shadachildwithaformergirlfriend.But
keepsthetensionhigher,though.
I'mgladyoulikedtherestofit.And,yes,ittookmany,many,manydaystowrite.
AsfarasIknow,thereisnoMatrix4intheworks.Butit'shardtopredictthefuture;you
neverknow.
Thanksforthethumbsup.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JeremyDATE:11/5/20099:58:20AM
Coolstorybutnegligibleonphilosophy.
Everythingthathasabeginninghasanend.-TheOracle
WhatisthepointofTheMatrixtrilogy.
Thepointisthis.
Zionhasbeendestroyed6times.TheMatrixhasbeendestroyed6times.
Andsowheredoesthisleadtoo.
Endlessdestructionandrebirth.
WhenNeofellinlovewithTrinitythiscyclewasbroken.
ThetruthofTheMatrixwasreveledtoeveryoneinsideofit.
ConcurrentlyTheSource"Theanomaly"thathadonlybeenembeddedinTheOnehas
spreedtoallhumansinTheMatrix.
AndyettheMachinesandtheArchitectstilldonotknowthemeaningofchoice.
WhyMr.Anderson,Whydoyoupersist.-Smith.
BecauseIchoosetoo.-Neo
NeochosetodieinplaceofMorpheusinEnterTheMatrix.
HeChoseTrinityoverHumanityinTheMatrixReloaded.
HechoseHumanityoverHimselfinMatrixRevolutions.
Jeremy,
I'mgladyouthoughtitwascool,butIwasalsosurprisedthatyouthoughtitwas
negligibleonphilosophy.
Iwouldsaythatthephilosophicalpunctuationofmystoryisintheyet-even-deeper
layerofmeaningandrealitythatNeoencounters.Heistestedyetagain,andinasense,
findsinnerpeaceinthenewworld.Anditissuggestedbutnotoutwardlystatedthat
thisnewworldinwhichhefindshimselfisjustanotherlayerofreality,perhapsavirtual
oneoryetjustanother,deeperlayerofreality.Buttherealphilosophicalawakeningis
thatNeoacceptsitwhole-heartedly.Asortofnirvana,Iguess.
But,ofcourse,thisisjustmyauthorialjustification,mypointofview.
Gladyoulikethestoryotherwise;andthanksforthediscussion.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:sergeyDATE:11/7/20097:57:00PM
YouwroteaREALLYniceandinterestingscript.
ThereareaboutthreewaystomakethisscriptbeTheMatrix4movie:
1)YoutrytosellthescripttooneoftheWarnerbrothersscriptwriters.(Alittleillegal).
TheywillpresentittoWarnerbrothersastheirsandWarnerbrothersmightmakea
movieoutofit.Illegalbecauseyouarenotallowedtosellthatscriptwiththename
MatrixandwiththecharacternamesbecauseitsthepropertyofWarnerbrothers.But
bythischoiceyougetmoneyandenjoythemovie.
2)YoucontactWarnerbrothersdirectlyandgivethemyourscriptasanexamplefor
Matrix4(forfree).Theymightmakesomechangesandmakeamovieoutofit.Bythis
choiceyoudon'tgetanythingandyoucanjustenjoythemovie.
3)(THEHARDEST)YougetajobthroughWarnerbrothersasascriptwriter.Thenbring
upyourscriptandshowittoyourbossatWarnerbrothers.Ifheaccepts,hewillhandit
overtotheexecutivesandtheywillmakethemovie.Bythischoiceyougetmoney,your
nameinthescriptasawriterattheendofthemovieandajobatwithWarnerbrothers.
4)THEREISALSOAREALLYHUGE4CHOICE.
MakemillionsofpeoplewriteorcometoWarnerbrothersofficesandgiveorsend
themtheexactsamescript.(Thescriptyouwrote).Theywillseethattherearereally
manypeopleinterestedinthatscriptandthat,iftheymakethemovie,theywillgettons
ofmoney.Notlongafter,theywillstartmakingthemovie.(Icouldhelpyouwiththis
choice).
Thanksforreading.
HopeIhelpedyouandthemovieisgoingtobeoutsoon.=D
SorryformybadEnglish.
Sergey,
Iloveyourideasaboutgettingthescriptturnedintoamovie.Thefirsttwooptions,I've
tried(i.e.gettingittoWarnerbrothersortheWachowskibrothers).Mucheasiersaid
thandone.Andnolucksofar.
Thethirdoptionisnotreallyanoptionformeatthistime.And,asyousay,it'salsothe
hardest.
Thefourthoptionisthemostpractical.Byallmeans,anyonewhosegametotry,I'm
readytogiveathumbsup.ButIdon'thaveacontactpersontosenditto.Ifsomeone
knowssomeoneontheinsideofWarnerbrotherstosenditto,pleaseletmeknow.
Thanks,PDWood
P.S.Gladyouenjoyedthestory.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:georgeDATE:11/12/20091:45:55AM
Ijustreadthescriptandimustsayitwasagreat2hourwalkbacktotherootsofthe
matrix...Iwon'ttellyouhowamazingthiswas,causehonestlyithinkthisstorylinesucks
balls...butyouhavesomegreatlinesinthereandsomeprettyawesomeideas...hada
similarideatotheonewherehumanityisactuallytheoneresponsibleforthecreation
ofthematrix,butforthesakeofit'sownsurvivalfromthemselvesandwantedtoput
thatintoacomicbookstoryofsomesortcoupleyearsago.Didn'twork:)butiamstillup
forworkingonitifanygoodstorylikethisonecomesonthehorizon...doyouhave
anythingelsewritten?I'dlovetocheckitout!Cheers!!!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MainahDATE:11/12/20092:31:24PM
Iwaswonderingifthisscriptwouldbeavailabletobeusedbysomemiddleschooland
highschoolstudentshereinMaine.Wewillnotbemakinganymoneyonsuchaproject
thatIforesee,Ifwedecidetosellcopiesorsaidmovieorsuch,ofcoursewewillshare
anyprofits(50/50)?Butthecostofsuchdiskswouldbeminimalifatall.
Wemightalsojustusescenes.Wouldthisbeokaywithyou?Weareasmallruraltown
withverylimitedbudget,sowewillnotbeabletodojusticetothemovie,butwewill
dojusticetothecharacters,plot,andstoryline.
Pleaseletmeknowyourthoughts.
Thanks!
george,
Thanksforreadingthescript.I'mguessingyoulikeditfromyourcomment,"imustsayit
wasagreat2hourwalkbacktotherootsofthematrix",butthenyousay,"Iwon'ttell
youhowamazingthiswas,causehonestlyithinkthisstorylinesucksballs".Kindofa
mixedreview,butI'lltakeitasoverallpositive.
AtthemomentIdon'thaveanythingelsesignificanttopresenttopeopleforreading,
butwhenIdo,I'llbesuretopostit.
Thanks,PDWood
Mainah,
Notsureexactlywhatyouhaveinmind;couldyoubemorespecificintermsofwhat
you'dliketodowiththescript?
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JaredDDATE:11/15/20097:01:45PM
WhileIappreciatetheeffort,IhavetosayIdidnotenjoythescript.
TheideasIliked:Asystemofcontrolwithinasystemofcontrol.Ilikedthismainly
becauseitcouldexplainhowNeohadsupernaturalabilitiesevenwhennotJackedinto
theMatrix.
AgentSmithgainingcontrolofmachinesinthe"realworld".
Yourabilitytodescribeactionsequencesinawaythatmadethemeasytovisualize.I
wasabletocreatethesescenesinmyheadquiteeasilythankstoyourdetails.
Unfortunatelythelistendshere.
ThingsIdidn'tlike:Thedialog.75%ofitsoundedasifthecharacterwouldnotsaysuch
things.Thisreallyputadamperonthebelievabilityofthescript.
Thosemodel36androids.Theirexistencegenerallybotheredme.Andtheirstory
seemedquitevague.
Allofthefamily-tiesyoucreated.Thisideajustmademecringe.Suddenlycharactersin
theMatrixwererelatedtoeachotherinwaysthatdidnotmakeanyrealsensebased
onthewaythey'veactedtowardseachotherinthescopeofthemovies.InRevolutions
TrinitywasgoingtoshoottheMerovingianintheheadatpoint-blankrange.Despite
youraddedexplanationaboveofhernotretainingmemoryoftheirfamilyties,would
thearchitectbeokwithallowinghisgranddaughtertokillhissonandherfather?
BringingoneofNeo'sex-girlfriendsintothepictureseemsentirelyunnecessary.Idon't
careifshehasapurposeinthesequeltothisscript,ashintedatinthelastfew
sentences.WhybringinapastloveofMrAnderson?
Toomanyflashbacks.Amoviewiththismanyflashbacksfailsatbeingthenextstepof
anystory.You'vebasicallywrittenaprequeltotheMatrixtrilogy.Butnooneneedsto
knowanythingaboutthatwhenwealreadyknowthatZionhasbeendestroyedand
rebuiltmultipletimes.Therehasbeennumerousincarnationsof"TheOne".Therewasa
warofhumanityagainstthemachines.ThisknowledgeshouldclosethebooksonMatrix
prequels.Theanimatrixdidanicetwoparterabouttheaforementionedwaritself.
PersonallyIbelieveitshouldbeleftatthat.
TheonlythingthatmakesthisgenerationoftheMatrixanydifferentisthatthistime
Zionwasn'tdestroyed.ThisIbelieveshouldbeexpandedupon.Notthepastofthe
Matrix.
I'mreallythinkingNeoshouldstaydead.HemergedhimselfwithAgentSmith,andwas
destroyed.Theend.AgentsexisttodeleteprogramsthatareathreattotheMatrix,and
tokillrebels.Thatinitselfhashugepotential.
Again,Iappreciatetheeffort.ButIfeeltheMatrixmythosshouldhaveevolvedina
differentdirectionthanwhatyouhavebroughttolighthere.
Asuggestion:Moreupsidedownfighting.Hadthecreatorsextendedthatfightsceneat
theentrancetoclubHelbetweenSeraph,therebels,andtheclub-goers(whichIcan
onlyassumewererogueprogramsduetotheirgravitybendingabilities),themovie
wouldhavedonebetter.
Thankyouforallowingmetobecritical.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:XenithDATE:11/15/20099:58:04PM
Anyupdateonthis?Enjoyedtheread!
HiXenith,
Lucrative,no.Appreciated,yes.I'vehadover250,000visitsandthevoteshavebeen
75%positive,10%neutraland15%negative.I'mprettyhappyoverallfromthat
response.
AttemptstogetthescripttopowerfuldecisionmakersinHollywoodhaveproved
ineffectivesofar.Butgoodnewscanpopupanytime,Isuppose.Ikeepmyfingers
crossed.Ifyouhaveanygoodcontacts,pleaseletmeknow.
Andthanksforcheckingin.
PDWood
JaredD,
Yourcritiqueishonestandbalanced;Itakenoumbrage.
Thedialoghashadsomenegativereviews,butoverallpeopleseemtothinkithasfit
withthecharacters.Ican'tsaywhysomelikeitandsomedon't;it'saverypersonal
assessment,Iguess.Sorryitdidn'tgelforyou.Itwouldputadamperonthe
continuationofastoryforme,too.
The36storyisabitvague,buttherewasonlysomuchroominthisscript.Itwasmeant
togiveatasteoftheirexistenceanddilemma.Thereaders,Iwashoping,woulduse
theirimaginationfortherest.PerhapsIfellshorthere.
Yeah,thefamily-tiesidea,Ithinkthat'sjustahitormissidea.Eitheryoulikeitoryou
hateit.ItchangessomuchabouttheMatrixstory,eitheryouembraceitasanother
huge,profound,mind-numbingrealizationoryoufeelitcheapensthecharactersthe
waytheywereintheTrilogy.Again,anothermissforyou.
Thegirlfriendthingcouldbedispensedwith.Itputspeopleoff.TheideathatNeohas
hadarelationshipwithanotherwomanotherthanTrinityandthattherelationship
createdhischild,that'sjustapossibilitymanypeopledon'tlike.I'vethoughtabout
removingit.Notsureyet.
TheAnimatrixisdescriptiveofwhathappenedbeforetheMatrix,butformystory,it's
justanotherfabricationoftheSupermatrixandthereforehasnobearingontherealwar
asIdescribeitinmystory.
IthinkmaybeIbitoffmorethanIcouldchewwithmyscript.Itreallytriestotacklea
prequelandsequelinonemovieandbydoingso(withalltheflashbacksandsuch)it
losessomeclarityandlinearity.Hardtoknowwhatmighthavebeenabetterapproach.
Ididlimittheamountoffightinginthisscript,mostlybecauseofallthegroundIwas
tryingtocover.Forsomethat'sadrag.Moreupside-downfightingiswhatit'sallabout.
ButIalsofeltthattheMatrixstoryrevolvedaroundmyth,discovery,surprise,
introspection,etc.Forthatreason,Ithinkthelackofmorefightingisn'ttotally
incongruous.
Thanksforthein-depthanalysisandfrankopinions.Itakethemmoretoheartwhen
theirdeliveredinathoughtfulandhonestway,eveniftheoverallreviewisunfavorable.
PDWood
Mr.Wood,
Gosh,youknowIfoundthissiteandscriptyoucreatedbackinAprilandwroteacouple
ofcomments,(onewasquiteforwardandstrangetomost)butI'vereadmore
commentssincethen.IrealizedsomethingasIreadthemandlaughedoutloud-there
aresomanywithsuchconfusingjuxtapositionswithinthecomment,Idon'tknowhow
youstaypatient.There'snoneedtoevenbegininexplainingthegrammaticalerrorsand
sloppyfragmentedsentences.Idon'tknowhowyoudoit.Itmustbenicetocome
acrossacommenteverynowandagainfromaneducatedreaderIsuppose.Abreathof
freshair,sotospeak.
Ah!ShallItellyouandthefanssomethingthatdidoccurtomethough?Ican'tbelieveI
didn'tthinkofthisbefore.AsIreadthecomments,Inoticedthatyou'reinfactinneed
ofanyhelpatall.ItjustsohappensIwaspartofamulti-milliondollarworldtour
productionoftheSoldierShowin2006.Thiswasamilitaryfundedevent,andIbecame
reallygoodfriendswiththecivilianDirector.Wellhe'ssinceleftArmyEntertainmentat
FortLewis,andwentbacktoproducing.He'scurrentlyfinishingthecontractswith
startingarealitybasedshowforsoldiersintheArmy,(he'sbeensettingitupfora
coupleofyearsnow,butthePentagonhashadaproblemwiththeArmybeing
misrepresentedinanywaybyanoutsidemediation).Turnsouthe'safriendofSimon
Cowell'sandjudgedafewtimesonAmericanIdol,America'sGotTalent,andothers.He
travelsalot,butIhavehisnumberandhephonedmetheotherweeksayinghewants
tostopbyPhoenixonhisnexttriptoLAforlunch.He'dliketobemyagentapparently,
afterImoveouttoCaliforniaandgetofftheground.Icoulddropyourscriptforhimto
takeovertoacoupleofproducersheknowsatWarnerBrothersifyou'dlike.Ijust
wantedtocheckwithyoufirsttoensurethatyoutooktheproperstepstogainrightsto
thechangesyou'vemadetotheMatrixstorycharacterprogression.Inotherwords,I
knowthescriptiscopywritten,butistheideaofthestoryaswell?Idon'tknowhowsly
someslickwriterscanbe,orifIshoulddothiswithoutyourblessing.
Ifit'salrightwithyou,Ithoughtyoucouldusemorepublicityaswell.Thethought
occurredtomethatASUisoneofthelargestUniversitiesinthecountry;Icouldpost
somelocalfliersforyourwebsiteusingthelogoatthetopofthesite.Afterall,Iama
fulltimestudenttheremajoringinActing.LetmeknowMr.Wood,Iloveyourideas!
Takecare.
Cordially,
BenfromArizona
(Iapologizeforanygrammaticalerrorsmyself,everyonelovesahypocriteright?
*laughs*ItISlate...orearly...whew.)
BenfromArizona,
Irememberyouwell.Youwhippedrightthroughthescript,asIrecall.
Youwrite,"IrealizedsomethingasIreadthemandlaughedoutloud-thereareso
manywithsuchconfusingjuxtapositionswithinthecommentIdon'tknowhowyoustay
patient.There'snoneedtoevenbegininexplainingthegrammaticalerrorsandsloppy
fragmentedsentences.Idon'tknowhowyoudoit.Itmustbenicetocomeacrossa
commenteverynowandagainfromaneducatedreaderIsuppose.Abreathoffreshair,
sotospeak."
Ithinkthedigitalinformationageistransformingthelanguageandcommunicationin
general.Textmessaging,twittering,andemailinghascausedpeopletoreduce,simplify
andhurryup.Consequently,punctuation,capitalization,spellingandsentencestructure
haveevolved,partlyduetotheneed/desireforbrevitybutmoremoreoftendueto
simplelaziness.Asawriter.I'mcompelledtomaintainahighstandardwiththewritten
word,butIdofindmyselfoccasionallyfallingpreytothelethargyofpopular
communication.But,alas,itisnaturalthatlanguageswillevolve,andnotnecessarilya
badthing;itispartlywhytheEnglishlanguageissovastandcolorful.So,althoughwe
maysometimessquirmatthechangesnowtakingplace,weshouldbeequallyopento
thepossibilitythatthesechangesmayexpandthelanguageandcreateamore
interestingformofcommunication.But,asyousaid,itisnicetoreceivecommentsthat
arestillinthelanguageandformwithwhichI'mmostfamiliar.
Also,thatIgetcommentsatallisgoodenoughforme.Imaginedoingallthisworkto
writethescriptandhavenoonerespond.So,Itrynottolookagifthorseinthemouth.
And,ingeneral,thecontentofthecommentsisinvigorating,challenging,andfun.I
alwaysenjoyreceivingthem.
Well,youcertainlydoseemtobewellconnectedintheentertainmentbusiness.Iwould
betrulygratefulifyouwouldshowthescripttoSimonCowell,andevenmoregratefulif
hecouldgetittotherightpeopleoveratWarnerBrothers.Really,nothingcouldbe
moreexcitingtome.
Youwrite,"Ijustwantedtocheckwithyoufirsttoensurethatyoutooktheproper
stepstogainrightstothechangesyou'vemadetotheMatrixstorycharacter
progression.Inotherwords,Iknowthescriptiscopywritten,butistheideaofthestory
aswell?Idon'tknowhowslysomeslickwriterscanbe,orifIshoulddothiswithout
yourblessing."ThestepsI'vetakentogainrightstomyworkhavebeentoregisterthe
scriptwiththeLibraryofCongressandwiththeWriter'sGuild.Theplotofmyscriptis
completelyoriginal;however,thecharactersandthemilieuoftheMatrixTrilogyare
obviouslywhatI'mbuildingon.I'mnotsurewhatelseIwouldneedtodotomakesure
thescriptisreadyfordistributiontoagentsorHollywoodingeneral.Iassumethat,
becauseI'mbuildingoncopywrittenmaterial,myscriptisnotwhollyownedbyme.
Howthatwillplayout,Idon'tknow.Ifyouhaveanythoughtsonthematter,pleaselet
meknow.Youmadeittothefrontpageofmywebsiteasafeaturedcommentorwith
yourcomment,"Findapublisher,gainlegaladviceonretainingadaptiverightstothe
originalmaterial,andmoveforward".I'mguessingyoumusthavesomeideaofhowto
dothat.
And,yes,anypublicityIcangetforthescriptisjustanotherladleofgravy.Yes,byall
meanspublicizeaway.Fliers,anything.
Ifthisthingeverreallygetsoffthegroundthroughyourefforts,I'mnotsurehowIcould
thankyouproperly.WouldthattherecouldbeanactingroleforyouintheMatrix4!
Dreamingisgood.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:BrianDATE:11/24/20099:56:02AM
Greatread!Ireadthewholestoryinonesitting.Ireallylikedtheconceptofasuper
matrixandhowtheoldercharactersfitintotherealworldaswellasthematrix.Youdid
havealotofdialogsbutitwasallneeded.Ilikedthe3.0agentsandtheideathatthe
"cortex"wasorganicandthatthe36shadahumandefianceaboutthem.Thebattles
withinthematrixwereepicbutnotoverthetop,itwouldhavebeencooltopushthe
envelopealittlebitmorewithateamupoftheoldplayerslikethe"marvandserifand
agentblacktokicksomesmithassbeforehebuildshismassivearmy.Itwouldhave
addedalittlefalsehopeinthemiddleofthestorytocarrythereaderfurther.
Iwouldhaveliketoseemoreonthe36'sandanexpansionofhowmuchtheyknew
aboutthealternaterealities.Thatcouldbeanotherscriptinitselfprobably.
Youreallyhavedoneanexcellentjobonexpandingonanalreadymassivemulti
dimensionalcomplexstoryline.Pleasecontinuetokeepwriting,notjustthematrix
storylinebutingeneralyougreatwritingskills.
ThanksfortakingthetimetocreateagreatstoryforthemanyMatrixfans!
Brian,
ManyoftheaspectsofthestorythatyousiteascoolpartsarethesamepartsthatI
lovedcreating-thesupermatrix,thefamilialcharacterrelationships,theandroid36s,
theorganiccortexentity-allthesewerethought-provokingandwild.
IwishIhadhadmoreroomandmoresituationswherebattle/fightscenescouldbe
moreglorious/longer,butitwasalwaysanissueoftryingtoincorporateallthe
elementsofthestorythatIfeltwerenecessary.Besides,Iwasreactingabittothethird
Matrixmovie,whichIthoughtwasabitheavyonbattlescenes(well,maybenotheavy
onbattlescenessomuchaslightoncharacter/plotdevelopment).
The36scoulddefinitelydevelopintotheirownstory;there'sthatmuchmeatthere.
We'llseewhathappenswiththat.
I'mveryhappytohearthatitbroughtyousomuchenjoyment.ShouldIwritemore,I'll
besuretopostithere.
Thanksforyourscintillatingreview.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JefreyGDATE:11/28/20095:56:15AM
Ireadonlyasmallbitofitbutatfirstglanceitappearstoomuchofafantasythe
wachowskibrothershadavisionwhentheycreatedthismoviealmosteverybitofthe
matrixwassymbolicinsomereligionorothereverycharacter,nearlyeveryscene,the
rolesthateachcharacterplayed,everythingdowntowhatwassaidandwhy,hada
meaningidontseemuchmeaninginthisversionofthematrixorsupermatrixthe
reasontherewillbenosequeltothematrixtrilogyisbecauseitiscompleteithasall
beenexplainedifyoudontunderstandwhatimeanwhenisaythisreadpageandyou
willknowhttp://www.wylfing.net/essays/matrix_revolutions.htmlasyouhadstatedon
yourwebsitetoreadthewholethingiwillmerelyaskyoutoreadtheentirepagethis
literallyexplainstheentirevisionofthewachowskibrothersandwhytherewillbenoor
shouldbenosequelthebrothershadavisionforthemoviethatvisionwasbroughtto
lifeinitsentiretyandnowitstimetoletgothepagesucksyouinsothereisnorealto
askyoutoreadthepagebutjustdoit
JefreyG
I'dbegladtoreadthepagesyou'velinkedinyourcommentintheirentiretyifyouwill
grantmethesamecourtesyandreadmyscriptinitsentirety.Wewillthenbothbeina
positiontocommentmoreaccuratelyandinsightfully,don'tyouagree?Ilookforward
toit.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ClintXCVDATE:11/30/20091:25:19AM
Wow,lotsofworkwentintothisIcantell.You'veaddedandansweredalotof
questions.TheonlybigdifferencebetweentheMatrixtrilogyandthisistheadditionof
waymoreemotionconveyed.Forexample,theArchitecthugsNeointhe'realworld',
veryemotional.
Idon'tthinkthiswillbeconvertedtoafulllengthmovie...however,acomicorvisual
bookseriescouldbewelladapted.
Goodluckyoudefinatlyhaveatalentinwriting.
ClintXCV,
I'mgladyoucanseetheamountofworkthatwentintothis;itwassubstantial.
Acomicorgraphicnovelisthemostlikelyavenue,Iagree;butI'malwayshopefulthata
moviewilltranspire.Thatwoulddefinitelyhavethemostimpact.
Thanksfortheshotinthearm.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TheWizardofBODDATE:12/17/20097:04:01PM
IhaveaconceptthatIknowwhichiscalledSoulSplitting.
Idonotunderstandwhyitexists,butitdoes.
SoulSplittingallowsyoudirectaccessintotheVortexofTheMatrix.
TheVortexdoesexist,andIdonotunderstandwhy,butitdoes.
IhavetheknowingofSoulSplittingandnottheunderstanding.
Thisistheconceptormissingpieceof"TheMatrix4"
Wizard,
Intriguingbutkindofcryptic.Canyouelaborateanyfurtheronyourcomment?Anddid
youreadthescript?
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TheWizardofBODDATE:12/18/20098:22:25PM
Iwillbereadingthecompletescriptthisweekendandasforelaborating,Iwillsharein
goodtime.Plus,TheMatrixisalwayscryptic.
Wizard,
Indeed,alwayscryptic.Iawaityourthoughts.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:johnDATE:12/27/200910:57:06AM
IhaveseenthematrixtrilogyverywellandIthinkifthisstoryisreleaseditwould
undoubtedlydestroythenamethemoviedeveloped
john,
Certainlythe"Trilogy"namewouldundergosomescrutinyifafourthepisodewere
released;butIthinkthatthatissuewouldbenegligibleconsideringthefunofseeingthe
storygoonelayerdeeper.Myopinion,ofcourse.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:dimebagDATE:12/27/20096:20:12PM
heyman,ireadthestory,wasreallycool..actuallyidintknowitwaswrittenbyyoutill
now..lol..ithoughtthewachowskishadjustpennedalittlesomethingforusfans,just
forfun..thisstuffisreallygood..hopetheymakeitintoamoviewhichfranklywillbea
monumentaltask..isawinconceptart.orgthatuwerelookingforalternatetitles..thisis
thetitleihadinmind..MATRIX:UNPLUGGED...anywayskeepupthegoodworkandlet
meknowifudoanyfurtherrevisions..bestofluckdude..
dimebag,
IlikethatyouthoughttheWachowski'spennedit;that'saniceego-booster.And,yes,it
woulddefinitelybeabigproductionifitevergotmadeintoamovie.
Matrix:Unpluggedisagoodtitle,butatthispointthenewestoneI'vesettledon,
Matrix:Resurrected,seemstoappealtopeople.I'llprobablybestickingwiththat.
Thanksforyourthoughtsandpositivefeedback.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RonDATE:12/30/20091:40:16AM
Iamabigfanofthematrix.ThescreenplayhadmomentsequivalenttowhenNEOwas
flyingattheendofthefirstmatrix.Veryimaginative.Thiscouldbewonderfullyadapted
toamovie.
IwouldliketoseetheMachineworldinadiseasedchaoticstatewithvirtualcharacters
meetinglikeaunitednations.TheSmithagentshouldhavetherementsofthehuman
experience,perhapsfallinginlovewithpersephone.Thesupermatrixshouldbeaworld
ofgodswherethedigitalselfismonstrousorangelic.Deathofavirtualshouldbethe
equivalentofaperpetualexistenceinahellishstate.Thiswouldbethemotivationto
purpose.Aglimpseofthevirtualmachineworldkingwouldbeveryexciting.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:E-75DATE:12/30/20099:45:29AM
Ireallyenjoyreadingthescript.Itgivesusthe'reality'ofourworld'where'(and'when')
weliveintoday...IgrowupwithlotsofchancestoreadaboutBuddhism.Inthis
comment,Ihavetosaythatyourstoryiscloselyconnectedtotheconceptoflifethatis
describedbyBuddhism.
Anyway,itwouldbeexcitingtoseeyourscriptbeingfilmedontoarealwide-screen
version.Thanks.
Ron,
I'mgladyouenjoyedmyvisionofafourthMatrix.Fromyourfurthercomments,it
soundslikeyouhavealotofideasofyourownaboutwherethestoryshouldgo.
Perhapsyou'lltakemyleadandwriteyourownversionofafourthMatrix.Perhapseven
toppingmine.There'snomoneyinit,butitsureisfunandagreatscreenplaywriting
exercise.Goodluck.
Thanks,PDWood
E-75,
IlikethereferencetoBuddhism,ofrebirthandreachingNirvanathroughthe
acceptanceofone'splaceintheuniverse.
Gladyouenjoyedit.Wide-screenversion,please!
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidStephenDATE:1/12/20104:49:22PM
Wow,Igotsuckedinbecauseofgreatcharactersandagreatpremisebutthosewere
notyours.PoorlywrittenfromLockandMorphiousbecomingbuddies,toNeolosinghis
secondworldwithashuckydarnattitude.Notonlydidyougrabideasfromadozen
othermovies,butyouhadnofinishtoanyoftheplotsyouintroduced,ANYofthem.By
theway,sincethehumanswereincontrolofthemachinesthankstothe"E-Mags",why
thehelldidtheyneedtocreatethe"SuperMatrix".Dohumansnowneedpowerfrom
themachinesnow????LikeIsaidpoorlywritten.Realwritersgiveyouthebackground
tothestoryproperly,theydon'thavecharacterssay"Howareyoufeelingafteryourlast
medicalprocedure?"or"They’redesignedtodisableonlymachinesorentitieswitha
specificoperatingsignatureorwavepattern.Theyshootwideandtheyshootdeep.
Shouldtakecareofthemall."Buytheway,whatpurposewouldthatweaponbeused
forindeepspace?????Ifyoucan'ttellastorywithoutsoundinglikea12yearold
writingforaschoolcontest,don'twrite.Whatawaste!
David,
AsyouseemtobeafanoftheMatrixTrilogy,I'msorrymyextensionofthestoryhitall
thewrongnotesforyou.
Youasked,"Sincethehumanswereincontrolofthemachinesthankstothe"E-Mags",
whythehelldidtheyneedtocreatethe"SuperMatrix"?.Myansweris,e-magswere
employedtosimpleneutralizeallthemachinestoendtheGreatWar;theydidn'twipe
themachinesoutorgivethehumanscontroloverthem.Asmachinesweregoingtobea
partofthehumanworldafterthewar,asystemhadtobedevisedtocontrolthem.The
Supermatrixisacontrolnetworkthatallmachinesareconnectedto.The36swerethe
onlymachinenotaffectedbythee-magsandsotheyfightmuchasZion'speopledoto
regaincontrolandfreedomfortheirkind.And,no,thehumansdon'tusethemachines
likebatteriesforpower.
Youalsoasked,"Buytheway,whatpurposewouldthatweaponbeusedforindeep
space?????"Myansweris,Isensethatspaceexplorationwillhavebecomemuchmore
sophisticatedinthisfutureworldandthatwiththepossibilityofdiscoveringhostile
aliensoranimalsorperhapsevenalienmachinesonotherplanets,auniqueweapon
wouldneedtobeinventedtoconfrontthosepossibilities.Idoesn'tseemthatfarfetchedtome.
Irespectyourrighttoyourownopinions,butit'salwayshardtoviewpeople'scriticism
asvalidwhenit'ssoone-sided.I'malwaysmoreopentopeople'scriticismwhenthey
canacknowledgesomeoftheaspectsoftheworkthatdeservemerit.Attheveryleast
anacknowledgmentoftheimmenseamountoftimeputintothisprobablywouldhave
sufficed.
I'msorryitwassuchadisappointmentforyou.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:LexieNeevelDATE:1/15/201011:59:07PM
ithinktheyshouldmakeanotherMatrixmovie
Lexie,
Ditto.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:vittorioDATE:1/18/201010:17:12PM
I'mreadingit..I'mimpressedthiswouldbeanamazingsequel.thismoviecouldbedone
in3dnotnecessarilywithactors....atthemomentithinkthisideashouldbedeveloped
bysomeonei'mcontinuingmyreading.
vittorio,
IappreciateyourenthusiasmandIawaityourfinalcomments.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:VittorioDATE:1/23/20101:45:48PM
Myopiniondidn'tchange.Ithinkyouworkedreallyhardonthat,theresultisreally
good.Onlyonething:it'sverydifferentfromtheothermatrixmovies.Thisisbecausethe
manyflashbacks.AlthoughIstillthinkthisideashouldbedeveloped.
Vittorio,
I'mgladitliveduptoyourenjoymentrighttiltheend.ItisdifferentfromtheTrilogy
(especiallywiththeflashbacks)butIstillthinkitstayswithinthespiritoftheMatrix
idea.
Cheers,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HarryDsouzaDATE:1/26/20107:20:43AM
Hi,
ThatmakesenseandIlikeitmost!theideayoupresentedissoimpressiveandwillget
attractionofpeoplewholikesMatrixasmuchilikeit!
COMMENT:PDWoodDATE:1/27/20102:19:30AM
Harry,
Sogladtohearthatyouenjoyed.
Thanksfordroppingby.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidJacksonIIIDATE:2/1/20104:20:48AM
CheckthisoutifneorestoredpeacetothedemolishedpresentdayMatrix(cough)then
allthepeopleinthepresentdayMatrix.....wouldwakeupfromthosecryotubethings
theywereallsleepinginandifneowaswokeupfromthepastMatrixcouldtherehave
beenpeoplethatwereawokenfromafutureMatrix.
DavidJacksonIII,
Nicesarcasm(cough).
COMMENT:AUTHOR:metinDATE:3/7/20108:51:09AM
Iaminpage110,andallIcansayisIwastotallyblownaway.Usingmirrorisveryclever
andIamwonderingwhythedirectorsneverusemirrorsafterthefirstmovie.Iwish
Hollywoodrealizesyourgreattalent.
metin,
Iappreciateyourupliftingcomment.Leavingpeople"totallyblownaway"isalwaysthe
desiredeffect.
Themirrorisdefinitelyaneffectivemetaphorinaworldwhererealityandunreality
clash.Iassumetheysimplymovedontoothermetaphorsthatwereequallyaseffective.
Theydidhavesomany.Andcoolonesatthat!
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkOfClarkDATE:3/27/20103:19:38PM
GreatworkPD,IcameacrossyourworkveryrandomlybutonceIstartedreading,Igot
suckedin!Ireadalotofyourcomments(fromover3years,wow)andIcanagreeon
mostofthepositiveandsomeoftheconstructivecriticism.Thecharacterdialoguewas
definitelyveryfittingandIlikedhowwefinallygetanexplanationastowho
MerovingianandPersephoneareandlovedhowmanyholesleftoverfromtheprevious
movieswerefinallypluggedinbyyou.But,Idothinkatleastinthispotentialmovie
therearesomemorethingsthatshouldbeelaboratedthatcanlaterkeepeveryone
else'sattentiongoingforatleastthe2moremoviesforthe"PDWood"trilogyforwhat
I'msuretheWachowskiswouldgiveyoutheirblessingsfor.One,Ithinkjustlikein
Matrix1,thereshouldbemoreofanexplanationforthepurposeoftheCortexandthe
SuperMatrixthatwouldparallelmorewiththefirstmovie.Ijustdon'tthinkthestoryis
clearenoughonwhatexactlyhappenedinthe"realworld"thatledtotheSuper
Matrix'screation.Wegetanunderstandingofwhathappenedinthe"realworld"that
ledtotheothermatrix'screation.AlsomaybealittleelaborationonNeo's
"predocessors"mentionedbyMerovingianfromMatrixReloaded?Also,whydoes
TrinitypretendnottoknowthatherparentsareMerovingianandPersephoneinthe
priorMatrixmovies?WhywouldagirllethermomkissherboyfriendlikePersephone
didinReloaded?Whywouldsomeone'sMomkisstheirboyfriend?Iwouldsuppose
youranswerwouldbefor"power"?
Allinall,thisisreallygoodwork,justneedstobesmoothedoutalittlebit.WithCGIand
othertechnologicaladvances,Idon'tseewhythismoviecan'tbepossible.Keanuisn't
thatoldyet,butwecanalwaysairbrushoutthewrinkles!hahaPleasekeepatthis,I
thinkthishaslotsofpotential.
-MarkOfClark
MarkofClark,
Ah...werethatitweretrue,theWachoskisgivingmetheirblessingonaPDWood
trilogy!IdoubtitwilleverhappenbutI'mflatteredthatyouthinkIcouldtakeitthatfar.
Iagree,theSupermatrixandCortexcouldandshouldbeelaboratedon.Thiswould
definitelybeapartofanysecondorthirdscriptinthe(PDWood?)trilogy.Asfarasthis
scriptgoes,though,itwouldmakeittoolong.IthinkIgavepeopleenoughtopeektheir
curiositybutnotenoughtocompletelyquenchtheirthirst.Partofthemystique,Iguess.
AndNeo'spredecessors,thattoo,couldandshouldbeworkedinlater.
AsforTrinityoranyoneelse,oncethey'reinsidetheSupermatrix,theyhaveno
awarenessofeventsintherealworld.Trinitydoesn'tknowthatPersephoneandthe
MerovingianareherparentsinthesamemannerthatPersephoneandtheMerovingian
havenoideathatTrinityistheirdaughter.ThisisaruleoftheSupermatrixthatisnever
broken.
AndIthinkyou'reright.CGIcouldmakethisworkinthefuture.Thatmayendupbeing
theonlywaytopullitoff!
It'sbeenabitquietasofrecently(withcomments)sothanksforthegreatcomments
andcritique.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DSmarttDATE:4/1/20107:36:36AM
P.D.Wood
Ireallyenjoyedyourtakeonafourthinstallment.Itoo,amhopefulforafourthmovie.I
havestartedamovementofsortsbywayofafanpageonfb.Acensusifyouwill.I
nameditGiveus"TheMatrix4"!!!!!!Myhopeistobuildafanbaselargeenoughthat
theWachowskibrotherscannotignore.Thisstorylinebegsforanothersequel!
DSmartt,
Gladyoulikedit.
LetmeknowwhatyourfanpagenameisonFacebook.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:merondDATE:4/7/20103:06:18AM
Iwasskepticalatfirst,andasIbeganreadingIwasunsure,butbytheendIwasas
totallyenthralledinthestoryasifitwereanactualsequel.It'sstillalittlerough,butit
hastrulycapturedthespiritoftheMatrix.Withalittleworkandsomewaytogetthe
WachowskiBrotherstoacceptit,Icouldeasilyseethisbecomingareality.
merond,
Itsaysalottomethatyoustuckwithiteventhoughyouhadyourapprehensions.And
it'snicetohearthatitpaidoffforyou.
Definitelyabitrough.Anotherrewriteortwowouldhelp.Perhaps...someday...the
Brotherswillcall,andanewepisodewillbegin.
Untilthen,it'sjustanalternaterealityonanotherplaneofexistence.Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:steveDATE:5/3/20102:09:49PM
ireallyenjoyedthestoryandididn'tputitdownassoonasistartedreadingit,butmy
feelingstowardsmakinganothermatrixmoviearemixed.itwasgreathowyou
answeredtheunresolvedquestions.alotofthemesthatcameupinthescriptmadea
lotofsense.maybethereweretoomany"iamyourfather,LukeSkywalkerscenes"buti
likehowtheArchitectwasarealhumanbeingetcandthescriptexplainsandshows
everythingwhichyouwouldlovetosee,butifeelifididseeallofthat,themysteryof
theMatrixwouldbegoneandleftuninteresting.butnonethelessitstillwouldbean
awesomemovie,greatjob.
steve,
EvenmyfeelingstowardsanotherMatrixmoviearemixed...especiallysincethelastone
cameoutsolongago.
IagreethatsomeofthemysteryoftheTrilogyislostwithtoomuchexplanation,butI
thoughtIalsoopenedupawholenewterritoryofmystery...abouttheandroid36s,the
Cortex,theSource,thepossibilityofevenmorerealitiesevenbeyondtheoneinmy
story.
Yes,thehumanelement,oftheArchitect,andthefamilialrelationshipofmanyofthe
maincharacters,thatwasfuntocreate.
I'mgladyouroverallimpressionwasfavorable.Andthanksforthefeedback.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ScriptwriterDATE:5/5/20108:57:04AM
Ihavewritten8screenplays,soImighthavealittlemoreinputthanyouraverage
Matrixfan.
Havingthestorybeingtoldinthreedifferenteras,IdidnotfeellikeIwasapartofthe
story.
Ithinkyou'vereallygotsomethinghere,butIwouldsuggestwritingeverythingasa
prequelorasanothersequel...butIwouldn'ttrycombiningthemtogetherasyouhave.
Whilereading,Icouldn'tfindtheAct1break...ifthereisone,itwastoosubtle.
Sofar,youhaven'ttolduswhotheHerois,I'massumingit'sNeo,butwithoutgivingus
theSet-up.
I'msorry,butIhadtostopreadingafterpage40...Ijustcouldn'treadanymore.
Beingeducatedincomputers,Ialsofoundithardtobelievethethe"program"forAgent
Smithwasback.HewasdestroyedbytheheadMachine,throughNeo.Howisitpossible
thathe'saliveandrunningagain?Maybethatshouldbeexplained.
Sorry,ifmywordssoundharsh.Idowishyouthebestofluck.
Sincerely,
scriptwriter
Scriptwriter,
IappreciateyourcandidcommentsandItakenooffense.
Sincethiswasmyfirstattemptatascreenplay,Ihaveprobablyfallenshortinnumerous
areas,nodoubt.Myattemptwastowriteadeepstorythatbothtiedupsomeloose
endsandalsoestablishedsomenewterritory;itwaslessofanattempttofollowthe
guidelinesofstorystructureandHollywooddigestibility.
Iviewedmystoryasthefinal(third)actofthewholestorythatfollowedthroughfrom
theTrilogy.InthatsenseitdidnothaveanAct1break.Iknowthiswouldprobablynot
flywithHollywoodexpectations,but,asIsaid,thiswasmoreofapersonalexercisethan
agenuineattempttofitthemold.
Idobelievenow,inretrospect,thatthiswouldbebetterbrokenupintoeitherasequel
oraprequel.Thetimeandplaceshiftsaredifficulttofollowandtheydistractfromfocus
andcontinuity.Jumpingaroundsomuchpreventstheaudiencefrombeingableto
reallyconnectemotionallywiththecharacters.I'llkeepthatinmind.
Thelackofaclearandactiveheroicfigure,Iagree,isaproblem.Yes,Neoisultimately
thatfigureinthisstory,buthisrelativepassiveness(comparedtohisroleintheTrilogy)
tendstodissipatethefocusandenergyofaheroicfigurethatpropelsastoryforward.
Theattempttocombineelementsofaprequelandasequelmadeitdifficulttohavea
centralheroicfigure.Ithinkyourobservationiscorrectandifarewriteforthisstoryis
addressed,Iwillcertainlyworktowardsremedyingthisproblem.
Givenyourreservations,Iunderstandwhyyoustoppedatpage40,butIurgeyouto
readtherestanyway.Therearesomeveryjuicybitsjustabouttohappenandsome
partsthatmighthelpaddresssomeofyourconcerns.
MyideafortheresurrectionofAgentSmithwasbasedonthefactthatintheMatrix
Reloaded,Bane(aZiondweller)waspossessedbyaSmithcloneoutsideoftheMatrix.If
aSmithclonecanexistoutsideoftheMatrix,then,inmyopinion,hewouldbe
independentofandunaffectedbyimmediateeventsintheMatrix,solongashe
remainedoutsideoftheMatrix.Ifyouacceptthisidea,thenit'slogicaltoassumethat
whentheoriginalSmithandallhisclonesweredestroyedintheMatrix,thecloneSmith
intheBanecharacterwouldhavesurvived.
IsimplyextendedthenotionthatSmithsentoutmorethanonecloneintoZion.The
firstclonewasinBaneandBanewaseventuallykilled;inmystoryIsuggestasecond
clonewasalsosentout(attheasametimeastheBanecloneperhaps),andthissecond
clonelaidlowlongeranddidn'tmakeamoveuntilafterNeowasdead.SincekillingNeo
wasthemainreasonfortheclone'sinfiltrationintoZioninthefirstplace,onceNeowas
dead,theSmithclone'snewdirectivewouldprobablybetogetbackintotheMatrixand
reestablishhimself.Thatwasmylogic,anyway.Nosureitholdsup.
Again,Ihopeyou'lltakemysuggestionandreadtotheendofthestory.Itmaynotbe
textbookscreenwriting,butthere'ssomefunstuffinthere.Ifyou'reaMatrixfan,I
suggestit'sworththeread.
Thanksforyourtimeandthoughtful(accurate)comments.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:TinyDATE:5/5/20101:55:10PM
Thisisaverycoolstoryline-itshouldtotallybereleasedasanothermatrixmovie.The
endingevensuggestsapotentialforafifthmovie.Ithoughtitwasgreat,youshoud
contacttheWachowskibrothersandgettheballrolling.Myfinalrequestwouldjustbe
togetkeanureevesbackasNEO!
Tiny,
Yourenthusiasmisintoxicating.Unfortunately,it'sveryhardtocontacttheWachowski
brothers(I'vetried).And,asgoodasmystorymightbe,it'streadingonsomeoneelse's
story.Thiscanbeanenormoushurdletoovercome.TheWachowski'swouldhavetobe
veryopen-mindedandhumbletoacceptsomeoneelse'scontinuationoftheirstory.
Nonetheless,theymightbeopentoit.ButcontactingTHEMdirectlyhasproved
impossible.Maybemystoryhasbeenforwardedtothemandthey'vedismissedit
outright,simplyonprinciple.Ormaybetheyhavenoideathatmystoryexists.It'shard
toknow.Ifyou(oranyoneoutthere)hasacontactoralinein,justletmeknow.I'dbe
morethanhappytopursueit.
InthemeantimethisisonefortheMatrixfans,which,ifthat'sallthatcomesofit,will
stillmakemyday.ButIalwaysholdouthopeforsomethingbigger.
Thanksagainfortheego-inflatingpraise.Idosoappreciateit.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:scriptwriterDATE:5/5/20108:36:28PMIunderstandyour
passionfortheMatrixseries,theywereterrific.
Iwouldjustliketorecommendtwobooks,"SavetheCat"bythelateBlakeSnyder,a
screenwriterwhohassoldmorescriptsthananybodyinHollywoodpurelybasedonhis
sctructure...thesecondbookis"Story"byRobertMckee,oneofthegreats.
Iunderstandthatthiswasyourfirstscreenplayanditwasdonemoreoutofyour
passionfortheSeries,butitwouldn'thurttomakethebestoutofwhatyou'vegot.In
ordertodothat,andifyouseriouslywanttobeconsideredbyanybodyinHollywood
(whereIlive)Iwouldsuggestlearningstructure.ALLmovieshavea"setup"amain
"here"or"protagonist"andamain"badguy"or"antagonist".ThereisandAct1break,
aMidpoint,andanAct2break(3Actstotal,nomore,noless).Thereisdramaand
majorconflict.Yourmaincharacterallgothrougha"CharacterArc"meaning,ifyour
Heroisjadedbachelorwhosmokesinthebeginningofthemovie,bytheendofthe
movie,he'squitsmoking,andthinkingaboutloveagain.
IhavetwoscreenplaysthatarebeinglookedatbyLionsgatecurrently.Oneofthem
we'reinnegotiationswithmoney.Beingascreenwritercanbeveryfun,anditcanmake
youagoodliving.
Now,onmy9thscreenplay,IlookbackatmyfirstscreenplayIeverwroteandlaughat
myselfforeverthinkingIcouldsellit(it'sabsolutelyhorrible)...:)ButIgotacoupleof
booksandreadthem,I'vetakenacoupleofworkshops,andnowIhavetwoscreenplays
inthehandsoftheprofessionals.
It'sOKifyoujustwanttowriteforfun,butifyoucanwriteforfunANDmakealiving
doingit,thenallthebetter.
So,learnstructure,storyline,plotpoints,Actbreaks,charactersandcharacterarcs....and
thencomebackandrewritethis.
Byevenfinishingascreenplay,mayIsay"congratulations".Andagain,bestofluck.
sincerely,
Scripwriter
Scriptwriter,
Ilikeallofyouradvice.SinceI'vewrittentheMatrixscreenplay,Ihavedonemuchof
whatyousuggest.SavetheCat,greatbook(mayherestinpeace).Story,amust.Ialso
particularlylikeScreenandTelevisionWriting(Vale),YourScreenplaySucks,(Akers),and
theScreenwriter'sBible(Trottier).
I'vewrittenasecondscreenplaythathasnothingtodowiththeMatrixandamworking
onathirdonenow.Iagreewitheverythingyou'vesaid.Understandingthebasicsof
screenwritingandthentailoringscreenplaysforHollywoodareindispensablegoals,if
makingmoneyandalivingaregoingtobepartofthescreenwritingexperience.
WhenI'mmoreseasoned,IassumeI'lllookbackonmyearliestscreenplaysandseeall
theirflawsinaninstant.It'sthenatureofthebeast,Iguess.
Doyouthinkmystoryelements,ifconfiguredproperly,woulddrawtheattentionofthe
"powersthatbe"withregardtoafourthMatrixepisode?I'vekindofputmyMatrix
storybehindme,butifyou,beingsomewhatontheinside,feelithasgreatpotential,I
mightbemoreinclinedtoreworkit.Doyouhaveconnectionsthatmightbewillingto
lookitover?
AndcongratulationsontheLionsgatesuccesses.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ScriptwriterDATE:5/6/20101:49:30AM
It'sgreatthatyou'recontinuingtowriteotherscreenplays.
yes,itisthenatureofthebeast,whichisgoodandbad,meaning,weaswritersknow
what"Hollywood"expectsfromussotheformulaisthereandsetinstone,onthebad
side,wearen'tallowedtonegotiatethatformulaandsay,"look,I'vegotsomething
greathere,andeventhoughitdoesn'tfitintoyourformula,itreallyhaspotential."So,
aswriters,we'renotabletoexperimentbeyondwhatisalreadythere,becausenobody
willacceptit(unlessofcourseyouhavemillionsofdollarsandcanProduceyourown
writtenwork).
Mybestfriendisaworkingactor.He'ssupportedDenzel,CubaGooding,Terrance
Howard,andothers,andIdon'tevenfeelrightaboutbringingmyownmaterialtohim
letalonesomeoneelses...youknowwhatImean.
But,whatIwoulddo,ifyoureallywantedtogobackandtuneMatrixResurrectedupa
bit,isIwouldfindoutwheretheWachowskiBrotherslive(youcouldprobablyfindthat
outthroughStarTours)andmailthemyourscript.Maybeyougetareply,maybeyou
don't.Butyouneverknowuntilyoutry.
Scriptwriter,
Yes,formularules.Sucks!But"whaddyagonnado,huh"?
Ihearyouaboutthescriptreaderapprehensionthing.Hardenoughtobringyourown
worktohimwhenthere'sprobablyabucketloadofothersaskinghimthesamefavor.
IgoogledStarToursanddidn'tcomeupwithanythingthatlookedlikeasitethatmight
havealeadtotheWachowski'saddress.Isthattherightspelling?Perhapsyoucould
forwardmealink?I'llcheckitout.Certainlyworthatry.
Muchappreciated.
Ifyourmoviesgetmadeintoreleasedproductions,comebackandletmeknowwhat
theyare.Lovetocheckthemout.
PDWood
Firstoff,IjustwanttostatethateventhoughsomemaythinkthattheMatrixtrilogy
hadaninconclusiveending,Ithinkthattheendingwasunexpectedyetinevitable,and
everytimeIthinkabouttheplotofthethreemoviesalltogether,Iseemoreandmore
hiddenmeaninginit.SoIdon'tthinkthereneedstobeasequel...butifyouwantto
writeone,I'mnotgoingtostopyou.
Ithinkyourplotwasdefinitelylacking.Youhadsomegreatandcreativeideas,but
nothingHAPPENED.Youwerejustsettingupanotherscene.Ifeellikethiscouldbea
prologuetoanothermovie.Also,someofyourideas,whilecreativeandtotallynew,
didn'tquitefitwiththeMatrixtrilogy.Forexample,theMerovingianandPersephone
knewwhotheOraclewasintheMatrix,andknewthattheylivedinafictionalworld.
Theyalsodidn'thaveasmuch'power'asNeoorSmith.
Also,youintroducedalotofnewthreadswithouttyingthemupconclusively.Whatis
thesignificanceofNeo'sreflections?WhathappenstotheyoungerNeo?Howdidhe
getsuchpowers?EvenifhewasNeo'sson,hewouldhardlybeageneticclone...AndI
thinkthoughyourstyleisgenerallyconsistent,insomeplacesitisnotquitethesameas
themovietrilogy.
Idon'tmeantosoundnegative,butIthinkifyoureallywanttomakethisamovie,you
havealotofrevising-andaddingactualactionandplot-todo.
Commentsonyourreply:(Itseemstobeaweebitinconsistent...)Why'neutralize'?
'Neutralize'asinhow?Andwhywouldthemachineshaveto"beapartofthehuman
worldafterthewar"?Whywouldn'tthe36snotbeaffectedbytheE-Mags?Also,the
storysaidthattheE-Magswouldonlyworkonartificialintelligences...sowhatuse
wouldtheybeagainstaliens?
Anonymous,
Ithinktherearemainlytwoapproachestohowpeopleviewmystory.Thefirst
approachistolookatitasanexplanationformuchofwhathappendintheTrilogyand
asthesetupforacontinuingstoryline.Peopleinthiscampseemtohavebeenvery
happywithmystory;theylikewhatitrevealsofthepastandwhatitportendsforthe
future.Thesecondapproachistolookatitasaself-containedstorythathasaclear
three-actstructureandclearresolutionofallthreads.Peopleinthiscampseemtoenjoy
muchofwhatthestoryfocuseson,butaredisappointedwithitslackoffinality.Ithink
youareinthesecondcamp.
IntheMatrixTrilogy,theMerovingianandPersephonedoknowwhotheOracleisand
doknowthattheyliveinafictionalworld.Butifyoufollowmystorylinecarefully(andI
admitthat'shard,givenhowconvoluteditis),you'llseethatmysceneswith
PersephoneandtheMerovingianhappenprevioustoeventsintheTrilogy,beforethey
knewtheOracleandbeforetheyknewtheylivedinafictionalworld(andevenbefore
theyhadpowers).
Neo'sreflectionssuggestthatthereareaninfinitenumberofuniversesorrealities,
whethervirtualorconcrete.Anditfurtherstheideathatallworldsarereal,nomatter
whattheyareorwheretheyare.
TheyoungNeoisabitofawildcard.MysuggestionisthatheisthefutureoftheMatrix
worldandhewillpickupwheretheolderNeoleftoff.Thecyclecontinues.Theyoung
Neoinheritinghisfather'spowersmaybeabitweak,butIdidn'tthinkitwastotally
implausible.
Ididn'tfindyourcommentstobenegative,justinsightful.Everyonehastheiropinion.
Thatyoutookthetimetoreadthewholestoryandcomehereandgivemereal,
thoughtfulcommentsisofimmensevaluetome.Isincerelyappreciateanyonewhowill
dothat.
I'mgladthatyouthoughtthereweresomegood,creativepartstothestory,evenif,asa
completeproject,youfeltitfellsomewhatshortofthemark.IfIdorevise,I'llbesureto
takeyourcommentstoheart.
Thanksagain,PDWood
Anonymous,
I'mnotsurewhichreplyyouarereferringto;Ithinkyoumayhavereadoneofmy
repliesdirectedtowardssomeoneelsesince,upuntilnow,Ihaven'tleftyouareply.I
did,however,justnowleaveyouareplyifyouwouldliketoreadit.
AsfortheE'mags,Idon'tbelieveIsaidtheywouldonlyworkonmachineswithartificial
intelligence.IbelieveIsaid"Theyâ€redesignedtodisableonlymachinesorentities
withaspecificoperatingsignatureorwavepattern".PresumablytheE-magswouldbe
programmedtomatchanddisabletheirintendedtargets.Inthiscasethe36swere
immunetotheE-magseffectsbecausethe36swerethemostadvancedand(again
presumably)themostresilientmachines.
Hopethishelpsabit.PDWood
OnyourclarificationabouttheMerovingianandPersephone:somecomments.1)You
saythatthesceneswiththeOracletakeplacebeforethetrilogy.Butinthetrilogyitis
impliedthattheyarebothprogramscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'real
world'-andthattheyknowthisandalwayshaveknownthis.2)Perhapsyoucouldclarify
howtheMerovingiancametotakethatnameifhisoriginalnamewasVictor?
OnyourclarificationabouttheMerovingianandPersephone:somecomments.1)You
saythatthesceneswiththeOracletakeplacebeforethetrilogy.Butinthetrilogyitis
impliedthattheyarebothprogramscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'real
world'-andthattheyknowthisandalwayshaveknownthis.2)Perhapsyoucouldclarify
howtheMerovingiancametotakethatnameifhisoriginalnamewasVictor?
Anonymous,
ItisassumedintheTrilogythatthemachinesfabricatedalltheeventsand
circumstancesoftheMatrix.Butinactuality(atleastaccordingtomystory)thehumans
fabricatealltheeventsandcircumstancesoftheSuperMatrixwhichalsoincludesthe
Matrix.Itisallahumanfabrication.
TheimportantpointtorememberisthatnooneinsidetheMatrixortheSuperMatrixis
awareoftheworldbeyond(wheretheCortexexists).TheMerovingianandPersephone,
onceinsidetheSuperMatrix,haveabsolutelynoknowledgeoftheirrealpast.Theyfall
intotherolesoftheirMatrixvirtuals.ThatPersephoneandtheMerovingian"areboth
programscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'realworld'-andthattheyknowthis
andalwayshaveknownthis"isperfectlyinkeepingwiththeworldoftheMatrixinmy
opinion.Sinceitisallafabrication,anythingisopentopossibility.
MylogicforhimchanginghisnamefromVictortotheMerovingianistohighlighthis
grandiosityandarrogance.Ashetapsintoandstartsusinghispowers,he,beingof
Frenchdescent,wouldquitenaturallywanttoassociatehimselfwithroyalFrench
lineage,thatoftheMerovingiankingsbeingperfectlysuitedtohischaracter.
Ihopetheseexplanationsseemsomewhatplausibleandappealing.Itisveryhardto
stringtogethersomanythreadsandkeeptheminteresting,logical,thought-provoking
andexciting.IhopeIhaveatleastattainedamodicumofsuccess.
Thanksagainforyourthoughts.PDWood
Yes,howeverinyourscriptitseemslikewhentheyentertheworldtheythinktheyare
peopleintheworldratherthanprograms.Butthenlatertheythinktheyareprograms?
Andyousaythattheycouldhavealways"known"thattheywereprograms,butintheir
interactionwiththeOracle,theydon'tknowanythingabouttheoutsideworld.
Anonymous,
TheOracleinformsthemoftheirstatusasprogramsoftheMatrix,likesheis.Yes,that
impliesthattheydidn'tknowtheywereprogramsupuntilthen;butoncetheyare
informedofthisfact,theyassumetheyalwayswereprograms.Iguessthat'swhereIsee
itkindoffittinginwiththeTrilogy.Abitsketchy,butnoteverythingcanlineup
perfectly.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ARACELISnyder27DATE:6/6/20105:50:02PM
Iproposenottowaituntilyougetenoughamountofmoneytobuyallyouneed!You
shouldgetthemortgageloansorjusttermloanandfeelcomfortable
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AgentChavezDATE:6/27/20102:03:43AM
TheMatrixandTheTerminatorarethesamestoryandwherestolenfromSofiaStewart.
TheMotherofTheMatrix.Themovieswhereinspiredbyherbook,"TheThirdEye".
SnopesandTheLATimesarebothcontrolled.Mediamindmanipulationanddouble
speakiswhatcontrolsourworld!GoergeOrwellwarnedusaboutthis.
SofiaStewart'sstoryisveryREALandVeryTrue!YoucanlistentoherliveonParallel's
withmyselfAgentChavezexclusivelyonLATalkLive.com!WeAreMoreThanJustTalk!
SofiagaveusasneakpeaktothenewdevelopmentofTheMatrix4!Iamnottyping
wronghere,shehasWONthelawsuitagainstthethiefCameronandtheWachowski
Brothersforover$2BillionDollars!!Nowsheisinpre-productionofTheMatrix4!
Listentotheinterviewhere:
http://www.latalklive.com/medianmusic/parallels/parallels062310.mp3
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DannoDATE:6/30/20102:03:16PM
ThisjustsoundslikeStephanhasacaseoftheoldgreenmonster'Envy'.Well,thisisthe
internetafterall.Thebetteryoudoatsomething,thehardertheidoitsretaliate.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/3/20106:55:43PM
Matrixtrilogywasamasterpiece...Iwatchthesemoviesoverandoveragain...Inthe
finalpart,whenthelittlegirlasksOracleiftheywillbeseeingNeo,shegivestheanswer
"Isuspectso"...Thatleftmecuriousalltheseyears...Iwashopingthatbythistime
therewouldbeanewMatrixmovie,butitdidn'thappen.Thentwodaysback,Iwas
surfingthroughthenetlookingfornewreleasesscheduledforthisyear.Wheniwas
typingMatrix,inGoogle,itshowedMatrix4...Icheckeditout,andstumbleduponyour
site...Ididn'tfindanymovie,butifoundthisp.d.ffile...Iwentthroughit,andtomy
amazement,itwasflawlessandperfect...Itwastheperfectsequelanybodycouldever
imagine...Youdefinitelydidagreatjob...Youshouldseriouslyconsiderconvertingthis
storylineintomovie...
NowI'meagerlywaitingforthenextMatrixinline...Matrix5...Iwanttoknowwhat
Smithwilldo,Morpheus,NaobiandCommanderLockwilldo...WillMorpheusandLock
findoutthatOracle/Serenaistheirmother...WillNeoreturntoZion...Willthewar
end...Willthemachineskeeptheirwordandfreethehumanslavesfromtheirpods...
WillVictorandPersephonerealizetheirfates...Somanyquestionsunanswered...Will
youbeansweringthesequestionsinthenextpartwhichIhopewillbecominginsoon...
Hopetohearfromyouverysoon...Shakir...
Shakir,
I'mveryhappytohearhowmuchyouenjoyedthestoryandIacceptyourhighpraise
withduehumility.I,too,wouldlovetohavethisscreenplayturnedintoareal,live
Hollywoodproduction,butthat'seasiersaidthandone.I'vetried...believeme.
ThelikelihoodthatIwillwritea5thMatrixscreenplayisslim.Althoughthereismuch
thatcouldbecontinued,Isortofliketheopen-endedqualityofthe4thepisode.Should
the4thepisodeevermakeittothescreenandshouldpeopleTHENclamorfor
more...well...thenImightbepersuaded.
Butfornow,Ihopeyoucanenjoythestoryasitis,acontinuationwithoutfinality,a
storytomakeyouthinkandinterpretyourownending.
Thanksforyourthoughtsandtime.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/4/20106:00:30AM
HiSir,
Thankyouforrespondingtomycomment...Yesterdayiwasthinkingaboutyourscript
andMatrix4andallthepossibilities...ThenIfoundasmalldoubtthatisstillremaining
inmymind...Iwouldliketoshareitwithyouingreathopeofgettingthismistoutofthe
air...
Inall3Matrixmovies,therehasbeenindicationsofancestorsofTheOne,i.e.Neo...The
Architect,TheOracle,AgentSmith,Merovingianallspecificallymentionaboutthe
ancestors...Tobespecific,theArchitectmentionedthattherewas5ancestorspriorto
Neo...
Butinyourscript,Alex/SerenaandTrinityallnoticeaunfamiliaranomalythatwas
unexplained...LateryoumentionedthattheyfoundasimilarvirtualpersonintheSuper
Matrixshowingresemblancetothecharacteristicsoftheunexplainedanomaly...Trinity
saysthatshestudiedNeocloselysothatshecouldkillhim...Butthenfellinlovewith
him...
Soifmyconclusionisright,theanomalyjusthappenedonce,becausetheCortex
wantedtofindawaytogetcontroloftheartificialintelligenceitlacked...SoNeowas
theCortexinliving...Ifthat'strue...Thenitdoesn'tsinkwiththeancestorsstorythat
wastoldinthetrilogy...
AnotherthingIwouldliketoaskisthat,inthebeginningofthestoryafterNeois
resurrected,heseesPersephonenakedandthenMerovingianalsoentersthesceneand
thentheyhaveaconversationandthen...Theyfadeaway...Theyarenotseen
anywhereinthepresentbutonlyintheflashbackofthestory...WhenNeoasksTrinity
aboutthem,shesaysitscomplicated...Sotheniftheywerenotshowninthepresent...
Thenwhyweretheyshowninthestory...I'mcurioustoknow...Pleasereply...
Shakir,
Asregardsmystory,itisveryimportanttorememberthatthehistory,events,places
andpeople(i.e.theentireworld)oftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrixareacomplete
fabricationwithintheCortex,andthatentireworldhasbeenmanufacturedbythe
"real"peoplewhooccupytheSource.InthissensethehistoryoftheMatrixandthe
SuperMatrixcouldjustaswellbeinformationsimplyimplantedinthevirtualmindsof
theinhabitantsoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix.Buteveniftheseeventstookplace
virtual(asopposedbebeingjustimplantedmemoriesofhistory),sucheventshaveno
bearingontheworldoutsideoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix.
Thatbeingsaid,thereisnoreasontosuggestthattherewerenotfiveancestorsor
previous"Ones"beforeNeo.Isuggestthatthecycleofthehumanstryingtoconquer
themachinesbyfindingandtrainingaspecial"One"wouldhavecontinuedindefinitely
wereitnotfortheextraordinaryandunanticipatedpowersandvisionofthenewest
"One"(i.e.Neo).Neo'sgiftandpowerssurpassedthatoftheprevious"Ones"insucha
wayastomakehimathreattothewholeCortexconstructandthereforeofthereal
world'scontrolofthemachines.Aspecial"One"wasananomalyintheworldofthe
MatrixandtheSuperMatrix,butNeo'sdangerouspowersasa"One"wentbeyondwhat
thenormalanomalywouldhavebeencapableofandhethereforebecameareal
anomaly(notjustavirtualanomaly)andathreattotherealworld.
ThedesignersoftheCortex(andtheMatrixandSuperMatrixworldswithintheCortex)
deliberatelysetupacyclicalbattlebetweenhumansandmachineswherethemachines
wouldultimatelywineverytime.Thiswasanintentionalwayofpreoccupyingthe"real"
machinesandkeepingthemfromrealizingthattheywerereallybeingcontrolled(i.e
enslaved)intherealworld.Neo,asthenew"One",shouldhavebeendestroyed,but
becausehispowerswereasuperanomaly,heupsetthebalanceandintendedpurpose
oftheCortexworld.Asfarastherealworldisconcered,Neoisanormalvirtualperson,
aconstructoftheCortex,upuntilhesurpassesthenormalpowersofthe"One".After
thathebecomesanextensionof,andperhapseventheoffspringof,theCortex(insome
weirdway).Heisonthevergeofachievingawarenessofthetruthbeyond,acondition
therealworldcannotallow.
Ihopethisisn'talltooconvoluted.
AsforPersephoneandtheMerovingian(whogoesbythenameVictorinthe
flashbacks),Ifoundithardtodoanythingwiththeminthepresent.Theresimplywasn't
enoughroominthestoryand,also,I'mnotsurewhatIwouldhavethemdoingina
MatrixworldwithnoNeo.Whatwasmostinterestingtomewaswhotheywerebefore
theirlivesunfoldedintheTrilogyandhowtheycamebebewhotheywereattheendof
theTrilogy.ThereiswhereIputallmyeffort.
You'veaskedsomeexcellentquestionsandIcanonlyhopeI'vegivenexcellentanswers.
Thanksforyourenthusiasmandinquiringthoughts.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/5/20107:07:04AM
HiSir...Thankyouforclarifyingmydoubts...Iseeyouhavementionedsomethingabout
MatrixRememory...IsthisanotherscriptbeforetheResurrected....Pleaseexplain...If
yes,thenwherecanIfindit...
Shakir,
Thisisastory(notintruescreenplayformat)thatwasmerelyatoolformetoexplore
theideasthatleaduptoMatrixResurrectedstory.Itissortoflikeasketch,nota
finishedwork.Besttoreaditinthatlight.Youcandownloaditatmatrixrememory.com
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:WarrenDATE:8/19/20103:16:32AM
Interesting...Ithasbagsofpotentialitjustseemsalittleunfinished.
OverallalthoughgrippedfrombeginningtofinishIdidn'tfeellikesomeeventswere
relevantortiedtogetherwellenoughandwasultimatelyleftfeelinglikethemovie
endedhalfwaythrough.
Generallythescriptisfullofinterestingrevealswhileitdoesexplaintheoriginsand
familytreesofsomeofthemorecolourfulcharactersfromthematrixuniverse.The
storyissofullofrevealsthatbythetimeIlearntheOracleisreallycalledSerenaandis
infactthemotherofMorpheusandCommanderLockeI'dalreadyhadmyfill.Basically
ratherthanrelyingoncharacterrevealsIthinkyouneedtogeneratesomefreshnew
interestingcharactersandgivethemafreshsenseofpurposewhatsthedilemmainthis
filmwhyamIcompelledtoreadonIfindmyselfsearching.Whatisthemeaningoflife,
whyamIhere?(JOKE)
Don'tgetmewronghavingrevealsisfineanddandyandcompellingbutitdoesn'treally
addtothestoryof''theone''andIdon'treallythinklearningtheMatrixfamilytree
makesforagoodmovie.Neo'sandTrinitiesparticipationalthoughcentraltothescript
turnsouttobealargelymundanemeettheparentsaffairwithinteractionstypically
reducedtomomentarylovescensandsoapoperaconversationlines.
SmithsrebirthintheMatrixworkswellandrevengeonthemachinesisniceIcansee
somemajorcarnagehappeningoncinemascreensbutIthinkyoushouldrethinkabout
howtheseeventstieintothestoryoftheoneandcommunicatehowtheseeventsare
goingtoleadNeobackintotheheartofthestoryifatall.
TheideaofNeobeingrebornagaininarealworldisinterestingbutthescriptdoesn't
makeanythingofit.Weknowwhyhewaspulledintothe'real'worldbutwhatishis
purposethereotherthantomakebabieswithTrinity?
...Iwanttoknowwhenheplugsbackinandstartskickingassagain!?!?Idon'tcare
aboutaFrenchMerovingianandaSigmundFraudwannabelookalikewhocallshimself
TheArchitectorisitDoctorStrong.Butthatsjustmyopinion.
Ipersonallydon'tseeithappeningasamoviebutperhapsItmightbebetterasabook?
Itwasacompellingread!!!
Warren,
IhavetosaythatIagreewithmostofyourcomments.
IwasreluctanttohaveNeoresurrectedasthesamecharacterheplayedintheTrilogy
(fightingSmithateveryturnandbattlingthemachinesadinfinitum).Ithinkthatthat
partofhischaracterwaswellheeledintheTrilogyandmighthavegottenabittoo
predictableifcarriedon.Thatiswhyheassumesalesserbutstillimportantroleinthis
story.
Grantedthat'srisky.ThepeoplewhoareintotheMatrixwantjustthat,Neosmashand
bash.Itookachance,though,andbypassedthatapproach.WhatIdidn'tdoenoughof,
Iguess,wascreateacentralcharacterorgroupthatcouldbringusthatsuper-charged
energythatmadeNeoandtheTrilogysoexciting.Ithinkthisispartofyourcriticism.
WhatIprobablyshouldhavedonewasspendmoretimeandenergyontheandroid36s
andtheirdilemmainfightingthehumans.IthinkthathaslotsofMatrix-stylepotential.
Iagreethatasitstandsitmightbebetterjustasabook(orscreenplay).Butif
Hollywoodnibblesatall,I'msureitcouldbeampedup.
I'mgladitintriguedyou,eventhoughitmighthavefallenshortofyourmark.Thanksfor
yourthoughtfulandhonestcritique.Suchconstructiveinsightisinvaluable.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:Neo13DATE:8/25/20105:33:56AM
Excellentattempt.Youhavethegift,butIthinkyou'rewaitingforsomething.
Neo13,
Iappreciatethatyoureaditanddroppedmeavoteofconfidence.
Yes,waitingforsomething...aren'tweall.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:CatherineFellsDATE:8/31/20108:37:21AM
its4:35amandireadthisinitsentiretyandihavetosaythisisincrediblework...uhave
anamazingtalentandihopeyougettherecognitionudeserve...wellthoughtoutand
edgeofyourseatmaterial..goodluck
Catherine,
Lovewhenitkeepspeoplereadingintotheweehoursofthenight.That'sasuresign
I'vecapturedsomeone'simagination.
Sohappytohearthatyoulikeditsomuch.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:PacoFranciscoDATE:9/4/20105:31:37AM
Unfortunately,mycommentisn'tgoingtobeadeepplotanalysisinthescriptsentirety,
butratherasummaryofmyopinionsonvariouskeyplotdevices.
Theworldabovethe"supermatrix":Aslongasyoupromisethatthere'snosupersuper
matrix...fine,thisideaisverygood,especiallythewayyouportrayitasalmostlikean
antithesistoZion,butifyoutrytoaddonanotherlevelinanotherinstallment...itwould
becomeveryoffputting.Istartedtogetqueasyattheendwhenneo'sreflectionsdidn't
moveinthemirror...
Victor=Merovingian-Ilovethisidea.
Victor=ArchitectsSon...Trinity=Victor'sdaughter,etc.etc.
Ifeelliketherearealotoftheserandomcoincidentalrelationstoallthemajorplot
characters.Butitworksoutfine.TheOraclebeingMorpheus'motherisjustfunny.
IsaidIlikedtheideathatVictorwastheMerovingian...HOWEVER.Thescenewhere
VictorenterstheMatrixanddropshissuitcasemakesabsolutelynosensetome
whatsoever...Idon'tunderstandwhatit'stryingtoportray.Doesthesuitcaseholdsome
kindofimportantinformationabouttheworldoutsidetheMatrix?Also...intheMatrix
reloaded...hedefinitelydidn'tseemtohavetheamountofpoweryou'reportrayinghim
tohave.
Smithisback:I'mkindof50-50onthisone...andI'mlessthan50-50onthefactthathe
cannowmanipulateallofthemachineswithinthesupermatrix...Butthenostalgiaof
Smith'slinesmademesmile,hiscoldandcalculatingphilosophies.
CharacteroftheArchitect-MakehimmorelikehewasintheMatrix:Reloaded...but
notassinister...ifyouknowwhatImean?It'snotsomuchhowyouusehimintheplot
asitisthathiswordchoiceseemsslightlyoff.Butthat'snotabigdeal.
Neo'sson-Ireallyhatethisidea...Ican'treallyexplainwhy...Maybeitwasjusttheway
youportrayedtheendingandhisintroduction...itwasverylacklusterandseemed
childishespeciallycomparedtotherestofthetext.
TheCortex/Source...Howitmagicallycapturedandtrickedallrobotswasneverreally
explained...
Overall...Iwouldpaymoneytoseethisinthetheaters...andthenbuytheDVD.Asis.So
yousucceededinmyopinion.
Paco,
Ireadyourcommentsbutwon'tbeabletoreplyforafewdays.Theyareinsightfuland,
tome,affirmingofmywork.Iwilladdressallofyourcommentsinmoredetailwhen
timepermits.
Thanks,PDWood
Paco,
Sorryforthedelayedresponse.Ireadallyourcommentsandverymuchappreciatethe
timeyouputintothem.
Iunderstandyourqueasinessatsensinga"supersupermatrix".Yes,Idoimplythat
thereareworldsbeyondtheoneIpaintedbutIdon'tsuggest(norwouldIpursue)a
supersupermatrix(i.e.afabricatedworldthat'smaskingthetruthfromonegroupso
theothercandominateit).Thatwouldcertainlybecometiresome.WhatIdopostulate
(andsuggestthatNeocanpotentiallytapinto)arerealitiesbeyondhisown.Isuggest
thatreality(foreveryone)isjustaninfinitenumberofparallelplanesofexistenceand
it'stherefortheviewingorexperiencing,ifonlywecanaccessit.AndIsuggestthatNeo
maybeabletotapintoit,butthatisallIsuggest.Idon'tsuggestthathewillorevenhas
thedesiretogobeyondtheworldhehasfinalendedupin.AsIsayinmystory,Neo
comestotermswiththeillusoryqualityofhisreality(andofallpotentialrealities)and
realizesthatenjoyingthehereandnowiswhat'smostimportant.
ThankyouforlovingtheVictor=MerovingianideaasmuchasIdid.AlsotheVictor=
Architect'sson.Trinity=Victor'sdaughter,etc.Thisconceptoffamilywassocentralto
mystoryand,tome,oneofthemostintriguingandfunideas.
I'msorrythescenewhereVictor(theMerovingian)dropshissuitcasewasconfusingto
you(orpoorlywrittenbyme).ThesuitcasehadnothingtodowiththepowerthatVictor
acquired.Hejusthappenedtobeholdingit(anddroppingit)whenhispowersbecame
apparenttohim.Thegreencodeswirlingaboutthathewasabletoseejust
coincidentallyconvenedaroundhissuitcase.Sorryfortheconfusion.Asforhisnot
havingthesamepowersintheearlierMatrixTrilogythatIseemtoimplyhehasnow,let
megiveyoumytake.IalwayssawtheMerovingianintheTrilogyashavingimmense
powerbutneverusingit.Hehadhenchmentodohisdirtywork.Todisplaythebrute
aggressivenessofsuchpowerwouldbeconsideredgauche.Butasyouwillrecall,when
allhishenchmenhadbeendisabledandhewasleftalonewithNeo,hewasforcedto
usehispowertoescapeNeoandsimultaneouslytransporthimthousandsofmilesaway
(whenhehadNeofollowhimthroughthatdoor).ThatwasapowerthatnotevenNeo
couldreplicate.So,thatismylineofreasoning.Hopeitmakessenseforyou.
ThereturnofSmithsomehowseemednecessarytome.IfmyideaoftheMatrixasa
worldwherethemachinesmustalwaysbedistractedistomakesense,thenthemore
themachineshavetofightagainst,thebetter.Iadmit,though,itcangetabitold.But
likeyousaid,hisdeliciousevilnessishardtoputdown.
TheArchitectbecomesaverycomplexcharacterinmystory.Heisnowshownasboth
savioranddestroyer,Godanddevil.Andwordchoiceseemstobeahitormisswith
him.Somepeoplelikeit,somepeopledon't.
TheNeo'ssonthing,morenegativethanpositivereviews.Itmayhavetogo.Yep.
AndIbelieveyouareonlythesecondpersontocommentonhowthe"Cortex/Source...
Howitmagicallycapturedandtrickedallrobotswasneverreallyexplained..."Ididthink
thatconceptthroughandIdidhaveanexplanationandIwouldhaveincorporateditifI
hadhadmorespace,butitwassimplytoocomplextoaddressinthisstory.Shouldthis
screenplayevergetpickedupandproducedinsomeformatbythepublishingworldor
WarnerBrothers,Ihopetobringthatexplanationtolight.
Butfornow,Ileaveitamystery.Afterall,Idon'twanttoleavenothingforthe
imagination.
Thanksforyourtimeandattention.Ifeltonlyaffirmationafterreadingyourcomments
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DominguezBertieDATE:9/24/201010:38:21PM
Ihadadreamtomakemycompany,howeverIdidnothavegotenoughamountof
moneytodothis.Thankgoodnessmyclosefellowproposedtoutilizethemortgage
loans.SoIusedthestudentloanandmaderealmyolddream.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MicroConsoleDATE:10/19/20106:35:17PM
Icanseethatyouareanexpertinthisfield!Iamlaunchingawebsitesoon,andthis
informationisveryusefulforme.Thanksforallyourhelpandwishingyouallthe
successinyourbusiness.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:researchpaperhelpDATE:10/20/20101:35:40PM
greatonetheOracleimpliestheabilitytoseethefuture
COMMENT:AUTHOR:johnbDATE:12/1/20104:29:31PM
Yourpositivecommentsareallveryimpressive!Notonlydothese'fans'havesimilar(if
notidenticallypraiseworthy)commentsandopinions,theyposttheirpraiseinthesame
exactstyleandprose!Now,Iknowastand-upauthorlikeyourselfwouldNEVERgive
himselffakepressonafakewebsitepraisingafakescriptinanadmittedlyfakedup
franchisethathasalreadybeendeflowered,draggedthroughdirt,anddippedindog
shit...wouldyou?
IamaprofessionalwriterwhohasactuallysoldawordortwoandIjustwokeupwitha
nastyhangover,Iamwearingsoiledclothing,andIamoutofcigarettes,andthispost
burningyouisbetterthananythingyouhaveeverwritten.Studythispostlongand
hard,andyoujustmightsomedaybeabletosqueezeoutasemi-softslanderous
soliloquy.
Iknowyouaredyingtojustquotemethereandsay'that'swhatshesaid'.Sodoit.
Goodwritersspeaktheirmindsatalltimes=)
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AmandaDATE:12/16/20105:06:07PM
Thisscriptwasbeautifullycraftedandverywellconstructed.Haveyoutriedsendingthis
to"TheBrothers"togetthismadeintothenextMatrix?Itcertainellyfillsgapsand
broadenshorizons.
Amanda,
Thankyoufortheupliftingpraise.IhavetriedtogetittotheWachowskibrothers,but
thatisnoeasytask.Ifyouhaveanyideasonhowtoaccomplishthatorknowsomeone
whoknowsthem,pleaseletmeknow.I'mallears.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:NT2HLBLYDATE:12/18/20105:50:16AM
Thiswasagreatread!Iwouldlovetoseethisonthebigscreen.
Greatjob!
NT2HLBLY,
Thanks.Appreciatethethumbsup.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JordanMadereDATE:12/30/20106:06:15PM
ToWhomitMayConcern....
IfeelcompelledtowritetowhomeverisresponsiblefortheMatrixResurrected
screenplay.
Firstofall,holyshit.Iamfloored.AsasupremeAll-Things-Matrixdevotee,Iam
impressedbeyondbeliefwiththismaterials,somuchsothatIammorethansurethat
therealcreativebrilliancebehinditarethewritersoftheoriginalMatrixtrilogy.For
manyyearsI'vefeltthephilosophicalweightofthisstory,asI'msuremanyfanshave,
andthatRevolutionswasnottherightfulconclusion.Thankyousomuchforputtingthe
propereffortintolayingoutapremisethatgoesaboveandbeyondtrulyexpandingon
theoriginalwork.
Thelayersofsyntheticrealitythatyouhavecreated,whileeachexistingasboth
simulationandmicrocosmofthecosmosandthehumanmind,reallydoestheoriginal
trilogyjustice,downtothefinestdetails,includeelementsofcharacterandsettingthat
completelysync.
IcannotexpresshowimpressedandgratefulIamforyourefforts.Itmayevenseem
ludicroushowmuchthismeanstome,butIconnectwiththeMatrixmaterialonalevel
thatIhavenotyetfoundinanother.
Thanksagainforyourefforts,theyaretrulyappreciated.
JordanMadere
Jordan,
Iamequallyflooredbyyourgenerouscommentsandadmiration.Theeffortandtime
putintomystoryseemallthemorerelevantandworthwhilewhenIreceivefeedback
suchasyours.
Whatagreatday.Thanks.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:yusufDATE:1/15/20115:52:49PM
istartedreadingthisscreenplaytodayandthebeginingwasgood,butireached
"MorpheusaddressestheCouncilELDERS"andithinkhesoundskindacoldinthis,it
wouldbebetterithinkifsomeoneelsereportsthenewsinthemeeting,anditwouldbe
likeprivate:Themachineshavesentamessage,morpheuslooksexitedbutwith
coution,private:AnditsaddensmetoreportthatTrinityandNeoarebothdead,then
morpheusseemesshokedforamomentleensalittlebitforewordbutthengetsagrip
onhisselfandsqueezeshiseyes,looksdown,andhesitsstraightagain,-orsomething
likethat-,andyougivemorpheusthelinethatsays"17hours..."thenthesoldieranswers
him"Theysaytheirbodies..."afterthatDILLARDseeshimandhowhegoteffectedthen
heaskshimifhewantstobetheonetobringhim,thenhesays:
"Itwouldbemyhonor."imsorryifyoumightthinkthatyourwayisbetterbutithink
thattherearesomepeoplelike"neo,morpheus..."whopeoplewillbeeagertoseethem
afteralltheseyears
andifaproducerisreadingthisandhasaearlybadcoldimpressionfromoneofthe
mainpartsthenhewillbarelyhavetheinterestinreadingtherest,imeantheperson
watchingthemovieforexamplewillmostlikelywanttoknowwhatsgoingtohappenat
thesurfaceifmorpheusseemsaffected,andtheywilllookforwardonseeingthethe
manwhobelievedreunitewiththeone,thereforeyousetthegroundsforanemotional
moment,andthatsitfornowimightbecorrectorincorrectbecausethispartiswerei
reachedsofar,imeanyouprobablywanthimtosoundcoldforsomereasonidon't
knowright?
yusuf,
Iappreciatethetimeyou'vetakentocommentonthescreenplayandIwillconsider
yourconcerns.However,Iwillalwaysbemoreopentocommentsifthestoryisread
fromstarttofinish.Ihopeyoureadthewholethingandcomebackwithfreshinsights.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:AlanDATE:1/24/20114:31:51PM
Lookslikea4thmovieishappening.Andthe5thoneaswell.Notsureifit'ssomething
relatetoyourscript?
http://movies.ign.com/articles/114/1145599p1.html
Alan,
Thanksfortheheadsup.Ikindofknewsomethingwasupthough;there'saspikein
visitortrafficwheneveranynewsabouttheMatrixhitstheairwaves.
Yes,therumoristhattheWachowskishaverampedupforMatrix4and5.Igottasay,
I'mprettyintriguedwithwhateverthey'vecomeupwith.Can'twaittosee'em.
Thanks,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:hollyDATE:1/28/20115:42:44PM
iabsolutelylovethematrixandithinkyouguysareexcellentwritersandiwasjust
wonderingifyouguysweregoingtomakethisoutbeamovie??butyouguysshould
keepwritingnomatterwhatanyonesayscauseisawsomeofthenastycommentsona
differentwebsitereferringtoyalbutthereisalwaysgoingtobeenemysinthisworld
andijustwantedtosaykeepwritingcauseimsureitmeansalottoyouguysanddont
letanyoneputuguysdown.andthefourthmatrixsoundsreallygoodandikept
thinkingdamnthewritersofthisarereallysmartandimaginativelol..pleaseemailmeif
youcancauseireallywanttoknowifthisisgoingtobeamovie
COMMENT:AUTHOR:WeirdDATE:1/29/20111:28:55AM
Hi,
SadlyfoundouttheMatrix4&5rumourswereahoax.Butthat'showIfoundyour
script!Readitallinonesitting,readalargenumberofthefeedbackcommentshere.I
absolutelylovedyourscript,andwouldlovetoseeitasafilm/comic/bookwhatever!
Whetherornotthishappens,I'mtakingthistobethe4thpartoftheMatrix,Ifeltthe
trilogyhadalotthatcould'vebeendevelopedoraddedonto,andIloveyourideasand
whatyou'vedone.
PleasekeepmepostedonyourprogresstryingtogetintocontactwiththeBrothers.I'm
morethanhappytohelpinanyway-mostlikelyonlinegroupstobehonest,but
anythingtobeofuse,letmeknow!Reallylovedit.
I'dwritemorebutit'slatehere,sodon'tbetoosurprisedifIaddrandomcommentsata
laterdate!Andit'sgoodtoseefrom2007you'vebeensteadilyreplyingtoalltheposts
here!Goodjob!
Weird,
Yep.Ahoax.Toobad.Butthere'sboundtobeafourthatsomepoint.Probablya
computer-generated,super-realistic,3DversionsoKeanuwon'thavetokillhimself.
Gladyoulikeditsomuchandconsideritworthytobeatruefourthepisode.Anyfuture
commentswouldcertainlybewelcome.Alwayslovethebanter.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DjshotokanDATE:3/3/20111:01:26PM
Absolutelybrilliant.Withallreads,peoplecanalwaysaddorsubtract.ThisoneIhope
doesreachtherighteyes.andwithKeanuandtheWachowskibrotherstalkingagain..i
dosincerelyhopeyoupushthisalittleharder.IFyouneedanyassistance,youhave
ALOOTTofpeoplewillingtohelp!
COMMENT:AUTHOR:lifesettlementDATE:3/3/20119:20:49PM
tryingtoreadyourpicture.YourlayoutisnotviewingrightwithIE5webbrowseron
ipad.
Djshotokan,
Thanksforthepositivewords.
IheardtherumorthatKeanuandtheWachowskiswereworkingonaMatrix4,butI
believeitturnedouttobeahoax.Doyouhaveothernews?
Byallmeanssendthescripttowhomeveryouthinkmightbeabletoputitintotheright
hands.I'vetriedandhadnoluck.
Perhapsyouhaveconnections?
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SarinaDATE:3/5/20113:02:01AM
Ijustreadthisforthefirsttimenow,andIthinkit'sBRILLIANT.Iabsolutelylovethe
Matrixtrilogy,andthisscreenplayisatleastasgood/ifnotbetterthanthefirstthree
movies.I'masuckerforintricatestories/mindscrews,anditdoesn'tgetmorecomplex
thanafreakingSupermatrix.Theonlyquibblethatanyonecouldpossiblyhavewithit
(andwhatcouldpreventitfromeverbeingmadeintoamovie)isthatwhileit'sa
fantasticexplanation/extensionoftheoriginalstoryoftheMatrix,there'snotaspecific,
identifiable"struggle"inthisinstallment.Everythingistoldintheformofflashbacks,
etc.ThestakesgetraisedneartheendwithSmith'sreappearance,butitendsona
cliffhangernotejustwhenthingsaregettinggood!(AndIreallywanttoknowwhatthe
heckisupwiththefreakyreflectionsinthemirrors).TheMatrixmovieswereso
successfulbecausetheywerestoriesofepicstruggleagainstimpossibleodds(everyone
lovesanunderdog),withtherequisiteheavydosesofkick-assactionthrownin.There
wasalsoamuchmorereadilyidentifiableantagonistinthefirstthree(themachines).
Thisscreenplayobfuscatesthatdistinctionbetweengoodandevil,whichIlike,butyour
averagemovietheater-goerdoesn't.AndIcansee"Hollywoodpeople"notwantingto
investinthisscreenplaybecauseunlikethefirstthreethere'smoreplotexplicationthan
thereisactualaction.Butohmygod,forallmycriticism,IwasjustabsolutelyBLOWN
AWAYbythescreenplay,andithaschangedthewayIseetheMatrixtrilogy.I'mgoing
tomakeeveryoneIknowreadit,whethertheywan'ttoornot!Kudostotheauthoron
aterrificpieceofscreenplay:D
Oh,andIhavetothrowthisin:scratchwhatIsaidearlier,theonlyproblemwiththis
storyisthatitDOESN'TINCLUDETHETWINS.IlovedtheminReloaded!!Theyarethe
bestvillainseverwhowerekilledofftoosoon:(
Sarina,
Todayhashadalotoflowpoints,sowhenIcheckedthecommentssection,Iwasreally
hopingforanice,upliftingreview.Yourscouldn'thavebeenmuchnicer.Thanksso
much.Iespeciallylovetheterm"brilliant";itreallywarmsthesoulofanywriter.
Idohavetorefuteyourcomment,though,thatthereisn'tasingle,identifiable
"struggle"inthisinstallment.WhereIseethemostprofoundandongoingstruggleis
withthehumansandtheandroid36s.Whileit'struethatmuchofmystorytalksabout
theirstruggleinflashbacks,it'simpliedthatthatstruggleisstillgoingoninthepresent
andwillcontinueindefinitely.Theheartofthisconflictandwhatmakesitsoironicis
thatitistheoppositeofwhatishappeningintheMatrixworld.Nowallofthesudden,
wesympathizewiththe36swhoaretryingtoregainthefreedomoftheirkindandwho
aretryingtobeeradicatedbythehumans.Thishastremendouspossibilitiesandsetsup
thepotentialthatNeomayhavetostepinatsomepointandusehis(implied)powersin
thisnewworldhehasjustentered.
Theother,lesserstrugglesare:
...theoriginalmachinesagainstthehumanswhich,althoughthereseemstobea
temporarytruce,couldrecommenceatanytime.Thetensionisintheimpliedfuturereengagementofhostilities.
...theresurrectionofSmithandhisnewarmy,thatsetsupthepotentialstruggle
betweenSmithandthemachines(whoheseemsbentondestroying)andbetween
SmithandperhapstheyoungNeo,whoappearsattheendofmystory.
Andthentherearenumerouslittlepotentialstrugglesbetweenindividualcharacters
thatcouldflairupatanytime;MorpheusandLock,LockandNiobe,theArchitectand
theOracle,PersephoneandtheMerovingian.Grantedthesearejustimplied,but
they'rethereandtheygivethestorytensionandelbowroomtoexpandlater(ifindeed
thereisaMatrix5ormore).
{{{NotthatI'mwritingaMatrix5.Letmebeclear.Icurrentlyhavenointentionofdoing
that...unlessofcoursetheMatrix4ideaisbroughttothescreenandissuccessful.THEN,
IwouldcertainlydoaMatrix5.}}}
ButIagreewithyourunderlyingpremisethatthisstorylacksaclear,singleantagonist
andthatHollywoodandmostmoviegoerswouldbedisappointedwiththestoryasitis
now.Butboydoesitsetupsomegreatthreadstoexpandupon.And,ifHollywood
knocked,I'msureIcouldpickoneortwogoodthreadsfromthisscreenplayanddevelop
themintothekindofstorythatmoviegoerswouldlove.And,yes,itwouldneedmore
action.Lotsmore.
Andthetwins.Deliciouslysinisterandatthesametimeunderstated.Iagree.
I'mflatteredthatyouaregoingtotellallyourfriendsaboutit.Ihopetheyenjoyitjust
asmuch.
Sothankfulforyourin-depthandinsightfulcomments.Andyourcelebratorypraise.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:A.JaradDATE:4/8/20116:28:05AMWOOW
IhavetobeHonestamInshock,YoualmostrepliedToeverycommentfrom2007to
2011WOW,Bravo,veryHonorable:)!
I'vstoppedatpage50andwillcontinuetomorrow,Ihavetogo2sleep,butIhaveto
saythatyoubroughttomesomuchmemory,itwaslikewatchingTheMatrixallover
again,Lovethefactthatithaveflashback,weneededthat,andtheopeningscenewas
"ClassicMatrix".
NeverthoughtoftheideaofwatchingaNewMatrixbutYouopenedmymindforitand
IhopeIwill.
anywayIhavealittlepointIwouldlovetoadd,I'vereadacommentatthe1stpage
aboutsomeonesayingthatthename"theSuperMatrix"isnotMarketable,youreplied,
heneverdid.IthinkthattheguyhaveapointImean"Supermatrix"foratittlenameis
acheesyname(withallrespect),morelikea80's/90'stittle,youcanfindmanymany
moreattractivenamethatCouldHelpyouSpreadTheScreenplayfaster,aftarallmy
friendmarketingisEVERYTHING!
IhaveaQuestion,nowamnotverywellknownwithhowmovieswork,butifaDirector
sawthiscanhemakeittothebigscreen?ifyesdidyoutrytosendtotheThe
Wachowskis?
Nextyearamgannastudy"ProductionandDirection"andifnoonewilladoptthis,I
promiseyouthatthiswillbeMy1stAdoption,ifIcandosuchathing:)
THEMATRIX.......
AFourthEpisode
WRITTEN/SCREENPLAYBY:P.D.Wood
DIRECTEDBY:A.JARAD
:)goodluckwithyourlifemyfriend,HopeyoureplytomeASAP
ajarad,
Gladyoulikethescript.Manyofyourquestionswillbeansweredifyoureadmoreof
thecomments.And,yes,ifyoubecomeadirectorandwanttomakemyscriptintoa
movie,justletmeknow.
Goodluck!PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JamesTaylorDATE:4/27/20118:20:58AM
Isthisajoke?Ibarelygotpastthefirstpage,it'ssomeofthemoststilteddialogueI've
everread.Unfilmablerubbish.
JamesTaylor,
ThankyouforseeingthatIcapturedthespiritoftheoriginalssowell:stilteddialogue
wasdefinitelyoneofthehallmarksoftheTrilogy...andoneofthequalitiesthatmadeit
sodistinctive(andcampyattimes)..."youknowwho".
Thankyou,MonkofKnowledge..."Who?...Youknowwho".
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DominickWrightDATE:5/20/201112:46:45AM
Verygood.IlovetheMatrixandalwaysfollowedit.Iactuallyjustsatdownwithapen
andpaperandwasabletointerperatetheMatrixinaspiritualsensewhichactually
makesitrealandIhavesomanyideals.Feelfreetogetincontactwithme,Ialsocanbe
averygoodassettothefilm.
-DominickWright
Dominick,
I'mgladyoulikedthescriptanditgaveyoua"spiritualconnection"withmanyideas
beinggenerated.Hopefully,theywillleadtomoregreatideas.
Isenseinyourlastsentencethatyouthinkthisisgoingtobe(oralreadyis)afilm.That
isnotthecase.AtthemomentitisjustatreatforMatrixfanswhowantedthestoryto
goonemorelevel.
However,ifyouhaveconnectionsorcanmovethisscripttoHollywood,Iwouldbevery
happy.Ifyoucandothat,pleaseletmeknow.
Otherwise,thanksforstoppingbyandreading(andcommenting).Italwaysmakesmy
day.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:mrwaltersDATE:6/13/201112:15:49PM
Ihavesomedoubtsaboutthisscript/screenplay!Ilikealotofwhatyouhavedonebut
imosmithshouldstaygone,neoshouldhaveflashbacksofsmith.andithinkneoshould
belinkedtothemachinesgivingtheminformationonactivitiesatZionandship
movements.anunknowingspyifyoulike.Imustadmitihaventreadallyourscreenplay
soyoumayhavethisinthere.ihavesomeotherideasforitaswellandwaseven
temptedtowritesomethingofmyown!butyouhavedoneanicejobfromwhatihave
seen,dropmeanemailifyouwantsomemoreofmyideas?!?RegardsSean.
Sean,
Thankyouforyourresponse.Yes,it'shardtopleaseeveryone;IwishIcould.
I'mgladtherearesomepartsthatyoulikeandIencourageyoutofinishthescript.It's
prettymeatyallthewaythrough(andnodoubtsomepartswillpleaseandsomewill
disappoint).Nonetheless,Ithinkyouwillappreciatethelevelofdetailanddepth,evenif
theplotdirectionisnottoyourtaste.
Alwaysliketohearotherpeople'sideas,butasformakingchangestomyscriptatthis
point,Iprobablywon'tunlesstheideawas"superboss"orthepaywas"megamega".
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:Chris
DATE:6/20/201110:19:32AM
WhowouldhavethoughtI'dchangeuponanintriguingpieceofwritingwhilewhittling
awaythehoursatwork?
OneofthefirstthingsInoticedaboutyourscriptwasthatitlackedtheoverthetop
actionscenesthatbecamethehallmarkofthetwosequels,yetasIcontinuedreadingI
realizedthatyourtakeontheMatrixmythoswasoneofphilosophicaldiscoursetinged
withreligiousovertones,butnotnearlyenoughtobeanythingmorethansubtle,
thankfully.
Ididhaveproblemswithsomeofthedialogue,inparticulartheveryjarring
presentationoftheArchitectcharacterHowever,afterreadingmore,Iconcludedthat
hisdropinverbosityislargelyduetohimnotbeingaconstructintheMatrix,butareal
andbelievableperson(NoonewouldspeakastheArchitectdidanyway,notunlesshe
wantstolivepast20haha).Theflashbackswerealittledisorientingbutmanageable
afterawhile.
Themachinecharactersinyourscripthowever,failedtoelicitanyemotion.Infact,
otherthanrelievewhentheyweredestroyed,Ididn'tcareforthatplot.Perhapsyou
wereintendingforthat,I'mnotsure.AllIknowisforastorythatwasalready
convoluted,themachineswereaweak,albeitnecessaryadditiontoillustratethe
schoolsofthoughtsthatwerespunontheirheadsinthescript.
ThereisnowayI'llknowifyou'llreadthis,somanyyearssincethelastcomment...butif
youdo,Isupposeyou'dbehappytoknowinthewakeofWBannouncingtwomore
Matrixsequels,thatIwilldevouranyscrapofinformationtheythrowatuswithyour
exceptionallywellwrittenandwellthoughtofstorylayingthebrickworkofwhatIwill
acceptintheiriteration.
Chris,
Verythoughtfulandhelpfulcomments.
Yes,morecerebralthantheoriginalTrilogy;Iwouldlovemoreactionthough,justnotso
muchthatthephilosophicalelementisblunted.Maybesomeday.
GladyouwereabletoassimilatetheArchitect'sdemeanorandtheflashbacksasthe
storyprogressed.Theydotakeabitofworkingthrough.
Iwassurprisedthatthemachinecharactersleftyoucold;thatwasnotmyintention.
AlthoughIfeltitwasnecessarytomakethemabitwoodenandcalculating(theyare
machinesafterall),Idid,nonetheless,wanttheaudiencetofeelsympathyandhopefor
them.Ifyouwouldn'tmind,pleasetellmewhatfellshortforyouorwhatyouthink
wouldengendermoresympathyforthem.Thiswouldbeveryimportantforthestory.
Thankyouagainforyourappreciationformywork.Hopefullysomedaythescriptwillbe
morethanjustwordsonapage.
PDWood
Actionsequencesarealwaysapickletowrite,whichmakessensesinceitsbetterto
watchsomeonepunchsomeoneelseratherthanreadaboutit.AndtheMatrixthrives
onphilosophicaldiscourse,notaction.Ablendofthetwowouldbegreat,butasshown
bythesecondmovie,itseasytogetoverwhelmed.
Isupposethereasonwhythemachinesdidn'tappealtomecouldhavebeenhowthey
wereintroduced.NowinitiallytherewereabitofamysterysurroundingthemandIwas
wonderingifthescenestheywereintookplaceinthepastornot.Eventuallyitall
begantomakesenseandthebigrevealthattheyweremachineswaswelldone.
Itwasshockingandslightlyterrifying.Still,mostofthereasonsbehindtheirpurposelay
withinthehumandialogueandthemachinesmerely,tomeanyway,tooktheplaceof
therebelsofZion.Perhapsifmoretimewerespentdevelopingthemandtheirstory
weretoldbytheirpeopleratherthanitjuxtaposingandleaningheavilyonthe
human/supermatrixside,itmighthaveappealedtomemore.
Ilovebrokenandanti-heroiccharacterssoIhadreallywantedtolikethemachinesbut
otherthantheinitialshockofthemturningouttobesuch,Iwassatisfiedwhenthey
blewupBECAUSEtheyweretryingtosabotagethehumans.Itshardtosympathizewith
aspeciesthat'sseentryingtofightforfreedomfromaspeciesyoubelongto.Evenmore
so,thehumanswereseenasdoingtherightthing.
YourcharactersoftheArchitect,TheOracleandallofthemcameofasgenerallyvery
nice,caringpeoplewhoonlywantthegoodformankind.Itshardtofaultpeoplelike
that,especiallysincetheyputthemselvesatdangerfortheonestheylove.
Ifthiswasatreatmentsplitupintotwoorthreeparts,itmayhavebeenpossibletogive
theMachinesmorefacetime,butasthiswasmeanttobeastand-alone,Ican
understandwrappinguptheplots.Ialsounderstandthatmyviewmaybeuniqueas
othersmayfinditfine.Asafellowwriter,Iknowitsimpossibletopleaseeveryone.
Chris,
Yes,theperfectblendofactionandconcept.Hardtoachieve.ThefirstMatrixwasa
greatexampleofsuccess.WishIwrotethat!
IthinkyouareprobablyrightthatIdidnotgivethemachinecharactersenoughdepthor
development.IwillkeepthatinmindifIdoarewrite.Actually,Ialwayscouldseemore
thatcouldbedonewiththem,butwiththegroundIwastryingtocover,itjustdidn'tfit
in.Damnedshoehorn!
And,yes,beingahumanmakesithardtorootforthemachines,especiallysincethe
humansarenotreallybehavingwithevilintent.Toughtoavoidthatdilemma.But,
again,withtherightrewrite,itcouldbeimproved.
Iappreciatewhenotherwritersgivemecritiques;Iknowthey'recomingfromthesame
placeandknowwhatitmeanstohavetheirworkdissected.There'shonestywith
delicacy.Necessaryforboththesuccessesandshortcomings.
Ifigureif75%likeit,that'sascloseto%100percentageasI(ormostwriters)arelikely
tocome.Thatusuallyleaves%10whoareindifferentand15%whodislikeit.Respectful,
that.
Thanksagainforyourcomments.Goodluckwiththewriting!
PDWood
Likewise,goodluck.You'veshownamazingresiliencetosomeofthemoreunfounded
nastycommentsonhereandI'msuitablyimpressed!IdoubtI'llbeabletofindthegood
ineverythingasyouhavehaha!
Ilookforwardtoreadingarewriteorasequelwhenyoueverdoone!
Chris,
AlthoughIlovetheideasIcameupwithforthisMatrixcontinuation,Iwasalways
uneasyaboutbuildingonsomeoneelse'swork.(Truthis,Ineverthoughtmyideas
wouldgothisfar,thestoryhavingbeenaresponsetoadarebyafriendwhowastired
ofhearingmetalkaboutwhatwouldhappeniftherewereanotherMatrix).Kindofjust
snowballedfromafewideasintoawholescript.
Ithinkafairnumberofcommentsthataren'tsofavorablearefrompeoplewhodidn't
likemefiddlingwithwhatmanythoughtwasacompleteandawesomestory.SoItake
mylicksbecausesomeofthemmaywellbedeserved.(Besides,allwritershavetohave
athickskin;criticscanbeverytough.)
Nonetheless,IlovethestoryandamveryappreciativeofallthoseMatrixfanswholove
it,too(andletmeknowthroughttheircomments).
Goodluck...andhopefullyseeyouinthemovies.PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:6/26/20118:59:14PM
HiChris,
Idon'tknowifyourememberme,butIreadyourstoryayearbackandwehadsome
conversationsregardingit....
Justwantedtocatchupwithyou:
(1)Iftherehasbeenanyprogressaboutmakingthisamovie,itsreallyworthit
(2)Ireallyappreciatethewayyouhandlecriticismsandreplytoeveryonealike...
Hatsofftoyou...
--
Shakir
COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:6/27/20114:43:31PM
Yes,Itotallyagree.Somepeopledogetpassionateaboutthingsanditsgood.IknowI'll
getreallypassionateaboutthingslikeTheTerminatorandSalvationreallymademe
wanttokillmyselfhah!Metaphoricallyofcourse.
Andallwritersdohavetohavethickskin.Thatistrue.Imcurrentlyattemptingto
managemyegoaswell.Butitsallgood.
Ifyoueverdoworkonextendingitandwantsomehelp,I'llgladlylendsomeassistance,
eventhoughitmaynotbeasprofoundassomeoftheotherexpertshere.
HiShakir,
Ithinkyouareconfusingmewiththepreviouscommenter.
Yes,Irememberyouwell.AsIrecall,wehadnumerousdiscussions.
Noprogressonmakingthemovie.Ifitweretohappen,atthispointitwouldprobably
havetobecompletelydigital;theactorsarenotasspryastheyusedtobe.
Butthatmightactuallybeverycool.Thetechnologyiscloseenough,Ithink,topullitoff
andhavepeoplestillgetintothecharacters.Naturally,thevoicesshouldbebythe
originalactors.
Asforcriticism,toacknowledgeonlythenicecommentsistodistanceyourselffromthe
truth.Itakethecriticismtoheartandtrytofindthevalueinthem.Thereisalwayssome
kernelworthconsidering.
Thankyouforyourfollowupcommentandtojustsayhello.Andifanythingsubstantial
happens,believeme,Iwillpostit!takecare,PDWood
Chris,
Passion.It'slife.Gottahaveit!
Goodideascancomefromanyone.Idiscountnoone.
Ifthisscriptmovestoanotherstage,Iwillbesuretosolicitassistancefromthosewho
havebeensokindastorespondwiththoughtfulcomments.
Goodluckonyourendeavors.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:KyleDATE:7/19/20114:31:18AM
IwilladmitthatIdidnotreadallofthescreenplay,somaybeImissedsomething.I
mainlyreadthescenesinwhichNeoappeared,becauseitseemedlikethosescenes
gavethemostinformationaboutyourunderlyingplot.ForgivemeifIamwrong,butto
me,thisscreenplayreallyseemedalotlikeacopyoftheoriginalstoryofthefirstthree
movies,withaslightrolereversalthrownintothemix.
Ialsofeltlikethedirectionyouchosetotakewiththeendingmadetheentirecreation
ofa4thpartsomewhatpointless.Yousetupalotofscenariosthatcouldhavebeen
interesting,butthenleftthemdanglingtherelikeachristmasstockingwithnopresents
inside.
SomeofthethingsthatIthoughtneededclosure:
SmithsreturntotheMatrix
Trinity'sparentsbeingstuckintheSuperMatrix
MorpheusthinkingthatTrinityandNeoweredead
Again,forgivemeifIbroughtsomethingupthatyoudidaddress.FromwhatIread,I
thinkIhaveitrightthough.Justmyopinion.Itwasverywellwrittenthough.Ididenjoy
yourvividdescriptionsofthingsthroughout.Youdoagreatjobofpaintingamental
pictureofhowtheimageryshouldlook.
Kyle,
Yourobservationsaremostlycorrect.Yes,thisstoryisdefinitelysimilartothefirst.The
ideawastocomefullcircle,withanewrevelationinanewworld.
WhatIthoughtmadethisparticularlycompelling,though,werethecharacterreversals
andsurprises-theArchitectasgood,fatherfigure,PersephoneandtheMerovingianas
beneficentcreatorsoftheworldthatultimatelyconsumesanddistortsthem,Trinityas
theirdaughterandsaviorofNeo.Also,thedevelopmentofthe36charactersandtheir
fightforsurvival.Plotwasimportant,butcharactermoreso,Ithink.
And,yes,Ididsetupalotandnotcompletelytieupthestorylines;somefeltthiswas
acceptable,othersfounditdownrightappalling.Ifallrightinbetween.Itdoessetupa
lotoffuturestorytellingpossibilities,though.
IapologizetoanyonewhofeelsthatIletthemdownorwishesformore;but25%
disappointmentlevelisalmostinescapableforanystoryorcreation.Natureofthe
beast.
Iamhappytohearthatyouthoughtitwaswell-writtenandthatIcreatedvivid
descriptions;thisisenoughformetofeellikeIsucceeded(atoneonelevelatleast).
Thankyouagainfortakingthetimetorespondandtogivebothapositiveand
constructivereview.Ionlyhopeyougobackandreadanypartsthatyoumayhave
skipped,asnothinginthescreenplayissuperfluous,anditmayfillinsomegapsthatleft
thestoryfeelingincomplete.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JeremiChaneyDATE:8/24/20114:36:32PM
Iwasgrippedbythismasterfulreworkingofthematrixcontinuity.Idobelievethatit
shouldbeanofficialpiece,asitmaintainsconsistencyinplot,charactersandsetting
whileopeningthedoortoacompletelydifferentandmoreinterestinguniverse.You're
rightaboutitbeingabletogoonperpetually.Theonlywaytocompletelyendthestory
isbyhavingacoupleofdoctorsstareinatascruffylookingneoinastraightjacket,
mumblingonaboutagentsinterferringintheprogramming.Ibelievethatyoushould
putforthseriouseffortineitherbuyingthemovierightsorsellingthescreenplaytobe
madeintoamoviebythebrothers.Pleaseavoidgettingsued.Somepeoplecanbecruel
tootherswhoareonlytryingtohelpperfecttheircreations.Onamoreseriousnote
aboutgainingclosure,youcouldwritesomethingabouttheandroidsontheotherend
ofthespectrumwheretheyshowloveandcompassion.Then,smithcouldsomehow
becomeawareofthesupermatrix,havingusedhisarmytoalmostobliteratethevirtuals
andlevel4'sandfacingoffwithneoonefinaltimeandhavingNeojrdealthefinalblow.
Thecortexbecomesawareandturnsouttobebenevolentisthekeytoendingall
enslavementandwar.Theythenbringallthevirtualsandlevel4'sthatsurvivetothe
realworldandwiththecortex'shelpachievesortofahigherlevelofconciousnessand
allhavepowersthatwerethoughttoonlyexistinthedoublematrix.Everyoneisable
fromthenontoliveouttheirlivesinpeace.Oryoucouldgowiththeotherideaand
haveNeoflingexcrementatthewindowandmakeoneofthedoctorsbustoutlaughing.
I'mjustsaying.Toendthisdrawnoutpost,Ijustwantyoutoknowthatthisentirething
wasinspiringtome.:p
Jeremi,
I'mgladithadsuchaprofoundeffectonyou.Thatisalwaysmyhope.
I'vetriedquiteabittogetitintotherighthandsbutthat'shardersaidthandone,asyou
canprobablyimagine.Neverknowwhenitmightfindtherightperson,though.Just
keepyourfingerscrossed.Adigitalversionwiththeoriginalactorsforthevoicesmight
beagoodpossibility(sincebythispointtheoriginalactorswillprobablylookabitold
andhaggard).
BTW,Ilikedyourideasforwaystoextenditevenfurther.Lotstothinkabout.
Thanksforthefeedbackandinsights.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:RonDATE:8/30/201111:02:10PM
DearSir,
Pleasekeepinmindwilereadingthisresponse,I'mDutchandthereforemyEnglish
vocabularyisratherlimited.
Afterstumblinguponthiswebsite'byaccident',I'vereadyourscreenplayinonego.
Sincethewordbrilliantwasalreadyusedinanothercomment,Iwillstickwithprofound
indescribingmyfirstresponse,whichcametomeafterthefirstfewpagesandnever
left.
WhenfirstIsawTheMatrix(part1)Ithought"Niceactionmoviewithsomedepthtoit".
Afterasecondviewingthough,Irealizedthemeaningofthephilosofical/spiritual
backdroptothestory.
WhenthetrilogywascompleteIwassatisfiedwiththewholetripfromstarttoend.
ThoughperhapsIshould
notethat,inmyexperiencethefirstmovietoldthecompletestoryandthetwosequels
merelyaddeddetails.
Whatyouhaveallowedmetoexperiencethroughyourwritinghashoweveractualy
completedtothestory.
Inshort,Ilikedeverythingaboutitfromstarttofinish.Andregardlessofsome
insinificanthickups,Iwouldnotwanttochangeanything.
Ron
P.S.It'ssortofamazingtomehowyoukeeprepondingtocommentsafterallthose
yearsinthefleetingworldwecallinternet:)
Ron,
YourEnglishisactuallyratherwelldevelopedandfluent.
Ilike"profound"justasmuchas"brilliant";I'lltakeithumblybutwithrelish.Many
thanks.
IdoagreethatthefirstMatrixwasacompletestoryandthatthetwofollowingepisodes
weremoreaboutdetails.Butsomeofthosedetailsweredeliciousand,inmyopinion,
indispensabletoarichertale.IlovedthecharactersofPersephone,theMerovingian
andtheArchitect,theyaddedsomuchinterest,somuchsothatIfeltliketheyneeded
tobefleshedoutmoreandgivendeeperroles.Hencemystory.
Iamparticularlypleasedwhensomeonelikesthestoryfromstarttofinish(despitethe
insignificanthiccups).Reallyprimesmywriter'sfingersfornewstories.Thankyou.
IrespondtocommentsevennowbecauseIthinkitisthedutyofallwriterstoreadand
respondtoanyonewhoreadsandrespondstothewriter'swork.Youtookthetimeout
tosaysomethinganditshouldberespondedto.Besides,evenwhenthecommentsare
harsh,IampleasedwithmyabilitytostaycalmandfocusedandIalmostalwaysgain
somenewinsightintothestory.Also,ittookahugeamountofstorydevelopment,plot
planningandsensitivitytocharacterconsistencytocreatemystoryandI'mveryproud
ofit,evenwithitsflaws.Igenuinelyliketalkingaboutit.
ThankyouagainRonforyourthoughtfulandbolsteringwords.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarvinDATE:9/30/20118:26:59PM
You'reanexcellentwriter,myfriend.IpraythisversionoftheMatrixisused,becauseit
keepsthestory,sciencefiction,andmysticismalive.Yourversionisapioneeringstory,
inthesameveinasTheMatrix;becausethescriptisspecialeffect,insteadofthecgi.
Oneofmyfavoritereadsofalltime.
Marvin,
That'ssomehighpraise...andI'lltakeitwiththegreatestofpleasure.
I,too,hopeitmakesittothescreensomeday.
Seeyouinthefrontrow!
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:teendonettDATE:10/19/201110:49:58PM
timeformatrixtheDarkknightistoprivateofasect.Letghostgetamajorpart.Let
everyonediedandcomebacklikeNeo.Neo,morpheousandtrinityonthronesand
thereisameetingofallthesuperpowersoftheuniverse.Theyhavetogotoother
universestofighttosetthemfree.Superhumanintelligenceistakingoverother
planets.Orgobackintohistoryandstoptheholocaustorafricanslavetradebefore
morpheusiscapturedinhispast.Howhewastakenfromslaveryandhiddenfromthe
matrix.TheyfindoutthatSmithwasinchargeofsomeofthehorriblecrimesof
humanityandtrytogobackandchangehistorybeforeitstartsagain.Thematrixstarted
theholocaustandslavetrade.Theyreversethegreatcrimesofhumanitybeforethey
resurface.prequel,neogoesbacktosavetrinity,morpheustostartthematrix.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:DamienJayDATE:11/13/20116:59:00AM
Forallthosefansouttherehopingforafourthmovecouldbeinluck.
WehaveactuallybeenworkingonaM4script.
Thenextmoviewillbeanamazing,spiritualjourneythroughmetaphysicsandreality
withlotsofneverseenbeforevisuals.
ImustsaythatIdidenjoyyourscriptverymuch.Youcouldgointomoredescriptive
detailwithyourvisuals.
http://truthaboutmatrix.com/
COMMENT:AUTHOR:EarlDATE:11/15/20115:40:32AM
Thisisabsolutelyamazing.I'veneverreadascreenplaybeforebutthisiscrispinmy
opinion.I'mashookedasIwouldbewithaStephenKingnovel.Thisislikea"reverseInception"typeconceptandI'mlovingit.Kudostoyouandmoresuccess!Ilookforward
tothisbeingconsideredanofficialMatrixplot.
Damien,
ThankyouforreadingmyscriptandIamverycurioustoseewhatyourscriptislike.
ProbablyI'llhavetowaitforthemoviesinceyouwouldn'twantthestorytogetout
prematurely.Ifyoudecide,however,thatyouwouldliketoshowittome,Iwouldbe
morethanwillingtosignanon-disclosureform.Itwouldbequiteathrilltoseewhatwill
actuallybecomeaHollywoodproduction.
Goodluck.Ican'twaittohandovermy$10toseeit.
PDWood
Earl,
Screenplaysarefast-pacedandvisual;Ienjoyreadingthem,too.
Ilikethedescriptiveterm"crisp".I'mguessinganywriterwouldbeflatteredbythat,asI
am.Thankyou.
AndI'mgladyougotsomuchoutofthisscript.Ihadnotthoughtofthe"reverseinception"connection,butIlikeit.I'malsohappythatyouthinkitshouldbeanofficial
Matrixplot.IfonlyHollywoodwoulddothesame.Onlytimewilltell.
Thankyouagainforthehighpraise.MakeseverywordIwrotefeellikeitwasworth
writing.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:11/26/20118:32:02AM
I'monlyalittlewayintoitsofar,butnooffence,thedialoguesofarisfallingprettyflat
forme.It'salljustwaytooexpositionary,peoplesayingalittletooclearlypreciselywhat
itisthey'rethinking,there'sverylittlesubtletytoitall.Notallthetime,thoughenough
forittobenoticeable.TaketheearlyscenewithLock,NiobeandMorpheusforinstance
-itseemsunlikelytomethatinthemidstofthischaos,whereafterhundredsofpeople
justdieddefendingthedock,whereNeomoreorlessfulfilledtheprophecyandbrought
acenturiesoldwartoanend,wheretheutterextinctionofthefreehumanracewas
justimminent,thattheywouldhavethisseeminglycalmexchangewhereLock
apologisesforbeingacynical@ssandtheybrieflyruminateonwhattodonext.There's
noneedtoestablishthatthis"peace"maybefragile,becausethiswasalready
establishedattheendofRevolutions.Itfelttomeasthoughtherewasverylittle
"thrust"tothisparticularscene,aswithseveralothers.
I'llgladlyreadtherestthough,andhappilypostmyopinionsafterwards.
Merillion,
It'struethatmuchisexpository.Idon'tloveiteither,buttoacertainextentitwas
unavoidable.There'sjustatonofbackstorytoreveal.Andit'sfunnyhowthesame
dialoguecanelicitsuchdifferentreactions.Manyreadersthinkit'srightonthemark;
othersjustthinkitfallsshort.It'ssosubjective.
Iactuallythinkthatthedialogue,whileabitflatandexpositoryasyousay,isinkeeping
withtheWachowskiscriptswhichareinmyopinionverysimilar.Partofmystylistic
approachwastomimictheirs,whichisoftenonthenoseandoverlyexplanatory.What
makesallthatstiltedandoverlydescriptivedialogueacceptableorbalancedis(inmy
opinion)thatthestoryconceptisrichandsurprisingandtheactionsequencesare
riveting.Thisiscomicbooksensibilitywrappedinscifidramaseriousness.Toacertain
degreeitallworkseventhoughthereseemtobemanyareastopickapart.
Icompletelyrespectyouropinionandwouldlovetohearmore.Ihopeyoudofinish
readingthescriptandcomebackwithfreshcomments.Halfofthefunofhavingwritten
thescriptisbeingabletoengageingooddebateaboutitsmeritsandshortcomings.
Thescriptcoulddefinitelybenefitfromarewrite,wheretheexpositionisreducedand
theactionisincreased.NotsurewhenorifI'lldoit,butthehugeamountoffeedback
I'vereceivedonthisbloghasgivenmeaclearpictureofwhatthescriptcouldbeif
certainareasarereworked.
Thankyouforyourcandidcommentsandwillingnesstoreadfurther.Ilookforwardto
readingyournewcomments.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:NeilDATE:12/3/20114:00:08PM
Hi,greattoreadsomethingofthecontinuationofthematrixworld-itshouldnever
havebeenleftwithoutaseriesorsequel.Iamhowevernotsureaboutthematrixwithin
amatrix,thesupermatrixidea.TheparalellswithaChristandthehumanillusionswent
sofarwiththematrix,Ifeelthattheyshouldbeexploredtothenextlevel.Readingyour
storyhasinspiredmetothinkofmyownsequelandmaybeevenwriteitdownasyou
have.Itwasnicetorevisitandreaquaintmyselfwiththematrixandit'scharacters.
ThankYou.
HiNeal,
The"MatrixwithinaMatrix"ideaisusuallyahitormissformostpeople.Obviously,it
couldgoinmanydirections.Ifyouchosetowriteyourownnewdirection,please
forwardittome.I'dlovetoseeanothertrajectory.
I'mnotsureifyourmentionofChristwasonethatencouragedordiscourageditina
Matrix4story.Ifitencouragesit,thenIthinkyoumissedtheparallelsthatIhave
createdanddeliberatelytriedtoincorporate.Herearesomeofmyresponsestoother
people'scommentsontheChristanglethatyoumightfindinteresting:
CommentResponse1:
"ThedualArchitectconceptIthoughtwaskindofcoolandcouldbeinterpretedasa
heaven/hellorGod/Devilparadigm.TherearemanyreferencestoChristianityinthe
originalTrilogyandIthoughtthiswasaniceextension.ThegoodArchitectislikeGod,
creatorofandoverseeroftheSourceandsaviorofthehumanworld.ThebadArchitect
islikeSatan,thefallenangel,theoppositeimageofthelordabove.ThisbadArchitectis
thecreatorofandoverseeroftheSourceintheMatrixandsaviorofthemachineworld.
InadditionthechoicebythegoodArchitecttocasthimselfasthebadorflawed
ArchitectintheMatrixsomehowlendsmorehumanitytothegoodArchitect.Itsuggests
thatdespitehisbrillianceandalmostGodlikestatusintherealworld,heiswillingto
acknowledgehisflawsandweaknessbytakingonthepersonaofthebadArchitectin
theMatrix.It'sawayforhimtobehumble,Isuppose."
CommentResponse2:
IactuallythinkmystoryreinforcestheChristianidea.IntheMatrixTrilogy,Neo,the
savior,sacrificeshislifetosavehumanity;inmystoryhelivesonthroughakindof
resurrectionandafterlifeinaworldthatexistsbeyond/outsidetheworldhewasborn
into.ThenewworldispresidedoverbytheArchitect,whoisthedesignerandoverseer.
Neo,Trinity,andtheArchitectformasortoftrinityoftheirown.AndNeoPage265of
27994207_86967_1â€“2â€“20121/2/124:57PMfinallyarrivesatanunderstanding
andacceptanceofhisplaceinexistence,akindofNirvanaorheaven.
CommentResponse3:
Ithinkinmyscriptthesuggestionisthatthewarwillbeginagain.Butthat'sjusta
suggestion.It'sleftuptotheimaginationoftheaudience.ThereasonIliketheopenendednatureofmyconclusionisthathappyendingsrarelyhappen.Lifeisopen-ended
andalwaysabitscary.TometheworldoftheMatrixseemslikeitbelongsmoreinthat
category.Idon'tthinkthisstripsNeoofthesaviortag.Christgavehislifetosave
humanity'ssoul,and,despitethehorrorsthatcontinueinourworld,westillthinkof
Christasasaviorbecausehegavehislifetosaveothers.InthatrespectNeoisstilla
savior.
CommentResponse4:
IfyouacceptmystoryasanextensionoftheTrilogy,thenNeodoesn'tdie.Infact,inmy
story(ifyouwanttocarrytheChristianparallelonward)NeoisalmostlikeaChrist
figureinthathedoesn'treallyeverdie.Hehasbeenresurrectedyetagain,andwould
beindefinitely.Essentially,heexistsinallrealities,allatthesametime.
IfyouthoughtthattheChristianangleshouldn'tbeexploredinafurtherscript,then
ignoremyquotesabove.InanycaseIappreciateyourcommentsandwouldloveto
hearanyotherthoughtsyoumighthave.
Thanksagain,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:santoshDATE:12/9/20116:58:16AM
Simplysuperbthoughttocontinuematrixseries
COMMENT:AUTHOR:muzzammilDATE:12/22/20116:22:56PM
wow!!!agreattwisttotrilogy.stillspinninginmyheadthatZionisinthematrix.
Combining3differentworldinastorywouldbeafascinatingandgivesanewstoryline
suchasNeo's"real"capabilitiesinrealworld(superstrengthtoo).Itwouldbeablastto
seeKeanuReevesagainandalloriginalcast"resurrect"theirroles.Forme,TheMatrix
andthenewone(ifthestorylineareaswritten)willbetheall-timebestmovies.Great
workandyousuchagenius...
Santosh,
Thankyoufortakingthetimetodropmeaquickupbeatcomment.Theshortresponses
arejustasappreciatedasthelongones.
PDWood
muzzammil,
I'mveryhappythatthestorybroughtyousuchenjoyment.
IfitdoesindeedmakeittothebigscreenandbecometheofficialfourthMatrixmovie,I
wouldalsohavetoputinthecategoryofthetop-five,all-timegreatestmoviesagas.
Withthewaythatvirtualdigitizationisgoing,inthenextfewyears,themoviecouldbe
replicatedinalmostperfectdigitalrealism.Thiscouldhelpdramaticallytomaintainthe
originalagesoftheactorssothemoviedoesfeellikejusttheoriginalactorscoming
togetherwhentheyaretoooldtobeconvincing.Thevoiceswouldbefromtheoriginal
actors,butthevisualswouldallbevirtual.IthinkWarnerBrotherswouldback
somethinglikethat.Itcouldfly.
Anyway,thanksfortheawesomefeedback.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:47:06PM
Ok,I'venowreadyourscripttwice,andIfeltlikeexpressingsomethoughts.To
elaboratequickly,I'mfirmlyoftheopinionthatwhilstthematrixsequelsweren't
perfect,theywerecertainlyadequate,enoughsothatthereisn'tanyneedforanother
sequel.ThestorywaswrappedupinRevolutions,inmyhumbleopinion,ratherneatly.If
therehastobeanothersequel,I'moftheopinionthatinnowayshoulditfeatureNeo,
Trinity,Smith,oranyattemptstobringthembacktolife,ordrasticallychangewhat's
alreadybeenestablishedthroughoutthecourseofthe3previousfilms,whichis,Iknow,
ineffectexactlywhatyourscriptisattemptingtodo.Ican'tfaultyourintent,butIcan
admitthatthedirectioninwhichyourscriptgoesdidn'tappealtomestraightoffthe
bat.Thatsaidthough,asaaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithmorethanan
openmind,andamgoingtobecompletelyupfrontandhonestinmyappraisal.Iread
throughyourscriptthefirsttimejusttoabsorbitallin,andthesecondtimemoreso
withafine-toothedcomb,sotospeak.Ihopeyoudon'tmindlong-windedresponses.
Wheretobegin..allinall,Ithinkyouhaveagreattalentforwriting,anditobviously
shows.Yourstyleisdescriptivewithoutbeingarduouslylong,andthevarioussettings
andimagespresentedareeasytoimagine.Myfaultsliemoresowiththestoryitself.
PerhapsI'moveranalysing,butalotofitwassimplytooconfusing.You'veobviously
spentagreatdealmoretimewiththisstorythanIhave,soperhapsImissedsome
explanationshereandthere,butspecifically:
-TheSuperMatrixitself;whatisit'srealpurpose?Sothehumanswinthewar,right?So
whydotheyneedtocontrolthemachines?Arethemachineshookeduptothissuper
matrix,andifso,how?Isitinthesameorsimilarmannerasthepeopleinthefieldsthat
weseeinthefirstmatrixfilm,onlywithmachinesinpods?Andwhydothemachines
needtobecontrolled,andforwhatpurpose?Aretheyprovidingtheremaininghuman
racewithsomevitalresource?Iftheprevailinghumansareinultimatecontrolofthe
machinesinthesupermatrix,andifthosemachineseverdostarttopresentanysortof
problem,can'tthehumansjust,yaknow,turnthemOFF??Whatisthepointofthe
givingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontroloftheoriginalMatrix?
-Toomanyflashbacks;oneortwoisfine,butherewe'rebeingpresentedwithalmosta
dozen(ormore)mostofwhichonlyservetodoleoutsomeexposition.Therearetoo
manytokeeptrackof,dealingwithtoomanynewandrandomcharacters.Imean,the
Architecthasflashbacks,Neohasflashbacks,Trinityhasflashbacksthatlinkstory-wise
totheArchitectsflashbacks,thenthereareflashbackstotherobotsandtheirbackstory,flashbackstothewarandhowitwaswon,flashbackstotheMerovingianandhis
wifeandtheirtimeintheMatrix,flashbackstoSmithmeetingwiththeMerovingian.
-WhyistheOracletheonlyonewhocanexitthesupermatrix?AndhowdoesTrinity
dyinginRevolutionsgetherbackintotherealworld?
-Thecortexitself;youestablishthatNeoisthefirstvirtualtoawakenandexistinthe
actualrealworld,sowhatishemadeof?Washechurnedoutfromsomehumanskinorgan-boneprinter??Furthermore,youestablishtherarityofhistransitionintothereal
worldasaneverbeforeseenphenomena,andthenpresentwithinthestoryasecond
Cortex-relatedphenomena,whatwiththeadventofthesuper-beingsandthepotential
forofthemachinestofindoutthattheyareactuallyinsideaMatrix.Ontopof
everything,thisCortexmanagestoproducetwoamazingphenomenaintherealmof
thestoryâ€¦prettyincredible,butthen,yourevealitbecameTrinity'splantohaveNeo
comeintotheactualrealworld,sothatreallycan'tbethatmuchofaphenomenaafterall..?IfNeowasthesuper-beingthatTrinity'sparentsenteredtheSuperMatrixtokill,
thenhowdoesthattakeaccountthepreviousversionsoftheOnethatexistedbefore
Neo,oraretheybeingdisregarded?Again,confusing.
-Theandroids;thoroughlyundevelopedinmyopinion.Thisentiresubplotcanbe
eliminatedcompletelyandthestorywillstillbemoreorlessthesame.Theyserved2
ultimatepurposesfromwhatIread-1)Togivethearchitectanemotionalmotivation,
bykillingiswife,tobuildtheCortex,and2)Toconveytheideathathumanscanbejust
asaggressive/oppressiveasthemachines,whichinitselfwasthoroughlydetailedinthe
Animatrix,althoughgranted,Idon'texpectallbuthardcoreMatrixfanstohavewatched
it.Butthen,sincea36killshiswife,andtheyadmitthatthe36'sexistbeyondthe
controloftheCortex,howandwhydoesthepersonalinvolvementofa36motivatehim
atall,sincetheverythingthatkilledhiswifewon'tactuallybeaffected/controlledby
theCortexthathe'lleventuallybuildorthesupermatrix?Iguesshejusthasageneral
dislikeformachines?Again,kindaconfusing.Itwouldhavebeenfarmoreinterestingin
myopinionforthemtohavecapturedthatoneandroidtheyimplantthebombin,and
thentohavetheArchitectsay,"No,Idon'twantthemtoallbekilled,"asanactof
forgiveness,orsomethinglikethat.Kindacheesy,I'lladmit,butmoredramatically
interestingthenintroducingthem,andthenjustblowingthemallupandnever
mentioningthemagain.
Idon'twriteallthistobeneedlesslyhurtful,I'mmerelyanalyzingitfromafan'sand
wannabewritersperspective.Asanaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithanopen
mindandsoughttopresentyouwithsomeoftheconundrumsthatyourstoryleftme
with.Ifullyencourageyoutocontinuewritinghowever,andI'dliketoreadmorescripts
likethisonline.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:48:38PM–
TheSuperMatrixitself;whatisit'srealpurpose?Sothehumanswinthewar,right?So
whydotheyneedtocontrolthemachines?Arethemachineshookeduptothissuper
matrix,andifso,how?Isitinthesameorsimilarmannerasthepeopleinthefieldsthat
weseeinthefirstmatrixfilm,onlywithmachinesinpods?Andwhydothemachines
needtobecontrolled,andforwhatpurpose?Aretheyprovidingtheremaininghuman
racewithsomevitalresource?Iftheprevailinghumansareinultimatecontrolofthe
machinesinthesupermatrix,andifthosemachineseverdostarttopresentanysortof
problem,can'tthehumansjust,yaknow,turnthemOFF??Whatisthepointofthe
givingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontroloftheoriginalMatrix?
-Toomanyflashbacks;oneortwoisfine,butherewe'rebeingpresentedwithalmosta
dozen(ormore)mostofwhichonlyservetodoleoutsomeexposition.Therearetoo
manytokeeptrackof,dealingwithtoomanynewandrandomcharacters.Imean,the
Architecthasflashbacks,Neohasflashbacks,Trinityhasflashbacksthatlinkstory-wise
totheArchitectsflashbacks,thenthereareflashbackstotherobotsandtheirbackstory,flashbackstothewarandhowitwaswon,flashbackstotheMerovingianandhis
wifeandtheirtimeintheMatrix,flashbackstoSmithmeetingwiththeMerovingian..
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:50:19PM–
WhyistheOracletheonlyonewhocanexitthesupermatrix?AndhowdoesTrinity
dyinginRevolutionsgetherbackintotherealworld?
-Thecortexitself;youestablishthatNeoisthefirstvirtualtoawakenandexistinthe
actualrealworld,sowhatishemadeof?Washechurnedoutfromsomehuman
skinorganboneprinter??Furthermore,youestablishtherarityofhistransitionintothe
realworldasaneverbeforeseenphenomena,andthenpresentwithinthestorya
secondCortex-relatedphenomena,whatwiththeadventofthesuper-beingsandthe
potentialforofthemachinestofindoutthattheyareactuallyinsideaMatrix.Ontopof
everything,thisCortexmanagestoproducetwoamazingphenomenaintherealmof
thestoryâ€¦prettyincredible,butthen,yourevealitbecameTrinity'splantohaveNeo
comeintotheactualrealworld,sothatreallycan'tbethatmuchofaphenomenaafterall..?IfNeowasthesuper-beingthatTrinity'sparentsenteredtheSuperMatrixtokill,
thenhowdoesthattakeaccountthepreviousversionsoftheOnethatexistedbefore
Neo,oraretheybeingdisregarded?Again,confusing.
-Theandroids;thoroughlyundevelopedinmyopinion.Thisentiresubplotcanbe
eliminatedcompletelyandthestorywillstillbemoreorlessthesame.Theyserved2
ultimatepurposesfromwhatIread-1)Togivethearchitectanemotionalmotivation,
bykillingiswife,tobuildtheCortex,and2)Toconveytheideathathumanscanbejust
asaggressive/oppressiveasthemachines,whichinitselfwasthoroughlydetailedinthe
Animatrix,althoughgranted,Idon'texpectallbuthardcoreMatrixfanstohavewatched
it.Butthen,sincea36killshiswife,andtheyadmitthatthe36'sexistbeyondthe
controloftheCortex,howandwhydoesthepersonalinvolvementofa36motivatehim
atall,sincetheverythingthatkilledhiswifewon'tactuallybeaffected/controlledby
theCortexthathe'lleventuallybuildorthesupermatrix?Iguesshejusthasageneral
dislikeformachines?Again,kindaconfusing.Itwouldhavebeenfarmoreinterestingin
myopinionforthemtohavecapturedthatoneandroidtheyimplantthebombin,and
thentohavetheArchitectsay,"No,Idon'twantthemtoallbekilled,"asanactof
forgiveness,orsomethinglikethat.Kindacheesy,I'lladmit,butmoredramatically
interestingthenintroducingthem,andthenjustblowingthemallupandnever
mentioningthemagain.
Idon'twriteallthistobeneedlesslyhurtful,I'mmerelyanalysingitfromafan'sand
wannabewritersperspective.Asanaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithanopen
mindandsoughttopresentyouwithsomeoftheconundrumsthatyourstoryleftme
with.Ifullyencourageyoutocontinuewritinghowever,andI'dliketoreadmorescripts
likethisonline.
Ok,I'venowreadyourscriptathirdandfourthtime,andratherthanclearupmanyof
thequestionsIposedearlier,I'vesadlyonlybecomemoreconfused.Formyownsake,I
triedtolistthevariousstoryelements,blowbyblow,frombeginningtoend..okay
(correctmeifI'mwrong):
-Neo,afteraseriesofstrangevisions(inoneofwhichwe'reintroducedtosomechick
whohadarelationshipwithNeoatsomepointbackbeforehewastheOne)awakensto
discoverthatTheMatrix,andthepreviouslyassumed"real"worldofZion,areactually
insideanotherbigger,SuperMatrix,intheACTUALrealworld,andhe'sintroducedto
the--
-Architect,thesame(butnotthesame)guywhohemetintheTVroomattheendof
Reloaded,butnowhe'sagenialoldguywhoturnsoutwantstohelpandexplainthings
toNeo,namely--
-ThatTrinity,hisgranddaughter,isstillaliveandalsointhisrealworld,andshe
explains,orlaments,tohimherlostrelationshipwithherparents--
-TheMerovingianandPersephone,whowerealsorealpeopleandbrilliantscientists,
andhowtheyenteredtheMatrixtokillNeobeforehisawarenessofbeingtheOne
couldpossiblydestabilisethewholeSuperMatrix,butinadvertentlybecameintegrated
intotheprogramasvirtualbeingswithsuperpowersbutwithnomemoryofwhothey
previouslywere(butmysteriously,stillrememberthattheyknoweachother,are
marriedtoeachother,andloveeachother)whereuponNeolearnsabout--
-TheCortex,asuper-organic-computer-brainthing,whichhousestheSuperMatrix,and
itsunpredictablenatureasitthreatenstogrow,learnandsupersedeitsprogrammingor
purpose,whichis--
-Tocontrolthemachines,becauseinthisrealworld,thehumansarethevictorsofthe
warandareusingtheSuperMatrixtocontrolallmachinekind,exceptfor--
-The36's,aparticular"breed"ofrobotthatsurvivedthewarandarestrivingto
underminethehumanstofreetheiroppressedmachinebrothers.Butthey'renotthe
onlyoneswhocanpotentiallyf#$kthingsupforeveryone,because--
-Smithisstillalive,survivedthroughasinisterdudecalledMarouk(inthesamewayas
SmithpossessedBane)throughwhichhemanagestore-entertheMatrix(thefirstone)
forthepurposeofwreakingsomehavoctotryandbringdownthemachinesfrom
within,whohebelievesareincontrol,andheencounters--
-TheOracle,whoisonlyinafewscenesbutdoeswhatshealwaysdoes:beneedlessly
mysterious,andshealsotalksto--
-MorpheusandNiobe,wheresheliterallyrepeatsthesamemoralconflict/scenarioto
MorpheusastheArchitectdidtoNeoattheendofReloaded,because--
-TherecouldbeanotherattackonZionfromthemachinesdespitetheapparentpeace
thatNeo'ssuccessfullywroughtwithhisdefeatofSmith,andMorpheus(andseveral
others,whoarealsorealpeoplewhoarepluggedintotheSuperMatrixforlifeandwith
noawarenessofthemselvesbeinginafakeworld
tostopthisandprotectZion,allto,secretly--
-Again,maintaintheillusionthatthemachinesareincontrolofthehumanracesothey
remainsubservientintheactualrealworld,anillusionthatcouldbeundone--
-Becausethecortex,asImentionedearlier,asittriestolearnoradaptitself,
could..like..linkitselfsomehowtoNeo,oranothervirtual,andbecomemoreselfaware
and,coupledwiththenewthreatofthenowre-emergedSmith,could,again,topplethe
worldoftheMatrix's--
-Butthere'shope,becausethatrandomchickfrombefore,yeah,Neoknockedherup
(cozapparentlybeingtheOne,likehavingmydad'sbrowneyes,canandispasseddown
genetically)andhasasonwithOne-likepowersovertheworldoftheMatrix,whowe
canonlypresume,willriseupandthecyclewillcontinueanew.
..Phew.DoIhavetheoverallgistofit?I'mprettysurethatencompasseseverything.
Theironyofitis,themorereadandthemoreIunderstandofyourscript,themore
confusedIgetandthelessthingsmakesense.Itreallyfeelslikethere'sisn'tanyone,
centralnarrativetothestory.Alltheflashbacksandalltherelationshipsonlyserveto
dilutethedrama.Whichleadsmetoosomemorespecificstoryelements--
-SoifNeobeingtheOneandpossessingextraordinarypowerscouldthreatentotopple
theworldoftheSuperMatrix,bymakingtheCortexself-aware,thenwhyisn'teveryone
freakingoutoverNeo'sson,whohasthesamepowers?Itseemedthatmuchoftheaim
ofthescientistswastopreventtheCortexfrombecomingaselfawareA.Irobot/being,
presumably,topreventanotherpotentialwarwithmachinesoccurring,tothepoint
thattheMerovingianandhiswifeevenentertheSuperMatrixwiththeintentofkilling
Neotopreserveandprotecteverything..soyeah,surelyNeo'ssonwillpresentasimilar
sortofproblem?Issomethingsimilarboundtohappen,thatpeoplewillhavetoenter
theSuperMatrixtotryandkillNeo'sson,orwilltheytryanddowhattheydidwithNeo
andbringhimintotheactualrealworldtoo?Butiftheydothat,howwillhedefeat
Smith?
-Whatarehowaretherobotsbeingcontrolledbythesupermatrix,connectedtoit?If
themachinesaren'tasortofpowersourceforthehumanrace,thenwhatactual
purposedotheyserve?Thisisn'taddressedinyourstory.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:29:32AM–
Thedramaitself;it'salottoasktheaudiencetotakein.You'reprettymuchsaying,
"Hey,youknowalltheemotionalhigh'sandlow'sthatyousufferedthroughwiththe
previous3movies,thelast2inparticular..turnsoutthatwasallhappeninginafake
world!"You'reprettymuchpushingagiant"reset"button.Peoplemightaswelljust
watchthefirstMatrixfilmandthenskipthenexttwo,andjustjumpstraighttoyours.
What'smore,it'salreadyalottopresenttotheaudiencethatNeoisalive,butthento
reallyhavesolittleofthestoryreallyconcernhim,justfeelswrong.Hejustbecomesa
minorplayerinallthis,constantlybeingservedwithinformationasavassalforthe
audience,muchlikehedidinthefirstfilm,butinthisoneitultimatelygoesnowhere.In
essence,NeoisthecharacterthatpeoplewillwatchanotherMatrixsequeltosee,not
someotherrandomperson.Hetakesabackseattoeverythinghere,literally
sitting/standingaroundwhileothercharactersexplainthingstohim.Hehasnoactual
involvementinthestory,reducedtobeingnomorethan,again,atoolthroughwhich
theaudiencecangaininformation,andboy,asIalludedtoearlier,there'salotofinfo
beingpresented.Inthefirstfilm,keymomentsofexpositionweredeliveredinperhaps
3-4keyscenes,acrossmuchofthefirstandsecondacts.Here,it'sallovertheplace.It's
justabarrageofnewinformation.Ireadthatinapreviouscommentyou'reofthe
opinionthatyouclearedupalotoftheholes/inconsistenciespresentedintheMatrix
2&3,butpersonally,IfoundyourstorytobeMUCHmoreconvolutedandonlyservesto
raiseaslewofnewquestions.
Inestablishingyournewrulesfortheworldyou'vecreatedinyourstory,you're
obviouslygoingtoneedtoprovidealotofexpositioninorderforpeopletoacceptit,
butforme,itgottothepointwhereitjusttookmeoutofthestory.Byaround60-70
pagesintoit,Iwasfeelingahugedisconnectfromeverythingthatwashappening.I
becamedisengagedbecauseIwastryingtoohardtokeepupwithallthecharactersand
themyriadofrelationshipspresented.Evenaround85-90pageintoit,righttowardthe
veryendofthefilm,variousquestionsandexplanationswerestillbeingpresentedas
entirenewplotdevelopments,rightaroundthetimewhenthatthirdandfinalact
shouldreallybekickingin,whentheexpositionsimplyHAStoendsothestorycould
begintoresolveitself.Asidefrombrieflyatthebeginning,Smithdoesn'tmakean
appearanceuntilthelastquarterofthescript.Thissimplydoesn'twork.Hecan'tbe
presentedasavillainrightasthestoryisabouttoconcludeitself.There'sjusttoomuch
goingon,toomanycharacters,toomanyrelationships,toomanysubplots,toomuch
expositionandtechno-babble.Thestorylacksanyrealandresoundingclimax.
LookatthepathofMorpheusandNiobeinyourstory.They'retryingtoprotectZion
fromanotherpossibleattack,butasIsaid,whatmotivationdoestheaudiencehaveto
careaboutthepeopleinZionwhenwe'vejustbeentoldthatallthosepeopledon't
actuallyexist,cozthey'rejustvirtuals??What'stheriskhere?Evenifallthevirtualsin
Ziondie,whocares?Theexplanationthatyoumentioninapreviouscommentto
anotherposter,abouteveryworldbeingrealinitsownsignificantway,justseems
wishy-washytome,andfrankly,contradictstheentirenotionofpeoplefightingtobe
freeandtoexistunencumberedasindividualsintherealworld.Youcan'tsuddenly
expectpeopletowanttocareaboutthevirtualrealitybeingpresentedwhenthewhole
Matrixtrilogyisdevotedtopeopleunderminingit.Andifallthepeopleinthefarmsdie
too(intheZion-matrixworld)thenthemachineswon'tactuallyceasetofunction,right,
coztheyaren'treallybeingpoweredbyhumanbodybatteries,cozit'sallfake,cozitsall
inthesupermatrix..?Right?LikeIsaid,tooconvoluted.
-TheMerovingianandhiswife;howandwhydotheybecome"superbeings"?Ifthe
Merovingianhasallthesecrazypowers,whydoesn'thejustfightandkillNeoin
Reloadedduringthechateaufightscene,ratherthanjustwatchasNeokillsallhis
henchmen?OrarehispowerssomehowdifferentorlessertoNeo's?*Edit*Ok,Ijust
read"whenallhishenchmenhadbeendisabledandhewasleftalonewithNeo,hewas
forcedtousehispowertoescapeNeoandsimultaneouslytransporthimthousandsof
milesaway(whenhehadNeofollowhimthroughthatdoor).Thatwasapowerthatnot
evenNeocouldreplicate.So,thatismylineofreasoning."Butit'stheback-doorkey
thatallowedthemtopassthroughdoorwaysmilesapart.Thathadnothingtodowith
any"super-powers."Seraphandthekeymakerbothalsodothis.Butanyway,howdo
theycorrectthemalfunctionthatinadvertentlymadetheMerovingianandPersephone
virtuals,sowhenTrinityenterstheSuperMatrixthesamedoesn'thappentoher?
Andthefactthatthey'reallrelated..arewe,astheaudience,nowsupposedtoaccept
thatTrinityjuststoodthereandwatchedasNeomadeoutwiththevirtual,superversion
ofHEROWNMOMduringthebathroomkissscene??Really..??Andontopofthat,not
onlyareMorpheusandLockbrothers..buttheOracleistheirmom..!!That's
streeeeetchingit.Theelementyoupresentofsomeofthevirtualshavingrealworld
counterpartsalsojustseemstooconvenient.Igetthesensethatthisisonlythecase
becausepeoplewouldn't..andImeanWOULDN'T,acceptthatacharacterlike
Morpheus,whowe'vecometoloveandcareaboutacross3movies,isanothervirtual.
Soconveniently,HE'Sreal,buteveryoneelseisfake.Idunno,it'sjustdoesn'tworkme
for.
Icommendyourability,butthisscreenplayishardlytheawesome,ground-breaking,
story-equaltothefirstMatrixfilmthatothercommentersherehavesaid.Ifthisscript
wastobemadeasitstands,rightnow,justlikeIjusthave,peoplewouldtearitapart
andpointouteveryinconsistency,justliketheydidtheMatrix2and3.Iprobablysound
likeanoverzealousgeek,but,ifnothingelse,readingyourscriptandanalysingitwas
certainlyaninterestingandthoughtprovokingexercisethatIenjoyedquiteabit.It's
evengotmethinkingaboutwhereanotherMatrixsequelcouldpotentiallygo.Asfaras
mycommentsgo,IthinkI'vesaidenough(probablytoomuch.)
Merillion,
Itakenoumbrageatalltoyourcomments.OnthecontraryIamenergizedand
flattered,boththatyouwouldreadthescriptsomanytimeswithsuchinterestandthat
youwouldrespondinsuchdepth,withsuchhonestyandwithsuchexcellentquestions.
Astheholidaysareparticularlyintenserightnowandbecauseyourcommentswill
requiresomeforethoughtandamplereplytime,Iwillhavetorespondabitlateron.I
dolookforwardtoitandwilldomybesttoaddressallyourconcernsandinsights.
Untilthen,enjoythewinterseason.
Thanks,PDWood
Merillion,
Istartedtorespondtoyourinitialcomments(seeSectionAbelow),butthenevenmore
commentscameinfromyouandIsensedthataddressingeverythreadofyour
discussionwouldnotnecessarilybethemostproductiveapproachconsideringthat
therearesomanythreads.SoIhavegivenyouabroad,overviewresponse(seeSection
Bbelow).
SectionA:
Merillion,
Yes,theresurrectionoftheoldcharactershasthepotentialtobecometedious(inmy
storyaswellasanyoneelse's),butIhadhopetoavoidthatbygivingtheoldcharacters
verydynamictwistsofpersonalityinatopsy-turvyworld.Mostpeopleeitherlikeitor
hateit.Veryfewinbetweens.
Thankyouforrecognizingmywritingtalent.Ihavebeenworkingonitforquiteawhile.
AndIcontinuetowriteregularly.
Yes,thestorywastwisty,convolutedandwithmanyunexpectedturns.Tomanypeople,
thisisexactlywhataforthMatrixshouldprovide;toothers,itisjusttoomuch
informationinadisorientingformat.Mostlyamatteroftaste,Iwouldventuretosay.I,
too,wouldprobablyhavesometroublewiththestorylineifIdidn'thavetheperspective
ofhavingwrittenitandthepatienceofadie-hardfan.Ido,however,believethatina
visualformat,withvisualcluesandcues,thetimeshiftsandflashbackscouldbeless
difficulttofollow.Hardtoknow,though,unlessit'smadeintoamovie.
It'struethatmuchofthestorywaslacedwithexposition.Inretrospect,Icouldprobably
havedoneabetterjobofembellishingitordiminishingittothepointwhereitwasn'tso
obvious;therewas,however,aneedtohavemostofitintheretocreatethestoryI
envisioned.PerhapsIshouldhavezeroedinonasmallerchunkofmyscriptandspent
moretimefleshingoutnewcharacters(suchasthe36s,whichIthinkcouldhaveareally
coolandlessundevelopedpresence)andnotjumpingaroundquitesomuch.Whenthe
boysinHollywoodfinallycomeknocking(??),I'llbesuretoedit/condense/refinethe
officialscriptwithyourthoughtsinmind.
Toanswersomeofyourquestionsaboutthereasoning/logic,thefollowingisintended
togivesomeinsightanditisallaccordingtomyscript'svisionoftherealworldwhich
existsintheyear2249:
1)Havingachievedindependentthinkingandmotivation,smartmachinesattackedand
cameclosetodecimatinghumanity.
2)Tocoexist,humanshadtodevelopasystem(theSupermatrix)thatwouldsubjugate
smartmachinesandpreventthemfromeverbeingabletothreatenhumanitywhileat
thesametimecontrollingthemforhumanneeds.
3)TheSupermatrixisnecessarybecausehumansarenotwillingtoexistwithouttheuse
ofsmart(A.I.)machines.Toomuchofthefutureworldhasbuiltitselfaroundthem,
becomedependentonthemandisunwillingtolivewithoutthem.(Eveninourworld,
manypeoplewouldfinditintolerabletolivewithoutmachines;evenmoreso,Ithink,in
thefuture).
4)Yes,themachinesarehookeduptotheSupermatrix.Ienvisionawireless
internetworkedsystemthat,ifbrokenoralteredbythemachines(orhumans),renders
thosemachinesinoperableand/ortaggeduntiltheyarereintegratedintothenetwork,
thuspreventingthemfromworking/operatingoutsidetheSupermatrix'ssystemof
control.
5)"Whatisthepointofthegivingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontrolofthe
originalMatrix?"ThisquestionofyoursisonethatIdon'treallydiscussorelaborateon
inthescript.Ido,however,haveareasoning.Ididn'tgetintoitinthestory,though,
becauseit'sanothergiantbitofexposition,demandingpreciouspagerealestate.
Besides,Iwasn'tsurehowpeoplewouldtaketoit.It'skindofchewyandperhaps
difficulttoswallow(althoughIpersonallythinkit'sprettyingenious).Okay,hereitgoes:
Smartmachines,itturnsout,needsleepjustlikehumans.Theyalsoneedtodream,just
likehumans.TheArchitecttakesadvantageofthisextraordinaryconditiontodeceive
andharnessthemachines.Here'sthebigpicture:Allsmartmachinesdream.Withinthe
inter-networkedsystem(theSupermatrix),theArchitectalterstheirperceptionoftheir
realitysotheirdreamstatesareperceivedbythemaswakingstateswhiletheirwaking
statesseemlikedreams.InthisdeceptiontheirrealworldisperceivedastheMatrixand
theirdreamstateisperceivedastheirmundanetasksthattheyconductinthehuman
world.Iknowthisconceptofmineisoutthereandradical,butitcouldwork.Lookatit
thisway:Letssaythatourcurrenthumanreality(yoursandmine)isthatweexistina
worldwhererobotsandmachinesareunderourcontrol(astheyare,moreorless)and
wegoaboutournormalliveswithinthisframework.Andthenlet'ssaythatour
sleeping/dreamingworldiswherewebelievewearecontrolledandpersecutedby
robotsandmachinesandwemustfreehumanitytoalertthemtothisdisturbingfact.If
wetoldpeoplethatwethoughtmachinescontrolledusandusedusaspowercellsfor
theirexistence,whoisgoingtobelieveusorthinkwearesane?Probablynotmany.
Okaynow,flipitaround.Thesmartmachines,inwhatthey'vebeendeceivedtobelieve
istheirrealworldinwhichtheycontrolhumansintheMatrix,andwhatthey'vebeen
deceivedtobelieveistheirsleepingworld,wheretheyperformmundanetasksfor
humans.Supposeoneofthemachinestriedtopursuedothermachinesthattheir
dreamsofthemundaneworldwererealityandtheirreallivesintheMatrixworldwere
justadeception.Whatmachineisgoingtothinkthatisatrueorsaneconclusion?
Probablynotmany.Okay,Iknow,prettyoutthereâ€¦.butthinkaboutitforawhile.
Anyway,that'smytakeonit.Ultimately,thesmartmachinesintherealworldhaveto
bedeceivedintodoingtheirmundanetaskswithoutknowingthattheyareactually
doingthemintherealworld,otherwisetheywillberesentful,oppositionandultimately
aggressivetowardshumans.
SectionB:
Merillion,
Yousaythatthestorybecomesmoreconfusingasyoureaditmultipletimes,butyour
synopsisofthestoryisspoton.Icansaythatyouprobablydidabetterjobofbreakingit
downandexplainingitthanIcould.Myrespectstoyouforbeingsoattentiveand
patient.
Myguessisthateventhoughyoubrokeitdownpreciselyandcanunderstanditwell,
youfoundthatthestory,asitstands,isnottoyourliking.Irespectyouropinionand
understandyourposition.Youalsosaythatthestoryseemstogarneralotofpraiseon
mysite,andyousuggestthatitmaynotbewarrantedorjustified.Myresponseisthatit
dependsonwhatyouarelookingforfromthestoryandonyourcriteriaforsuccessin
thatstory.Asitstands,Iagreewithyouthatthestoryisnotreadyforprime-time;itis
disparate,unresolvedandover-reaching.Nonetheless,Ithinkthereismuchtolikein
thestory,ifthosepartsaretoyourtaste.
Theonesthatseemtolikethescriptthemostdonotmindthatthestorydoesnot
followalinearprogressionandpredicableHollywoodformat.Theydon'tseemtomind
thatthestorymovesinmany(oftendisparatedirections)andwithlittlefinalityor
resolutionattheend.Theonesthatlikeitfindgreatpleasureinastorythattriesto
exploremanynewandunexpectedpossibilitiesevenifitinvolvestoleratingalotof
exposition.Theonesthatlikeitseemtoseeitmoreasthegroundworkformanyideas
tocontinueon,eitherinfuturemovies,episodesorjustintheirimaginations.
Somekeypointstoansweryourquestions:
IagreethatinmyscriptNeobeingapassivefiguredeflateshispresenceagreatdeal
(althoughhedoeshavesomeactionscenes).ButIfeltthathischaracterwasplayedout
toacertainextentintheTrilogy,andIwantedtoletnewcharactersaswellassome
olderones,whosepresenceinpreviousmovieshadonlybeentouchedupon,havemore
roomtobreath.Idoleaveopenthepotential,however,forNeotobeactiveinany
futurescriptsbothasaplayerinthereal(Cortex)worldandasaplayerintheMatrix
(wherehissonexists).
TheCortexisdifferentfromacomputerwhichcanbeprogrammedandreprogrammed
atwill.TheCortexismorelikeanorganismthat,onceit'sgeneticcodeand
programmingareinitiated,canonlybealteredorcontrolledindirectly.Thinkofthe
OracleasmedicinethatisinjectedintotheCortexwiththeintentoftryingtoalteror
correctspecificparts.And,likemedicine,thereissometrialanderrorandtheresults
arenotalwaysperfectorpredictable.
TheOracleisnottheonlyonewhocanenterandexittheSupermatrix,butevery
attemptismadetolimithertotheonethatentersandexitsregularly.Byrestricting
variables(i.e.peopleenteringandexitingintheSupermatrix),potentialproblemsare
reduced.
IfsomeonediesintheMatrixorSupermatrix,theydieintherealworld(although
PersephoneandVictorareunexpectedexceptionstothisrule).JustbeforeTrinitydies
inRevolutions,sheisextractedfromtheSupermatrix(Onpage3ofthescriptthe
Architectsays-"Nataani,Iapologizefornottellingyouearlier,but,yourtimingwas
impeccable.Theextractionwasacompletesuccess.")Thetrickherewastoextract
Trinityjustaftershefinishesher(overlylong?)dyingspeechtoNeobutalsobeforeshe
actuallydies(otherwiseshecanneverbeextracted,becausesheisdead).
Theandroid36swereprettyundeveloped.Iagree.Iwouldlovetofleshoutthataspect
ofthestory.Ithinkithaslotsofpotential.
Myscriptintroduceslotsofideas,charactersandstorylines.IntheprocessIthinkit
explainsalotofloosestufffromtheoriginalmovieswhileatthesametimegeneratinga
lotofnewloosestuff,leavingopenthepotentialformoreinthefuture.Somelikethat,
somedon't.Hitormiss.
Icouldgoonpointforpoint(andIfeelthatallyourpointshavegreatdebatepotential)
butIwishnotsomuchtorefutewhatyouhavesaidsomuchastoacceptyourposition
withoutoffense.Youhavegreatanalyticalskillandyouhavefoundjustabouteveryflaw
orunansweredaspectofthestory(which,inkeepingwiththeoriginalMatrixideasand
concepts,Ithink,hasasimilardegreeofvagaryandthereforemakesforacompatible
story).
Everythingyouhavesaidhasmademerethinkmyoriginalintentionsand/ordevise
betterwaystorewritethestoryifIevergetaroundtoit.ThemainthingsIwoulddoare
probably:
-BreakthestorydownintotwostoriessoIcanfleshoutcharactersandsituationsthat
arethin.
-Reduceexpositionwhereverpossible
-FindwaystohaveNeobeamoreintegral/animatedplayer(evenifhe'snotthecentral
figure)
-Expandthestoryofthe36s
-MaybeeliminateSmith
-Maybeusethe36sasthemainthreateningagents(perhapshavingtheminfiltratethe
Source,Cortex&Supermatrixsystemssomehow)
Anyway,Merillion,IwouldencourageyoutocreateyourownversionofaFourth
Matrix.Iwouldimaginethatanystorycontinuationyoumightcomeupwithwouldbe
somethingworthy,asyouhaveincredibleknowledgeoftheTrilogyandareverygoodat
logicalconceptualizationandareveryattunedtothecriticalanalysisofpotentialpitfalls.
Ifyoudoevercomeupwithafourthstory(orevenanoutlineforone),ifyoufeel
inclined,senditmyway;Iwouldbeexcitedandflatteredtotakealookatit.
Thankyouforallyourthoughts.Ithashelpedmeunderstandmystorybetterandwill
giveotherreads(ofcomments)muchtochewonandthinkabout.
Allthebest,PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:HdoggaDATE:12/30/201111:59:04AM
Iamexcitedforthenextmatrix,IreadthescriptandIamsolookingforwardtothis:):)
:):):):):P:P:P:P:P:P:):P:):P
Hodogga,
Thisisnotanofficialscript,butgladyoulikedit.
KeepyourfingerscrossedforaMatrix4,nomatterwhowritestheofficialversion.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeybDATE:12/31/201111:25:40PM
Thisscriptsuckssobad.Itmakesnosense.
Joeyb,
Iadmitithasitsproblems.Ifyoucouldbemorespecific,itwouldbemorehelpfultome
asawriterandmoreinterestingasacommenttoread.Howexactlydoesit"suck"andit
whatwaysdoesit"makenosenseatall"?
HopetheMatrix4thatactuallygetsmadeislesssuckyandmakesmoresensetoyou.
PDWood
COMMENT:AUTHOR:richardlaughterDATE:1/2/201212:21:05AM
illadmityouhaveplentyoftalentman,andtheplotconnectswellwiththepriorfilm,
buttomeitcameoffasmoreofafanficthananactualpossibilityforasequel.ithinki
gotthisfeelingfromyoumakingtheARCHITECTtrinity'sgrandfather.itjustdidn'tfeel
righttoome.asforthewholesupermatrixconcept,ilikedit,andthinkthatitwould
work,buthighlydoubtthatitwouldbewellreceived.sooomanyinceptionjokes,itsnot
funnyalsoifeelthattheflashbackscometooftenandtoawkwardly.iwouldtrytogo
backandcondenseitasmuchaspossible.lookatitthisway.ifthiswasactuallygonna
becomeamovie,alotofitwouldhavetobeeithercutorcondensedanyway.
COMMENT:AUTHOR:SunnyPDATE:1/2/201212:25:32PM
FirstofallPDWood,nicework.Ilikedthescriptenoughtoreaditallinonesetting.
However,herearemycomments/concerns:
Yousaythesupermatrixandmatrixarelikeatwowaymirrorandthatthecharacters
donotknowwhattheyaredoingineachreality.Althoughyourscriptsaysotherwise.
TheOracleknowsexactlywhatsheisdoingwhenshecrossesthroughthesupermatrix
andentersthematrix.ShewarnstheMerov.andPerso.aboutSmith.Shealso
purposefullytellsMorph.tounplugTrinitysoshecangettoNeo.
InyourscriptTrinityalsomentionsthatshewantedtokillNEObutthenshefellinlove
withhimandthenconstruedaplantobringNEOtoreality.Thishappendbeforeshe
enteredthematrixandsheknowinglycarriedoutthesameplanaftershecrossedover.
YourscriptalsoshowstheOracletellingMerov.andPerso.thattheyareprogramsand
theyaresurprisedandgetmad.Fromthetrilogytheyalreadyknowtheyareprograms,
thatshowtheMerov.gotallofhispowerandmoney,frombeingprograms.InReloaded
theMerov.evenrightsaprogramhimself,inthesliceofcake,whichisgiventothegirl
hegetsaBJfrom,whichgetsPerso.mad.
Iunderstoodyourendingformatrix4andIdidn'tneedanyclarification,howeverI
prefertheendingformatrix3thanyourmatrix4ending.
OnthepositivesideIwasstillentertainedtheentiretimeIreadyourscript,onlyhad
someminorissues.
richardlaughter,
I'mgladyoulikedthescript,theSupermatrixconceptandthatyoufeltitallconnected
wellwiththeTrilogy.Thatinitselfispraiseenough.
Iagreewithallyourothercomments:morefanficthanbonefidescript,probablytoo
manyinceptionparallels,flashbacksaretricky.
Ithinkthewhole"intertwinedfamilialrelationships"conceptisahitormissformost
people.Missedwithyou.
IfthereisanyinterestatallfromtheHollywoodfolks,Ihavenodoubtthatmuchwould
getcut,alteredand/orcondensedinarewrite.ThatisachallengeIwouldwelcome
immediately.
Ithinkmyscriptsetsthestageformanyextensionideasbutonlyafewwouldprobably
getdevelopedinasinglenewmovieconcept.Let'shopethere'senoughinterest.
Thanksfortheconstructivecriticismandpraise.Alwayswelcomed.
PDWood
SunnyP,
Readingitinonesittingisdefinitelythewaytogetthemostoutofthescript.Packs
moreofawallopandkeepsthethreadofthestorymoreclear.Imaynothaveexplained
itdeeplyenoughinthescript,buttheideaisthatpeopleintherealworldwhoare
slatedtogointotheMatrix/Supermatrixhavecertainspecificmemoriesturnedoff
temporarilywhileotherspecific(purposelydesignedorimplanted)memoriesremain
intact.(NEO:So,theirmemoriesareerased?ARCHITECT/ALEX:No,noterased.Specific
memoriesareshutdown.)
So,forinstance,theOracleknowsthathermissionistotellMorpheustofreeTrinityto
thenhelpunplugNeo(becauseitisamemorythathasnotbeenshutdown),butthe
knowledgethatshelearnedthatinformationintherealworldisshutdown.Sointhe
Matrix/Supermatrixworldsheassumesthatanyknowledgeorvisionsthatshehas
aboutthefuturearesimplypartofherabilitiesasanOracle.
Thisselectivityofinformation/knowledgewouldbetrueofTrinityalso.Shemaybe
awareoftherealworldandtheplantoextractNeowhilesheremainsintherealworld,
butshehasnoknowledgeofthiswhensheenterstheMatrix/Supermatrixworld
becauseallthosememorieshavebeenshutdown.HerdestinyintheMatrix/
SupermatrixisdeterminedsolelybyMorpheusandtheOracle.(Andasfarasherlove
forNeogoes,itisalogicaloutcomeofherbasicpersonalitywhichremainsconsistentin
allworlds,i.e.TrinitywouldnaturallycometoloveNeosimplybylearningabouthim
andbeingaroundhim.)
ThepartofthescriptthatshowstheOracletellingPersephoneandtheMerovingian
thattheyareprogramsissupposedtohavehappenedmanyyearsbeforetheeventsin
thefirstMatrixmovie,thereforetheywouldnothaveknowntheywereprogramsinthe
firstmovie.
Hardtofollowallthisandmaybeneedsmoreclarification.Tryingtoreduceanalready
overlyabundantamountofexposition.
ButI'mgladyoufoundpositiveaspectsthroughoutsomeoftheinconsistenciesandI
hopemyexplanationmakesthestorymoreclear/palatable.Letmeknowifyouhave
anymorethoughts.
Thanksforreading,SunnyP,andhaveagoodnewyear.

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